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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Thank you for letting me read your poem.

I can almost hear the homesickness in the narrator's voice as I read your lines. Wishing you could go home, perhaps, but knowing that you are where you are for a reason.

I am curious about why you've chosen a "paper boat". Is it like the tiny boats used to put to sea as a "memorial" or are you thinking of letters in the mail? Just curious. I could see the poem using either interpretation.

I enjoyed reading your poem. Other than the one word, I found no other typos or grammar issues in your writing. The flow was smooth, and using the same opening line on each verse made me wonder as to the interpretation you used for that sailboat.

A suggestion: To the place I once belong.{/} perhaps you meant belonged?

Keep up the good job with your writing. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

sincerely,
amyjo

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#1300305 by Maryann- summer travel
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Thank you for allowing me the opportunity to review your work. Happy WdC Anniversary!

*Cake* My first impression: Despair and sadness, able to swallow someone even in the midst of a busy, seemingly uncaring crowd.

*Cake2* Other thoughts: You write in vivid terms. I have seen this loneliness and have had those silent tears, so I can relate on an emotional level to your writing. The suffocation, unrelenting void that seems impossible to span. It is a private hell, and so very hard to escape; for some, escape isn't possible in this life.

*Cake* My favorite parts: The last two lines especially hit home, with the lonely tears that never go away.

*Cake3* Some suggestions: I have no suggestions on how to improve your writing here. You've spelled it out precisely. It was well thought out and executed. I saw no grammar issues or typos in your work.

*Cake* Overall: A well done poem about the depression, and its ensuing partners, loneliness and hidden tears. Thank you for sharing this. I wonder if this is something telling: if you or someone close to you has fallen prey to this despair.


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#1300305 by Maryann- summer travel
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Thank you for allowing me the opportunity to review your work. I will be reviewing for the Anniversary reviews as well as the Mad Dash.

*Cake* My first impression: I believe that you have a wonderful fantasy in the making. You have brought the characters to life, and I can feel the evil oozing from Vergris as I continued reading. Then on the opposite side of the spectrum, you have Raynar and Azriel. Young and innocent caught up in the fight between good and evil.

*Cake2* Other thoughts: I have enjoyed reading what you've written so far. You paint this fantasy world in vivid colors, and it is easy to picture the scenes you have laid out thus far.

*Cake* My favorite parts: The condescension of Vergris in his thoughts about those Wizards. You could almost see the disdain that he has for them. Then I enjoyed the apparent friendship and comrade-re between Raynar and Azriel.

*Cake3* Some suggestions: (Keep in mind, these are only my opinions) I did have a question with the following sentence: It has been almost eighteen years since then and since peace his crowning, peace had reigned. I didn't really understand how to read it, especially the highlighted phrase. Perhaps you might take out the word peace before "his crowning"?
I know it is only a prologue, but I am also interested in finding out more about the familiar/companion to Vergris.

*Cake* Overall: I am ready for more! You got the beginning down, and I cannot wait to see where this may go. I look forward to more from this story and from you as well. Thanks again for sharing such an interesting world.


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Review of Virtue  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Thank you for allowing me the opportunity to review your work.

*Cake* My first impression: The first thing that struck me when I looked at your poem, Virtue, was the opposite way you portrayed the seven virtues. The same number as the sins, but even the way you've laid out the poem...opposite side of the page.

*Cake2* Other thoughts: When I look at both lists, I see how easy it would be to fall in the "middle" of either list, not completely virtuous, nor completely sinful.

*Cake* My favorite parts: Again, it is hard to choose a favorite. Each virtue has its own merit, and can stand alone. I think that the virtues are by far harder to achieve, as it is always easier to take the sinful path. The virtuous path is harder and takes more discipline, but the rewards are eminently better in the long run.

*Cake3* Some suggestions: Once again, no typos or grammar issues. The flow of the verses was smooth. You've shown both sides of the argument in the sin/virtue behaviors. This was definitely well thought out and executed.

*Cake* Overall: I enjoyed reading both of your poems from beginning to end. I hope to snoop around your portfolio more in the future. Great Job!


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Review of Sin  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Thank you for allowing me the opportunity to review your work.

*Cake* My first impression: The seven deadly sins...that is quite the topic for your poem. I will want to read the companion piece Virtue afterward to see the similarities and differences in your styles.

