~ The Poet's Place Cafe~

Hi Solace. Bring,
I like the Huitain you posted in Poets' Place Cafe. You seem to have the form and the meter is consistent as is the rhyme scheme. I like the topic too. The only way it could be better is if the end rhymes stood out a little less. I find this very hard to do with meter and so don't really know how to suggest a change. This is something I am trying to improve in my writing. Keep writing.
Elizabeth

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