Hey, we're both doing "I Write in 2020"! First, let me say that I am not a professional. This review is just a personal opinion that I am sharing with you. If anything in this review is deemed unhelpful, promptly ignore it and go about business as usual..
FIRST IMPRESSION: My first thought is that the title is interesting. I think I know what it will be about, but I'm not sure. I like it because it draws me in to find out for sure.
LIKES: I like the second stanza because the second line lightens the mood just a tiny bit without taking away from the serious message.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION: Nothing jumped out at me.
FORM: This is another new form I can add to my list. It looks like you've followed pretty well.
SUGGESTIONS: None from me.
FINAL THOUGHTS: Overall, you've created a great little piece. Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Good luck in the contest!
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Your entry is so catchy that I had no problem imagining a commercial for it. I love the rhymes! Especially 'quality' and 'jollity'. I'm not sure I could have pulled that off, but you nailed it. Thank you for entering and I hope to see you in the next round!
Even though this isn't a typical one, I just had to leave a review. I actually considered buying this thing for my granddaughter's room, but my daughter didn't think it was as amusing as I did.
I like your overall way of thinking. It's quick, to the point, and as a bonus, it even rhymes. Job well done. Thank you for entering, I hope you play again!
I know my hormones are out of wack, but this made me a little weepy. It captures her essence perfectly. Although, I'm jealous of the line rays of Ravyn how come I never thought of that?
Seriously though, thank you so very much!
As a co-participant in "I Write", it's a pleasure to review your work. If anything in this review is deemed unhelpful, promptly ignore it and go about business as usual..
FIRST IMPRESSION: I was saddened to see this is based on actual events. Losing a faithful companion is devastating. I've only been through it once, but I didn't think my daughter would ever be able to cope. Somehow, we managed to get through the pain in one piece, like you.
LIKES: The ending is by far my favorite. Even though there's sorrow, there's comfort in knowing the two are together.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION: Nothing jumped out at me.
STYLE/VOICE: Your love for Mitzy shines throughout this piece.
SUGGESTIONS: None from me. But on a side note, the furry friend we lost two years ago was named Mitzy also. Perhaps they too shall meet.
FINAL THOUGHTS: Overall, you've created a great piece. Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Good luck in the contest!
This review is just a personal opinion that I am sharing with you. If anything in this review is deemed unhelpful, promptly ignore it and go about business as usual..
FIRST IMPRESSION: I like reading about how others came to find this site and their experiences, so I really enjoyed this poem.
LIKES: There's not much to dislike. It's a short and simple piece giving readers an inside look at Ruwth. It's relatable and honest, which speaks volumes itself. However, I do like the last stanza more than the first two. Simply because of the acknowledgment that you come to share your words. I haven't written much over the last two years, but I still continue to come each day. Mainly to just have that connection to other writers. So the final line kinds of bridges the gap for me.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION: Nothing jumped out at me.
SUGGESTIONS: None from me.
FINAL THOUGHTS: Overall, you've created a great little piece. Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Good luck in the contest!
This review is brought to you by "I Write 2020". First, let me say that I am not a professional. This review is just a personal opinion that I'm sharing with you. If anything in this review is deemed unhelpful, promptly ignore it and go about business as usual..
FIRST IMPRESSION: Great intro! It hooked me instantly. I may not know who these characters are, but I still want to watch them slowly die. Of embarrassment, of course.
LIKES: This piece is infused with satire, which I adore.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION: I got a little confused trying to figure out who was who and who said what, but since I'm not familiar with the rules of the contest, I'm assuming the names of the speakers are purposely omitted. As for punctuation, I did notice a few issues, but nothing a quick run through Grammarly (or similar program) won't clear up.
STYLE/VOICE: I do believe you've hit the nail on the head with your keen dinner party mindreading. The inner thoughts of the characters are a good balance of snarky and serious. This makes it relatable and believable, which I think is important for fiction.
SUGGESTIONS: If you'd like more exposure for this story, I'd switch up the genres. This item could be classified as several types, so I'd take advantage.
