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Review of You and That Soul  
Review by Lesley Scott
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Your love poem made me remember my love for my husband, and our successful relationship or twelve years. I read the love and emotion in you poem. One of my favorite verses is: "Embrace the body with which your soul must endeavor; cherish your lips for your soul mate they'll kiss, your mind and soul is trapped in is is no cage. It is a tool which we were blessed with life we can engage." In the next to the last verse, maybe you did it intentionly, but the word,"is," isn't really needed. That is my opinion.
Otherwise, it is a good poem and I plan to let my husband read your poem, too.
Keep on writing.
Lesdonks
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Review by Lesley Scott
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Your story is so much like my own, but not quite, I have read so many books about the Bible and Atheism. Dawins, Hitchens, Sagan and a number more about theocracy. Your story makes you sound like an intelligent young man who thinks for himself. My parents don't like it because I think therapy is much better than church and Dr. Wayne Dyer and The Tao Te Ching are some good books and I'll bet you have already read them. The Tao Te Ching is my favorite way to live. Your story really gave me a surprise. Thanks!
Keep On Writing and Reading!
Lesdonks
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Review by Lesley Scott
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is great, Lone wolf! I don't need a banner at the moment, but my birthday is coming up. I don't know when because I want all of my family there. I want to invite more people, but almost everyone hates my twenty pet rats. I don't understand, but I am an animal freak. I have a couple of gator stories in my port you'd like.
Your banner venture is so cool, I'll tell everyone. Do I just tell them Lonewolf's banners?
Later,
L.
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Review of Lornda, My Friend  
Review by Lesley Scott
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)


It was beautiful! How do you write like that? I've been trying forever to write poetry. Is there anything else I can do? If I have the facts, I can write an introduction that willmake us all cry! Keep thinking! There is just so much racing through my bimfuzzled head! I have something important to tell you. I will write you back on your priate line!ove So much
Les
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Review of Will Power  
Review by Lesley Scott
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)


Your story was very cool and Will seemed to be a classic scitzophrenian. He seemed to be entertaining and weird to talk to. Is this true or from your family, or did you use your imagination to write this story? I just sat down and wrote my trashy story. I am up against too much talent. Sometimes I get lucky and win something. all of this writing is improving my once lost skills.
Lesdonks
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Review by Lesley Scott
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Rated: E | (4.5)


Great plans for 2012. It would seem you have all of your ducks in a row! I have ADHD and Bipolar, so I always fly from the seat of my pants. I will see a title or think of something and sit down and write. The writing is starting to return and has always kept my disabilities grounded, sometimes.
So if you can ever find any spare time for me, I'd love to learn from you instead of writing off the top of my head. I want to improve and I also want friends. When I moved from my farm to the city, by best friends live far away and I doubt they think Of me very often. So let me know how to improve my work and I'll tell you how hard it can be to make a mule! Check out my unusual port.
Later,
Lesley
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Review of Grand Opening!  
Review by Lesley Scott
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)


Good detecting, Meenie! I am a crime buff and read a lot of true crime, I watch tvs Crime Dramas and seldom miss "Criminal Minds," among others. I just finished the Story of Richard Ramerez, the Night Stalker. Enough of those books and tv. Iused to work for several police Departments and was one of their own. Iwas trusted with evidence and prisoners (we called them Maggots). I was interesting and we all were tight. So the banter in the squadroom made me wonder if you were ever a cop or had one as a close friend. Or did you deliver doghnuts?
The detective work was great. Y'all put the pieces into place so fast. That's a hunch, I guess. I was good to follow your gut and hunches. As long as I did Animal Control, I paid attention and was never bitten. Well I was bitten by several snakes --- my fault.

I want you to write some more of your stories about Delaney, who likes to nod. It comes with the territory.
Exellent police work!
Have you read any of my animal stories? I managed to closely escape death several times. Wild animals have something deep in their core. No wild animals are tame, no matter what anyone thinks. I know!
Keep it up!
Lesley
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Review by Lesley Scott
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)

{I really did enjoy your running dialog. It gave your story the human touch. I noticed a lot of people have been walking a long time, maybe days. I liked the tragic ending with almost everyone dying and the deep dark pit. Where do you get your ideas? Do they just come to you, or do you spend time making an outline? I wish I was that good.
Lesdonks{1770237}
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Review of Mr. Prendergast  
Review by Lesley Scott
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
The story uou wrote about Mr. predergasts caught my full attention. The man is sick pysicaly and most certinley has a mental disorder. Why did he stab Mr. Prendergasts, who lives at that time, with such brutality and decided not to kill himself. He is also not quite right in the head, himself, and Mr. Prnedergasts both share a secret to kill someone. The list is narrowed down when Mr. Prendergasts becomes termally ill. So the boy carries out his promise by killing the older man and the man gives the young man a foot ball ticket ans says, "Good bye."
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Review of Department Store  
Review by Lesley Scott
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)