*Cake2* Other thoughts: You've labeled these sins and their consequences with great style. While this is a free-form poem, the rhythm and rhyme flows smoothly and has a nice bouncy feel to it.

*Cake* My favorite parts: I am having a hard time choosing a favorite part or verse. Each could stand on its own with it's own warning. You've done a great job throughout the entire poem.

*Cake3* Some suggestions: No typos or grammar issues that I found. I really couldn't offer any suggestions, other than I am surprised that this doesn't have an award attached to it.

*Cake* Overall: Wonderful wording. Smooth flow. Excellent descriptions and heedful warnings. I enjoyed reading your poem, and will look at your companion piece as well. Happy WDC Anniversary this month, too!


sincerely,

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Review of Dark Cloud  
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi Jimminycritic Thank you for sharing this work
Dark Cloud  (13+)
Personification of a cloud.
#2074133 by Jimminycritic


*PenR* Why I chose to review this work: I am reviewing your work for the "Smiling Skies" contest.

*PenR* My first impression: Wow! I had never thought about a cloud in that manner before. I was completely hooked into reading your story, even with the little bit of digression, and I could not stop reading until the end of the tale.

*Penr* What I thought about your personification: I usually associate the anger and raging that you talked about with the wind or the lightning. The phrasing "I am God", so displayed in the the cloud's thinking is brilliantly appropriate. That you associate the cloud's anger from having "taken the life" of the white cloud, and thereby going insane - Well, it is very appropriate and could easily be portrayed in a person. Curiosity, obsession, death, am I or am I not God? the insanity...talk about a Criminal Minds episode!

*PenR* Some suggestions I have: I saw no grammar issues or typos in your writing. The digression, which is so "human" wasn't pushed too far, as to get off topic. I have nothing really to suggest to improve your writing. I can say that as far as I have read, this is a completely unique writing, from an interesting point of view.

*PenR* Overall: I may never look at clouds the same way again. I have always looked at them as friendly little puffs, turning into various shapes. In Texas, to see a cold front move across the sky, with an ominous line is something to behold. But even then, I never thought about the anger that might be expressed through a cloud's point of view...the "sucking in of the white cloud" also made me think of the energy that might spawn a tornado, but again, it put me in mind how the wind might be the aggressive energy. Your writing has made me rethink how I might again view the weather, and your "humanizing" of the cloud, in my opinion was "spot on"! Thank you for sharing such a unique story, and good luck in the Personification contest.


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Review of The Dance Of Dis  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A very interesting story within your poetry. Vivid imagery dances in my mind, just like the "lost souls" dancing around the fire. Thank you also for the definition of "DIS". That was very helpful, and also pretty much confirmed what I was thinking as I was reading. I saw no typos or grammar issues with your writing. Nice phrasing of your poem, and the flow was pretty smooth. Good luck in the 2nd chance contest!

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#1300305 by Maryann- summer travel
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Review of Bangaround  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing your poem. It is an interesting way to have an argument with yourself...I feel the frustration coming from the words you have written. Being your own worst enemy is probably an issue for more people than we can even imagine. I saw no typos or grammar issues with your writing. Good Luck with the 2nd Chance Poetry contest!

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#1300305 by Maryann- summer travel
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Review of Metamorphosis  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing your Triolet poem. I also like how you've explained what a triolet is and give a link for more clarification if needed.
An interesting read, and I like how you liken shedding of clothing and stress to that of a butterfly escaping the chrysalis (or cocoon).
I saw no grammar issues or typos in your writing. Good Luck in the 2nd chance contest.

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#1300305 by Maryann- summer travel
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed reading your poem. It made me long for the coming Spring...I am soooo ready!
I like they way you painted the scenery in my mind, and could almost smell the wildflowers as the gentle spring breezes waft through the meadow.
Quite a lovely picture.
I saw no typos or grammar issues with your writing. Good luck with the 2nd chance contest!

sincerely,
amyjo

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#1300305 by Maryann- summer travel
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Review of Crazy Love  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
An interesting, yet definitely one-sided romance. When first reading it, I thought perhaps it was going to be a sci-fi story. Intriguing dialog drew me in from the beginning, and I laughed out loud to read the ending line. Clever writing!
I saw no grammar issues or typos in your work. It was a pleasure to read, and I am glad that you've shared this work. I found it looking through the Romance genre for something to review. Thanks for the laugh this morning *Smile*!

