IMPRESSIONS: This must be a city-poem. I realized this after reading it and then reading it for the second time carefully as I noted the next to the last stanza. It might have even been the gold nugget in the poem. To have looked at it this way, while I lived in a city, I find it an amazing poem. Ironic, candid, full of detail.
PRAiSE AND APPLAUSE: Whatever kind of poem you wanted it to be, it was just fine. I liked the last line as well. It speaks for itself.
GRAMMAR, SPELLING: No mistakes.
Feather Duster
Twilight Rain My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
IMPRESSIONS: As a comedic sense of word-play with using talking potatoes, this works. I find a comedic piece a nice slice of WDC. Off-the-cuff gem.
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: Original, funny.
ANYTHING GO WRONG?: If you wanted to be a little silly, you suceeded. I don't think there is anything wrong with that. I like features in the Noticiing Newbies Newsletter. Yours was featured and for a good reason, something different from you guys. Nice. No spelling, grammar mistakes to speak of.
Feather Duster
Twilight Rain
IMPRESSIONS: Just had to read another. I am a fan. This was featured in the Poetry Newsletter this week and I have noted your talent well in the Simply Positive Group as a choice of a feature. With this particular poem, it is a bit serious for you. You usually leave a small note of honesty that comes through ryely however this piece is just out and out interestingly sad. Death is the hardest subject to talk about. Some don't want to touch it.
I like the line:
"Yet others must have been loved quite widely, for their graves are piled high with grief from mourners, right up past the tombstone toward the sky." What a line! How catchy! Noteable! Exemplary!
LOVE AND DEATH. It is a reality for most. Your words want to move toward the subject of love before death. This is so admirable.
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: As in all your work, it is by far WDC's most original work amongst the others as a whole. I delineated a logical question with this piece. And then solved it. It was most fitting. For those I mourned, in my own world, I would love to keep these words in mind.
GRAMMAR AND SPELLING: No spelling mistakes. You have arranged your poems in such a way that their style is "rebellious" to the norm and stands out as something noone can actually copy. In different instances, they are wild and free. In this instance, more contained, however, never normal.
IMPRESSIONS: I get the feeling you have read alot of detective novels? Your take on the "Windy City" detective here is quite clever, has good humor, and many details. I liked your substance to the detective Lou. Gloria was a type-cast take-off I think you wanted to keep as comic relief and I felt that went well. You told a real story here with crime circuit buddies. It was original and fast-paced. It took me a second reading and I understood the blow-by-blow details and took it all in. Good sense of imagination here. Nicely engineered.
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: Congrats that it received an award. I think it was award-material. Applause to your characters from Chicago in the '30's. They were dynamite. Nicely lengthy with out a short-out. Good, select dialogue. Sensible, coy description.
SPELLING AND GRAMMAR: I didn't see any spelling mistakes. Your grammar appeared fine.
I enjoyed reviewing you for First Peoples as they shine light on Mods.
IMPRESSIONS: I commend you for working on a Vampire novel. I hope it is going well for you. I got a brief notion of your work here with this piece for ACE reviews and am very impressed. I liked your descriptions and your subject. Your knowledge of the subject of vampires must be vast. Do
you read alot of Vampire material? It sounds like you do. Your next to the last paragraph in this piece was well done and interesting for us as detail to what you spoke of.
IMPRESSIONS: I liked your title immediately with this poem. It invades the poem with lots of meaning behind your deeper thoughts. As a spiritual statement, the poem goes further than meek words. It is based on something much better than that. It has a strong sense of stanzas and gives us something to the imagination as well. To resound in His Glory is a very honorable thing. You did this masterfully.
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I always love to contemplate spiritual poetry. I breathe with this kind of poem and really get something good out of it. I found myself placing myself in the "I" personna and felt just the way the poem did. Examination of soul is a great mentalist exercise. Good job!
IMPRESSIONS: I know that you find vampires interesting in stories, Megan. I like to see that you have a comprehensive list of vampires in stories that you like. Your list was filled with tidbits about vampires I am interested in as well. The best thing about this list is it wasn't boring.
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I liked your women vampires, "Rosalie" --I identify with her. Maybe I will write something like this. Thank you for helping me with vampires. I've been going through WDC browsing through vampire stories for several months. All of the ones you emailed me with are great. I have a few of my own that I found too!
