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Review of My Love...  Open in new Window.
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)


Impressions. What beautiful images. Much to think and ponder on.

Praise and Applause: Romantically speaking you have embraced a uphoria.

Grammar: I see your grammar as having problems. You need a comma after morning. Then the word "and" cut. After "diamond" a comma and then cut "that is" of the next line. I had a confusion with how "waterfalls" being "swept away" and why with "just one caress?" It should follow perhaps without the word "create" maybe being "crying" or "weeping". A comma after "give you" and add "a" before "paradise". Somehow "broken" to me isn't the correct word perhaps it might be "forsaken". "tears" and suddenly "enchanting kiss" perhaps should eclipse themselves more. They are very opposite.

Suggestions: My grammarical changes are my suggestions. You have beautiful moments that need to be emphasized.

Write on. I'm proud to review you for Simply Positive as a feature.

Feather Duster
vicki


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Review of My Cat Tigger  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)


Gee Megan, everyone in First Peoples will just love your story about Tigger. I can't believe you saved her in a fire. I didn't even know your first house burnt down. There is so much in your portfolio that I can always find such treasures that are personal memories and many good and wonderful moments. What I loved about this story again is your heart was on the line when you needed to save your very own best friend Tigger and you did it, you saved her! How brave!

I liked your details for us. You made it a story to remember.


Feather Duster
vicki


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In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)


FIR*Star*ST}e:star} IMPRESSIONS: This is so original and yes inspirational. You have a high level of knowledge it seems. Your footnotes were very helpful too. I thought of McCartney's plan on "Blackbirds singin' in the edge of night" and loved your poem. It gave me strength and a lean on peace. Just loved it. Your stanzas ran smoothly and had a cut above the rest. I followed the plan and could see it. I also liked the momentary doubt. It brought your words to the ground. To contemplate.

PRAISE*Star**Star* AND APPLAUSE*Star*: I saw excellent free verse in this. Very respectable. Good two last lines to finalize.

GRAMMAR: Nothing, really. No mistakes.

SUGGESTIONS: You are taking a very interesting journey in this folder. No suggestions. I'd love to read more of it if I can find time. Write On!


First Peoples Review.
Feather Duster
~~Twilight Rain
vicki

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Rated: E | (5.0)



IMPRESSIONS: What an enjoyable story concerning knights-of-honor. It showed an honorable position of Alain and his world. The language of the piece was done well--good description and excellent story-telling.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I love a willing-suspension-of-disbelief. I feel that in this piece. Nicely secretive. I like your ingenuity with this piece. Nice world of fantasy you have created. I applaude your writing.

GRAMMAR: I have seen no mistakes.

SUGGESTIONS: Keep writing!

Thanks for being a part of First Peoples. It was a pleasure to review you for them.

Feather Duster
~~vicki
Twilight Rain


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Review of Last Breath  Open in new Window.
In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


IMPRESSIONS: I find non-fiction interesting to read. Because it has really happened, it it that much more exciting or phenomenal. I found your piece is to be so so smooth. With just the right touch of flavor to it, and where you were from and what your Daddy was like, you appeared to have taken time to write this. It had a voice that was unique and gave us a candid tongue that many pieces get high ratings for. I see where you were coming from. Daddy wasn't always an angel. And Mom knew it. The piece never let up, really. It was packed with action in an informative manner. I love family stories. And this one I just love too!

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: You should be applauded for showing your concern for a death in your family and praised for showing so much love for your father. By the end of this piece, I knew you forgave him for all he might have done wrong.

GRAMMAR: Couldn't see any mistakes. This is what makes this piece a marvel. Excellent spelling, grammatical moves, dialogue.

SUGGESTIONS: Keep writing! You have talent.


Thanks for being a part of First Peoples. I am.

Feather Duster
Twilight Rain
~~vicki

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)


IMPRESSIONS: I found this an absolute professional website for us to view. Are you Bev? Her accomplishments are well-worth placing on a good web site. I took a look at what was there and
would love to take a look at it closer. Perhaps,for a purcbase.

PRAISE: Thank you, for being a Tribesman in First Peoples. You have a wonderful Portfolio. I just
loved the times I spent reviewing your poetry in the past. Excellent.

