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Feb 17, 2020 at 10:34am
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Edited: February 17, 2020 at 10:35am
Re: Jake's Tanaga: You are the conductor of my life
by Dave Author IconMail Icon
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Tender sentiments, Romeo!

Syllable counts are off just a tad:

you are the con-duct-or of life = 8
be-ing eve-ry-thing my love-ly wife = 9
you are the night of my night life = 8
wel-com-ing the cen-ter of life = 8

I give thanks to God eve-ry day = 8
you came in-to my life that day = 8
fill-ing my life with love in May = 8
end-ing my lone-ly nights and Days = 8

The counts on "ev-er-y" take into account that many of us contract it to two syllables in pronunciation.

Let the creativity flow from your soul! *Cool*
Dave
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You are the conductor of my life · 02-16-20 11:57pm
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*Star* Re: Jake's Tanaga: You are the conductor of my life · 02-17-20 10:34am
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