~ The Poet's Place Cafe~

Hi Jake, I'm assuming this poem was written in response to Dave's "Re: DISCUSSION: The powers of connotation."   You probably should have posted this as a reply to his post so it could be linked to the topic or at least titled the subject line with the words Power of Connotation.

I thought this piece was interesting connecting the accelerated heat of summer with the storms of politicians. I especially liked the line good examples of using connotation, dying / grip - power words.

"of the dying summer's grip"

Sometimes I think you tend to tell the reader too much, diminishing the importance of what you have to say. I think the poem would carry more power by simply deleting L1, L3, L7. This is just my opinion, use what you think helpful and ignore the rest.

I really enjoyed reading this poem.

~~Tink