Great show!

Feather Duster
Twilight Rain

vicki

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In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS: I am a Christian believer and find this poem awesome. I have given it a high mark because I feel it really deserves that
It moves with such Presence and gives every indication to be a thorough prayer for us to think seriously on. I can trust this poem. That is why I feel it is moving and ahead of the crowd.

PRAISE/APPLAUSE: Each line of this poem is lacy and frivolous and gives us a peace of mind. There can be hope then. It doesn't quit and give out a negative message. I was hoping for that. I would much rather have it be a sign of good will and hope when our Savior is concerned. I will as you say, use the last line and "linger near thee". It gives us a breath of good air.


SUGGESTIONS: Great rhyming form. Good style. No suggestions but that to write on!


Feather Duster
Circle of Sisters
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vicki

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Review of BEAUTY IN THE SKY  Open in new Window.
In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS: What lightning-works for a poem! Strong colorful words of dipping into the universe's picture.

PRAISE/APPLAUSE: This mighty poem for a short poem never quits. It's like the energizer bunny. It keeps going and going and going . . .

SUGGESTIONS: Marauders? Who could they be? From where? Write on. Great job.




Feather Duster
Circle Of Sisters
~~vicki


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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)



FIRST IMPRESSIONS: First of all, I'm glad you have mentioned the One, the One who saves us. I love these kinds of poems. I find compassion and serenity in winter and it may be because of prayer, I don't know. I liked the premise of your poem. Reverently to God, congrats on a good poem.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: Will there be promise in Spring? Let us write another poem to insure it may come.

SUGGESTIONS: Spice up your grammar. Make it a little more clearer. Examine your poem and find the best way to read it and then make line endings so that you can be more accurate. And most of all, write on!


Feather Duster
for Simply Positive Forum
Twilight Rain
~~vicki
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Review of A Lost Muse  Open in new Window.
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS: What a classic piece! It skips through the sad moment of losing inspiration and for me it is all too real. It happened to me
when I destroyed a long manuscript early in life. I could never get back what I had. It was a long time until I adjusted myself to writing that emotions
came back to me.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: What excellent stanzas. Resonent and clear. You know the path which you are traveling on. Your wish is clear. Get back, get back. This is a very real occurrence with many. I think this piece plays to an audience. A popular theme.

SUGGESTIONS: Don't do anything with this to improve. It speaks for itself. Fulfilling and thorough.

Feather Duster
for Simply Positive Forum
Twilight Rain
~~vicki
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Review of Heaven Sent  Open in new Window.
In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS: I am quite taken with this poem. Sentimental and fabulous, it gives rise to a birth: such a miracle! You have created a work of art here. Each stanza, as it unfolds, and it is very descriptive, lends to your faith and wishes for your dear child. It is a marvelous exactness to motherhood and a testimony to it.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I just can't get over that last line:

For in your tiny clenched fist
you held the key to the world
and the key to this mother's heart

It is the best of images and I can just picture this. There is no greater love than what you have shown us here.

GRAMMAR AND SPELLING: No mistakes. Good long stanzas that do not hold back anything.


Feather Duster
Twilight Rain~~~vicki

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Rated: E | (5.0)



FIRST IMPRESSIONS: I found this poem deeply moving. It searches the soul and gives strength of character. I love women poems and this one is special in that it is a woman's military poem. It speaks from honesty and does not gest. It adds to good reason for the military woman. And the imagiac themeof the "silent bugle" is as catchy and clever as you'll get.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: Why not accept this poem? WIll everyone? No. Because they are biased. But I really do. I have come to enjoy your poems and pieces and its given me a side to the military I just never read about before coming to WDC. Excellent stuff!

GRAMMAR AND SPELLING: I liked your ryhme and rhythm. No spelling mistakes that I can see.

Feather Duster
Twilight Rain~~~vicki
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Rated: E | (5.0)



FIRST IMPRESSIONS: A fascinating poem. The pounding words of the seacoast and the waves of the sea for an electric scene. Nice stanzas that stand up to a criticque. A colorful poem. I liked the imagery and the majestic lines.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: An excellent poem to jump into. A real occurrence poem. Lucky without a major storm. It is so often the case. I liked the way you described this.