MISTAKES: No spelling mistakes in your presentation.
Hail to the group for Simply Positive Forum. What a massive amount of royal reviews have come out of this. The names of these people are the very best on WDC and I'm proud to be associated with this group.
Then, too, the amount of sigs were a testimony like the long list of credits at the end of a movie. This is an ongoing one and I hope it lasts! Thanks Sherri Gibson and Kelly and Stephanie Grace and Vikki and the rest for being so dearly detailed and caring. I love you all.
IMPRESSIONS I love to read your poetry. Forgive me if I sound repetitive. I will try to come up with one opinion amongst many and try to be original. It's funny but every bird you mentioned in the first stanza I recognized either in my yard or my Mum's yard. Then it was all about the pigeons and it was just mind-blowing. If a person were to seek advice and logic behind poetry, I would place you as a Seer.
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I haven't seen one of your poems go down without a fight. And this one here, well it's a lesson yes.
MISTAKES IN SPELLING OR GRAMMAR: Nothing I could see.
IMPRESSIONS: I noted Bradley, Timmy, Mrs. Lipscome, Mum and Dad, Enid, Tandor, Tabitha--to name most--to be a real team. You have all the elements of a sci-fi extravaganz. Your characters bounce around a bit, but that is to be expected with lots of dialogue. I tried not to get lost and found myself clinging to the ending. Do you suppose more description in further pieces would help the knowledge of where we must go to understand "Timmy at the end of the dinosaur's tail" ?
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: Good job! You came across.
MISTAKES: Saw no spelling errors and your knowledge on grammar was sufficient.
Glad it was featured in this week's NOTICING NEWBIES NEWSLETTER.
IMPRESSIONS: Slated as a medical calendar of days in May over a basically Alzheimer's patient, this was instant "vintage-stew" for me since I had a clinic novel in the early seventies I wrote, and what one calls "mixed stew" to the Editor this week of the Mystery Newsletter where this item was featured. I found this not just hemlock- humorous, but ironic and flat-out interesting as an incident. Detailed nurses' charts are of course going to run this way.
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE "For Hauser to think someone is trying to kill him gives me the impression I am in a Kurt Vongegut book somewhere." Otherwise, Hauser is very ill and not able to handle this problems without steady daily nursing problems. In any case, Ativan was probably not the problem. And Lipitor could only save your life, unless you have developed back pain or any muscular pain from it. No wonder "no deficiencies were found regarding this incident". Yes, overdoses happen. How to trust the Medical Staff is up to you and is the only way going.
MISTAKES: Written up it sounds like there are no spelling mistakes.
IMPRESSIONS: I found your story life-giving and wonderful. It was a well-written story. Everything fit in detail and it claimed a real-life presence that few can override for a beautiful place to catch hold of. To say that it was wet and wild would be silly and sound like I was reviewing a poem however when you write like you do, the words on a beach setting with a lighthouse{one of my favorite subjects} involved, the setting and scene is very exciting. Your roll of words was a virtual dice of active bait. I like your twists and turns as if you really really worked on this when you might expect me to figure it was a quick run.
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE When you spoke of the lighthouse named Barnegat and then in the same piece admitted to being a tax accountant and also added a touch of irony with an obituary, I was delighted. Such is life. We see these things even as we vacation or as we admire things on our journeys and jaunts. Last of all, you have a great style. And that is the epitomy of envy for all writers. You cannot but be a great success in writing, when your style rises above all else.
SPELLING AND GRAMMAR: Somehow this was a masterpiece of grammar. Saw no spelling mistakes.
IMPRESSIONS I value this piece. My own father died in a similar way and I found it unforgettable. He in fact was unforgettable. I know my nephew felt he lingered on and he was young when Dad passed on. You gave a sense of peace and comfort to a reader. Your discussion of death was tender and life-giving to others. I liked your dialogue that you proposed, it was civil and in touch with family which is always nice. Not a line wasted.
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: You have a gift for giving us an honesty here. I felt it to be a reality and it came across nicely. Family issues are sometimes the hardest but always the best to speak of in a piece. You have conquered an audience for this. Your Dad looked good as he looked up for a goodbye and you gave him dignity as you wrote I think.
SPELLING AND GRAMMAR: No mistakes I could catch.