FINAL THOUGHTS: Overall, you've created a good piece. Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Don't stop writing!
First, let me say that I am not a professional. This review is just a personal opinion that I am sharing with you. If anything in this review is deemed unhelpful, please discard.
I'm extremely sensitive to sulfites so I shy away from wine. But since I'm an avid reader, I thought I'd give it a go. I'm happy with my 6 out of 10. Do you know what would pair great with this quiz? An article! I homeschool teens, so I test their attention with quizzes all the time 🤣
Anyway, cute quiz. Keep writing!
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I have to admit, I didn't expect a short story for this task, but I really like it. The image you've created of that poor woman trying to read the whole thing out loud just sends me into a laughing fit! Excellent work.
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Since we're both doing the "I Write in 2020" Activity, and I just posted one of my entries right after your post: TA-DA.. here I am! First, let me say that I am not a professional. This review is just a personal opinion that I am sharing with you. If anything in this review is deemed unhelpful, promptly ignore it and go about business as usual..
FIRST IMPRESSION: Oh boy, I haven't my entry yet! Let's see what the competition looks like this year.
LIKES: There's not much to dislike about this acrostic. You've clearly shown how much you value this website and have some strong word choices. I tend to struggle with this form and it ends up looking like a first grader wrote it But you've done a wonderful job!
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION: Nothing jumped out at me.
SUGGESTIONS: None from me.
FINAL THOUGHTS: Overall, you've created a great piece. Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Good luck in the contest!
Since we're both doing the "I Write in 2020" Activity, and I just posted one of my entries right after your post: TA-DA.. here I am! First, let me say that I am not a professional. This review is just a personal opinion that I am sharing with you. If anything in this review is deemed unhelpful, promptly ignore it and go about business as usual..
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a first for me. I don't think I've come across redaction poetry here before.
LIKES: There's not to much to dislike. Your choices on what to blackout and what to keep seem well thought out. I tend to be more impulsive and end up with something that resembles a poem. You have left a moving tribute.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION: Nothing jumped out at me.
SUGGESTIONS: None from me.
FINAL THOUGHTS: Overall, you've created a great poem. Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Good luck in the contest!
Since we're both doing the "I Write in 2020" Activity, and I just posted one of my entries right after your post, ta-da here I am! First, let me say that I am not a professional. This review is just a personal opinion that I am sharing with you. If anything in this review is deemed unhelpful, promptly ignore it and go about business as usual..
FIRST IMPRESSION: I've always enjoyed a good dystopian read, so the title and description intrigue me.
LIKES: It's hard to describe the indescribable, but you're spot on with this line. This is my favorite bit- Something changed overnight, but it is something we can’t see, touch, taste or smell.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION: Nothing jumped out at me.
STYLE/VOICE: You really set the mood with the opening paragraph. I struggle with the requirements of flash fiction, but you clearly know what you're doing.
SUGGESTIONS: None from me.
FINAL THOUGHTS:Overall, you've created a great little piece. Good luck in the contest!
Ooh, ruwth, you're on a roll! We're going to get caught up for sure! Okay, about this review..now this is going to sound strange, but I feel like I've read it before. I'm not sure if I'm confusing it with another one of your items or if my brain is just confused, but I really think I can remember wondering about how that vision pulled on something inside me. Well, even if I'm just experiencing brain fog in a new way, I like this for reasons I can't really explain. Maybe it's simply because I can identify with the woman crying out to God and I long for the hope she has for herself.
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FIRST IMPRESSION: I don't read blogs often, so this is a welcome change of pace. LIKES: There's really nothing to dislike. You share a heartwarming memory with grace and a hint of humor. A perfect combination. GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION: Nothing jumped off the page and slapped me in the face. STYLE/VOICE: You do a superb job of narrating this story. SUGGESTIONS: Absolutely none. FINAL THOUGHTS: Well, I've added your blog to my favorites list so I can learn what happens next. I'd say that ties up this review nicely!
