It's funny in a way because exams can feel like that. For me, it was in 5th grade most notably that I would get physically ill the day we would have a vocab test. I tended to do well on them. I can't really explained why I got so anxious over it. They just got to me. Very relatable and entertaining to read. A little changing of words could make it sail a bit smoother but other than that, it was a well put together poem.
I always thought this would be neat t enter. JUST FINDING THE TIME TO ACTUALLY DO THAT IS TRICKY. YOU ALWAYS HAVE SUCH INTERSTING TOPICS/THEMES WHEN I COME BY TO CHECK IT OUT. I WISH YOU LUCK AND SUCCESS. AND SOMEDAY IF I GET AROUND TO IT, I JUST MAY FINALLY ENTER A CONTEST. KEEP IT COMING YOU GUYS!
Hello! I think the title of this particular haiku, really sets the mood for this type of poem. It manages to say a lot in a short manner of time. That isn't always easy to accomplish. I like how you used mythology for this haiku. I personally think it makes it that more interesting more the reader.
WOW! Just, WOW! I don't even know where to start. I think I'm just in complete amazement. Of course, we have the good vs. evil here. Things that lead us to sin are sometimes very attractive. We may not even realize how badly entwined we actually are until we're in too deep. Such, an impactful way of putting it.
''Subterranean'' is of course a rhyming poem and I love that. It's easy to follow along with,which is always a plus for the reader. It also really flows as far as rhyming up until'' the deeper... on the surface never sure part. Digging and winning okay, rhymes. Draw and sure though, not so much. Maybe a rearrangement of that would work better. Otherwise loved it and keep it up!
Have to say, expecting to be more upset over this initially than I actually was. It kind of didn't match up with what it's supposed to be about. It didn't make sense reading it and knowing what it was supposed to be about. Reading it and the description you can kind of make a generalization of what's going on.
On Is there a heart that doesn't cry? I often see people asking for money where I live. They seem to alternate. It is disheartening to see people down on their luck. It also makes me feel a little uncomfortable when they approach the car and I feel bad about it.
Good for you, I wish you luck in the new year. You're a better person than I am. I'm not great with New year resolutions. I think you are on the right track and wish you luck in the coming year. Good ideas, I'll work on it. I hope you accomplish what you want and have a good summer. I may take a break from college. Good luck.
WOW! Really colorful, I have to say. It does have repetition which in this instance I think doesn't hurt the poem. Might want to think about it for future reference. Big. I liked that, easier to read, definitely. You may want to decide on a set color for the poem since it can be a little distracting for the reader. You don't want that to take away from the message you want them to receive. I loved your word choice too. Maybe a consistency for type. Still getting the hang of colors too,so no worries. Loved it. Keep on writing!
I liked the formatting of it actually. The fact that it was short but you could follow along made it easier to comprehend. It was interesting and just fun to read. It was interesting how it was like ''la,la,la and then LEAVE ME ALONE!'' Almost giving it some attitude at the end. Gives it a little kick ,so it really hits home. Nice work! I'm nominating you for a portfolio award. Write on!
You definitely know how to use words to you advantage. You're pretty good with imagery. Simple, nice and really makes it down to earth. Almost so it be related to. Good job! Hang in there, good things can be just around the bend.
I really enjoyed it and the fact that it rhymed kind of tickled me. I may be partial to poetry that rhymes, but that doesn't mean all of them are good. I liked how it kind of left it open to what was going on with Christine and at the ending. The majority of it flowed and here and there maybe not as much. But overall, well done and keep them coming!
SHOUT OUT TO THE NOMONSTER! from The Challenge.This is only the 2nd review of yours that I've done and I love your story ideas. You're stories so far are really good and the characters add to it. I thought it was kind of amusing that what would be considered normal for us was freaky in the story. That poor little girl. Anyways, great job as always. Keep it up!
Love how intriguing the title is. It's why I stopped and reviewed. A little awkward since I'm a catholic and shooting a priest is upsetting. I like the story. I liked reading it. I'm still a bit confused with what went on. Not bad though. Keep writing! You're in the right place.
Hello everyone, I just finished writing in response to a prompt and hope you enjoy it and you will review it and let me know what you think. 'please review'- item #819237
I really liked it. I especially liked when you were describing being on the beach. I have been to Sanibel Island fairly recently and it was a pleasant trip down memory lane for me. You were very descriptive and kept me interested from start to finish. The precious gift ended up not being a thing after all. But took more of an abstract form-faith. I found it uplifting in a way and as far as advice- maybe try to pinpoint to the reader what it is you want them to grasp from your writing. So they know what it is you are trying to convey to them so they don't lose interest. Otherwise I loved it and keep up the good work.
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