You sure did have an unusual childhood. I want to read more of your stories! I had sort of a "not right" feeling about this adventure. When my husband is only two isles away I start to panic. For a child to be separated from his mother is serious panic time.
I enjoyed your vivid descriptions of the clothes racks and how much fun you were having, amusing yourself. I guess you were more into having fun than keeping up with Mom. Big Mistake! But as a kid, I did my best to avoid my mother. She was high strung and had a mean temper. But at that era, she could just send me out to the car.
I was fearful when you were at the mercy of that awful man! People like that are all around us and we don't know. I was so relieved that your mother had found you and said, in a nasty voice,"You git lost, mister, I will call the police right now!"
The ending was too good to fabricate! I laughed until my eyes watered. She wasn't even your mother. She was a street wise woman who knew what had to be done to help you and she probably saved you from something perverted.
Keep on Writing!
Lesdonks
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Review by Lesley Scott
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This story attracted me after the first pargraph. The description of the man in the mirror was a good touch and I could almost smell the scent of ozone. I think it is a delightful smell that my dogs and cats bring inside at dark. He was standing in blood soaked shards of glass in front of a shattered mirror.
He was strung out badly and he was a meth head. He felt he had finally hit rock bottom and needed to take some drastic action to save himself.
Before, Donny had been his dealer. One night, in a fit of rage, he carried the stolen mirror out to where Donny was trying to sleep, if meth addicts ever slept. Donny came at him with a large stick and to make it simple, he finally realized he had killed his dealer!
He began to feel free and hopeful as he had "before." He planned to call his parents and admit himself into the hospital for treatment. He finally had hope now that Donny was dead. He was glad he had killed his dealer, ridding the world of blood sucking scum.
Now, he could begin to heal and pray Donnie's death did not lead to his newer, better life.
Lesdonks
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Review of The Epilogue  
Review by Lesley Scott
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This story is very well written and it seems to me to be a very experienced author. I don't know if I could write a great poem like the one I just read. I would like to think I could write a poem worth reading. I love to read poetry, but I am afraid to write one. Any advice?
It sounds like the character has led a life full of adventure. I especially like the quote, "Solitary path construded
With a heart of gold; untouched by the belligerence that mare creation; to bring back memories forgone for for a golden apple."
This poem makes me want to review some of my spiritual passages.
Lesdonks
Check out my port for non-fiction animal stories, full of excitement as well as sad endings. Most the the stories have good endings if that is how it turned out. Like me, pinned to a fence, being charged by an elk bull during rutting season.
L.
Maybe you could lend out some of your views of a story or two.
Thanks,
Lesdonks
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Review by Lesley Scott
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
That was a great and spooky story. I liked the dialog because it moved the story along so it kept my full attention. The ending was excellent and it was also a bit of humor in the story. I would recommend this story for my friends and family to read. I will read it to my husband this afternoon.
lesdonks
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Review of Confinement  
Review by Lesley Scott
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Now that one really made me cry. But I cry when any animal is hurt, sick or killed. I belong to a lot of animal groups and even help out with petitions from PETA, though I'm not a member. The biggest cause for my alarm is the way chickens, cattlel and pigs are treated. If people knew how their meant was handled and the cruel way they are kept, everyone, like me, would be a vegetarian. That is a paraphrase from Paul McCartny.
I did love your story, it evoked a very deep emotion that I live with!
Love,
Lesley
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Review of Pico's Guest Book  
Review by Lesley Scott
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Though I haven't finished "Let Sleeping Dogs Lie, " enjoyed what I read. I will be reading some more! It just takes me forever to catch up on email and enter contests. I've done okay with that. One of the first place awards was "Raccoon Kisses." I usually only write true animal stories like being attacked by an elk bull in rut. The non-animal stories are just stuff I wrote for contests.
Lesdonks
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Review by Lesley Scott
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I enjoyed your nice story about Calvin. I missread the first paragraph and thought Calvin was a child. I soon figured it out when I read about his orange ears. He seems so devoted to you and you are the Alpha in the house. Maybe he'll save you from a fire some dark night.
Lesdonks
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Review of Miracle On Earth  
Review by Lesley Scott
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I feel your wonderful spiritual poem was ver uplifting. I always go to church on Christmas and Easter. The church is so crowded, it's standing room in the back and chairs in the isle. I always feel the strong prescince of the Lord in myself and the many others who came to worship.
Thanks for the upliftling poem.
Lesdonks
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Review of My Friends  
Review by Lesley Scott
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Wonderful poetry! You really get across the value and support of your good friends. You seem like you must have a lot of close friends. I envy you because my friends all moved away and forgot about me. Be careful and don't let your friend or friends hurt your feelings or do something mean. Friends don't think it will hurt anyone and a good friendship has it s ups and downs.
Lesdonks
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Review by Lesley Scott
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Coco seems like the normal, everyday young girl. Mostly that is what she is. Yet she has odd feelings of being less important and mistrustful of true relationships. She tries to find someone to love only her, but hoped Jamie was different. He appreciated her in every way and seemed to understand her.
But when Coco and Jamie were about to be more romantic and started undressing, Coco realized that Jamie was only using her, just like the others.

