A very close relative of mine has cancer and I have the first hand experience of waiting upon a cancer patient. You could not have done better I guess. You have depicted the dilemma of the first chemo very poignantly. I know the tears and the fears that passes and not only the first but till all the chemo are taken. The pain, the baldness and the unending circle of doctors, medicines and tests. I really admire you for choosing such a subject and presenting it so well. Thanks for sharing it with us.
I am so overwhelmed to read this poem today.. only yesterday I had discussion about memories with a friend, and my views are echoed in your poem. Great use of words, wonderful expression!!! keep writing...
You tell a wonderful story in poetic form. I could imagine the scene vividly from your description. The disappointment of the children and the glee of the devil at accomplishment of his job are contrast perfectly done. Thank you for such an imaginative and beautiful poem.
You echo the fear and dread felt by numerous lovers all over the world! The stanza where you are terrified with the thought of her crossing the roads alone is something I have felt from my own experience. You have really done a great job. I guess all the lovers go through these phase of insecurity at one time or other. Great job, keep writing.
You have voiced the words and concern of lot of people like us, who have a parallel lives. The one from which we earn our living, and the one in which we follow our heart. How many times we give up the things we want for the lack of courage to pursue it? good piece, keep writing.
What a beautiful creation. The poem starts with a flourish and ends with an inevitable question. When anyone writes passionately, I guess he or she for once goes through this mad urge to write and finish of the creation. Its very well written and expressive. Good choice of words and the flow of the poem is smooth. Very well done indeed.
It is interesting, are you planning a story or novel? I am sure it would make a good read. But just my opinion, I think the last few para dragged a bit. You could use these thoughts seperately.
I like the comparison!! Its very well done. The idea that you are one type of tree and not the other is very good. Keep writing. Do read mine and review them too.
You have a very lucid writing style that gripped me from begining to the end. Very articulate, you said lot of complex things in a very simple manner yet retained all the intricacies intact. Keep writing.
you have written very well. I guess everyone goes through these same motions atleast once in their life. the second last para of the poem is my favourate. you have expressed yourself very well, though I think there are some places where the rhyming didn't go well. But it is a good poem keep writing.
Printed from https://shop.writing.com/main/profile/reviews/amiman/sort_by/r.review_creation_time DESC/page/4
All Writing.Com images are copyrighted and may not be copied / modified in any way. All other brand names & trademarks are owned by their respective companies.
Generated in 0.22 seconds at 10:19pm on Jul 06, 2024 via server web1.
View Portfolio
Visit Notebook
Send Gift Points
Awards
Badges
Send Email
Community Newsfeed
General Discussion
Sponsored Items
Book of Trinkets
Static Items
Books
Groups
Interactive Stories
Audio
Campfire Creatives
Community Notes
Crossword Puzzles
Documents
Folders
Images
In & Outs
Madlibs
Photo Albums
Polls
Product Reviews
Quizzes
Survey Forms
Web Pages
Word Searches
