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Review of The Mighty Pencil  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi tow of four,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of hope. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what Astrid is planning to do to change the world. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a woman who finds a unique way to make the world a better place. The characterization is well developed and believable. The story concentrates on Astrid, and she comes across as a real person. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Review of Trauma  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Erica,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is filled with pain and strength. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a destructive, painful relationship you have gotten away from. I am a survivor of emotional abuse and know what a lasting, emotional toll that can have on you. I loved this poem and read to the last word. I am so happy to see you are getting on with your life. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Mother  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi REJANI,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is filled with love and gratitude. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. In the poem you celebrate your mother and all the things she has given you. It looks like you have a close, loving relationship with your mother. That makes me so happy. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Minja,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of sorrow and pain. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone in pain after losing a relationship that meant a great deal to them. I am hoping that the speaker will find a way to deal with their loss and go on with their lives. I read to the last word to see if that happens. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have not used punctuation in this poem, but this does not interfere with the flow of this poem. You have used grammar consistently here. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Jackie,

This is a fantastic story. The tone starts off full of peace and contentment and ends up full of terror. This takes all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if their is something in the woods threatening Annalise. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a woman who is frightened by a threatening creature as she seeks some solitude. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on Annaliese, and she comes across as a real person. the dialogue is well done and realistic. Annalise speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of THE FALLEN MOON  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Erica,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of pride and sorrow. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the speaker will go to Illian and celebrate with him. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a werewolf woman who is watching in agony as the man she loves becomes the Alpha of a rival pack, while she is carrying his child. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Paladin,

This is a wonderful article. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the article. I try to be kind to everyone in my life. I was fascinated by your topic and began to read immediately to find out more. You introduce your topic by posing two philosophical, yet very interesting questions to the reader. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have written about the value of kindness and cited two examples to prove your point. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for the reader. The reader is, also, delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)differences based on cast color and creed.-There should be a comma after "cast".

You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Punji,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is tinged with pain and sorrow. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who has lost a person they loved dearly and are struggling to deal with the memories of their lost love. I am hoping that the speaker will find a way to move on with their life and still hold on to the good memories they have of this person. I read to the last word to see if this happened. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Joey,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about a dragon and a girl who form a deep, close bond and have many adventures at sea. I love poems which tell stories. I loved this poem and read the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of 2:02am  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Alina,

This is a wonderful story. The filled with fear. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering who is after the speaker and her family. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, a girl is driven mad by her arachnophobia. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on the girl suffering from arachnophobia, and she comes across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed her. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)You have neglected to either double space between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of The Crone  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi RacingSpider,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is frenzied and full of panic. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what kind of danger the people here are running from. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about three people, one who seems injured, who seem to be running from some kind of evil or danger. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The character speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Review of Nightmare  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi CM Joshua,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if the people will start to fight against the Nightmare. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a group of people. Living with an unnamed evil which rules their life but gives them a sense of routine they have grown comfortable with. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi SpinTown,

This is a wonderful piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. It, also, gets the reader's attention as they realize this will, probably, be a rather creepy piece. They will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have related a true story related to you on a ghost/folklore walk. I love ghost stories and learning about other places. I was delighted with the look I got at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)with an expression utter fear-Should read "with an expression of utter fear"

You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of Thunder Cover  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Words Whirling 'Round,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is tinged with fear and nervousness. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a night in which you sought the comfort of your husband's arms during a thunderstorm. I hate thunderstorms myself. They are loud, frightening and our lights usually go out during one. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi summer blush,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about a princess who ventures out of the safety of the castle walls and into the woods only to encounter strange creatures that want to lure her into their clutches. I love poems which tell stories. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Space is Dark  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Gravel,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if Thud and Ghost will survive this battle. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about two people involved in a fight in outer space. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi VanillaSoftArt,

This is a fantastic essay. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the essay. I have played Maro games for years-it is something I will never grow out of-and anxiously began to read to find out more. You introduce your topic by giving the reader a run down of your history with two Mario series games. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the essay. They will read to the last word. You compare two Mario series games. You have written from your own experience with these games. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the essay tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi pophia,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if Diego will get to be a great swordsman and be with Isabella. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a young man who strives to become the greatest swordsman in the land and builds a relationship with the woman he loves. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Cr1tiKalZer0,

This if a fantastic poem. The tone is filled with longing. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about your desire to move back to Midwest. My husband and I are looking forward to moving. We want to get away from where we are. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Think  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi ellie444,

This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about they are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about those who have left their life and your desire for more in your life. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of Soul of the Sea  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi intuey,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is filled with anxiety and confusion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Annie will escape the island. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a woman who is shipwrecked on a deserted island and encounters a scientific expedition. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Serena,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of annoyance. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what song Kevin is whistling. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, a woman is annoyed with her husband as he whistles a song he can't get out of his head. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Review of Thoughts of Ruby  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi LeJenD'

This is a fantastic story. The tone is filled with contentment. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The story is about a woman who falls in love with a female co-worker when she starts working at a diner and continues a close friendship with this woman. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This is rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi Alea,

This is a wonderful chapter. The chapter opens with intense instruction as Alea is learning how to be a warrior. The reader is wondering how she will do with her lessons. They will read on to find out. This is a fantastic opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the story. They are caught up in wondering if Alea will become the warrior she wants to become. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. I did come across a few structural issues that needs your attention:


1)"I am finally done, she muttered under her breathe trying to wipe her sweat off her brows."-Should be, "I am finally done," she muttered under her breath trying to wipe her sweat off her brows.

2)Moving closer he gave her a wooden box and in it was two daggers.-There should be a comma after "box".

3)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.

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Review of Morning Journey  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Arthur,

This is a wonderful story. The tone is filled with nervousness and confusion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the speaker will make successfully make a new life for themselves. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about someone who has left an abusive relationship and is figuring out their next move. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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