First Thoughts: I discovered "The Monster" in "Horror/Scary Newsletter (October 1, 2014)" . The first paragraph hooked me with Mirabelle creeping down the stairs. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace.
What I liked: I like the fact that the author did not mention the chocolate bunny until the end of the story.
Suggestions For Improvement: I found no technical problem or typos. I have no suggestions for improvement.
Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this intriguing story. Write on.
First Thoughts: I discovered "Shadow People" in "Horror/Scary Newsletter (October 1, 2014)" . The first paragraph hooked me with Timmy unable to sleep. The interaction among the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace.
What I liked: I like the conversation between the brothers because it sounded natural.
Suggestions For Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos. I have no suggestions for improvement.
Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this scary children's story. Write on.
First Thoughts: I discovered "Singers&StarfallBroughtYouToTears" in "Poetry Newsletter (October 1, 2014)" . The first stanza of this free verse poem establishes the rhythm, location, and theme. The rhythm moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while each stanza reveals an individual picture of what is going on in the speaker's mind while watching the singing.
What I liked: The last stanza is my favorite because it gives the speaker's final thoughts about the performance.
Suggestions For Improvement: I find no technical problems or typos.
Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this intriguing poem. Write on.
First Thoughts: I discovered "Twin Flames" in "Noticing Newbies Newsletter (October 1, 2014)" . This beautiful poem entwines both the romantic and spiritual love of two individuals. The first stanza establishes the rhythm, rhyme scheme, mood, and theme. The rhythm and rhyme scheme compliments each other, while the rhythm moves the emotions of love and hope forward at a good pace.
What I liked: My favorite stanza it the last because it emphasizes hope.
Suggestions For Improvement: A typo in this line, Forever you will me my Lover. I suggest changing me to be.
Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this beautiful love poem. Write on.
First Thoughts: I discovered "On Angel's Wings" in "Spiritual Newsletter (October 1, 2014)" . The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker in the arms of his mother. The speaker moves the plot forward at a good pace.
What I liked: I like the hope that this story reveals.
Suggestions For Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos. I have not suggestions for improvement.
Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this emotion packed and hopeful story. Write on.
First Thoughts: I discovered "May Angels Watch" in "Spiritual Newsletter (October 1, 2014)" . This is an angel blessing poem wishing the reader the assistance of angels in every aspect of life. The first stanza establishes the rhythm, theme, mood, and rhyme scheme. The rhythm, which compliments the rhyme scheme, carries the emotions of tranquility and peace easily from stanza to stanza.
What I liked: I like the way each line begins with May because it emphasizes that this is a blessing poem wishing the assistance of angels.
Suggestions For Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos. I have no suggestions for improvement.
Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading the tranquil poem. Write on.
First Thoughts: I discovered "Grandmother Willow" in "Poetry Newsletter (October 1, 2014)" . This is a beautiful free verso poem an ancient willow tree. The first stanza establish the rhythm, theme and the setting. The rhythm moves the plot forward at a good pace.
What I liked: The last stanza is my favorite because it climaxes the plot of the poem.
Suggestions For Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos.
Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this beautiful poem. Write on.
First Thoughts: I discovered "Double Agent Chaos " in "Action/Adventure Newsletter (October 1, 2014)" . The first paragraph hooked me with the annoying tone. The interaction among the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while revealing the personalities of the characters.
What I liked: I like the twist at the end because it went along with Bobby's personality.
Suggestions For Improvement: A typo in this phrase, all that bed, I suggest changing bed to bad.
Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this exciting story. Write on.
First Thoughts: I discovered "My Anne Marie Gale" in "Action/Adventure Newsletter (October 1, 2014)" . The first line hooked me with the ship waiting to sail. The speaker moves narrative forward at a good pace, while the rhyming words emphasize the speaker's desire.
What I liked: This is my favorite line because it reveals the speaker's love.
Binds me keeping me tied forever a knot, only time unfolding me
Suggestions For Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos. I have no suggestions.
Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this ballad. Write on.
First Thoughts: I discovered "ALL HALLOW'S EVE" when I searched on the keyword Halloween. The first stanza establishes the theme, message, and rhythm of the poem. The rhythm moves the message forward at a good pace.
