Fantastic! I like the work, and I have enjoyed the read.
You may be interested to know the title of your poem is significant, if not catchy. You would like to note that I expect a title maybe in addition, expressive, clear, complete, captivating, tricky, unforgettable and or attention-drawing. Though, the title relates to the theme and thematic appreciation of the work, in essence.
However, I do not like the title of the work.
Edit:
Introduction Speech
(An Introduction to a Speech)
Or,
(An Introductory Speech)
Or,
(A Speech Introduction)
Comments:
I do not like the title; I think it is not expressive; moreover, it does not appear correct to me, as we do not use or write ‘introduction book’, or ‘introduction lecture’, or ‘introduction meeting’, or ‘introduction interview’, or ‘introduction man’, or ‘introduction country’, or ‘introduction friend’, and the like.
I have just tried to offer you some suggested titles to read them expressive or appropriate.
Edit:
A speech introduction for Myst.
(This tells about a speech introduction for Myst.)
Or,
(This interview tells about a speech introduction for Myst.)
Or,
(This tells about an introduction to a speech for Myst.)
Comments:
This description about the interview is not expressive and I find it is grammatically incorrect, because it is not a complete sentence, as you have used a period or full-stop at the end of the groups of words to make it a sentence.
Edit:
Ladies and Gentlemen, it is my distinct pleasure to introduce to you a dear friend of mine. She’s one of those crazy Canadiens, eh?, and currently resides in Alberta.
(Ladies and gentlemen, it is my distinct pleasure to introduce to you a dear friend of mine. She is one of those crazy Canadians and currently, she resides in Alberta.)
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I can honestly say, we have been through thick and thin together going all the way back to when we first met -- about fifteen minutes ago. She has edited and written many newsletters for business and health care -- One of those attracting the attention of a major Canadian magazine.
(I can honestly say that we have been through thick and thin together, going all the way back to when, we first met, just about fifteen minutes ago. She has edited and written many newsletters for business and health care, one of those attracting the attention of a major Canadian magazine.)
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Speaking of attraction, her and her husband of many years have seven children -- A lovely family that has grown to include three grandchildren with two more on the way. She loves staying home to write and read. While she stands only five foot with raven-like hair, she stands tall in her household with the admiration of her family including Fuzzbutt, a pet schnollie. For those of you unaware, this is a cross between a schnauzer and border collie, or alternatively a new Canadian term for beer.
(Speaking of attraction, her husband and about her of many years, they have seven children; they are a lovely family that has grown to include three grandchildren with two more on the way. She loves staying home to read and write. While, she stands only five foot with raven-like hair, she stands tall in her household with the admiration of her family including Fuzzbutt, a pet schnollie. For those of you unaware, this is a cross between a schnauzer, and a border collie, or alternatively a new Canadian term for beer.)
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Her interests include documentaries, and television shows including House and What Would You Do? She revels in her children’s education as a home schooler, and has overcome gigantic obstacles in her life including caring for her ill mother in high school which prevented her from graduating, all the way until her mother passed away when she was the tender age of 16.
(Her interests include documentaries, and television shows including House and What Would You Do? She revels in her children’s education as a homeschooler, and has overcome gigantic obstacles in her life including caring for her ill mother in high school which prevented her from graduating, all the way until her mother had passed away when she was at her tender age of 16.)
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However, she persevered to attend university where she earned a bachelor’s degree in business and an honours degree in English. Truly, our guest has much to offer.
(However, she persevered to attend university where she earned a bachelor’s degree in Business and an honours degree in English. Truly, our guest has much to offer.)
Edit:
So, without further ado please give a polite round of applause to our featured guest speaker, and author extraordinaire, Myst!
(So, without further ado, please give a polite round of applause to our featured guest speaker, and our author extraordinaire, Myst.)
In order to encourage you, I would wish to help you, so honestly and humbly, I have offered just a few suggestions and comments you might need, and have changed words and have corrected the lines of the interview, grammatically, for better or expressive expressions.
Righteously, you are free, you are at free will or you are at liberty to accept, or reject any of the comments and, or the suggestions as edits, given in the brackets as above, for smoother, more expressive, and or more pleasant read of your interview (work).
You would appreciate when your work is on public read and review, it is not a private affair, it should entertain, educate, inspire your readers, it should not be only for your own, personal or self-satisfaction-appreciation-understanding.
You would like to know I feel good at writing this review of your poem which you created in August, 2010 and now I feel happy to send the first (1st) review of your work within about ten years, after creation of your work placed on for public read and review.
Well done overall; thank you for sharing this work with us.
Keep Writing Anything Readable And Or Enjoyable For Years! Nothing Impossible! R No.1366 / Wednesday 06112019
by Guru Valmiki Aristotle Scriber  
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