i really loved the images in your poem. i was fantastically visual. i just love the lines"prism dreams shattered black and white." what an expression! i will never forget in my life. one day i hope to write like you. but i never know i would be ever able to achieve.
hai michael your essay is practical and relevant. i enjoyed it. i make it a point to give responses to my reviewers. i suggest you to write on how reviewers write something long in order to get auto-rewards.
sometimes i too feel the same as the persona longing for the introduction of someone. most of the times it happens like the persona. but i can't be stopping or go and talk. i just leave the place thinking life has to go on however: if he is my man he would have approached me, talked to me and would have been my close friend. i don't care for any (sweet) who refuse to see me. nice practical write up.
dream of missing a loved one gives us more pain... i know . though the poem was initially very romantic, it path took a twist in the last two lines. the changeover was good. there was a line"I love you more than in the dream" that brought that changeover effectively.i loved it.
the pain, sacrifice and bravery behind fighting a war is portrayed well."Piteous faces, where bloods ceaselessly bleed."is my favourite line. the soldiers never have any personal revenge on the enemy but they fight............. in that way they are pity.
you have done a pretty good research on lies. first time i am reading a poem on lies. it was interesting. it way it starts the way it spreads, the way it grows, the way it affects people etc.i just love the line"They start out small, something little.
But then they get more intricate, complicated." very true.
Friendship is something sacred. your poem moved me emotionally. i felt the poem deep in my heart. the last two lines really choked my throat. absolutely touching.
i really loved it.the values you attached was really worth reading and following. i loved the way u played with the word "Rome". u are not too much concentrating on rhyme .....so only the poem has come out well. never in ur dream can fate intervene. go ahead.
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