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Review of Winter Colors  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
I really liked it, only have one real issue with it.
The line "The spectacle was quite good" just seems a bit clunky. Especially considering that it doesn't have to rhyme with anything, I think the choice of the words "quite good" was a bit poor - just doesn't flow so well, and is a bit less descriptive than it has the potential to be. Even something like "the spectacle was amazing" or something along those lines, in my opinion, would fit just a little better.
I do quite like the second last stanza, except for the doubling-up on "as" as a line-starter. I particularly like "The frost-covered branches glittered
As did the bench below"
Not really sure why I do, just seems to flow really well and create effective imagery.
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Review of The Eagle  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I really liked this. I sort of interpreted it as the Eagle being symbolic of a person willing to succeed, willing to rise above everything that makes him mediocre, and the other characters - the fat Cat, the Hawk - as people that will try to bring an ambitious person down. I enjoyed how it was sort of subtle in giving me this interpretation - is this the intended interpretation? (Message me, I'm really curious about this whole piece - what inspired it, what you mean by it).
Also, just a side note, I read this whole thing in David Attenborough's voice, unintentionally.
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