Thanks for sharing this in the Spiritual Newsletter this time. I love features in that Newsletter.
IMPRESSIONS: What a delight to read such a poverty poem. There are comedic lines in this but for the most part, we have that "bum" in mind the whole way through the poem. Whoever the narrative is, he is captivating and essential to a poem about those unfortunates who find themselves at a loss for money. Now that Donald Trump has everyone talking money, what do the elderly need to live up to to see it happen? I like this poem. Off-the-cuff and intelligent.
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I think you suggested that there is an economy problem somewhere. I was just reading "Rolling Stone" today and there is an Obama article in there concerning his take on the economy. Hey. This poem might see us all in a tight squeeze if you like at it in a certain light. Good show.
MISTAKES: Couldn't see any spelling or grammar mistakes.
Thanks for letting me share my opinion with you. It doesn't reflect all, but myself. Hope that I said something you might key into. Saw this in the Poetry Newsletter as a feature. Excellent.
This poem is perfect for a summer read. I'll admit I noted the basic in it and just loved that and the logic behind it. Loved the grains of sand on that beach I might count or the time of day that made it perfect. It was easy to understand. Nice to note the flow of it. Love. If that doesnt beat all. Such a wonderful thing. How often we say it. And in good expression you have stayed true.
I like your form. I don't know exactly what pentameter it is but it really does have a nice gait. If it was in all honesty written in free verse consciousness then the gait was mastered well and never an easy task with free verse. Champagne free verse.
Good spelling, good grammar, I liked the pauses and the stops.
Thanks for sharing this in a recent Romance/Love Newsletter.
Let my opinion be only one opinion. Take what you can. I am reviewing for the Simply Positive Forum.
From the get-go, the poem speaks with a statement and officially gives you a stance as an author. What has happened here? Although the slight ambiguity exists, merely the poem is very good. I find it in all stages, a thoughtful piece that lends credibility to free verse and prose moments inside of a poem that examine a move in life that may be consequential and life-changing. I had to "float away" from several jobs, that came to mind. By romance standards, it stands. And even politically.
Good that it does that. No, mindless poems are usually stiff with misgivings and ultimate mistakes of lost words without meaningful blends.This poem had a mind. It spoke wel. It gave us a trace of metaphor and gave us that visually.
No spelling, no grammar mistakes. Freedom in it. Good.
May I say, Megan, you have such stamina. You are listed as a top reviewer presently and I humbly bow to you when it comes to reviewing. Nothing less than excellent is your style.
I loved this piece. You again have us enjoying princesses and princes. I like to think of myself as Cinderella at one time, even presently. I did get the kiss from Prince Charming, but I'm still doing all the dirty housework. Did Cinderella do anything for chores after the Prince kissed her? I wonder.
You can be so enchanting. Nobody knows a magical spell more than you, I think. I love to rip through your winding tales and unweave them to find the details of a particular Princess or Prince. Whatever comes from their substance, you surely get to it.
What else can I say for this review? Most times you obey all laws of spelling and give good enough effect to grammar for WDC to be proud of
Nothing can really be sure on WDC, it is kind of a test to me, I think. If you do well, you might do well on the market. You have. That's proven. I hope your next books sells and it has interesting characters like you give us on WDC.
Have fun with your next project. I'll be here to read it. I enjoy everything you write and I'm not ashamed to say, I'm addicted.
Such a great little poem. I liked your concise quickly solved solution to a long-time and lifetime journey of sisterhood with someone. True blue. Your valuable words give me hope that the someone I am thinking of for this poem, can keep me standing up to others ridicule with a hug or a smile. Nothing is greater than loving one's sister or having sisterhood with someone. A testimony can be found this way. That is the way of life for a good person. Many words can sometimes say nothing or just be confusing. This one lets emotions give way to honesty and then a statement
of spiritual continence with that last line.
Best that Spiritual Newsletter knew this as they put this in this week's Newsletter. Glad to ponder it.
I would like this review to be just an opinion. Take what you like, and remember each of us has their own opinion.
Right off the bat, I think this piece has much honesty. It rifles through my mind as an active voice like an active wave of an ocean. With much to say on enchantment and the reality of no enchantment, I found it enchanting. This sizes words and it gives life to them.
