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Review of 54 EXCUSES  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
First Thoughts: I discovered "54 EXCUSES" Open in new Window. in " Newsletter (Spare)" Open in new Window.. The first paragraph hooked me with Bob's greeting. The conversation moved the plot forward at a good pace and it made me smile.

I like: I like several things about this story. First, I like the name of the horse Dissun Terry because it made me laugh every time I read it. Second, I like the excuses and the way they were used in the story. Third, while I liked all the excuses, this is my favorite excuse His sire could only win at a mile and a half [40]. I could not help but laugh when I read it

Technical problems, Typos, or Suggestions for Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this amusing story because it made me smile and laugh all the way through. Write on.

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Review of A Rookie's Tale  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
First Thoughts: I discovered "A Rookie's Tale" Open in new Window. in " Newsletter (Spare)" Open in new Window.. The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker wanting something exciting to happen in Logan’s Helm. The speaker moves the plot forward at a good pace while building the suspense. The first person point of view is a good choice because it feels as if the speaker is talking directly to the reader instead of just telling a story.

I like: I like the way the author builds the suspense and plot while keeping the laugh until the climax.

Technical problems, Typos, or Suggestions for Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this funny story because it made me laugh. I am giving it a 5.0 because the author built the story's suspense toward the laugh at the end. Write on.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
First Thoughts: I discovered "Even Dark Lords Have Off Days" Open in new Window. in " Newsletter (Spare)" Open in new Window.. The first paragraph hooked me with the dark lord's name. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation and interaction between the two siblings reveals the funny side of sibling rivalry.

I like: I like a couple of things about this story. First, I like the interaction between the characters because it was natural and amusing. Second, I like the way the story ended. Third I like the name DeathLord AngryDeathPantsMurderWill (Will for short) because it was the first phrase to make me laugh.

Technical problems, Typos, or Suggestions for Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this funny story because I began laughing with the first paragraph and laughed to the end. I am giving this story a 5.0 because it is funny. Write on.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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First Thoughts: I discovered "To Be or Not To Be...Human" Open in new Window. in " Newsletter (Spare)" Open in new Window.. The first paragraph hooked me with Simon battling the dwarf. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace.

What I liked: I like this metaphor, hot enough to roast a pig and humid enough to wash the pan, because it is fresh and descriptive.

Suggestions For Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos.

Final Thoughts: The twist at the end surprised me, but did not disappoint. Write on.

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Review of The Monarchs  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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First Thoughts: I discovered "The Monarchs" Open in new Window. in " Newsletter (Spare)" Open in new Window.. The first section hooked me with the perpetration's for the meeting. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace.

What I liked: I like the twist at the end because I thought they were only negating a peace treaty.

Suggestions For Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this intriguing story.

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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First Thoughts: I discovered "A Fairy Tale in Thread" Open in new Window. in " Newsletter (Spare)" Open in new Window.. The first paragraph hooked me with the clack of a loom and a woman weaving her life into thread. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace.

What I liked: I like this simile, the thread flowed through her hands like water, because it is fresh and descriptive. I also like this metaphor, playing the music of her soul loud in her ears, because it is a fresh expression of the emotion.

Suggestions For Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this sad story. Write on.

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Review of Samurai  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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First Thoughts: I discovered "Samurai" Open in new Window. in " Newsletter (Spare)" Open in new Window.. The first paragraph hooked me with Taka Wakameda wrapping the wooden boxes. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace.

What I liked: This is my favorite sentence, Once you prepare yourself for death, you will be far stronger than those who fear it.” Because it is true and something people sometimes need reminded about.

Suggestions For Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this intriguing story. Write on.

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Review of The Eagle's Talon  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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First Thoughts: I discovered "The Eagle's Talon" Open in new Window. in "Horror/Scary Newsletter (November 5, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first paragraph hooked me with Roger walking in the rain. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace.

What I liked: I like the interaction and conversation among the characters because it revealed their personalities while advancing the plot.

Suggestions For Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this intriguing story. Write on.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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First Thoughts: I discovered "What Grew Inside Him" Open in new Window. in "Horror/Scary Newsletter (November 5, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first paragraph hooked me with Max's occupation. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace.

What I liked: I like the interaction between Max and his worm. I also like the way the story ended.

Suggestions For Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this intriguing story. Write on.

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Review of The Night Road  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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First Thoughts: I discovered "The Night Road" Open in new Window. in "Horror/Scary Newsletter (November 5, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker encountering a patch of fog. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace.

What I liked: I like the twist at the end because it came as a chilling surprise.

Suggestions For Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story. Write on.

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Review of The Broken Cup  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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First Thoughts: I discovered "The Broken Cup" Open in new Window. in "Horror/Scary Newsletter (November 5, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first paragraph hooked me with the sound of breaking glass. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace.

What I liked: I like the way the story ended because the mischievous ghost made me smile.

Suggestions For Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this intriguing story. Write on.

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Review of The Gift  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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First Thoughts: I discovered "The Gift" Open in new Window. in "Poetry Newsletter (November 5, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first stanza establishes the rhythm, rhyme scheme, plot, and mood of the poem. The rhythm and rhyme scheme compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the plot and the mood forward at a good pace.

