Its short but I was on the verge of tears while reading it. I devoured every word that, too me, seemed perfect. Very well written. Its simple but it sends its message with such emotion loud and clear. I can tell that its straight from the heart and thats what makes it so beautiful.
It is very well written and very original. You can definitely sense the sorrow when a howl and its great that you were able to think of a way to put such meaning into that howl. Very very good read. I enjoyed it a lot!
I hope to see more of your work in the future! I just know they'll be great!
God Bless!
Very emotonal and I liked it. I especially liked the part where you described him having 'black hair like Elvis'..etc.' There you effectively conveyed your deep love for your father. The details make life beautiful, and when you love someone.. thats what really counts.
I enjoyed your poem and I hope to see more of your stuff! :)
I love it! The fact that you used different language just further stresses the universal and unconditional love of God and how He touches our lives with such beauty.
You have made such a beautiful poem. One suggestion though, why not add Tagalog (Filipino language..I'm Filipino) ? :) Just kidding! Its wonderful piece!
Keep writing! I would love to see more stuff from you!
God Bless
Beautiful poem! The imagery was wonderful and it really touched my heart. You narrated Jesus' suffering well and highlighted every detail which made it all the more powerful.
One thing, though. On the second to the last line...
'We may never forget them,'
Maybe you meant...
'May we never forget them,'
I'm not sure, its just that that line didn't sound right with the last line.
Wow... good stuff! Your imagery is great and you write very well! The lines I loved the most are;
Their lifeless souls,
Chant the echoes of those gone,
I can say the exact same thing. You have very original ideas and bring forward your own way of looking at things. I loved reading your work, I hope to see more from you. Keep writing!
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