As a guy with a foot fetish, this story really peaked for my taste… pun intended! Anyways, it's a well written story. No typos that I could see, proper grammar and a lot of feet! As this story went on, I found myself wanting those feet myself! Anyways, well done! It is a great story!
This was very… interesting. While I'm not into ball busting, I do like feet and have a foot fetish myself. The descriptions were very detailed in the foot odor and flavor. That was a very very great part of the story. As for the ball busting, not a fan, but there are people that like that stuff.
This was a great story! There weren't any typos and all the words were easy to understand. I like words that are commonly used in books and stories, and you had all of them. I have always wanted a story where a guy gets shrunk, and gets put in a shoe (in this case, in a sandal) and doesn't die! Again, great job!
That was a great piece of work, you could call it artistic is the way that it described it in such that you could alcually see what was going on. It did have a couple typos though, but other than that, it was a great story. I'm only giving it 4.5 stars for the limited typos I saw and other than those it was a piece I'll remember for a while as well. Great job!
I didn't know if this was a poem or not, but even if it was, I found it rather interesting. I usually don't like reading poems, but rather short stories or books, but I was attracted to this. It had a lot of suspence, like what was the pistol for? Was the person going to kill the other person or them self? It was very intriguing and left me wanting more and waiting for more words to appear, but they naver came. There should be a "sequel" to this if you can call another poem from the original a sequil, but you should keepnus the good work. I couldn't see any typos or grammatical errors, so over all it was a great writing!
This was interesting for sure. All the giant or shrinking stories I read end in a... well... squashing or butt crush. This was a refreshing change of pace though. As the story first started, the details were well described, but overwhelming. Too many details at the beginning. After that it was great. Over all it was a well written story.
Well written - yes
Beginning details - overwhelming
Middle section - well written
Ending - played it safe
Overall rating - 3.5 stars
Keep at it. You'll get there.
I just wish it was Sora on the receiving end of this foot fetish story. That's the only criticism I have. Overall it was a well written and detailed story. The depail of her flexibility was perfect and honestly it did make me a little turned on at that part.
It was an overall great story line and had the right words in the correct spots too. All the grammar was outstanding and every word was spelled correctly! Great job!
Yeah. Cats are the best. I have one, and she's definitely a handful to say the least. I'm certain that cats know more than we think. I loved this story and will definitely be adding this to my favorites.
Given that this is in the cats perspective gives it an interesting story line and plot. It was a pleasurable read and didn't get hung up on details or crowd things up. I would, however, loved to have read more about this cats view on itself. Overall, well done!
As always, happy writing!
Kenny B.
Wow. Talk about leaving people in suspence. That was definitely a cliff hanger. It was not ended like I expected, but is was well written an had great character expressions. Overall it was a great story, I just wish we know what Catherine gave him. Just an incredible work of art and a job well done.
This sounds like brothers. I would know because I have a younger brother who always wants his way. This is a perfect example of sibling rivalry at it's finest. This was a great example of a great dialogue. This could be a small skit for a comedy show at the community theatre. I love a good comedic skit here and there. Now it has to be played by good... no great actors that can portray the parts otherwise it's absolutely useless. But overall it was a great dialogue. I can say for sure that you must have a brother or sister. Great work!
The end was a bit dark, but overall the worship of shoes wasn't for me. It was well written and didn't use overly large words that no one can pronounce and had a twisted yet similar plot throughout. Although I'd like to worship feet, I couldn't do shoes. It was for people that have a shoe fetish and your name is footlover2004. I thought its be more about feet than shoes, but it was overall a good story.
Goosebumbs everywhere. I usually don't like poems because they're not like reading a book that could take a while, but I am a patriotic man that stands up for our country and am dissapointed that there are people out there in the United States that burn our flag and set their state flag ablaze too. Those people are sickening, but your poem restored my faith in patriots like us. We need to take a stand, and this is the first step in the right direction.
Great job!
As a special needs person and former student (highschool GED) I really appreciate your work at raising awareness for the need of special needs staff and workers. I just wish it was that easy to get one for real. As a person living with autism and other cognitive disabilities and have worked with and helped kids with down syndrome, this really hits close to home for me. Please don't stop making stories like this and keep up the good work.
As for the constructive criticism, you could have broken the longer paragraphs into shorter ones. The longer the paragraph goes on, the more likely it is to over detail things. Wile over detailing wasn't present here, I just want you to know from my own personal experiences of what could happen.
Great work overall and keep it up!
Happy writing and reading on WDC,
Kenny B.
That was some very interesting content you wrote. It was well written and kept my interest peaked as well. It was a very nice writing, and I found myself wanting more! Do they overthrow the "governor" or do they get caught or worse yet, killed! I need a sequil to this. It had the ease of the reader in mind, something that I really need to work on. Over all, it was very well written and kept short, but not too short without being too long either, if that makes any sense to you.