What I liked: This is my favorite line because of the alteration.
Lingering litanies from circles cast
Suggestions For Improvement: I I found no technical problems or typos. I have no suggestions for improvement.
Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this beautiful Halloween poem. Write on.
First Thoughts: I discovered "As I Wander'd Lone through Nature" when I searched on the keyword autumn. The first stanza established the theme, rhythm, and mood of the poem. This poem describes the beauty of nature through the eyes of the poet in the style of Walt Whitman, which enhances the reader's enjoyment of the poem.
What I liked: I like the way this poem follows the style of Mr. Whitman because it encouraged me to contemplate the meaning and tranquility of the poem.
Suggestions For Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos.
Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this beautiful nature poem. Write on.
First Thoughts: I discovered "On a October Night" when I searched on the keyword October. The first stanza establishes the mood and theme of the poem. The rhythm is smooth and moves the emotions of love forward at a good pace.
What I liked: This is my favorite line because of the fresh and descriptive simile.
Like wind in high grass
Suggestions For Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos. I have no suggestions.
Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this intriguing love poem. Write on.
I discovered "Beauty and the Beast" on the Unreviewed Newbie Page. The first stanza establishes the rhythm and form of the poem. The rhythm moves the emotions and plot of the poem forward at a good pace.
What I liked
I like the message this poem gives about abuse.
Suggestions For Improvement
A possible typo in this line, But how can seine so beautiful. Is the word seine the word intended in this line?
Final Thoughts
I enjoyed reading this thought provoking poem. Write on.
I discovered "Busy" in " Newsletter (Spare)" . The first line hooks the reader with the way its is written. This poem looks good on the page, while emphasizing the fast pace by the placement of the words on each line.
What I liked
I like the way this poem is written because it emphasized the fast pace of life and that we need to slow down.
Suggestions For Improvement
I found no technical problems or typos. I have no suggestions for improvement.
Final Thoughts
I am giving this poem a 5.0 because the way it is written show the too fast pace of daily living. Writ on.
I discovered "The Rehearsal" in " Newsletter (Spare)" . The first stanza hooks the reader, while establishing the plot and location of the poem. The speaker moves the plot forward at a good pace and makes the descriptions part of the action.
What I liked
The last stanza is my favorite because it climaxes the plot with a message.
Suggestions For Improvement
I found no technical problems or typos. I have no suggestions for improvement.
Final Thoughts
I enjoyed reading this beautiful and well-written poem. Write on.
I discovered "Snowmen and Sunshine" in " Newsletter (Spare)" . The first stanza of the poem hooks the reader with the question. The rhythm moves the plot forward at a good pace, while complimenting the rhyming pairs.
What I liked
The last stanza is my favorite because it emphasizes the lesson the speaker learned.
Suggestions For Improvement
I found no technical problems or typos. I have no suggestions.
I discovered "Shadows and Fog" in " Newsletter (Spare)" . The first stanza establishes the mood, rhythm, and theme of the poem. The rhythm moves the mood and emotions forward at a good pace while the author gives glimpses of his childhood.
What I liked
I like the minimal use of punctuation in this free verse poem because it emphasizes the lessons the author learned.
Suggestions For Improvement
I found no technical problems or typos. I have no suggestions for improvement.
Final Thoughts
I enjoyed reading this poem because it brought back memories of my childhood. Write on.
I discovered "My Friend" in " Newsletter (Spare)" . The first stanza establishes the plot, rhythm, theme, and mood of the poem. The rhythm compliments the rhyming pairs, while it moves the plot forward at a good pace.
What I liked
My favorite stanza is the last because it states the lesson of the poem.
Suggestions For Improvement
I found not technical problems or typos. I have no suggestions for improvement.
I discovered "Growing Up So Well" in " Newsletter (Spare)" . The first stanza establishes the rhythm, rhyme scheme, plot, and mood of the poem. The rhythm is musical and moves the plot forward at a good pace. The mood is light and joyful encouraging the reader to read this poem aloud.
What I liked
The last stanza is my favorite because it climaxes the plot with a lesson.
Suggestions For Improvement
I found no technical problems or typos. I have no suggestions.
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