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Review by Odessa Molinari Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I have only experienced one full eclipse in my lifetime. I knew it was coming, I understood what it was all about, but it still felt scary. For early civilizations, ignorant of the science, it would have been terrifying.

This is written as though you experienced it for yourself. I don't think anyone on WDC is that old, though some of us have been around awhile.


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for entry "Firework" Open in new Window.
Review by Odessa Molinari Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Although I am familiar with the song, can't say I'm really familiar with the lyrics. How many people do actually listen to the words while they are bopping away to the tune?

The misquoting is interesting. Over the years many well known songs have been misheard and the lyrics changed by popular usage.


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Review of Elemental  Open in new Window.
Review by Odessa Molinari Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I don't read much fantasy but I can tell a good story from a bad one. This has all the elements of a good adventure. You have established the norm for your protagonist. Then came the call to action. Who will leave with Barud? What will be the fate of those who stay?

I do hope you will make this into a novel, maybe for Nano.


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Review by Odessa Molinari Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Where can I find this man? Would he consider renovating a bungalow? (I can't manage stairs). I wonder, though, if this computer geek knows more about her than she realises.

You build a very good picture of this part-renovated home, not to mention the disabled cats. I wish this couple well.


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Review by Odessa Molinari Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I get the feeling your Grandfather would be happier shooting with a camera. I spotted a few places where a comma or dash would be more appropriate. I would love to see wildlife like that. The only thing I have seen is a fox. It injured my dog. I think she was protecting young.


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Review by Odessa Molinari Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (3.0)
What you have here is an outline for a story. You have 1000 words you can use. Show their first meeting. Use dialogue. Maybe bring in another character who tells Big Daddy who Miss Lee is. Then show his decision making and the final 'Dear Jane' letter being written.


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for entry "Race Unity Day" Open in new Window.
Review by Odessa Molinari Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
This is more than just another blog entry. Although based around your own religion, it makes points which should resound with people of all faiths. It is good to see quotes used, and links to other sites.

You might want to read through. I spotted a few typos.


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Review by Odessa Molinari Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I like the idea of these cat-like creatures breeding humans in captivity. Any cat owner will tell you, they own you not the other way around.

I can see a time when something is done about overpopulation. I just pray that it will not be taken too far.


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Review of Slugger  Open in new Window.
Review by Odessa Molinari Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I am 67 and have never been a sports person. A couple of years ago there was an event in town. Someone had set up a basket ball hoop, somewhat small than pro level, meant for little kids. Get a hoop, win a chocolate bar. I have never played basket ball, but I am a chocoholic. First ball, in the hoop. Yummee chocolate in my tummy. You're never too old to have a go.


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Review by Odessa Molinari Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Haven't we all had that conversation with our other half at least once. In my case, the conversation was with the police. They didn't take me seriously either. Hey, my dog doesn't make a habit of growling at the front door in the middle of the night.


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Review of Wheel of Fortune  Open in new Window.
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Review by Odessa Molinari Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I had better make this a nice review. I don't want you to put a hex on me. I'm having enough bad luck already. Why do some people act so violently? Unfortunately it is not so easy to get rid of the local troublemakers. Karma will catch up with them eventually.


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Review of The Bus  Open in new Window.
Review by Odessa Molinari Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I feel for Kirstin, but as she realised, she would still see her father. This story is teaching the children of divorce to learn to live with their altered circumstances. You handled the issue sensitively.

Just those snippets of conversation overheard have changed Kirstin's attitude. Hopefully she realised that it was not all about her.


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Review by Odessa Molinari Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This is a very detailed profile. I do hope he has appeared in a novel. I would like to read it. You have obviously put a lot of thought into this character and got to know him well. If your other characters are as well thought out, you should create a successful tale.


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Review by Odessa Molinari Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I know little of the science of black holes. I doubt anyone really does. In a way this story makes sense. Anything could happen when we delve into the void. Maybe there is another universe on the other side.

Your description of the journey is credible. You show the confusion, both of sentient being and of technology.


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Review of Something Unknown  Open in new Window.
Review by Odessa Molinari Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I take it that 'Gas, gin and genies' were your prompt words. I'm glad you put in the line “Anyone have a dictionary?” because I was thinking the same when I read the victim's words.

You managed to show the scene in just 239 words. It would be interesting to see what you could have made of this without the word limit.


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Review by Odessa Molinari Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
You are so like me. You go to a new place and what is most important? Where will I eat? What will I eat? You have made me hungry.

I would have liked to see more of the place itself. I understand that you were there to work, but you had to walk down the street to each restaurant you feature. What did you see on the way?


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Review of Holder  Open in new Window.
Review by Odessa Molinari Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
An interesting take on the prompt. The first part describes well what happens if you ride the slide. The second seems to be a flash back of how Jacob came to be in that predicament. I found it slightly confusing.

There are a few places that call for a comma. Read it out loud and you will soon spot them.


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Review of Along The Way...  Open in new Window.
Review by Odessa Molinari Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I don't normally review poetry but this sparked something in me. You get to a point in your life when what is history to one person is actually a record of your living it.

I have over the years been forced to leave things and people behind. I realise that my bucket list will never be completed. But the memories are still with me.


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Review of Untitled Story  Open in new Window.
Review by Odessa Molinari Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I will be interested to see how this story pans out. It is a good idea to leave spaces after each speaker. It makes reading from a screen easier. I see no other problems with spelling or grammar.

I have to ask - would an autistic person be capable of speaking to a large group? My grandson struggles with crowds.


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Review by Odessa Molinari Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
An interesting article with a personal touch. You relate your decision making process, with all it's twists and turns, in a manner that could be a conversation with a friend.

I have seen other articles on the subject which go on about 'meanings', cultural references etc. From one of those I learned that 'combine harvester' is a girls name. Who knew?


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Review of A Summer Quest  Open in new Window.
Review by Odessa Molinari Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
That little adventure was way too short. He's with Grandma for six weeks. The treasure hunt lasted a few hours. Lloyd could have found it necessary to study the geology book to find the next clue. His hunt could be interrupted by meals and bedtime. The treasure could have been something which would lead to a lifelong interest.


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Review of Dad Holmes  Open in new Window.
Review by Odessa Molinari Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
The case of the missing peanut butter. Rebecca Brookes is on the case. Having interviewed the available suspects she came to the same conclusion. Elementary Mr. Holmes.

A nice little domestic drama. I see no problems with spelling or grammar. Not sure that peanut butter is good for squirrels though.


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Review by Odessa Molinari Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
More 'tell' than 'show' but still a good story. I wonder if his prayers were answered? It sounds as though he lived a good life, so nurture overcame nature.

I see no problem with spelling or grammar. Try building on this with more description of his life.


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Review by Odessa Molinari Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Not really my kind of story but fairly well told. For reading on screen it could do with more spacing. Use a new paragraph for each speaker. I see no problems with spelling or grammar.

I am glad to see a Newbie entering contests. That is a good way to make friends, get reviews, learn from other members of the community.


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Review by Odessa Molinari Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Woops! Who's got it wrong? Joy, for smiling or Clara for saying not to? It seems the smile changed the Ambassador's mind, but what were the consequences for Joy?

There is no clear POV character here. I also spotted at least one typo; 'are' instead of 'our'.


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