Hi, with this review I send my sincerest apologies. You entered the Newbies are the Judge contest months ago, and because there were no other entries I just forgot about it. I am truly sorry.
This poem was well written in the Villanelle form. I like the way you brought the meaning of a storm at different stages of life, the refrain tied them together nicely.
I saw no errors in this piece and I really enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing it and entering it into the contest.
Hi, I am reviewing your story today as part of the "Invalid Entry"
This was a compelling piece of flash fiction. I found the descriptiveness of this piece to be very well done. You packed a lot of drama in 300 words! The ending was good.
I did notice one small typo,
Stillness fals I know you meant 'falls', but I wanted to let you know.
I am glad I took the time to read this, thank you for sharing it!
What a beautiful poem and tribute to your mother. I am sorry for your loss, I lost my mother long ago, so I understand your pain.
The flow of this poem is good, and it holds the readers attention all the way to the end.
Just one thing that I noticed I wanted to tell you about, In your title - worthy, is missing the "r". I only mention this because I would sure want someone to let me know if it were my poem!
Thank you for sharing this lovely personal piece with the community. I hope to read more of your work in the future.
This story had me in tears. It was beautiful, this really isn't a cop out review, or just fluff. I think this was extremely well written, one of the best things I have read on WDC. Thank you so much for sharing this.
This is another review as part of your prize package.
The title of this story intrigued me, as it gave no hint as to what the story was about, nor did the brief description. I am glad I chose to read it.
Annabelle was a strong, female character in the old-fashioned romance genre way. The story was well written, the setting was well-defined and the dialogue added to the development of the characters. Although the nature of the story (romance) made it somewhat predictable it was a fun read and well done.
Hi, fyn I am sending this review as part of the prize you won in the "Believe It Can Happen" fundraiser.
I chose this poem because I remember the prompt from the construct cup. I like the title and the feeling of this piece. Sentimental about love lost, but not regretful, I like that. I think this piece is excellent. The imagery is fantastic and paints vivid pictures in the mind of the reader.
I found nothing in this piece I would suggest that needs improvement. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it, heartbreak and all.
This is a beautiful poem. The free verse poem told the story of a loving father playing the piano for his little girl. It reminded me of my dad playing the banjo for me when I was a little girl. I loved to hear him making music. The imagery is good, and the piece has a warmth and charm about it that made it a pleasure to read.
I noticed no errors and punctuation was done consistently throughout the piece. I have only one suggestion and that would be to maybe rethink the title, which seems a bit off to me and doesn't do this lovely piece justice.
I really enjoyed reading this. The repetition at the beginning of each stanza really works, and the flow and rhyme are exceptional. It felt like a summer breeze whispering "I'm here" in my mind. The little touches of humor also added to the charm of this poem.
I can't give any suggestions on improvement, as I think it is perfect the way it is. I am so glad that I took the time to read this. Thank you for sharing it with the community.
Hi, and welcome to Writing.com! I just read, "Blue Nights" which I found in the "Read a Newbie" section.
I liked your poem, it was well written and flowed easily. The third and fourth stanzas in particular really stand out to me. It vividly paints a picture in my mind as I read it, and I can feel the emotion behind it.
You used punctuation well throughout, and I have no suggestions, I think it is fine the way it is. Thank you for sharing this with the community. I hope to read more of your work in the future.
Hi Passionwrite and welcome to Writing.com! I've just read your poem "Tears of a Melting Candle" and wanted to share my thoughts.
Your title drew me in, I like it.
This poem was very sad, I write quite a few sad poems myself. I can understand the emotion behind it. I've been there. The rhyme was good, and it read fairly smoothly. The message of the poem could be heard loud and clear.
The meter of the poem is a bit off, some of the lines seem as though they are two lines put together, ex:
The beatings start getting hard to handle, Slowly like a melting candle
Perhaps if you seperated it like this it would read a bit more smoothly.
The beatings are getting harder to handle,
slowly fading like a melting candle
Overall, I think your poem has great potential, I think you have a gift for poetry and look forward to reading more of your work in the future.
There is a great resource for poets, I use it a lot, it has explanations of poetic forms, syllable counters, and other useful information. http://www.poetrysoup.com
I have a thing for squirrels so when I saw the title I had to read this, and I am glad I did.
This piece was funny and drew a vivid picture in my mind. It brought back a memory of a day at work when I was doing inventory in the back room and I could hear all of my employees yelling "Run Squirrel, Run! Oh, NO!" as they watched a squirrel try and fail to get across the busiest street in town. One poor teenage girl was in tears. Poor squirrel.
This piece grabbed my attention and held it through to the end. I found no errors and I have no suggestions for improvement.
