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526
Review of what is love?  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Thanks for entering your poem in "Invalid Item" and good luck.

I like what you have here.
You capture some parts of love.

suggestions:
I would expand on these thoughts and show more on your feelings/thoughts about love.

Add some genres to your poem.

Keep writing,
Tammy
527
527
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi there,
The review you requested.

I enjoyed your romance, I like the humor you slide in.
I like your witty main character.
Your story flows well and kept me wondering how it would end.
I like the way you leave this...it stands fine as is, but you could also expand on the story if you wanted.

suggestion:
I think you could expand a little on your descriptions...I do like the way you show some of the main characters flaws but would like to know a little more on her.
I think you could also expand a little more on his art work.

Keep writing.
hugs, Tammy
528
528
Review of A Rookie's Tale  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi,

I enjoyed your story and was surprised with the ending funny twist!
Your title is good and appropriate.
I like your main character and the way he seems to be talking to the reader.

suggestions:
I know you have to watch your word count on this but in para one, I think I would have added a little more imagery.

Keep writing.
hugs, Tammy
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529
529
Review of The Christmas Box  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there.
This is a review for participating in our Egg Hunt!

Your title is good.
Your rating and genres are good.

Your story flows well and I wasn't left with any questions.
Your story holds a big message, a reminder that we all need.

Keep writing,
Tammy
530
530
Review of Poetry & Prose  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Great folder.
I love the image...it's very unique and pretty.

I like the quote that you include, it's very appropriate for setting up the contents of this folder.

Great use of writingML.
Your folder is inviting and makes your reader want to spend time in your port!

Tammy
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531
531
Review of Life in a Vacuum  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Flower1* Welcome to the site. Hope you enjoy it. Thanks for entering The Drop Box, my contest for newbies. "THE DROP-OFF BOX " 

My Overall impression:
Very creative topic to write on.
I like how you start the first 2 stanzas.
You set the tone of this well.

You ask some unique questions...I don't think I want to find the answers! lol I enjoyed reading this.

I like that this could be a play on words for letting go of past memories/emotions (which you briefly touch on this at the end.)

Well-done!

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me.
Keep writing, Tammy
532
532
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Flower1* Welcome to the site. Hope you enjoy it. Thanks for entering The Drop Box, my contest for newbies.
THE DROP-OFF BOX   (13+)
Monthly newbie contest.
#530577 by Tammy~Catchin Up~


My Overall impression:
Great tribute/poem.
Your poem goes full circle in this tragedy.
Your ending is really good.
Your rhymes are good and your poem/story flows well.
I think stanza 4 is the best it really sets the mood of your poem.

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me.
Keep writing, Tammy
533
533
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*Flower1* Welcome to the site. Hope you enjoy it. Thanks for entering The Drop Box, my contest for newbies. "THE DROP-OFF BOX " 

My Overall impression:
I enjoyed your story.
It was intense in places and ironic/funny at times.
Very unique plot you have.....not your normal vampire story!!
Your title, rating and genres are all good.
I didn't notice any typos or errors.

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me.
Keep writing, Tammy
534
534
Review of A Bunny's Tale  
Rated: E | (4.0)
*Flower1* Welcome to the site. Hope you enjoy it. Thanks for entering The Drop Box, my contest for newbies.
THE DROP-OFF BOX   (13+)
Monthly newbie contest.
#530577 by Tammy~Catchin Up~


My Overall impression:
Very cute story.
I like your title...creative play on words there!
Your story flows well and I wasn't left with any questions.

Suggestions/Errors:
Watch your repitition of words
In para 4 you have chocolate 4 times...a couple of these could be changed for different descriptive words.

You might make Daniel a little older...I'm not sure a 4 year old would be worried about the bunny or have such a creative plan...

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me.
Keep writing, Tammy
535
535
Rated: E | (4.5)
Welcome to the site.
There is lots to do here.
Have fun!!

I enjoyed reading a little about you.
Thanks for sharing. You express yourself well.

I am from Texas, moved up to Iowa 3 years ago.
VERY big difference. I miss the South, the good manners and all.