I know this kind of torment with "endless barriers", I believe. I find this in perspective when I write, to be "don't make me out to be so much" "make me out to be what I am". I find justice in this poem. It flys through phrases and gives us home base to end on. It is a natural poem, like the seasons, I
believe. Has a kind of metamorphosis built in. You could have said anything, but you claimed one "comes down to earth" with this. Very good.
I think your audience here at WDC will adapt well to a good review for this piece.
I saw no spelling/grammar mistakes. Your style was fine with me with the long sentences to get across what you wanted to.
I am reviewieng this piece for the Simply Positive Forum:
April Summer (ASR) A free-verse poem about it being so blamed hot in Dallas yesterday. #1552948 by Harry
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Wow, Harry! This is just your style. That masculine scent to a wonderful jaunt with a depressing day to Target in the heat is more a good prose style than just an autobiographical memoralbic piece of yours. You love to talk I think. I like that. You get a bit, Salingereque and give us
a downright honest string of lines here.
I like to read you for your storyline. This one is no exception. With no grammar problems, really, you do great. Irony hits me with this and I recall Florida weather {I am a Pennsylvanian} in April doing the same thing to me at the Walmart! He he.
Excellently explained the poem is a simple yet fun poem to read in giving us a character sketch of yourself, Harry. Great stuff!
First of all, I have always felt that you are one of the best on WDC. A soul of a poet maybe. It is inborn. I love your curious images, that pop up at any given moment in a poem. You know what you are doing. Your psychology rises above. And you make statements. It's all so terrific.
Your poem speaks with "that animal" in mind, so well. Could you have done more with spacing? I don't know. This was probably a quick response to a contest, I have a feeling. In it's truest form, with caution, a perfectly acceptable damn good poem!
Thanks for sharing with Sherri's Simply Positive Forum.
First of all thank you for being who you are. You have graced so many with the chance to give the Rising Star Program success. I love being a Rising Star Sponsor and hope to sponsor someone else sometime. To be part of Author Appreciation Day is kind of an honor for us all. Many have tread the path of WDC. How many have survived? How talented so many of the list today appear to be.
I just thought I would choose one of your interesting prose/poetry items to rate/review as well. This particular item was three parts genius. The macrame of character studies and the labyrinth of words that equal a veritable inhale of hip-talk with underworld circus gods and godesses in mind perhaps, was just great. I just love a take-off like these three are. I go for following the angles the circus character words take you and found your mix just as potent as Tom Mix itself. Good writing, really. Enjoyed it. Thanks.
Your choice for a folder term was very appropriate towards those items in it. I liked the premise immediately for this short story that speaks of the steps of a blind person. In the first person, you made this piece very spiritual and even suspenseful in its manner. Heart-felt toward the blind, I am very interested in this subject. I know a blind man we have taken into care in a manner of speaking at various times and it is a joy to deal with him. He is always pleasant and extra-special. Even humor is his game and he is such a good young man.
Hope you are at peace and happy today, Sherri L. I just want to say "Happy Appreciation Author Day" to one my favorite authors on WDC in every way. Your portfolio does you only half-justice. As many of us know that your books are fabulous. Simply my favorites.
You have a wonderful portfolio to go to, and I needn't mention "Simply Positive Forum" without telling you it is a smash hit. Everyone just loves it. I haven't reviewed with more enjoyment in years.
And then your folder of poems. This poem particularly caught my fancy. Absolutely lovely. Chosen words for a chosen one. May God bless, Sherri. You are a dearie.
You know, Joy, this poem is a good example of your nicest work. You have a knack for clearing up a word or giving an answer to how poetry examines life. It is a fast-paced write with Slam as it was when I was in it, I hear myself thinking, and I can't help but say, you tune it well even though it was a difficult contest. There is a cryptic message to all your poetry, I believe. You find pictures of things and your imagery is verbose and magical.
Take for instance, from the line,
Suddenly in a fluorescent flush,
I’m young again, singing,
ringing like a wineglass
down into the line,
smiles of solace dribble down my chin,
and in my rocking chair
behind the window-shade
I sit thinking,
I can look at what you might have wanted to say about icy and fiery, {or young and old} , or even, Ying and Yang. I get good vibes from it. Your brilliant musings are high quality. I have reviewed you many times and hope you don't find this another captive fan mail but it is!
Thank you for sharing.
Best Regards.
Feather Duster
vicki
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