GRAMMAR AND SPELLING: Interesting ryhme. No spelling mistakes.


Feather Duster
~~Twilight Rain~~~~vicki




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Rated: E | (5.0)


FIRST IM*Star**Star**Star*PRESSIONS: LOL, you have such a funny and yet honest to goodness candid piece here. These things are the best things to look back and smile about.

PRAISE AND APPLAUS*Star**staar*E: I think childhood memories of this kind are what people want to hear about. Good job!

GRAMMAR AND SPELLING: No mistakes I could find.

SUGGESTIONS: Write on! I'd like to see more.


Feather Duster
~~~~Twilight Rain


~~vicki




Happy New Year!!!


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Review of Noise  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)



IMPRESSIONS: *Star**Star**Star* Joy, your style here is much like those poems I like to read in "Little Press" Productions and especially there favorite darling and a corrrespondent of mine, Ms. Lyn Lyfshin. I liked your style and I liked your premise. Your last line did justice to the point of the poem and even though it was slightly intellectual {which I love} I still could get full comprehension of this poem.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: There is something about you Joy. You make everything new and exciting. You must have an omnipotental brain. It sounds so exceptional. Just love your choice and words. Love your psychology. And you can get yourself down on the ground too!

SUGGESTIONS: Get a little more loose and add those high intellectual touchstones and you may acheive more original stuff.in a poem like this. This could be good for you in publishing your works.

Feather Duster
~~Twlight Rain
~~~~vicki

Happy New Year~~~~!!!!!!


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Rated: E | (5.0)


IMPRESSIONS: This item was listed with Rising Stars Items for November and December. I am happy to review it. How sad, Shi. I know of your Sig Shoppe and am accquainted with the fact that you are a published writer and have reviewed you lightly in the past. This particular review gives you sympathy and best wishes for a sad sad sequel of occurences that somehow happened to your family. I am sorry to hear this all went on. You sound like a great run of family. Even though I am across the United States in the state of Pennsylvania, I wish you condolences at this late date.

PRAiSE AND APPLAUSE: A great write. Detailed and filled with inspiration for us to remember on WDC.


GRAMMAR AND SPELLING: No mistakes noted.


Feather Duster
~~~Twilight Rain
~~vicki


Showering Acts Of Joy gifted me with a Sig from Shi Shad
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Review of Ho, Ho, Ho!  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)



FIRST IMPRESSIONS: An absolute fun-loving knock-out wish for Christmas and I just love it. It is a caring poem. It is a colorful poem. It is a family poem.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: Loved your lines. Succinct. Down to earth. Grabbing. Well-targeted.

GRAMMAR AND SPELLING: No mistakes. Good rhyme. Good rhythm. Nice, even stanzas that stand up to time. Thanks. Ho ho ho. Happy New Year to you too as well.


Feather Duster
Twilght Rain
~~~vicki


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Review of Adam's Memories!  Open in new Window.
In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)


IMPRESSIONS: Grand illusions to which we can only revere. I know that you have a good place here with it. These are tearful images in my mind that reflect what you want Eden to stand for.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: Irony, at its best, calms the spirit.

SUGGESTIONS: Again, we go forth into heaven after paradise. Shall it be what we all hope for?


Feather Duster

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Rated: E | (4.5)


IMPRESSIONS: In as much as I understand this poem, it is very clever. The demand for this can be high. Less words yield more meaning.
Saying less is more.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: Do you think you played medium in this contest of Larry's? I think so.

SUGGESTIONS: Good follow-ups.


Feather Duster

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Rated: E | (4.5)


IMPRESSIONS: Dramatic and worthy words. All taken for us to dream about on Larry's list. I can just see the "Northern lights". Nothing more meaningful than a death at sea. I found the words like an examination. They heaved up into the froth for me. Carry me home. It was a spiritual awakening for me.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: A time of sadness for all of us. The little boat tossed. Your own meaning, your own ground and here you are revealing another world to us. Larry would have loved it.

SUGGESTIONS: Writing with such meaningful direction, we cannot help but prick up our ears.

