Your story about "The Power of Prayer," was touching and made me feel good to know that He cares. I know people in Prayer Groups and all help and pray for each other and everyone. Their prayer has even touched me a time or two. So the Power of Prayer is strong and growing.
Your article, , about writing reviews helped me out a lot. I discovered that some of my reviews were pretty good. I still have a hard time finding advice for a writer. I don't seem to pick up many errors or stories I don't like. I find the reviews for my writing are valluable tools if I do recieve advice and errors noticed. I feel like your artilce was written for me.
Lesley
Your story about sharing customs, such as an American Birthday Party is a good story. I love the way you said you finally carried your cake for Mama. "Yet again, I saw how different life here could be," summed it all up. I recommend this story for everyone. I will read it to my husband, too.
Keep on Writing!
Lesley
I don't play poker well but I need a King, too. We all do, I think. With Easter creeping up on us, I think knowing the King is the best hand of everyone's life. I don't know if your story was literal or not, but I see everything as meaning something.
Lesley
Yes you do sound depressed. Is it only when you wrote your poem or are you upbeat every now and then. I ask because I am Bipolar and I have depressive episodes that last a couple of days, from day to day, it's up and down (rapid cycling) and every couple of months I'll be so manic, I won't sleep for a few days, get a lot done, and feel fine until the depression returns. Are you like that? I do like you poem. I'll put this in our Reviews File.
Lesley
I love that poem. I'll bet you had a wonderful child hood with a caring mother. My childhood was good, but my folks didn't like me to write. I would stuff a towel under my door so my folks couldn't see my light was on. I have ADHD and Bipolar Disorder, so I still stay up for a couple of days and feel fine.
I will read more of you poems. Oh, I know this is a lot to ask, but can I write a copy of your poem for my mother's 80th birthday? I will give you all the credit, of course. Just think about it.
Later,
L.
I loved your poem about Katie. My African Grey, Timmy, likes to call himself "Mister Timbo." He does all of the nice things like Katie. But he is a liar and very craftly. He loves my husband, never bit him once. I can't count the times he sweetly asked me to take him out. When I put my hand in the cage, he savages me! Yesterday, I was cleaning his cage and keeping an eye on him, just one second, I let my guard down and he bit the side of my face. Blood dripped on the floor and my clothes.
I am going to spend more time with Timbo, just talking. He likes that. But I will never trust him not to bite me. Do you have any advice? Timbo is three years old.
Your Katie sounds like a treasure! I wish I could have such a relationship and special friend.
Please keep on writing and I will keep on reading!
Lesley Scott
Hi,l That was a super good story you wrote, Lornda. The song was very touching and gave me tears. It must have been difficult for you to write such a story. Did it really happen? It is one of the best I've read. You really do derserve first place. I agree whole heartedly with the judges!
Lesdonks
This was a most unusual and yet a realistic story. Small children sometimes become so involved with their toys it feels like it is time for her to know that nothing lasts forever. However, I sleep with stuffed animals and my favorite, Snoopy, is cradled in my arms. Dr. Oz adviced that we should sleep on our right side and cuddle a pillow or stuffed animals. That is where I got the idea. I sleep better and have better dreams.
Lesdonks
Maybe Mike is a pick up artice but he does sound real. I also trust Raches' way of handling the situation. I am not sure to believe him or not. He just may be a nice guy. Again, Rache must trust her instincs. Once I let a homless man sleep on my couch. I told him my boy friend was on his way home, just to be sure. He turned out to be a very decent and hard working man and Cliff let him stay with us until he got on his feet. He was also good with livestock.. All three of us became good friends.
So do what your heart tells you to do. I have met guys who didn't have good intentions. But, again, he may end up being a good friend. Be sure and tell him you have a jealous boyfriend.
