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Rated: E | (4.5)
First Thoughts

I discovered "A Beautiful Potion" Open in new Window. in "Comedy Newsletter (September 24, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first paragraph hooked me with the description of Princess Zelda. The interaction among the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace.

What I liked

I like the way this story ended because it made me smile.

Suggestions For Improvement

A typo in this phrase, let everything behind, I suggest changing let to left.

Final Thoughts

I enjoyed reading this amusing story. Write on.

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Rated: E | (3.5)
First Thoughts

I discovered "Sixth Grade Surprise" Open in new Window. in "Comedy Newsletter (September 24, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first sentence hooked me with the speaker standing in front of the class. The narrative moves the author's emotions and discomfort forward at a good pace.

What I liked

I like the lesson that this story teaches children about going to the bathroom before making a speech.

Suggestions For Improvement

I found no technical problems or typos. I have no suggestions.

Final Thoughts

I enjoyed reading this amusing story. Write on.

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Review of MicroCuts  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
First Thoughts

I discovered "MicroCuts" Open in new Window. on the Unreviewed Newbies page. The first paragraph hooked me with the description of the bedroom. The speaker moves the plot forward at a good pace, while describing his emotions in a way that arouses both the reader's curiosity and sympathy.

What I liked

I like this simile, darkness acted like a blanket made of thorns, because it is fresh, while describing the speaker's feelings about the basement.

Suggestions For Improvement

A typo in this sentence, I donât even know why. The apostrophe looks like a â, I suspect it has to do with the device or the program used to composed the story because there are other places where this same typo occurs. I have no suggestions on how to remedy this issue. This problem did not make the story any less intriguing.

Two typos in this phrase, him through the death, I suggest changing through to though and the to then because the make the meaning of the sentence clear.

Final Thoughts

I liked reading this story because of the author's talented in the use of similes. Write on.


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Review of The Morning After  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
First Thoughts

I discovered "The Morning After" Open in new Window. in "Comedy Newsletter (September 24, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first stanza establishes the mood, rhythm, plot, and theme of the poem. The rhythm moves the plot forward at a good pace.

What I liked

I like the twist at the end because it did a good job of climaxing the plot and it made me laugh.

Suggestions For Improvement

I found no technical problems or typos. I have no suggestions for improvement.

Final Thoughts

I enjoyed reading this amusing poem. Write on.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
First Thoughts

I discovered "An Ode to Calculus" Open in new Window. in "Comedy Newsletter (September 24, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first stanza establishes the rhythm, rhyme scheme, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm is musical and moves the theme forward at a good pace. The rhyming words are well-chosen to enhance the emotions and the reader's amusement.

What I liked

I like the repetition of the phrase calc book because it emphasizes the theme and emotions of the poem.

Suggestions For Improvement

I found no technical problems or typos. I have no suggestions for improvement.

Final Thoughts

I enjoyed reading this funny poem. Write on.

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
First Thoughts

I discovered "Ninja Pirate Zombie Robot (or N.P.Z.R.)" Open in new Window. in "Comedy Newsletter (September 24, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first sentence hooked me with the speaker's proclamation. The speaker moves the plot forward at a good pace while answering the reader's questions about the creation of a Ninja Pirate Zombie Robot.

What I liked

The creation of a N.P.Z.R. from a high-tech toaster made me smile.

Suggestions For Improvement

I found no technical problems or typos. I have not suggestions.

Final Thoughts

I enjoyed reading this amusing story. Write on.

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Review of 'Me' Time  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
First Thoughts

I discovered "'Me' Time" Open in new Window. in "Comedy Newsletter (September 24, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first paragraph hooked me with the description of Sal's face. The first person point of view is a good choice because it lets the reader understand the motives and emotions of the main character.

What I liked

I like the way the main characters uses the locking bathroom as a break room.

Suggestions For Improvement

I found no technical problems or typos. I have no suggestions.

Final Thoughts

I enjoyed reading this amusing story because it gave me my first smile of the day. Write on.

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Review of The Hole  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
First Thoughts

I discovered "The Hole" Open in new Window. in "Mystery Newsletter (September 24, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first paragraph hooked me with the conversation in the bar. The first person point of view is a good choice because it heightens the mystery of the story. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace.

What I liked

I like the conversation in the description of the trees around the hole because it increased the mystery.

Suggestions For Improvement

I found no technical problems or typos. I have no suggestions.

