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#3113707

Review of Discarded

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Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Discarded"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

I knew you had talent, didn't I say so? I really loved this piece of flash fiction you got going here K, you did a great job. I liked how you wrote this from the perspective of the prom dress. I find it very clever that you had a material object have internal dialogue. As for the story, it was simple, short, but effective. You utilized everything very well. Good luck with this competition. I really look forward to reading more from you, so get writin' girl!

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#3113699

Review of Valentine

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Valentine"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Small Note: Your title has a small typo in there, you have Velentine instead of Valentine.

What sticks out to me the most at first glance is the beautiful red text you have, with each stanza separated with a heart. Cute idea, I think it really added to the overall feel!

Some words that particularly stuck out to me as I read this poem were: taken hold, food for my soul, piercing words and entwine me. I thought the imagery was really great, especially stanza three where you talk about satisfying your hunger and admitting heavy defeat.

Overall, I felt this was an excellent poem. I can offer no room for improvement other than the small error in the title. Keep up the excellent work!

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#3113694

Review of I'm Special Too

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "I'm Special Too"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

This is a great short poem. I like the title, as it sets up what the poem will be about. As a free-verse, I think you did especially well with your flow and rhythm. There was no where that I thought the flow was disrupted. My favorite lines in the entire poem was the end. I feel it packed a good point. Overall, I highly enjoyed this. Keep up the excellent work!

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#3113689

Review of If You're Broken Hearted

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "If You're Broken Hearted"

Word Choice: I like the word choice here, from dismal moonlight, to madness awakened, all the way down to dying heart.

Structure and Form: I couldn't detect any specific form here, so I'm pretty sure it's free-verse. The word choice was great, and the flow was smooth.

Theme and Meaning: A song for the broken-hearted.

Overall Opinion: Overall, I felt this was an excellent poem. Keep up the great work!

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#3113196

Review of The Thorns of Truth

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "The Thorns of Truth"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Alright, I lied. I hit the back button and this one was sitting under the other one. "The Thorns of Truth" - how could I resist? What I liked best about this poem was stanza 3, even though I felt the whole thing was great. How lucky I am tonight to stumble upon a clearly talented poet. I will be sure to be coming back for more! Many thanks for letting me read these three poems tonight. Write on!

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#3113194

Review of The Spell of the Crow

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "The Spell of the Crow"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Hey there, me again, just getting in another one real quick here. I really liked the title of this one. It sort of reminded me of Edgar Allan Poe. What I liked best about this poem was the excellent use of dialogue throughout the piece. Not only did it have great imagery, but it told a story as well. Overall, I can offer no room for improvement as I feel this piece is flawless. Thank you very much for sharing this with us, you're clearly a gifted writer!

Again, happy WDC anniversary. :)

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#3113193

Review of The Haunting of My Love

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "The Haunting of My Love"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

I love the title of this. I was sitting here steaming over something from a few minutes ago, and I saw this title as I was searching for anniversary reviews. The title definitely drew me in. Now, after reading it, I also feel it's appropriate to the piece. I think the word choice in here is excellent: eerily, eternal bliss, tranquility, and preys upon my flesh. Each line seemed to progress this wonderful poem. Overall, I think you did an excellent job and I can offer no room for improvement. Thanks for sharing this with us!

Happy WDC Anniversary!

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#3113190

Review of Passionesque!

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Passionesque!"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

I love the imagery in this piece: sunshine pouring through a window, moon rising in the night sky, and vast sea. I think your analogies were spot on. My favorite part, I think, is stanza two, where you dream of him any. Overall, I felt this was a really romantic poem and I think you did a great job. Thank you for sharing it with us, and Happy WDC Anniversary!

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#3113187

Review of Totem Wolf

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Totem Wolf"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Thank you for posting this poem. It got me thinking, a lot, based off the things you posed. I liked the word phrasing in here, from words like spiritual birth, psyche, hope is renewed, and pre-spring rain. Not only is the word choice excellent, but I love the imagery. Overall, I felt this was a very good poem and I can offer no room for improvement. Thank you for sharing it with us, and Happy WDC Anniversary!