Lesdonsk
This is a lot of fun. Lucky for me, I've kept parrots and I am somewhat farmiliar with their behaviours and keep an eye on them, making sure the parrot would be in a good mood. I've read about "Alex," and that he was considered as intelligent as a toddler. So I treat parrots as if they are little chilldren with feathers that can hurt me badly when the bird is angry. I'm still working with Timmy, but after four years, he still bites me hard and adores my husband.
Lesdonks
I really did enjoy your cockatiel story. I've had several, but only one could talk up a storm and was super tame. However, Bella sounds to be much tamer than my "Pretty Bird." Also the information that you have shared will help me with my African Grey. He bites hard and I bleed for days.
I didn't know you could take a bird out on a harness. Maybe I could try that with Timmy. Great idea!
Keep on writing!
Lesdonks
Your story was a good read. I felt bad for your editor's "epifphany' that caused him to reject and make such negative comments about your novel. Allan is very fortunate to have such a supportinve sister. Having someone to catch you is important to everyone.
Keep on Writing!
Lesdonks
Your love poem made me remember my love for my husband, and our successful relationship or twelve years. I read the love and emotion in you poem. One of my favorite verses is: "Embrace the body with which your soul must endeavor; cherish your lips for your soul mate they'll kiss, your mind and soul is trapped in is is no cage. It is a tool which we were blessed with life we can engage." In the next to the last verse, maybe you did it intentionly, but the word,"is," isn't really needed. That is my opinion.
Otherwise, it is a good poem and I plan to let my husband read your poem, too.
Keep on writing.
Lesdonks
Your story is so much like my own, but not quite, I have read so many books about the Bible and Atheism. Dawins, Hitchens, Sagan and a number more about theocracy. Your story makes you sound like an intelligent young man who thinks for himself. My parents don't like it because I think therapy is much better than church and Dr. Wayne Dyer and The Tao Te Ching are some good books and I'll bet you have already read them. The Tao Te Ching is my favorite way to live. Your story really gave me a surprise. Thanks!
Keep On Writing and Reading!
Lesdonks
This is great, Lone wolf! I don't need a banner at the moment, but my birthday is coming up. I don't know when because I want all of my family there. I want to invite more people, but almost everyone hates my twenty pet rats. I don't understand, but I am an animal freak. I have a couple of gator stories in my port you'd like.
Your banner venture is so cool, I'll tell everyone. Do I just tell them Lonewolf's banners?
Later,
L.
It was beautiful! How do you write like that? I've been trying forever to write poetry. Is there anything else I can do? If I have the facts, I can write an introduction that willmake us all cry! Keep thinking! There is just so much racing through my bimfuzzled head! I have something important to tell you. I will write you back on your priate line!ove So much
Les
Your story was very cool and Will seemed to be a classic scitzophrenian. He seemed to be entertaining and weird to talk to. Is this true or from your family, or did you use your imagination to write this story? I just sat down and wrote my trashy story. I am up against too much talent. Sometimes I get lucky and win something. all of this writing is improving my once lost skills.
Lesdonks
Great plans for 2012. It would seem you have all of your ducks in a row! I have ADHD and Bipolar, so I always fly from the seat of my pants. I will see a title or think of something and sit down and write. The writing is starting to return and has always kept my disabilities grounded, sometimes.
So if you can ever find any spare time for me, I'd love to learn from you instead of writing off the top of my head. I want to improve and I also want friends. When I moved from my farm to the city, by best friends live far away and I doubt they think Of me very often. So let me know how to improve my work and I'll tell you how hard it can be to make a mule! Check out my unusual port.
Later,
Lesley
Good detecting, Meenie! I am a crime buff and read a lot of true crime, I watch tvs Crime Dramas and seldom miss "Criminal Minds," among others. I just finished the Story of Richard Ramerez, the Night Stalker. Enough of those books and tv. Iused to work for several police Departments and was one of their own. Iwas trusted with evidence and prisoners (we called them Maggots). I was interesting and we all were tight. So the banter in the squadroom made me wonder if you were ever a cop or had one as a close friend. Or did you deliver doghnuts?
