~ The Poet's Place Cafe~

Hi Phyllis, First, your poem is charming, I'd love to have a cup of tea with you.

We are here to stretch our poetic muscles, that is why we try these forms with meter. I have always found meter a challenge even though I keep trying. It helps me learn when I scan other's work. Your meter is pretty spot on the way I hear it except for a couple of lines.

7/5 Trochee catalectic trochaic meter, alternating 4 metric feet/ 3 metric feet. Trochee=Su catalectic the last unstressed syllable dropped. Alternating lines SuSuSuS / SuSuS

This is how I hear it:

How we wish for clutter free                     SuSuSuS
spaces in our sight.                              SuSuS
We'd sing and dance happily,                    uSuSSuS should be SuSuSuS something like Happily we sing off-key
like a summer sprite.                              SuSuS

No more papers or debris                    SuSuSuS
blocking precious light.                              SuSuS
We'll enjoy a cup of tea                              SuSuSuS
while our spirits take to flight.                              SuSuSuS should be SuSuS you have one too many trochees. Just leave off "while our".

That's my take on it. Thanks for letting me practice.

~~Tink