~ The Poet's Place Cafe~

This made me smile.

Per the elements of the Dizain you got the rhyme right but the syllable count is off a little. The poet has the choice of 8 syllable lines or 10 syllable lines, whichever choice made, all of the lines should carry the same syllable count. Just pointing it out because it is a forms challenge. Easier said than done, I have no room to talk, I still haven't written my Dizain, at least you wrote and posted one.

This was fun to read.

~~Tink