Happy writing,
Kenny B
My great grandfather was a veteran in the Korean war and so is my grandpa. Unfortunately I didn't get to know either one, but I can tell from the stories my parents have told me about them that I would've loved to hear their stories of war and their triumphs and defeats so thank you for writing this. Now for the criticism. I really couldn't find anything wrong with this poem. It was perfect (well... as perfect as humanly possible) so I don't have anything to say that is called constructive criticism. Well done!
Happy writing,
Kenny B.
That's a dream I likento call acid trip dreams. It has nothing involving the drug and they're somewhat normal when there's extreme heat or cold. Your brain makes things appear real in dreams it is weird like that. Anyways. The story outline was amazing and it kept my interest. You didn't over detail at all so in my view the detailing was perfect. I think dreams like this are what you would call paranormals. It's not like the paranormal creatures or anything besides Tue talking bird, but I've had dreams where I've talked to animals too. Overall it was a great story! Well done!
Happy writing,
Kenny B.
It was very interesting. There were, however a couple typos and some spaces were missed, but overall it was a good story, I just wish it lasted longer. Hope you take this constructive criticism to heart and make sure to proof read next time. Again, it was a great story.
Happy writing,
Kenny B.
Oh man. What to say! It was a perfectly delivered comedy! I couldn't find anything that needed work! If there was a ten star rating, you'd get it my friend! It was flawless. It was an easy read and you had humor. That's what I call art! Well done!
Happy writing!
Kenny B.
So the standing queen died? That was a morbid ending. I feel like it could be a metaphor for the struggles inside as well. Dark clouds means depression or addiction and the streak of light is the last flicker of hope. Thankfully there's stories like this so some people can understand some of the troubles that people who are is are recovered addicts or a person with depression feel almost daily. Thanks for this.
Happy writing,
Kenny B.
Wow. Talk about paranoia. I'm definitely a little bit paranoid after reading this. I'll never hear whispers in the same way again. I've been through a lot in my 26 years of life. I've tried shaking away demons that have cursed me and now I have to worry about another one? I'm just hoping that this I'd just folklore and it's not real, but I'm quite gullible. I'll believe something that I feel isn't real if it's described like this story was. I believe in supernatural things like ghosts, spirits and God, but this is different in so many ways. I couldn't find anything that denies her existence, but I have to wonder if it's real or not. I'm literally hiding under the covers in my bed, and it usually takes something audible to do that to me, so way to go! It was written so well, and had no big words in there that are hard to pronounce, so for that I say well done. Good read!
Happy writing!
Kenny B.
This story just goes to show that even people that have been rotton their whole life, can change and become good. I guess there's still hope in this messed up world after all.
Now for the constructive criticism. While it was an easy read, it was over detailed about only two people. As they were main characters, I get it that we as humans can get lost in over detailing things or characters. As a writer, I try to spread out the details a little bit at a time leading up to the full picture, but then again, I'm writing books instead of short stories such as this. I'm not saying that they're perfect as I do need improvement, but overall it was a good story. I did loose a little bit of my interest toward the middle because of the over detailing, but it was okay. I'll give this a mediocre rating because of that, but it was an interesting story. Great job. Room for improvement.
Happy writing
Kenny B.
Welcome to life. That's what it is. I've just come to accept the pain and emotional turmoil. All the therapists in the world can't help with that. Everyone at one point or another in life feels that way my friend. I've had those feelings for a long time now and trust me. It can get worse. It usually does. It can break you down and stomp on you like ashes in a firepit that haven't completely smothered out yet, then more strife and turmoil comes in and takes away all the hope you have remaining and throws it away like used wrappers and dirty napkins. Once in a while you'll have someone there to help you build back up, but that's a rarity.
Wishing you the best and as always.
Happy writing,
Kenny B.
As a 25 year old male living with autism, I love seeing sites like this that help support those people that have disabilities like autism. If you didn't know this, one of the richest men on earth has autism. That'd right! Bill Gates has autism and he developed a whole computer industry. In fact, if he didn't have a personal assistant with him 24/7, he wouldn't be dressed in the morning. You heard right. The CEO and developer of a major computer program would be completely NAKED if someone wasn't there to tell him to get dressed every day. So I love seeing places like this encouraging people with disabilities. May God bless you. Happy Easter.
Kenny B.
That's my feeling right now. Writers block has set in on all three stories I'm working on. This is a look into the eyes of a well seasoned writer of short stories like this one. I can't say that it was an attention grabber, however, it was very informational. It was a third person pov looking in on someone that don't know themselves anymore and I gotta say. I get it. Hang in there. It will get worse before it gets better. I know because I've been through it. Just keep pushing on and forward.
Happy Writing,
Kenny B.
There's a lot of love in your home. I have one cat. I downsized from having twenty cats. Anyways. That story was a real attention grabber with a lot of detail, but it didn't smother out the story. Overall it was well written, and I want to see more of your stories. This one was really good. Job well done!
Happy Writing,
Kenny B.
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