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#1300305 by Maryann- summer travel
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I'm surprised that I haven't reviewed this forum before now! I have really enjoyed my blogging time here. I love the daily prompts, and having fun reading other's takes on that same prompt, but with a totally different take on it. There is a reason this is so popular and a long-running forum. May it continue on for as long as there is a Writing.Com!

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#1300305 by Maryann- summer travel
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This is a fun and informative forum. I like that we have the opportunity to review and discuss movies and books here on Writing.com. I cannot get over how many reviews some people have*Shock2*! It is also interactive, which is great.
Thank you for having such a great forum.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
I'm surprised that I haven't reviewed this as yet! It is a great way to "break the ice" with Newbies, and a good interactive for both Newbies and Non-Newbies alike. It has been well thought out and from the looks of it, a very popular forum. I've done some nominating in the few months I've been at WdC, and I also remember my first ribbon for my portfolio from NRC. I was very proud of it!
Thank you for having such a neat forum, and I wish you every continued success with it. As a not so New- newbie, you are very much appreciated!

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#1300305 by Maryann- summer travel
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Thank you for allowing me the opportunity to review your work.

*Cake* My first impression: You have quite the collection of c-notes! Almost anything I could think to use. One stop shopping *Smile*

*Cake2* Other thoughts: Your c-notes are colorful and sweet. They tug at the heart and some bring a smile to my face.

*Cake* My favorite parts: I sent a "Thinking of You" note to a friend, as I thought it would be rude to review and not purchase something...lol

*Cake3* Some suggestions: I found nothing to suggest to improve your shop. I'd love to have something like this to set up one day.

*Cake* Overall: Keep up the great job! I'm happy to have found your little shop, and I also want to wish you a Happy WDC Anniversary this month.


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#1300305 by Maryann- summer travel
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Nicely done! You followed the prompt, and I like the way you portray the battle of the blank page! I also like how you've given out hope that every so often the "beast" is bested. Thank you for sharing your poem. I believe you've done a great job with it. I saw no typos or grammar issues, and I enjoy the centering of your poem - it makes the words stand out that much more to me. Good luck with the Construct! Keep up the great writing *Smile*!

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amyjo

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#1300305 by Maryann- summer travel
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Review of Stacy's Poem  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Ouch! You paint the pain in such a vivid way. Broken glass shards, both painful and cutting...leaving your heart to bleed and your emotions ragged. Knowing there was nothing to do but to hurt, both you and the object of your love. The pain felt by both makes me want to cry. The hopelessness of the situation, "left me with your nothing". The emptiness and futility shows through. I cannot imagine such pain, even though love has dragged me through the mire at times.
I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

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#1300305 by Maryann- summer travel
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Thank you for sharing your poem. You have a wonderful way of painting your words. I am reviewing this completely on an emotional level. I really enjoyed reading this. "A ball of light" captures their innocence aptly. I also agree with you message that children are something to "cherish" and not "destroy". I sense the weariness, but also the hope that one day we will love our children as a society and not treat them like something disposable. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

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#1300305 by Maryann- summer travel
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Review of New Years Changes  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Bravo! And excellent goal to work for in the New Year. Very upbeat and positive point of view here. The narrator understands that there are some issues, but is not going to let the issues come between her and what she wants. The flow is energetic and very positive in nature. I only spotted one typo, in the last line: her she comes!, I think you meant here she comes! Other than that I saw no grammar issues or typos. I think I might have broken it up into two paragraphs for break up the giant paragraph, but that is my opinion only.
If this is your year, then I commend you, and look forward to reading more of your work in the New Year. You do great things, and even though 2015 was an awful ending year, here is to 2016 and to power! Well done as always, my friend.

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#1300305 by Maryann- summer travel
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Review of Fear is Real  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Caitlin Washnock Thank you for sharing this work
 Fear is Real  (E)
Fear is not only a emotion. It defies our actions, but can also show us what is important.
#2070824 by Caitlin Washnock


*PenR* Why I chose to review this work:I enjoy reading Newbies and your title and description intrigued me. And having read your story, you did not disappoint. You are off to a very good start!