Tammy
536
536
Review of Melissa W  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
*Flower1* Welcome to the site. Hope you enjoy it. Thanks for entering The Drop Box, my contest for newbies. "THE DROP-OFF BOX " 

My Overall impression:
Thanks for sharing a part of yourself with us.
Your title, rating and genres are good.
I like the descriptions you use they are very creative.

Suggestions/Errors:
I would just go over this there are a lot of little grammar errors/spelling errors that need fixing.

Here are a few:
One person who stands out like a glow stick in the pitch black in Melissa W.
I would change the second in to is.

The resin I like Mel is because she is magic
this should be reason.

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me.
Keep writing, Tammy
537
537
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Flower1* Welcome to the site. Hope you enjoy it. Thanks for entering The Drop Box, my contest for newbies. "THE DROP-OFF BOX " 

My Overall impression:
I like the topic you write on.
I think most here will identify with these thoughts and feelings.

Suggestions/Errors:
Add some genres to this, it will get your poem more exposure.

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me.
Keep writing, Tammy
538
538
Review of From Me to You  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Flower1* Welcome to the site. Hope you enjoy it. Thanks for entering The Drop Box, my contest for newbies. "THE DROP-OFF BOX " 

My Overall impression:
Your words are true, we all long to be older until before we know it...we are old, longing for our youth.
It's ironic! Your poem expresses this very well.

Suggestions/Errors:
You mention memories....I think if you added a stanza with some personal memories that it would enhance your poem.

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me.
Keep writing, Tammy
539
539
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Flower1* Welcome to the site. Hope you enjoy it. Thanks for entering The Drop Box, my contest for newbies.
THE DROP-OFF BOX   (13+)
Monthly newbie contest.
#530577 by Tammy~Catchin Up~


My Overall impression:
I am sorry that you and your family had to go through this.

I know this was hard to write; I hope with your writing that you find some release.

Your title, rating and genres are good.

Suggestions/Errors:
Only one, if it isn't too hard mayb a little more on what led to this happening.

I have family in Texas and have heard numerous horror stories re: CPS.

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me.
Keep writing, Tammy
540
540
Review of Smiles  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Flower1* Welcome to the site. Hope you enjoy it. Thanks for entering The Drop Box, my contest for newbies. "THE DROP-OFF BOX " 

My Overall impression:
I like your poem.
It made me think of my parents, the Lord, my best friend and others.
I think each reader will think of special people that this applies to.
Thanks for sharing.

Suggestions/Errors:
Add some genres to this...it will give your poem exposure. (maybe spiritual, experience, personal)

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me.
Keep writing, Tammy
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541
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*Flower1* Welcome to the site. Hope you enjoy it. Thanks for entering The Drop Box, my contest for newbies.
THE DROP-OFF BOX   (13+)
Monthly newbie contest.
#530577 by Tammy~Catchin Up~


My Overall impression:
I like your title, it fits well.
Your rating and genres are good.
Your poem tells a tragic story.
You set the scene well and the ending twist was unexpected.

Suggestions/Errors:
Your ryhme pattern is the same except for the first stanza..I would change line 3 or 4 in the first stanza to make that rhyme better.

Watch your use of words not needed/or filler words, the, that, and etc.
ex;
We were under the shade of that same, old cherry blossom tree.
Seeing the painful feeling in his eyes, from it, I don’t think I could ever break free.
He held me tightly in his arms like he never did before.
I soon felt the urge not to let go of his embrace more and more
try
We were under the shade of that old cherry blossom tree.
Seeing the pain in his eyes; I don’t think I could ever break free.
He held me tightly like he never had before.
I felt the urge to not let go of his embrace for
evermore

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me.
Keep writing, Tammy
542
542
Review of Roy's Beginnings  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Flower1* Welcome to the site. Hope you enjoy it. Thanks for entering The Drop Box, my contest for newbies. "THE DROP-OFF BOX " 

My Overall impression:
This is written very well.
I would love to read more on this, the past that led to this and on to the future with Roy.
I think you have the start for a character sketch, but I wouldn't say this was a character sketch...you have intorduced the new character but not revealed anything about Roy yet.
I'd like to know more about him and his parents.

