This story reminds me of my father's condition
At that time I was suffering from suspension
I wanted to be a World-class runner
But, my father made me lose everything
When he was in is death-bed with disease
He was confessing to my mother tearfully
About the wrong done to me by him
But, mom consoled him as fate's act
But, he was going on regretting severely
He was also suffering from A-disease
God is making great calculations strangely
But, he is right in all His concrete steps
He will always do the right thing superbly
This story I truly enjoyed and felt sorry
This type of tragedy has become common
The author has described really finely
My best wishes for the author I express
In her case mother and in my case father
This is the only difference I observe
Due to my psychiatric ailment a decade back
I could not stay with my father closely
I just made trips to see him daily
One day I touched his head giving strokes
And then I came back home locking the door
Immediately was sounded the calling bell
Watchman from my parents' flat
Informed me that my father passed away
My kind touch must have given him solace
That his son had no hard feelings at heart
That touch was an assuaging message.
Nicely written poetry with perfection
Really is wonderful night's depiction
A pat is a must to show satisfaction
I truly appreciate the writing action
Beautifully rhyme pattern is followed
And is totally removed mind's load
The poet has followed fine poetic mode
Taking us to joyfully walk on life-road.
A mother and her baby escaping
Who gave her that precious baby?
Where did he go? to the Almighty?
A baby is not just like that living
It is keenly watching everything
Mother's expression it considers
Its mind is surely functioning
Her tears make it get confused
Mother's smile makes it jolly
In this poetry the poet remembers
Her mother alive or gone I know not
But, she made the child live safely
And write a poetry about the past
A very touching poetry I feel
My heart bleeds with sadness
My soul feels for her very much
Just like how all felt when Jesus
Was ruthlessly in the cross crucified.
The poet regards disability as a companion
This is true in the lives of every individual
In some or other way people are disabled
There cannot be any exception in this World
The poet has kindly titled disability as a friend
He has accepted it as an inevitable associate
This type of making up mind is beneficial
There will be no question of any disappointment.
A really beautiful poem giving hope
That He is present everywhere
We take the next step hopefully
When we are by many cheated
We put full trust upon Him
And then only we can move ahead
Due to his invisible presence
We cross tears using hope-oars
This poem is simple, but truthful
No tough words are used anywhere
A fluent language with a superb theme
Its flow is like that of a perennial river
That adjusts and runs with full vigor
To benefit the entire World with love
Excellently written with a holy motive
A boon to all suffering from sorrow
A crisp prescription for the Universe
Really an extraordinary write for patting.
A great poem about a noble mother
Penned skillfully bestowing encomiums
This is to all mothers applicable
The poet has written only the truth
If the poet has carefully pondered over
Certain extensions can be restricted
This may give the poem a fine structure
But for that the poem is a sure hit.
One is one's best friend
If one trusts another
There starts real trouble
It is better to be cautious
Mind will change drastically
Mind is really a monkey
Today a friend will help
Tomorrow our blood to gulp
when I go through newspapers
A friend alone does all evil acts
A friend who enters into a family
At last even does the act of killing
Just by misusing his vantage point
He may separate husband and wife
Or he may do the most criminal trick
So this poem is in a way educative
The poet grieves with a sad emotion
A friend is lost in her life giving sorrow
But, in practical life, a friend is a menace
Distance is the promoter of admiration.
Really remarkable write with great skill
Getting stranded in the sea is horrible
Samantha wanted to stay to be safe
All others ignored her words just like that
Samantha managed to make up her mind
That shows her true love for the team
She was the person who preferred staying
But, unfortunately fate stole her life simply
Surely life is like this only if we deeply muse
A hard-worker getting suspended or sacked
Fools easily reaching the top of their career
But, nothing else can be derived concretely
Description is undoubtedly very rich
Excellently written with great finesse
A nice theme could have been weaved
Still, reading gave joy and satisfaction.
This is a happened-really information
Leading to happy thoughts' formation
This article depicts finely souls' relation
In a way giving mind elevation cum elation
Even a baby does deep musing
It is hurt when it feels like losing
This intricate life may be confusing
Its own techniques, it will be using
The older child is very co-operative
She adjusts with that small relative
She is to a very great extent sportive
She is positive and really superlative
Such a child will guide the World
With a heart full of pure gold
As a genius she will grow old
Hatred will be by her clean-bowled
The child's heart is by love ruled
By her affection, heart is cooled
Mercy and kindness are pooled
Fate is by her love totally fooled
When is smelled a baby's head
Milky fragrance will flood
Tender body has innocent blood
"Baby is God" is well-said
This article I too much relish
Long live children is my wish
A child is innocently selfish
That is why we call it childish
It is gazing at its mother's direction
And then do a mischievous action
And hugs the girl with love and affection
And at last try for self-protection
The older one expresses her approval
She feels not the young one as a rival
She silently welcomes its lovely arrival
Now relations will have sound revival
By this article I feel immensely delighted
Let that young one be in future knighted
Let by the older one World be lighted
Heaven is by me via pictures now sighted.
With best wishes,
M V VENKATARAMAN
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