*PenR* My first impression:An excellent lesson on priorities and how skewing them can lead to loneliness. I also like how you had Liam learn that lesson, before it became a heart break to his family and his friends. How easy it is to focus so hard on the goal and miss the journey along the way.

*Penr* How I feel about this: I like how you showed Liam's tendency to blow off things that were once important to him. You clearly showed his lack of patience with his friend, and the disappointment in Bri's voice when he again tried to put her off.

*PenR* Some suggestions I have: I found no typing errors or grammar issues with your writing. I would have loved to see what Liam did to rectify his "standoffishness" with both his friend and his little sister. Other than that, well done!

*PenR* Overall: You painted a great picture with your words. I could picture the scenes in my mind clearly. I enjoyed reading your story, and look forward to reading more of your work in the future.


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Review of In Loving Memory  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing a place that can be of comfort to those who have lost loved ones. Writing eases the burden some, although it can never completely heal it without time. This is also an interesting style, the "campfire". I appreciate the time it took to make this place of comfort.

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#1300305 by Maryann- summer travel
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
This is a bittersweet poem. I love the way you use rain as hope of "washing" away the sorrow of losing a loved one. It offers some hope in the midst of despair. I saw no grammar or typo issues in your writing. Simple words, but they definitely pack a punch. Congrats on your win with the Second Chance Contest! Keep up the good job!

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amyjo

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#1300305 by Maryann- summer travel
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Matt } Thank you for sharing this work
The Last Snowflake  (13+)
Professional thief Jan is about to find out that not everything goes your way
#2070103 by Matt


*PenR* Why I chose to review this work: I am helping to judge for the 3 Prompts contest. I enjoy reading new material, and you definitely didn't disappoint.

*PenR* My first impression: This is an interesting world that you've come up with. A bit of fantasy, but I really felt like I could actually get to know the characters in your story. I could feel their emotions, and this really carried well throughout your story.

*Penr* How I feel about this: Your words riveted me, and I couldn't stop til the end of the story. This isn't what I thought it might be about, but you did an excellent job with the prompt in my opinion.

*PenR* Some suggestions I have: I really had no suggestions for your story. I hope that I will be able to read more of your work in the future.

*PenR* Overall: An excellent story, in my opinion. A fantasy, but still real enough to be believable. You've done an excellent job writing, and I wish you good luck in the contest. *Smile*


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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi brom21 } Thank you for sharing this work
 The Christmas Curse  (13+)
Three teenagers must save Christmas from an ancient spell.
#2069216 by brom21


*PenR* Why I chose to review this work: I am helping judge for the 3 Prompts contest.

*PenR* My first impression:I liked the title and description of your story. Luke seems to me like a bit of a trouble maker. Thena seems to be the most level headed of the bunch, but these are teenagers we are talking about.

*Penr* How I feel about this: I liked the dialog between the teenagers.

*PenR* Some suggestions I have: I noticed that you misspelled curious...you have written "curios" a couple of typos, but nothing that really distracts from the story.

*PenR* Overall: A very nice fantasy story. I liked the "legend" and the action and flow of your writing. Keep up the good job! Good luck in the contest *Smile*


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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi Princess Megan Rose 22 Years Thank you for sharing this work
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Fairy Tale Princess Forum  (E)
A forum to talk about fairy tale Princesses.
#2061098 by Princess Megan Rose 22 Years


*PenR* Why I chose to review this work: I am part of this group, and I noticed that it doesn't have a review.

*PenR* My first impression: Being a fan of the Disney Princesses, I liked the way you've set up this forum. I also like the "what if" prompts. There is a lot of times that the way Disney ends a "princess" story isn't the way they were originally written. It is nice to have a different POV about these stories.

*Penr* How I feel about this: It is a fun forum, for "girls of any age" to participate in. I also like the ratings limit, as there are a lot of underage young ladies out there.

*PenR* Some suggestions I have: I found no typos or grammar issues with your writing. The forum is set up smoothly and easy to read. The only thing I might suggest is that it is advertised more.

*PenR* Overall: A wonderful place to allow your imagination to fly and to come up with your own stories about the Princesses. Thank you for making this a fun place to visit again and again!


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