Dialog isn't bad but you really have to give descriptions on where these people are and why. More importantly you never specified who was speaking so it's impossible to tell who is how in the conversation.
this was incredibly hard to read. Remember to use paragraphs when you write and proper line spacing because I can't even tell you what the story is about because how how many issues I had reading this.
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