Thank you for sharing this with the community. I really enjoyed reading it.
Hi, I just read "Anon A. Mouse" and thought I would share my thoughts.
The title is very clever, great choice. It drew me in and made me want to read this piece.
The poem was very cute and well written. It flowed very well the rhyme felt very natural and unforced. The imagery was good and the ending made the poem a delight.
I found no errors in this piece and I have no suggestions to improve it. It is a little gem.
Hi, I just read your entry for "Randomly Writing Poetry" I was wondering how someone would use the word "pimp" and you did a good job with it. The person before you skipped their turn because they didn't want to use that word, I don't blame them. Thank you for taking it on! I look forward to what you come up with next!
Hi, and welcome to Writing.com! I just read your poem "Chill" which I found in the "Read a Newbie" section.
I chose to read this because of your description. I can understand the cold meaning nothing but pain. I also suffer from the same problem. I live in a warm climate which helps, but it does still get cold here at times, and I feel it every time it does.
Written in a free verse style, that just sort floats, reading it gave me the sensation of how I feel just coming in from outside in the freezing cold. You used no punctuation which is fine as long as it is consistent, and I noticed no obvious typos or errors.
Thank you for sharing this, I know that it is not an easy thing to do, but feedback helps us all grow. I hope to read more of your work in the future.
I just read your story "Little Lady Luck" and wanted to share my thoughts.
I like the way you tell the story, in the beginning, I envisioned a shady lady looking for someone to "buy her a drink" and loved the image transforming into a stray cat.
I really enjoyed reading this little gem of flash fiction. Thank you for sharing this and I hope to read more of your work in the future!
Hi, I just read "Reflection of the Night" which I found while perusing your portfolio.
The title captured my interest and I decided to read it.
I like the basis of the story, and I think you did a great job with the contest prompt. I loved the sense of compassion and tolerance shown by the narrator. I see that this story was written in 2003, and it is sad to think how much more intolerant the world has become since then.
I saw no errors and there is nothing I can suggest for improvement. Great story, it touched my heart.
Hi, I just read "Othello's Adjustment" and wanted to share my thoughts.
The title and picture of the cat drew me in and is what led me to read the story.
It was well written, and I felt that feline attitude, a sense of indifference that cats so often display while describing a horrific part of history.
I had never thought about the holocaust in the point of view of an animal, and I like what you did with this. This story really got to me and I am so glad I chose to read it.
Hi, I just read your poem "As She waits" and thought I would share my thoughts. First, I would like to welcome you to Writing.com!
I chose to read this because of the title, it had me intrigued.
The theme of the poem is very somber but I could relate to it. It is a different situation, but it reminded me of my family's cat, she was very attached to my husband and when he passed away, the cat was never the same.
The piece flowed very well, and I could feel the sadness of the pet. The rhyme scheme seems natural and is not forced and I didn't notice any obvious typos or errors.
I am glad that I chose to read this, it really touched my heart.
Karen
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Hi, Mari McKee I just read your poem, "Imagination" which I found in the "Read a Newbie" section. First, welcome to Writing.com. I hope you will like this great community, I have been a member for a while and I love this place.
This is a cute poem and I can picture reading it to a child. It follows an abab rhyme scheme and the poem flows fairly well.
I am glad I took the time to read this, thank you for sharing it with the community. I hope to read more of your work in the future!
Hi, I just read "Life is Like a Cup of Coffee" which I found in the "Read a Newbie" section. First I'd like to say welcome to Writing.com!
I have to say, I really liked your story. The message is a great one, and I really enjoyed reading it. It is great advice and something everyone should remember. Well Done!
I found no errors in your story and it held my attention until the end. I have no suggestions, I think it great just the way it is.
Thank you for sharing this with the community and I hope to read more of your work in the future!
Hi, I am reviewing your entry for the "Newbies Are the Judge!" contest. Since you were the only entry for this round, I thought I would send you a review. Technically I'm still a newbie, so I guess it still counts!
I like where you took the prompt and the poem it inspired. Your rhyme and rhythm were well done, and I enjoyed your poem. Your message was well put, and it made me smile.
I saw no errors, and I have no suggestions for changes.
Hi! I just did your crossword! I got them all right, but clue 5 across sure was tough! This was fun and you did a great job with it! I hope things are going well for you! Have a great day!
This short little story was great. I really enjoyed reading it. As a parent, I have a song that makes me think of my daughter every time I hear it. It is called "Little Miss Can't Be Wrong" by the Spin Doctors, and I shared a similar moment with my son about that song, so I understand why you treasure this memory. This story really touched me. Thank you for sharing it.
I hope you have a wonderful holiday and a fantastic 2016!
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