First, let me say that I am not a professional. This review is just a personal opinion that I am sharing with you. If anything in this review is deemed unhelpful, please discard.
I don't review many blog posts, so this is another perk of participating in I Write. I have to say you outdid yourself with this response to the prompt. You chose to answer with a heartfelt poem that showcases your talent and spirit.
"crystal tones
reverberate clear and strong"
Those words really stand out to me. I can't really describe why, but I love it.
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I don't review many blog posts, so another perk of participating in I Write! Let's see, the title is definitely appropriate and you nailed the prompt, so well done. Having an autoimmune disease has always kept me careful, but now I have to fight the urge to Lysol strangers that get too close. Also, I think you're right on the mark about which part is more awkward. I try to mind my own business, but I also enjoy a good show. The internal struggle is tough! Thank you for sharing your view with us!
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As a fellow participant of I Write, it's my pleasure to review this piece. I'm not sure why, but the Story Poem contest intimidates me, so I've never entered. This poem is very touching and your love for God shines through brilliantly. Keep up the great work and good luck in the contest!
First, let me say that I am not a professional. This review is just a personal opinion that I am sharing with you. If anything in this review is deemed unhelpful, please discard.
FIRST IMPRESSION: Boy, oh boy, I'm behind with this activity! Thankfully, I took notes on the entries as they were cleared. 😉 Due to the sheer number of items the judges are considering, I probably won't be able to offer many in-depth reviews until after the judging is complete.
LIKES: First, I'd like to say that it has been a pleasure to watch you work your way through Wonderland. I'm not sure I would have made it to the end. This entry is a great way to start the game. I especially appreciate the honesty you show when listing your expectations.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION: Nothing jumps off the page at me.
STYLE/VOICE: From the entries I've seen so far, I can tell that this excursion has started to help you amplify your voice find your style. It can take many years for a writer to recognize their strengths and this is certainly a good start.
SUGGESTIONS: Nothing pops into my head.
FINAL THOUGHTS: I'm glad you decided to join, and stick around, after all. Kiya is known for her intense activities, but I've found being pushed out of my comfort zone isn't too brutal. Most of the time. I hope you've enjoyed your trip through Wonderland as much as we've enjoyed watching it.
First, let me say that I am not a professional. This review is just a personal opinion that I am sharing with you. If anything in this review is deemed unhelpful, please discard.
FIRST IMPRESSION: Boy, oh boy, I'm behind with this activity! Thankfully, I took notes on the entries as they were cleared. 😉 Due to the sheer number of items the judges are considering, I probably won't be able to offer many in-depth reviews until after the judging is complete.
LIKES: First, I'd like to say that it has been a pleasure to watch you work your way through Wonderland. I'm not sure I would have made it to the end. This entry is a great way to start the game. I especially appreciate the honesty you show by listing your expectations. I think many of us have a secret dream to outdo the "best of the best", yet not many would admit to it.
FINAL THOUGHTS: I'm glad you decided to join, and stick around, after all. Kiya is known for her intense activities, but I've found being pushed out of my comfort zone isn't too brutal. Most of the time. I hope you've enjoyed your trip through Wonderland as much as we've enjoyed watching it.
First, let me say that I am not a professional. This review is just a personal opinion that I am sharing with you. If anything in this review is deemed unhelpful, please discard.
FIRST IMPRESSION: Boy, oh boy, I'm behind with this activity! Thankfully, I took notes on the entries as they were cleared. 😉 Due to the sheer number of items the judges are considering, I probably won't be able to offer many in-depth reviews until after the judging is complete.
LIKES: First, I'd like to say that it has been a pleasure to watch you work your way through Wonderland. I'm not sure I would have made it to the end. This entry is a great way to start the game. I especially appreciate the honesty you show by listing your expectations. I think many of us have a secret dream to outdo the "best of the best", yet not many would admit to it.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION: Nothing jumped out at me.
STYLE/VOICE: From this entry, I'm betting that throughout the journey you'll give the others a run for the money by staying true to yourself. I've seen authors that try to be someone else and it shows in their work.
