This is a profoundly deep poem. It speaks volumns in few words. I enjoyed the flow and it was done beautifully with feelings few understand. Thank you. Write on Sweethonesty.
"Catuary?" What a fun word. You certainly have the gift my fair writing friend. I loved this story. It moved along at a lovely pace and you metaphors were perfectly used. All the description was perfect. It was a beautiful break in my day to spend it reading this whimsical tale. I look forward to reading more you your writing. THank you for the oppportunity. Sweethonesty.
This was a story I enjoyed thoroughly and could not stop reading. It had a wonderful pace but it pulled me in till the end. Loved the twisted ending. You have a true gift of telling a good story. Never thought I would enjoy a piece like this, but I did. Good job. Write on. Sweethonesty
It is not very often that I can be brought to tears by something I read. This was one of those times. I devoured every word and felt as though I was there in the middle of the horror. You have done a praiseworthy job with this piece. I can only hope that one day I may capture someone the way you captured me throughout. with my writing. I loved it and hated it at the same time. You are so very gifted. Write on my fellow communicator. Thank you for the experience. Sweethonesty. If I could give a 6 i would.
This is a free verse done well. The flow is electric and I could not stop reading it. The story was true and lovely. All usage of grammar was perfect as was spelling. A totally absorbing piece for sure. Write on. Sweethonesty.
Both of these poems were done well. Your metaphors usage was spot on. The flow was good as was the rhyme. My favorite line was, "Money's not the only vice
For which this sin exacts a price.
It strikes a particular note for me with a relative. Thank you for an excellent read. Write on. Sweethonesty
Hi Jeff,
You recently reviewed one of my essays and I felt I would like to return the same for you. I pulled up this blog in an effort to do that review. I was stopped dead by your first entry on Love, and what keeps up from giving it. You did a great job of explaining something that has left me in a quandary for so long. I have a young adult daughter who turns to her phone way too often and I could never figure it out. Your self explained discomfort in small groups gave me a whole new insight into why she does it. Your ability to communicate this delema was done clearly. I fully intend to read more of your work and thank you for what I got from your blog. Write on. Sweethonesty
This was a beautiful poem in Blank verse. Your word flow was excellent and the emotion was clearly felt for this young man in his waiting moment. The blue bird was a beautiful touch. It made this even stronger. Your appreciation of our veterans is commendable. Thank you for a lovely poem. Sweethonesty
I have read your pieces and I could feel your passion of the written word. You have a clear gift of expressing your thoughts. Your dog is priceless and I so understand how he inspires you to write this piece. I have a mini-doxi who I love more than life. Good job with all of it. Easy to read and understand. Glad your intention is to continue to write. Would not want you to let go of that dream ever. Sweethoesty
This is a beautiful love poem. The recipient is truly blessed to inspire you to the depth of this poem. Good rhyme, good word flow. Clearly a tribute to your love. A piece to be framed and placed over your bed. Write on. My favorite line is
"The love in our eyes when we see each other, it envelops us,
No longer two, but one; about it, there’s nothing to discuss."
Sweethonesty
Dear Hooves,
What a lively imagination is displayed here. The story line was smooth and well written. There were no grammar or spelling errors. Your style is delightful. You would be so good at writing books for children, that brought forth information from the past. Loved this piece. Thank you. My favorite line was, " All his noble, fine, or tragic characters are right here in the eyes of Hooves.
I am the noble bull that legends are made of." Write on.
What an imagination you have been gifted with. It is only surpassed by your ability to tell an unusual tale. The flow and the wording are worthy of the received awards. I love your style of writing and will be making you one of my favorites from today on. My favorite line, albeit, so difficult to decide which one I would pick,
"picture myself grazing in a meadow. My modest goals are to avoid dropping my package, and refrain from emitting any noxious fumes from my hindquarters. This requires concentration at both ends."
Write on Sweethonesty.
What a fun read. I would stay with it. Your poem was well written with good rhyme and flow. Do not give up. You have just begun. I think you should stay with it. It will only get better. Write on. Sweethonesty
Nice job on this short but heartfelt piece. Good feelings, good look back at better times. The title is awesome. Good display of how love often sucks. Good that we do get over it and we do more on. Write on , Sweethonesty.
This is truly an extraordinary piece of poetry. The usage of metaphor is done well. Word flow is uniform and clear. Feeling described with an eloquence that has never been mine to use as well as you have. I am truly ignited by this poem and you are truly a gifted writer. Write on my fellow poet. My favorite line is "In space-time, no one can hear me scream
as every fiber of my being is unwound"
Mike this is truly a beautiful poem. Can see that it is coming from the heart. My only quandry is why you have not continued writing. Good job. NIce wording, No errors to my eye. Good flow of words and feelings. Keep it up. Do not stop. Yours is the gift. Sweet honesty.
This piece was good right from the start. You hooked me in the first paragraph. Your word usage was excelent. Your visuals were on spot. I was breathing faster and faster as you were going into and around that curve. I like this so much I am sending it to my sixteen year old grandson who has just received his driver's permit. NIce job. Write on. Sweethonesty
A good choice of topics for my favorite month of the year. Visuals are excellent. I felt as thought I was walking with you and the dogs. Good images. Good use of metaphors. An excellent flow for the blank verse. (always my favorite) My favorite verse was the last one. I like your concept of "Pay attention" this was a unique touch. Nice job. Thorougly enjoyed. Sweethonesty
My question is simple. Can anyone tell me how to get a spell check and grammar check within WDC format without paying for an application? I understand it is there, but I can not figure out where it is. Many thanks in advance.
You have worn your heart on your sleeve and did it beautifully. This was beautifully done. The word flow was goood and grammar perfect to my eye. Nice job. Yours is the gift. Write on.. Sweethonesty.
"My favorite line is:
"A sigh spirals downward
like a leaf on a lazy day"
Good metaphor usage.
This a job well done. Good flow of words. Clear message reflected with good rhyme. Grammar appeared perfect. This was a step back for anyone who reads it. You brought back wonderful memories and you truly have gift for writing. Thank you for a wonderful trip. Sweethonesty
Wow. You really had me throughout. What a wonderful job. Your word flow and your usage of metaphor were perfect. I lived those moments with the charactr. I recognized the distress. Your description was outstanding. And to think I only wanted to look at your opening line. I could not look away. A job well done. You are gifted. My favoritre line was "My pathetic attempts to crack through a defense I created. And now, I appear to have chains holding me down here" I look forward to additional readings. THank you. Sweethonesty
This short but beautiful piece is lovely. You show an inner joy which is sought after by all of us. The word usage is excellent. The thought is captured with brevity. I love this. Thank you Sweethonesty.
What a precious poem this is. The rhyme was done beautifully. The flow was excellent. A great way to teach a child a lesson. My favorite stanza was,
"I know this is against our nature,
but we must help 'cause she's our neighbor!"
Little Dunkin's voice did ring true-
a Dink's gotta do what a Dink's gotta do!!"
This was a job very well done. Thank you for a perfect lesson in child poetry.
Sweethonesty
This poem was done well. It sounded like a child would speak. A clear messasge of sibling disruption and love. I loved this. It reminded me of an earlier time when I had a little brother who drove me crazy. He is not with me anymore but I live because of those memories. Thank you for a lovely ride.
Sweethonesty.
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