Final Thoughts

I enjoyed reading this intriguing story. Write on.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
First Thoughts

I discovered "Changing the world everyday?" Open in new Window. on the Unreviewed Newbie page. The title question hooked me and drew me into this article. The author of this article is restless and want to know what to do to benefit the world. The narrative is negative at first stating what the author cannot do, but the articles attitude changes to positive in the last paragraph.

What I liked

I like the way this narrative move from positive to negative.

Suggestions For Improvement

I found no technical problems or typos.

Final Thoughts

I enjoyed reading this inspirational article. Write on.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
First Thoughts

I discovered "Diamond In The Rough" Open in new Window. in "Drama Newsletter (September 24, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first stanza establishes the rhythm, rhyme scheme, theme, and form of the poem. The rhythm and rhyme scheme compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the emotions of love, longing, betrayal forward at a good pace.

What I liked

The last stanza is my favorite because it states the reason for the broken relationship.

Suggestions For Improvement

I found no technical problems or typos.

Final Thoughts

I enjoyed reading this intriguing poem. Write on.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
First Thoughts

I discovered "The Path of God " Open in new Window. in "Mystery Newsletter (September 24, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first paragraph hooked me with the pouring rain and the only coffee shop still open. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The action in each part of the story held my complete attention, while the end pulled me forward to the next section.

What I liked

I like the way the author has divided this story into three parts with each part advancing the plot while revealing the change in the main character.

Suggestions For Improvement

I found no technical problems or typos.

Final Thoughts

I enjoyed this intriguing and thought provoking story. Write on.

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Review of Last Day  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
First Thoughts

I discovered "Last Day" Open in new Window. on the Please Review page. The first paragraph hooked me with John Lomas waking up. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The author builds the suspense to a climax by revealing John's crime a little at a time.

What I liked

I like the way the author reveals John's crime because it kept my attention.

Suggestions For Improvement

An unnecessary word in this phrase, girl is stood, I suggest removing is because it does not add to the meaning of the sentence.

Final Thoughts

I enjoyed reading this intriguing crime story. Write on.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
First Thoughts

I discovered "Reality Spirituality" Open in new Window. on the Read a Newbie page. The title arouse my curiosity and I had to read this prose piece. The first sentence establishes the theme of this essay, while the rest of the sentences elaborate on the author's thoughts.

What I liked

I like the look of this on the pace because the line-phasing and centering suggest a free verse poem.

Suggestions For Improvement

I found no technical problems or typos. I have no suggestions.

Final Thoughts

I enjoyed reading this intriguing prose poem. Write on.

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Review of Bad Luck  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
First Thoughts

Congratulations on winning the September 23 "Writer's Cramp wishes WDC Happy 25th!" Open in new Window. with "Bad Luck" Open in new Window.. The rhythm and rhyme scheme compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the plot forward at a good pace.

What I liked

These are my favorite lines because the climax the plot with an interesting twist.
A semi loaded with pillows T-boned one packed with babies breath,
Frank ran in to save both men and was tickled to a laughing death.

Suggestions For Improvement

I found no technical problems or typos. I have no suggestions for improvement.

Final Thoughts

I enjoyed reading this amusing poem. Write on.

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Review of The Kiss of Life  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
First Thoughts

I discovered "The Kiss of Life" Open in new Window. on the Please Review page. The first sentence hooked me with the speaker's statement about being tired. The monologue moves the plot forward at a good pace.

What I liked

I like the way the author described each sleep interruption in a separate paragraph.

Suggestions For Improvement

I found no technical problems or typos. I have no suggestions for improvement.

Final Thoughts

I enjoyed reading this story. Write on.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
First Thoughts

I discovered "Search the Sea of Stars" Open in new Window. on the Please Review page. The first line of this intriguing poem hooked me. The speaker moves the poem's narrative forward at a good pace while keeping the reader's attention.

What I liked

I like the way the author suggests the search for love without specifically naming the object of the quest.

Suggestions For Improvement

I found no technical problems or typos. I have no suggestions for changing the last stanza or any of the poem.

Final Thoughts

I enjoyed reading this poem because it made me think. Write on.

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
First Thoughts

I discovered "Disease of the Mind" Open in new Window. under Read a Newbie. The first line of this poem hooked me and I had to read the entire poem. The author uses sever ugly words to describe the play. The words suggest the emotional state of depression and darkness.

