My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE POEM
A poem about the beauty of winter.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the word play of the poem, using the word "beautiful" in the first lines makes the words "frost" and "stars" (implying cold) glitter in beauty.
STRUCTURE
This is a contest entry which requires the poem to be 24 syllables and use the word tarnish.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling, punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to make the font bigger and easier to read.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
I have no suggestions for improvement. The poem is easy to read and is cold, evoking a shiver, with a focus on the sensation of touch.
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE BLOG
On The Write Path is a travel blog and engages readers through the various travels of the author. The author went to Portugal for a visit!
WHAT I LIKED
I loved the pictures and just every day notes about the places visited.
ENGAGING
The blog invites the reader to engage. I posted several times on topics.
VARIETY
There was a variety of posts in that it was a different city, different day, different people, and different set of circumstances. Every hostel is different.
EXPRESSIVE
The blog was easy to read.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes, but then when it comes to reviewing blogs, I'm not so picky.
PARTING THOUGHTS
Good use of graphics, pictures, and WDC ML. I enjoyed visiting your blog and sharing your adventures.
Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall Blogging Contest.
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE BLOG
Spiral Bound Journal engages the reader by telling a fictional story of characters who are a couple of degrees related to each other.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked how the characters were interwoven into each other's lives. Well done.
ENGAGING
The blog invites the reader to keep reading - onto the next post to find out what's going on next. It may not be what you think, which keeps the reader on their toes.
VARIETY
There was a variety of posts, in that characters, setting, situations changed. Nice focus on life situations.
EXPRESSIVE
The blog was easy to read. I liked the color switches with the font, if anything, my only suggestion would be to increase the font size a little.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes, but then when it comes to reviewing blogs, I'm not so picky.
PARTING THOUGHTS
I might suggest using a graphic maybe in the manner of a cover in the introduction to set a tone/mood for your blog. I enjoyed visiting your blog. Thanks for blogging for the Bard's Hall 2022 contest!
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2022. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:
Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID!
Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL!
Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem.
This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2022! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified.
Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!
A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.
And now... onto the review....
THE POEM
The author really wants Cupid to cease and desist.
WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:
SLAM: BAD. Cupid missed and it the narrator's gut. It did him no favors.
STRUCTURE
This is a free form poem with no rhythm scheme.
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MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
An intentionally bad slam. Cupid needs to lay off the belches and farts.
Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2022 Contest. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE POEM
A poem about a Full House of stuff that needs to go.
WHAT I LIKED
This poem really connected with me because I have a house full stuff of like that, too. It's hard to throw out most of it due to sentimental reasons.
STRUCTURE
This is a free form poem with the 2nd and 4th line of the stanza rythming.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling mistakes.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
I have no other suggestions for improvement. Good expression! The poem flows very smoothly and speaks to the reader in a very conversational tone. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest.
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE STORY
Mr. Varma wants to build an apartment building on haunted land.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the ending. Mr. Varma grew a lot from the start to the end.
POV NARRATION/TENSE
This is told in the third person limited. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.
DIALOGUE
Good use of dialogue to drive the story.
DESCRIPTIONS
The descriptions were enough to set the scenes in my mind. I might suggest a few stragetic sentences that tap into smell and taste to heighten the fright.
SETTING
TIME: modern day
PLACE: urban setting near a rural setting?
This is something that is clarified for the story.
CHARACTERS
Mr. Varna
There's enough here to understand his motivations. He's the character most affected by the ghosts and he's the one who goes through the most change.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest a period after the first sentence: "When the wind wailed."
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
Great ending! The story built the mystery well. Word count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the contest.
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