Here I will give an honest review. I will break it down with introductory, each lesson, and Aurthur summary. All this will becoming from my personal opinion so if you don't like what you read then let it go in one eye and out the there.
Intro-Magic is a bit like Santa clause, we say he exits. I think it could use more flare to pull your readers in.
Add that it has been used for centuries from the most famous of high royalty to the lowest of peasants.
Maybe add a few things that maybe gained from learning the technique. What few type of spells, protection spells, love, money and power.
Lesson 1- First off it seems to run on about the same point over and over. If a reader is interested in what they are reading and they don't understand it the first time over they will reread it
Instead of having this with what the reader starts out with make it the title of the lesson.
Here I will teach you how to Read magic.
So this lesson will be just like reading a Magic Spell only with no Magic since we have none right now.
Understanding how to read magic
All of this can be left out- it is a lot of words with no need for them
After you read it and understand, you can go back over the same Reading to unlock the Magic since an obvious magic Element is used in the reading but more about that later.
Here is the Reading, and in this reading you will learn a method of understanding you can apply in Reading and finding Magic.
Listen carefully, because this makes sense and will have you believe in Magic.
This needs to be put simpler to make better sense to the reader.
First let think like that Magic is already written down, all the spells and all the teaching and all you need to do is read it
Only this book is special, when you understand you learn something and it makes you more aware of magic.
The First word in this book is, Fireworks.
Now we know what fireworks are and look like right ?
Suggestion-
Image you have a book of spells lying in front of you.
The first spell is based on the word fireworks.
Image fireworks in your head. What do you see, hear , and feel?
We now focus on the word 'Fireworks'.
And split it up in to common words.
You can do this with many words in English.
And it's going to be used in unlocking a secret meaning.
We get these two words - Fire and Works.
Fireworks. This is saying fire really works.
Or a major construction in a workshop using fire.
Ok there is away to slim this down so it is better read by the reader-
Look at the word fireworks. Split it in to two common words fire works. What we get from this is fire really works.
Now take what you have and use your common knowledge here.
Who did fire work for and why is it worth celebrating ?
The Cave Men Of Course.
Cave men discovered fire, it worked
and a fitting celebration to that
would be a fireworks display.
The only thing that needs to be worked is the first line.
The cave men discovered fire first,
Change this altogether - That's the end to lesson one. Here No magic was revealed but you were just taught how to discover Magic and read Magic.
Now that you know how to decipher the magic from the sentence and read it lets move on to the next lesson.
Lesson 2You can lose all this and put it in simpler terms
Let do this now with a word that will connect us to the Magic World hidden around us.
The Second Word in this Wonderful Magic Book that came right after Fireworks was the word 'spell'.
Lets look at the word that is associated with magic 'spell
what you have here is fine-The word Spell is far to obvious to go unnoticed, the word is pure magic itself. Let us define the Word Spell, basically it's how you write a word.
What you have here is good as well-
We learn here that spells are written, and are all around us already.
Here you need to define how-
You could write down your most inner desires and have it all done with magic !
This is fine-With the understanding in Lesson one you are on a path of discovery and realizing your dreams are reality.
Welcome to the world of magic and wonder, a place where your imagination is your world and magic is the air we breath.
Lesson 3
This is good what you have here-
Using the Book that began with,
'Fireworks spells fire works.'
We have a template in applying new words for and discover new magic meanings.
Lets replace Fireworks with the word Spells.
No need for all the words-
We get, 'Spells, spells spells.'
This can me put more simplified-
What we want to understand is,
This means the word 'Spells' spells, or is understood as, magic spells and not simple meanings like in lesson one.
What we need to learn is the meaning of the word spells and what it holds.
once again an be put in simpler terms-
Apply lesson one in a Magic tone to the words and discover the Magic in the word Fireworks.
Add the word Magic to the word fireworks.
You come out with magical fireworks.
You need to put an end to lesson three there.
The rest of what you have is a mere summary.
All of what you have previously can be combined to make one lesson.
Here you have a few mistakes and the sentence is a good one-
This lesson will end in a somewhat disappointing fashion, but the now you can apply magic to every day words you can venture out and discover new things.
This lesson will end in a disappointing fashion, but now you can read the magic in every day words. You can venture out and discover new things.
Technology should match magic's expectations in advancement and it might us be be hidden already around us like a free amusement museum park.
I hope my lesson help you discover this world.
It should read- Technology should match magic's expectations in advancement, it is hidden around like an amusement park.
You asked for reviews so I gave my person opinion. I hope it helps. You have a great ideal going. But, you have to rember what is going to make this book different from the rest of them teaching the word of magic.
Now to answer all you questions.
Did you like this book ?
The subject is a good one, your trying to teach the subject to a beginner. The way you have it written I honestly have to say I did not.
Would you read more ?As the way it is now no I would not.
Would you buy the book if it taught you how to cast magic, like fire ? It depended on how you present it. How clearly the steps are.
Would you be interested helping create this book by publishing
works you have made by reading this book and be apart of a writing team ? n/a
I am sorry for such a harsh review but I know you would like an honest opinion and this one is mine.
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