She had an encounter with her sister, who wouldn't be home that night. So poor little hurt and damaged Coco, feeling hurt, rage, abandonment, hate and it was all turned inside. I think Coco is in need of a good shrink and meds. If not, she will hurt or kill herself and maybe others.
This story was so well written and the characters were so natural, I got caught up in the story. I didn't mean to analze the whole story. It was a great story.
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Review of A Good Horse  
Review by Lesley Scott
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I thought this was one of the same old horse stories. I love horses, but mules also donkeys are my passion. But your good horse story was as good as your brave and loyal friend, Monty. The best part was at the end when your son let out a yell and so, how much is a good horse worth? The World. Just the world.
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Review of Why try?  
Review by Lesley Scott
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Good Work, Robyn,

At first glance, though you meant it to be depressing, I don't see the poem as particularly depressing and I have been Bipolar my whole life. I know real, horrible, black pit, suicidal depression. When I read your poem, I didn't see depression, I saw truth. It's all true, not just for me, but anyone who knows how to read this sort of document. Maybe you did write it when you were depressed and wrote about how you happened to feel. Maybe you just had a breakup. I don't know.

The last verse sounds like me when I was living at home. Boy did they try to stiffle me and I have a lot of resentments for things they have forgotten. Oh well, who cares now, maybeme?

I think there is a quality in your poetry that seems like you are growing and getting better. BTW do you write short stories. They are easier to write, I think. I couldn't write a poem if my life depended on it, but I can read it.
Keep on writing

Lesdonks
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Review of Freezing Cold  
Review by Lesley Scott
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I really did enjoy feelling how cold you guys were/are. It may get into the teens once or twice and freezes infrequently. I don't even own winter clothes and I'm wearing flip flops! We do still worry a lot about hurricanes. I think I'd like the cold weather if I could come inside and warm up. It would beat the howling wind, drving rain, the following tornados and then the biggest mess to clean up. Make sure you have a chainsaw and a generator down here in the land of swamps and marshes.


The conversation between the three of you is priceless. Sam saying it was racial discrimination to duck him under the water and then another man said, "This is racial descrmination to me. I'm an Eskimo." It is all like y'all were just outside by the pond, just bsing like most of us like to do. I think you may be a winner!

Keep on Writing!

Lesdonks
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Review by Lesley Scott
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Wonderul writing. I got to know the characters, the dialog was very believable. I understood what these two friends had been going through. I have a friend of two with similar beliefs. I believe it, as well, but don't explore the things they write me about. So I try to help with my writing and contacts.

The meal the two friends shared was emotional, to me. I could actuallly hear some of my friend, Beverly's, words come out of "The Masters" mouth. Some of the subjects discussed and the ending reminded me of Te Tao Te Ching. It was written 3,000 years ago and has been translated and published close to the Bible. It is filled with good wisdom and words to live by.

Lao Tzu, author of Te Tao Te Ching also discusses "unfettered friendship and pure trust as gifts, along with being who we really are, not who others expect of us. " I sounds a bit to me as if he is talking about corruption. I'm sure it was around 3,000 years ago.

As the Author says, which is beautiful, "Things are not always sunshine and roses, we have our moments of disageement. However the respect and honesty still holds true today as it did on May 11, 2001 when I finally found the courage to be completely honest with not only myself, but a very dear, very wonderful friend as well."

I loved reading your wonderful piece, Portait of Sumission, and will read it again at bedtime so I can put my head on my pillow and think about what this story has taught me. I wish everyone would read it and maybe we would treat each other with respect and love.
Lesdonks
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Review of "Dear Me"  
Review by Lesley Scott
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Rated: E | (4.5)
The author's resolutions are so funny, yet so real, it's funny! I liked, "You can't change the laws of nature, so why not resolve this year to save me?" Well put! I like that one! I also loved, "...Together we can bask in the simple pleasures of life that cost nothing,demand nothing in return, and pays dividends that last forever. Find Me."

I love it!

Lesdonks

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Review of One Day  
Review by Lesley Scott
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Rated: E | (4.5)
What a poem! So free. yet always aware of the world. Here you are, high above these glorious creatures. It takes a lot of determination and a lot of confience to fly over the eagles. The part of the poem, and there are a few I like, is, "Racing through the wind, I never had a finish line. It's only time that you did." You have no boundries.
Lesdonks
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