SUGGESTIONS: Nothing pops into my head.
FINAL THOUGHTS: I'm glad you decided to join, and stick around, after all. Kiya is known for her intense activities, but I've found being pushed out of my comfort zone isn't too brutal. Most of the time. I hope you've enjoyed your trip through Wonderland as much as we've enjoyed watching it.
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FIRST IMPRESSION: The combination of your cover photo, description, and title lets the reader know exactly what's in store. Besides, with a title like "Wobbles McWhicskey", how could someone resist? LIKES: Of course, I have to say my favorite bit is Tip O'Neil. It explains so much! 🤣 GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION: You've done a great job using idioms and slang dialogue. This story flows well because of it. STYLE/VOICE: The playful tone sets the scene for a intrigued reader. SUGGESTIONS: Make sure you take advantage of adding extra genres to the "keywords/tags" section to get more exposure. FINAL THOUGHTS: Overall, you've crafted a charming and witty short story. Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Good luck in the contest!
I had the pleasure of following you in "I Write in 2020" , so here's my humble review. Please bear with me, I know my reviewing skills need improvement.
I can't believe I haven't come across this contest. Then again, with so many great activities, I'd have to be on here 24/7 to discover everything. Writing is such an emotional journey. It can be hard to admit when we write something we know isn't the best. By going back to that original piece and not stopping until you were satisfied, you showed that you are a true writer. It's amazing how adding our experiences can reshape the story.
Anyway, about this essay- I applaud your honesty and I agree with you. Also, I can identify with this too. There was a time in my life that I just kind of knew I needed to change some things and so I did. Without regret or an explanation to others.
Warning- I'm working on being a better reviewer. Please bear with me as I learn.
FIRST IMPRESSION: I'm loving this piece! I saw it posted on the newsfeed challenge and was intrigued by your description. So, of course, I had to check it out. FORM: I think this could be considered a concrete poem. GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION: I didn't spot any issues. STYLE/VOICE: I like how you just let loose and your emotions pour onto the paper (you know what I mean lol) without any apologies. It's raw and real. SUGGESTIONS: This is too awesome for suggestions. FINAL THOUGHTS: Overall, you've created a great piece, no matter what it's called. Thank you for sharing your talent.
Warning- I'm working on being a better reviewer. Please bear with me as I learn.
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FIRST IMPRESSION: I came across this item in "Noticing Newbies Newsletter (July 24, 2019)" . The combination of title, description, and cover image intrigued me, luring me to read more. I can definitely see why the editor chose it. As a poetry lover, I can easily say this a real gem!
FORM: Some folks don't consider free verse a form, but I do and it works well here. I especially like the enjambment on the thirteenth line. This poem begged me to read it out loud. When I did, it reminded me of a couple of works by Maya Angelou. It reads like slam poetry and I can picture someone reciting it.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION: I didn't spot any issues.
STYLE/VOICE: The semi-formal tone and encouraging mood fit nicely. You brought out feelings of empowerment and sisterhood.
SUGGESTIONS: My only suggestion would be about the visual impact, which is mainly a personal preference. I'd save the bold font for the twelfth line so it would jump out even more. But again, that's just my little opinion so it's not really a big deal.
FINAL THOUGHTS: Overall, you've created a great little poem. Thank you for sharing your talent with us. I can't wait to read more of your work, I have a feeling you have a lot more to offer the readers!
I finally had time to check out your "Fill-in-the-Blank" stories. What a great idea! Here's my offering...
Once upon a time, there was a chihuahua named Trixie. Every day, she watched kids walk home from the bus stop. They happily ate after school snacks and laughed about what fun the day had been. One day, the kids noticed Trixie barking and whimpering more than usual. Because of that, they felt sad for her being alone. Until finally, one little boy decided to let the dog out of the backyard to play. He put his bag on the ground and opened the gate. Trixie excitedly ran out. But instead of playing with him, she grabbed his bag of Cheetos and ran through the doggy door into the house.
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