I think that I can connect with this on a personal level. My grandma was a Lutheran who turned catholic when she married and she was probably the one getting their butts to church. I had great respect for my grandma and I believe she did the best she was able for her kids.
I like the use of barrel, it's kind of a fun word. You don't hear it used overly much, specifically in poetry, so I applaud your use of it. It's sweet and simple, and easy to follow. It gives the reader an image of nature, and tranquility, while from a barrel.
Not bad, I did enjoy doing this. I think you did pretty well. It helps get into the spirit of things. Madlibs are wacky and there's no wrong answer so you always win. Yeah! I hope you will keep on writing. I also wish you an early Happy Halloween b/c I can.
The picture sucked me in. I think it's really sweet actually. Also, a bit sad of course. I think it really speaks to me on various levels. I think this says in words what I can't. I think there doesn't really need to be any more said. Keep writing, and welcome to the neighborhood.
That's a real interesting experience. I don't know if that could truly be counted as horror though. Maybe suspense or intrigue. But it has a ghost involved in so maybe it could be a ghost story or something along those lines. Definitely something you would remember though.
Hello. So many varieties of these out there. I wonder how so many of the same themes end up being posted. There's one for nearly everything. yours was interesting. I know thses things can get wild and you never know what's going to happen. Wishing you well.
My mom is a navy vet, so I feel a bit of a connection with this. You really put thought and time into your poem. It really shows. From the start this vet is one of many in the crowd. And then he sees the flag and he honors it. I'm sure from his experiences in the war, there will always be some part of the that remains in him. He values life when so many of those he knew lost theirs. I believe that's hard to do.
When you're together as a group and then lose some of your own. I don't know how you deal with that. It's something you have to learn how to cope with so it doesn't control your life. That's not something I think you can ever really separate yourself from. When the dad said he was proud of him, that hit an emotional cord with me.
I like the title to start with. It makes an interesting story from when you start out with a view and at the end there's a dead body. It's pretty organized and structured too. Always appreciated when reviewing. A little bit of sci-fi to keep things engaging. You never know what you'll get in the end. Sometimes,some pretty bizarre things can come out of it. That just gives it more mystery and makes for more twists along the way.
You think you put a lot of thought into this to make your piece a good read. I hope you are having a productive writing career in 2015. A little variety helps keep things intriguing. Sometimes a little randomness is called for. You help give the reader a picture of what they're reading. Never stop writing. Good luck in the future.
This is actually pretty depressing. Forgive me if I make a song reference here. ''Everybody's Fool'' by Evanescence. This feels like it would fit this. I do appreciate the simplicity of this. Some things are so long and jumbled, it makes it almost painful. To me sometimes. To/review.
[indent}I appreciate how you spaced this and it's a pretty piece short too. It seems here, you were able to really grasp the feeling of isolation and people's misgivings of appearance. People can be like that sometimes. All you can do is know who you are and be confident in that. It can be challenging some days, but in the end it's making the best of your circumstances. If you can take pride in yourself then it's one more battle won. That's certainly true of nowadays.
It is depressing and yet, I think, really captures depression. It can really be a trial trying to get through day- to -day when you don't feel yourself. It can feel so isolating and miserable sometimes, you don't want to get out of bed. I think this was really well written.
I liked this. It kept me reading till the end. Which isn't too hard with 500 words. Suspense/ horror maybe? I liked it. I hope the guy gets help, seems he could really use intervention here. But great dialogue. How you were able to keep up the dialogue was nicely done. You held my attention to the end.
Interesting enough I guess. Though it seems to insane to be real. What stress the back must be under to support those monsters. Mirage would be an interesting candidate, if not one of the most suitable. It's an intriguing, if not somewhat creepy and disturbing.
I was always curious how you were supposed to review an interactive. I guess I know now. Thanks. I'll try doing that in the future. I won't understand the obsession to expand/shrink characters. After a while, the novelty wears off I believe. But I give you credit for variety and coming up with an idea just the same.
I really feel a connection with this. I don't know what that says about me. I think it's true of life. That sometimes, we're our own greatest enemy. It can be scary how fast you find yourself digressing so fast. I'm not sure of the cure but it's not found by our own power. I think this is really insightful and powerful in it's right.
I like the idea of campfires. This one looks like something I'd be interested in joining.
I had a quote in mind, but I know I'd have to be invited 1st.
I like what you have going here, and I'm glad you have people
to take part in it.
I wish you luck and that you get back to me when you are able.
Okay. Well, this really got my attention. I have to say I was curious how this would turn out. It was too great a surprise. Young child is horribly disfigured and it scars her for life. Eventually, she believes she is a monster and acts on it by attacking an innocent child. Tragic. Very well written.
First off, let me say this is my first review of a religious based poem. I appreciate you taking action and taking that step. Religion tends to get people antsy and I appreciate your ability to use it effectively in your writing. I think this hopeful. It feels hopeful and a certain sense of peace as well.
WOW! I find it rather impressive how just one person can start an ongoing story.
It looked very long and that people really took time for their addition to the story.
I think it shows dedication and interest if something has so long and descriptive missives attached to it.
Just the 2nd line I noticed. Be, instead of being, may work better there. But otherwise I thought you gave feeling to it. Let the reader feel a connection if they'd been through this before. I feel I can relate to this even if not fully. I think you're moving in the right direction.
First off, I like how easy to read it is. How you managed to capture the many ways love can form and accomplish. Some high/low points that love can run into along the way. In the second stanza(?)a word's used that I'm not sure if it's a typo or not. Further along, love is duty comes up twice. Maybe intentional, I'm not sure, just thought I'd mention it. Otherwise, I really liked what you did here.
Hi. I liked your word search though I will say I wasn't sure totally how to work it. Digitally anyways. I thought it was pretty good just the same. I did notice that the spacing from the top to the bottom wasn't all the same through out. As a whole I think you did a good job creating this word search.
Okay! Eww, but seriously though, great job overall. It was new to me and sad and unique as well. You are a good story teller and you definitely chose an intriguing piece for a day to celebrate mothers. But I can see how it could be found appropriate. Thank you for sharing and continue the good work you do.
Hello. Wow,You really are a newbie. Welcome. I hope you enjoy writing.com and you stick around. It's recently just been updated, so hopefully you'll be able to benefit from that. I do hope you are welcomed and fell welcomed here. It was interesting and I think you have potential. One thing I noticed:'' My first night out as a real woman.'' You had originally put women. I encourage you to write on and keep going.
Well, a quirky twist to an otherwise normal scenario. It was kind of cute in a weird way. A little imagination helps spread new ideas. I hope you benefitted from your advice and encourage you to keep the creative juices flowing. It was something new and made me smile just a little.
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