The detective work was great. Y'all put the pieces into place so fast. That's a hunch, I guess. I was good to follow your gut and hunches. As long as I did Animal Control, I paid attention and was never bitten. Well I was bitten by several snakes --- my fault.
I want you to write some more of your stories about Delaney, who likes to nod. It comes with the territory.
Exellent police work!
Have you read any of my animal stories? I managed to closely escape death several times. Wild animals have something deep in their core. No wild animals are tame, no matter what anyone thinks. I know!
Keep it up!
Lesley
{I really did enjoy your running dialog. It gave your story the human touch. I noticed a lot of people have been walking a long time, maybe days. I liked the tragic ending with almost everyone dying and the deep dark pit. Where do you get your ideas? Do they just come to you, or do you spend time making an outline? I wish I was that good.
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The story uou wrote about Mr. predergasts caught my full attention. The man is sick pysicaly and most certinley has a mental disorder. Why did he stab Mr. Prendergasts, who lives at that time, with such brutality and decided not to kill himself. He is also not quite right in the head, himself, and Mr. Prnedergasts both share a secret to kill someone. The list is narrowed down when Mr. Prendergasts becomes termally ill. So the boy carries out his promise by killing the older man and the man gives the young man a foot ball ticket ans says, "Good bye."
You sure did have an unusual childhood. I want to read more of your stories! I had sort of a "not right" feeling about this adventure. When my husband is only two isles away I start to panic. For a child to be separated from his mother is serious panic time.
I enjoyed your vivid descriptions of the clothes racks and how much fun you were having, amusing yourself. I guess you were more into having fun than keeping up with Mom. Big Mistake! But as a kid, I did my best to avoid my mother. She was high strung and had a mean temper. But at that era, she could just send me out to the car.
I was fearful when you were at the mercy of that awful man! People like that are all around us and we don't know. I was so relieved that your mother had found you and said, in a nasty voice,"You git lost, mister, I will call the police right now!"
The ending was too good to fabricate! I laughed until my eyes watered. She wasn't even your mother. She was a street wise woman who knew what had to be done to help you and she probably saved you from something perverted.
Keep on Writing!
Lesdonks
This story attracted me after the first pargraph. The description of the man in the mirror was a good touch and I could almost smell the scent of ozone. I think it is a delightful smell that my dogs and cats bring inside at dark. He was standing in blood soaked shards of glass in front of a shattered mirror.
He was strung out badly and he was a meth head. He felt he had finally hit rock bottom and needed to take some drastic action to save himself.
Before, Donny had been his dealer. One night, in a fit of rage, he carried the stolen mirror out to where Donny was trying to sleep, if meth addicts ever slept. Donny came at him with a large stick and to make it simple, he finally realized he had killed his dealer!
He began to feel free and hopeful as he had "before." He planned to call his parents and admit himself into the hospital for treatment. He finally had hope now that Donny was dead. He was glad he had killed his dealer, ridding the world of blood sucking scum.
Now, he could begin to heal and pray Donnie's death did not lead to his newer, better life.
Lesdonks
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This story is very well written and it seems to me to be a very experienced author. I don't know if I could write a great poem like the one I just read. I would like to think I could write a poem worth reading. I love to read poetry, but I am afraid to write one. Any advice?
It sounds like the character has led a life full of adventure. I especially like the quote, "Solitary path construded
With a heart of gold; untouched by the belligerence that mare creation; to bring back memories forgone for for a golden apple."
This poem makes me want to review some of my spiritual passages.
Lesdonks
Check out my port for non-fiction animal stories, full of excitement as well as sad endings. Most the the stories have good endings if that is how it turned out. Like me, pinned to a fence, being charged by an elk bull during rutting season.
L.
Maybe you could lend out some of your views of a story or two.
Thanks,
Lesdonks
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