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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Wow. I like how you have put everything into motion. I see very little mistakes. I would say that it might be a good idea to have a little more description of your main characters so that the reader can imagine what the little girl for instance looks like. I would also put information in about the Halo Effect and what the mother has learned even if you make it hard for her to understand. Cant wait for more.


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