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#3112947

Review of Sweet Breaths

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Sweet Breaths"

Style/Imagery: The imagery in this is wonderful. I like best how things were described, but through emotions.

Word Choice: Some words that struck me as I read this were: sunrise encompassed, nestled around my heart, blissful eternity and softly, warmly, peacefully. Excellent job!

Structure and Form: For a free-verse I thought this was done well. I couldn't find any parts where the flow was disrupted and your word choice was superb.

Overall: Thank you for finding this and reposting it, I'm so glad I read it. Happy WDC Anniversary!

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#3112537

Review of Passive Aggressive

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Rated: 18+

| (4.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Passive Aggressive"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

The first thing that stuck out to me with this poem was the first line in each stanza. I really like how you did this, from Pain, Neglect, Sabotage, down to Betrayed, Destroyed, Wounded and Gone. I liked how the first four stanzas started off. They almost seemed to be a perspective description of each word. However, when you got down to destroyed it seemed more personal. I think I would've liked this more if it had kept the same consistency as the beginning. Overall, I'm glad I read this. I think it has a lot of potential. Keep up the great work.

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#3112536

Review of A Girl Like You

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "A Girl Like You"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

I like the title of the poem, and it fits, but it does seem a bit overplayed. While I found the descriptions in this poem to be sweet, I felt like there was some real genius in some of your work poking behind the cliched statements. Structurally, I couldn't find any errors in the entire poem and I felt the flow was alright. In the end, I'm still glad I read this, because as I stated I found it to be very sweet. Thank you for sharing it with us and keep up the good writing!

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#3112513

Review of The Newborn Penguin Chick

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "The Newborn Penguin Chick"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: The title of this made me smile, images of baby penguins immediately filled my head.

Word Choice: The world choice here is great, even the descriptive slicing of the fish with the beaks. Some of my other favorites are: flock together and blur of feathers. How cute!

Structure and Form: I couldn't find a specific structure, but as I read this I couldn't find any errors where I thought the flow was disrupted.

Imagery: Again, as stated in word choice, I felt the imagery was excellent.

Overall Opinion: Overall, this poem brought a smile to my face. Even with comments like regurgitation of fishy dinner, haha. Great job, keep up the excellent work.

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#3112477

Review of Released

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Released"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: The title of this poem is good. Not only does it fit the context of the poem, but it also got me interested in reading the poem.

Word Choice: The words you chose to use in this poem were good. painful regret, usurped, pedestal, moored... all great and all popped out at me as I read this.

Structure and Form: For a free-verse, I thought this was well structured. My favorite part was the end analogy with the boat and letting go love.

Overall Opinion: Overall, I enjoyed this read very much. Thank you for sharing it with us.

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#3108836

Review of Kris

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Rated: E

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Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Kris"

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This is a very sweet poem. I'm not sure if I really like the title though. For a free-verse, I felt this was very well done. My only suggestion is to perhaps add some punctuation at the end of each line to help prompt us with the flow. Sometimes, especially with free-verse, this can tend to help. Overall, I thought this was a pretty enjoyable read. I wonder how it would sound if you expanded it a little? Either way, keep up the excellent work!

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#3108826

Review of The Hound Alarm System

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Rated: E

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Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "The Hound Alarm System"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

I really enjoyed this poem. I think you did an excellent job with your rhyming: night/plight, jowls/howls, home/roam, and right/night. The only stretch, I thought, was good/food. In the end, you capitalize "Yet" but in the rest of the poem you switch out casing depending on what part of the sentence the word is in. To keep up with the consistency, I think you should have it be lower-cased. Overall, I felt this was a good read, thank you for sharing it with us, and keep up the writing!

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#3108816

Review of Beachcombing

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Rated: E

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Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Beachcombing"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

This is a very moving and rather dark poem. The imagery in this is excellent, from descriptions of the shore and its treasures to the more emotional side of what you're feeling. The anticipation is set up early on this poem and many questions are placed to the mat for the reader to ponder. My only concern is with the punctuation, as it seemed like most of the lines had commas (which seems appropriate) but some were left without commas were I was expecting them. Overall, I felt this was an excellent poem and I look forward to more of your work. Keep up the great job!