Suggestions/Errors:
ONly one;
Finish with this, I think a novel with these characters would be very interesting.

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me.
Keep writing, Tammy
543
543
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Wink*Thanks for entering your poem in
 Invalid Item 
This item number is not valid.
#962569 by Not Available.
and good luck.

*Flower2*OVERALL IMPRESSION:
I enjoyed your poem.
You touch on your readers senses.
Your imagery is good through-out.
Each stanza paints a picture for your readers.
Your descriptions are good and really bring your poem alive for your readers.

My favorite lines are:
'A basket of fruit glistening. Fat
red apples and grapes-wishing to be wine if only they could speak.'

*Flower4*Keep writing. Always, Tammy
544
544
Rated: E | (4.5)
Thanks for entering your poem in "Invalid Item"  and good luck.

Great poem/your form is good.
I like your last 2 lines the best.

ONly one line stuck out to me:
My days and weeks and months have gone empty
you might try;
My days, my weeks and months have gone empty

Keep writing,
Tammy
545
545
Review of Isobel  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Wink*Thanks for entering your poem in
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This item number is not valid.
#962569 by Not Available.
and good luck.

*Flower2*OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Your title is fitting, your rating and genres are good.
What a love story. I enjoyed reading this.
Your poem is so very pretty as you tell your story.
What a way to gentle go into death!
Thanks for sharing your poem.

*Flower4*Keep writing. Always, Tammy
546
546
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Your title fits well. Your poem flows well.
Your rating and genres are appropriate.

I agree that Easter isn't what it used to be.
You voice your opinions very well.
And you make some great points to validate your opinions.

suggestion;
You might add an autor's note and explain for us who don't know, what Bilby is.

Keep writing.
Tammy
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547
547
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I loved this. Very funny.
Your poem flows well as it tells your tale!
Thanks for entering your poem in
 Invalid Item 
This item number is not valid.
#962569 by Not Available.
and good luck.
Keep writing.
hugs, Tammy
548
548
Review of Drivel  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*Wink*Thanks for entering your poem in"Invalid Item"  and good luck.

*Flower2*OVERALL IMPRESSION:
I like your title you chose for this.
I like your ending and most here will identify with your poem. Stanza 4 pretty much sums it all up.

*Idea*MY OPINIONS/SUGGESTIONS:
Watch your use of filler words(the, that and etc.) and your repitition of words.
ex;
Meaningless drivel pours forth
And blocks the sound of silence.
The darkness engulfs all beings
And stops the light from shining.
try;
Meaningless drivel pours forth
Blocking the sound of silence.
Darkness engulfs all beings
Stopping the light from shining.

*Flower4*Keep writing. Always, Tammy
549
549
Rated: E | (4.0)
*Flower1* Welcome to the site. Hope you enjoy it. Thanks for entering The Drop Box, my contest for newbies.
THE DROP-OFF BOX   (13+)
Monthly newbie contest.
#530577 by Tammy~Catchin Up~


My Overall impression:
Unique title.
Your rating and genres are good.
Your intro is good and should lure your readers in.
Your main character is very likable.
I enjoyed your story, it flows well and I didn't notice any typos or errors.

Suggestions/Errors:
Even though you explain why this is a little short;

I still would like to know your characters more, especially the main character.
Maybe include more physcial descriptions and a little on her personality.
I like the way you end this but you could still take the story line a little further.
Maybe show during her research she comes across some information on the man...

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me. Keep writing, Tammy
550
550
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Flower1* Welcome to the site. Hope you enjoy it. Thanks for entering The Drop Box, my contest for newbies. "THE DROP-OFF BOX " 

My Overall impression:
Very cute, I enjoyed reading this and even laughed out loud in a few spots!

Thanks for the read and for the smile.

Suggestions/Errors:
Okay, its SO officially official that most
(it's

similar situation...one word - FLEE)
(a period after flee.)

things all the time like its going to save the world
(it's)

I think you could leave the last line off (it might offend some)...Plus, it's funny without it.

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me. Keep writing, Tammy
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