What I liked

This is my favorite line because of the descriptive metaphor.
Laid on thickly as with a trowel

Suggestions For Improvement

A typo in this line, Nauseating and menacing malodorousness, I suggest changing the spelling of malodorousness to melodiousness.

Final Thoughts

I enjoyed reading this descriptive and intriguing poem. Write on.

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Review of Beauty Is ...  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
First Thoughts

I discovered "Beauty Is ..." Open in new Window. in "Poetry Newsletter (September 17, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first stanza establishes the theme, plot, and mood of the poem. The rhythm is smooth and flows easily from stanza to stanza carrying the plot forward at a good pace.

What I liked

My favorite stanza is the last because it climaxes the poem with a unique definitions of beauty.

Suggestions For Improvement

I found no technical problems or typos. I have no suggestions for improvement.

Final Thoughts

I am giving this well-written Garland Cinquain a 5.0 because the last stanza makes sense. Write on.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
First Thoughts

I discovered "Exile and Death (Prologue)" Open in new Window. in "Noticing Newbies Newsletter (September 17, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first paragraph hooked me with dangerous for so many of the villagers to be gathered together. The interaction among the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace and reveals their emotions.

What I liked

I like the logical progression of the plot.

Suggestions For Improvement

A missing word in this sentence, How can you our daughter out there? I suggest inserting send after you.

Final Thoughts

I enjoyed reading this prologue. Write on.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
First Thoughts

I discovered "Practical Strangers - Chapter 1 " Open in new Window. in "Noticing Newbies Newsletter (September 17, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first paragraph hooked me with Iron rang against iron. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace.

What I liked

I like this metaphor, fear rising in his chest like ice, because it is fresh and descriptive.

Suggestions For Improvement

I suggest placing a link to chapter two at the bottom of this story so that the reader can go to the next chapter.

Final Thoughts

I enjoyed reading this exciting chapter. Write on.

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Review of Rivers of Life  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
First Thoughts

I discovered "Rivers of Life" Open in new Window. in "Noticing Newbies Newsletter (September 17, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first paragraph of this essay hooked me with one of the most beautiful places to ever put the fear of death into me. The descriptions are part of the action and move the narrative forward at a good pace.

What I liked

This is my favorite phrase because it emphasizes the lesson of this essay.
helped me get a little closer to discovering who I am.

Suggestions For Improvement

A typo in this phrase, way i had, I suggest making the personal pronoun i uppercase.

Final Thoughts

I enjoyed this exciting essay. Write on.

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Review of BOUNDING HOME  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
First Thoughts

I discovered "BOUNDING HOME" Open in new Window. in "Action/Adventure Newsletter (September 17, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first paragraph hooked me with stormed Omaha Beach. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at at a good pace.

What I liked

I like this simile, like medicine to help erase the insanities of war, because it is fresh and contains subtle emotion.

I also like the way this story describes the terror of battle from a soldier's point of view.

Suggestions For Improvement

I found no technical problems or typos. I have no suggestions for improvement.

Final Thoughts

I am giving this well-written story a 5.0. Write on.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
First Thoughts

I discovered "A Special Piece of Pie" Open in new Window. in "Action/Adventure Newsletter (September 17, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first paragraph hooked me with the blown tire. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace.

What I liked

I like the similes in this story because they were fresh and descriptive. I also like the description of Strawberry Rhubarb pie.

Suggestions For Improvement

I found no technical problems or typos. I have no suggestions for improvement.

Final Thoughts

This is a beautiful and well-written slice-of-life story. Write on.

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Review of Roots And Wings  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
First Thoughts

I discovered "Roots And Wings" Open in new Window. in "Spiritual Newsletter (September 17, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The author moves the narrative forward at a good pace while giving the reader information on her spiritual path.

What I liked

I like the attitude of openness and confidence that the author of this essay reveals.

Suggestions For Improvement

A typo in this phrase, "Building Fun", I suggest changing Fun to Fund.

Final Thoughts

I enjoyed reading this intriguing essay. Write on.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
First Thoughts

I discovered "The Power of Song and Dance" Open in new Window. in "Spiritual Newsletter (September 17, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first paragraph of this essay hooked me with the survival of the human race is incumbent on song and dance. In the second paragraph the author gives us the sources of her beliefs come through her experience and reading.

What I liked

I like the emphasize on song and dance being a spiritual and healing experience.

Suggestions For Improvement

I found no technical problems or typos. I have no suggestions for improvement.

Final Thoughts

I enjoyed reading this intriguing and thought provoking essay. Write on.

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