What I liked: I like the way this poem felt when I read it aloud. My favorite stanza is the last because it climaxes the plot with faith and hope.

Suggestions For Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this creative and inspiring poem. Write on.

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Review of The Diary  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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First Thoughts: I discovered "The Diary" Open in new Window. in "Poetry Newsletter (November 5, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first stanza establishes the rhythm, rhyme scheme, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyme scheme compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the emotions of longing and loss forward at a good pace.

What I liked: The first stanza is my favorite because it hooked me and drew me into the poem.

Suggestions For Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos.

Final Thoughts: This poem follows the form and expresses the emotions of loss and mourning. Write on.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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First Thoughts: I discovered "I Don’t See The Juncos, Anymore" Open in new Window. in "Poetry Newsletter (November 5, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first stanza establishes the plot and the theme of the poem. The rhythm is neither too smooth nor too rough and moves the plot forward at a good pace. The main emotions of this poem are longing and nostalgia.

What I liked: I like the description of the Juncos forging for food.

Suggestions For Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this beautiful poem. Write on.

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Review of Twist of Fate  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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First Thoughts: I discovered "Twist of Fate" Open in new Window. in "Romance/Love Newsletter (November 5, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first stanza establishes the rhythm, rhyme scheme, and plot of the poem. The rhythm and rhyme scheme compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the plot forward at a good pace.

What I liked: The last stanza is my favorite because it climaxes the plot.

Suggestions For Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this intriguing poem. Write on.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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First Thoughts: I discovered "Weekend of Discovery - Chapter 1 Draft 2" Open in new Window. in "Romance/Love Newsletter (November 5, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first paragraph hooked me with Jim sitting in his favorite chair because it revealing part of his personality. The descriptions and background are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace.

What I liked: I like the logical movement of the plot as the suspense builds toward the climax of the chapter. I also like the way this draft ends because it aroused my curiosity for what was coming next.

Suggestions For Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this draft. Write on.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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First Thoughts: I discovered "The Shining Specter" Open in new Window. in "Romance/Love Newsletter (November 5, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first paragraph hooked me with the descriptions of the street. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace.

What I liked: I like this metaphor, a shroud of coldness was the nipping air, because it was descriptive and fresh. I also like the way the story ended because it suggested hoped.

Suggestions For Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this intriguing story. Write on.

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Review of Green Eyes  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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First Thoughts: I discovered "Green Eyes" Open in new Window. in "Romance/Love Newsletter (November 5, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker leaving the Dew Drop Inn early. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace.

What I liked: I like this metaphor, brown curls down to forever, because it is fresh and descriptive. I also liked the fact that the speaker mentioned specific brands when describing the drinks.

Suggestions For Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this intriguing, thought provoking, and beautiful love story. Write on.

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Review of Angel Songs  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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First Thoughts: I discovered "Angel Songs" Open in new Window. in "Spiritual Newsletter (November 5, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first line hooked with hungered. The rhythm flows easily from line to line carrying the emotions of spiritual hunger and tranquility forward at a good pace.

What I liked: This is my favorite line, the taste of angels' songs.

Suggestions For Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this inspiring poem. Write on.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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First Thoughts: I discovered "~A Thanksgiving Story~" Open in new Window. in "Comedy Newsletter (November 5, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first paragraph hooked me with the pies. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace.

What I liked: I like the creativity of the speaker defrosting the bird in the hot tub.

Suggestions For Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this amusing story. Write on.

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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First Thoughts: I discovered "CUTTING THE TURKEY" Open in new Window. in "Comedy Newsletter (November 5, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first paragraph hooked me with mom had a taste for luster. The interaction among the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace.

What I liked: I like the picture of the family presented in this story.

Suggestions For Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this amusing story. Write on.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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First Thoughts: I discovered "The Weather Report" Open in new Window. in "Comedy Newsletter (November 5, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first paragraph hooked me with William shutting down the house. The interaction and conversation among the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace.

What I liked: I like the way the story ended.

Suggestions For Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this amusing story. Write on.

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Review of Thick as Thieves  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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First Thoughts: I discovered "Thick as Thieves" Open in new Window. in "Noticing Newbies Newsletter (November 5, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first stanza establishes the rhythm, theme, and mood of the poem. The rhythm is musical and carries the mood forward at a good pace.

What I liked: I like the musical feel of the poem.

Suggestions For Improvement: I found no technical problems or typos.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this intriguing poem. Write on.

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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First Thoughts: I discovered "The Great Super Bowl Mystery" Open in new Window. in "Noticing Newbies Newsletter (November 5, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The first paragraph hooked me with the super bowl trophy being stolen. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace.

What I liked: I like the use of the super bowl trophy as part of this story.

Suggestions For Improvement: In this phrase, quickly got in their car, I suggest removing the adverb quickly because it slows the action.

Final Thoughts: I enjoy reading this intriguing sports mystery. Write on.

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Review of Posthumous Aether  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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First Thoughts: I discovered "Posthumous Aether" Open in new Window. in "Noticing Newbies Newsletter (November 5, 2014)" Open in new Window.. The quote at the beginning of the story hooked me. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace while revealing his personality.

What I liked: I like the way the story ended because it climaxed the plot while suggesting that there was more to the story.

Suggestions For Improvement: I found no technical problems.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this intriguing story. Write on.

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