Feather Duster

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)


IMPRESSIONS: The repetition of the main line to which gives us the key to the poem is very riveting. It commands the poem. It takes on different shades of meaning as your poem opens up to us and laments through years of war and into the arms of Christ. How sad that Larry Powers cannot be here today to affirm this. Your deepest tears are felt here. I feel them in lines like this in a tribute to Larry. He was deeply a great contest runner. Your own life shines with difficult times and agonizes over life's problems. This is very commendable and I sympathize.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: The irony of giving Larry one last list is a rare and wonderful job. You have a poem with much to say about yourself. You can see here that WDC will not rest without prayers for Larry.

SUGGESTIONS: Write on! It is another day now.

Feather Duster

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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)



IMPRESSIONS:*Star*: For all those Twilight Fans, you all should read this item. I think that Princess Megan Rose had a great tongue and cheek attitude about going to see a movie, much like the take I recall in a Seinfeld TV show about going off to see a movie. The people she meets there and the fact that this is all a reality in a movie theatre is quite candidly funny.

PRAISE *Star*AND APPLAUSE: There is so much riding on Stephanie Meyers. Three of her books are on the bestsellers list as of this week. She should be recognized. Seeing "New Moon" was a affirmation of such. Your description of the characters was very unique and thorough.

SUGG*Star**Star*ESTIONS: Continue with your off-the-cuff items for us, Princess Megan Rose. They are delightful and a change from some too serious stuff that is too boring. Hail, the vampire queen!

Feather Duster


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Review of My Life Thus Far  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)


FIRST IMPR*Star*ESSIONS*Star*: I am very impressed with your talking poems, your mainstream. This little biography was so very thorough I feel I know who you are by it. I was glad to note who you are Harry. Seeing that you have a wife, children, grandchildren: this is so vital to everyday life and a biography shines by it.

PRAISE AN*Star*D APPLAUSE: I applaude your accomplishments. I am guessing you are a modest man who just ends up showing up with all these honors. I can feel it in your poetry. A traveler too. A war vet. It is all so praisable. I liked the poem for giving us Harry!

MAIN SUGGE*Star*STIONS: I tell the best of you to write on! It only makes my job on WDC that much more enjoyable. Tell us more.


Thanks for giving us a chance in First Peoples. I am reviewing a Mod for them today.




Feather Duster
~~~vicki
Twilight Rain

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Rated: E | (5.0)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS*Star*: I am proud to be reviewing a poet whom I think has done superbly in the publishing end of poetry. I noted your collections and commend you. For this: this particular poem, I am quite sure that sestinas ARE very difficult to write. You did remarkably well. I find you have a deep heart for a death. That underneath the words, I could trust you. I don't like vile poems, I don't like bad behavior poems, I don't like hate poems. It's just my preference. This particular poem is a very intimate poem with death and gives a loved one a golden look from the point of view of a January death. Now I think I understand it. I hope I do. I do not sell anyone short when a sad occurence appears. You say you suffered the death over your own guilt. That is intriguing. Many of us have that happen over certain occurences in others fates.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE*Star*: Just to do a sestina is a praisable feat. Your words were clear-cut, not mixed or confusing. From what I took from it, your belief in those in the afterlife communicating with the living may be real. I agree. I love your graphics for this poem.

GRAMMAR*Star*: Excellent. Good form. No spelling mistakes.

MAIN SUGGESTIONS*Star*: Continue to write on! I imagine you know that your sig shop has got to be matchless on the WDC circuit. Lots of things
I just loved to browse. Thank you for that too, ShiSad.



*Leaf1**Leaf2**Leaf3*I am writing this with RAOK in mind. I am a proud member of RAOK.*Leaf1**Leaf2**Leaf3*


Feather Duster
~~~~vicki


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Review of I FEEL THE STORM  Open in new Window.
In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS*Star*: What a well-constructed poem! It examines much when it warns of the storm. I see the menace that it claims. I see the difficult ending that is justified. Good sense of wisdom. Knowing this, I can only guess what is next with the last stanza.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE*Star*: I think I can be pretty certain that this poem speaks for higher ground. With that in mind, you have done an excellent job of a universal gamble.

SUGGESTIONS*Star*: Write on. I see calm after the storm for you, with many other writings.


Feather Duster
Twilight Rain


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