I like how you have used the Haikus to make a longer poem. For me it works. The images of a person observing and the raindrops falling on the child are nice and give way to a nice ending.
This is lovely. The beauty of nature comes though strongly in this. Pictures of woodland floors carpeted with blue bells come to mind. I like the idea of the fog coming down and gently kissing the petals forehead. It is a lovely picture to have in my minds eye. Keep you the good writing.
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