Dan,
I truly enjoy your writing. I could easily visualize the tranquility of your world. Your prose flowed, an ease of pace and timing.
I the dream-like setting, redoubled his reflections on the characteristics of dreams was my favorite part.
This truly has the power to pull a reader in and leave them wanting more.
Great Job
Thanks for sharing,
Mik
I thought this was great fun. Very focused with great pacing.
My favorite part is how you incorporate all the things associated
with this type recreation, including beer.
Very good
A good story concept. Nice flow and pacing. I can already see a form to your character Bram, but don't forget to give depth to your other characters as well. Great start
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