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#3108789

Review of The Hunter's Daughter

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Rated: 13+

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Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "The Hunter's Daughter"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

This is a very eerie poem. I feel like there is a strong undertone in this poem that makes it rather creepy. So of course I love it.

- My only thought is to perhaps use full punctuation within the piece. In a couple of places you use a comma, but in other places I feel it's needed but not there. Also, you don't end anything with a period, so to me it felt like a long run on sentence. With some work, I think you could definitely fix this up easily. Thank you for sharing it with us today, I enjoyed this read very much.

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#3108785

Review of Death Among Us

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Rated: E

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Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Death Among Us"

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This is a very sad poem. I sort of expected the ending, but it didn't change the overall affect it had on me. In the fifth stanza from the end, you need to capitalize "I" but other than that I did not see any errors. For a free-verse, I felt this flowed pretty well. A couple of lines were longer, like She's full of pain, misery, and despair but that can easily be fixed by splitting it into an extra line. Since you don't have any particular pattern to your stanzas I don't think this should be much of a problem. My only other suggestion on this is to perhaps add some punctuation at the end of all the lines, to help better with the flow. Overall, this was a sad but worthwhile read. Thank you for sharing it with us.

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#3108773

Review of You Beat Him Up For Me?

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Rated: E

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Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

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I found this to be a cute short story. I like how you set us up in the beginning, giving us enough background on each character to feel like we could sympathize with them. The story seems to be about high school romance and reminds so many of us that sometimes the grass is not always greener on the other side. With a bit of work (grammar, punctuation) I feel like this piece could be improved. Overall, it was an enjoyable read. Thank you very much for sharing it with us.

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#3108770

Review of Thanks for nothing

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Rated: 13+

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Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Thanks for nothing"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

This is an interesting short poem. It turns from sounding somewhat grateful, to sound bitter and depressed. The end was packed with a punch that sent a clear message to the readers. I could find nothing technically wrong with this piece, but I think the reason why it has such a previous low rating is because one, it's very short, and two it's highly cliched. Being on this site, we see hundreds of broken-hearted poems. When I started reading this, I was reminded of at least a dozen almost word for word similar to yours. I'm not saying you copied anyone, at all. It was just predictable. Overall, it was still an enjoyable read, and as I said I couldn't spot any errors. Keep writing!

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#3108764

Review of Death Am I.

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Death Am I."

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

I like the title, but not the period at the end. This poem is pretty dreary and dark, but that's not an insult in the least, I like 'em that way. I like the questions that you posed within this piece, it made me, the reader, think and keep reading. The best part, I think, was the last stanza. After all that build-up, I liked the packed punch at the end. Overall, I'm really glad I decided to read this. Thank you very much for sharing it with us, I look forward to reading more from you of this nature.

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#3108760

Review of Warning Prayer

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Rated: E

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Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Warning Prayer"

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As I read this, it almost seemed like a sad song in my head. I like you did a good job with a light rhyming sequence and the flow seemed to be even throughout the whole piece. I like how you posed a lot of questions, which got me, the reader, thinking. My only thought to improve this piece would to be to add some form of punctuation. You can easily start with adding the question marks after each question and going from there. Overall, I felt this was a good read. Thank you for sharing it with us.

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Review of Dream World

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Rated: ASR

| (3.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Dream World"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

I'll be honest, a lot of this was confusing. But since it's depicting a crazy dream, perhaps it's meant to be and shouldn't make sense. I felt the imagery was still really great, from the thick paint and jagged tyrant, to the icky description of organs shutting down. My only criticism to you with this is to keep an eye on proper capitalization, spelling, and punctuation. Other then that, I'm glad I clicked on this today. Thank you very much for sharing it with us, I look forward to more of your poetry. Write on!

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Review of Never Take The Green Ones

Review by Riot

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Never Take The Green Ones"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Yikes, was this a true story? Some people can be so rude. That being said though, I sympathize with the character (you) in this story. Our convenience store is much the same way, with children running around and theft is a daily thing there. I don't think it was intentional, but I sort of chuckled at the end statement you made. What we go through to get the simplest pleasures in life sometime. Overall, I am really glad I read this. Thank you for sharing it with us, keep up the great work!

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