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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

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Hi Richard Allen Author Icon,

Thank you for the opportunity to review the next installment of your series the queen has returned. ▼ *Castle* *Crown*

*Star* Rating is for the following. The dialogue, the scenes, and the costumes were vibrant. I enjoyed the way the fears and concerns of the False Queen's guards manifested. The punctuation, spelling issues, and the narrative tense were inconsistent. Some words were applied in a way that did not fit the context.

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Thank you for sharing this story about the True Queen Marissa. I look forward to reading the next installment.

~ Amy
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

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Hi Richard Allen Author Icon,

Thank you for the opportunity to review the next installment of your series the queen has returned. ▼ *MushroomR* *MushroomG*

*Star* Rating is for the following. There were a few clear moments, however, I had trouble identifying the characters. I was unable to follow the action. And I had trouble connecting the action to the correct character. Also, I noticed some wording issues as well, such as using words that appear out of context with the flow of the story.

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Thank you for sharing this installment. I hope my comments are helpful. I look forward to reading the next installment.

~ Amy
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for entry "Me, Myself, and I" Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)

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Hi Ugly Christmas Sox Author Icon,

I found your blog entry from I Write in 2024 ▼ *Wave1* *MountainsG*

The prompt is rather interesting. I would have enjoyed crafting for the prompt that inspired this piece *Delight*

*Star* Rating is due to following. From my standpoint, the work has met the criteria. It was a little unusual to read. I have to say it succeeded in projecting the perception that there were several voices as well as a sense of confusion. Very humorous.

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Thank you for this puzzle like dialogue between three counterparts. I had a lot of fun wrapping my mind around the threesome.

~ Amy
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Rated: E | (4.5)

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Hi Richard Allen Author Icon,

Thank you for the opportunity to review the first installment within your series the queen has returned. ▼ *MushroomBr* *MushroomG*

*Star* Rating is for the following. Aside from a few lines with unusual wording, the words flow well. The theme of the poem follows the theme about the Queen as expressed by her loyal subjects.

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Thank you for sharing this installment. I look forward to reading the next installment.

~ Amy
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Rated: E | (5.0)

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Hi Richard Allen Author Icon,

Thank you for the opportunity to review your series the queen has returned. ▼ *MushroomBr* *MushroomO*

*Star* Rating is for overall organization. The theme, the short and the long descriptions provide just the right amount of information to set expectation. Review of the contents show that all available installments of this series can be found within this folder. Sentence structure errors are noticeable but not factored into the rating.

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Thank you for making the folder and the installments available. I look forward to reading the installments.

~ Amy
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Rated: E | (5.0)

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Hi KingsSideCastle Author Icon,

This review comes to you as part of I Write in 2024 ▼ *Railroad* *Railroad* *Railroad* *Railroad* *Railroad* I'm also taking part in StAG Firebox ▼ *Phonograph* *Phonograph* Good Luck to the both of us!

*Star* Rating is due to the following. There were some sentence structure issues but they did not detract from the action. I enjoyed seeing the world from the narrator's perspective.

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Thank you for sharing this incredible adventure. It's very exciting. I hope you find my comments helpful.

~ Amy
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Review of Space Tales  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)


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Hi JoeMiller Author Icon,

Happy Anniversary! *Music2* *Music1* I found your portfolio from Member Account Anniversaries ▼ *ConfettiV* *ConfettiV*

*Star* Rating is due to the following. The bulletin contains all the necessary information to help a reader find the product.

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Thank you for sharing this bulletin about your ebook collection of stories. I hope my suggestions were helpful.

~ Amy
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Review of MY LOVE FOR YOU  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi 54.elias Author Icon,

Welcome to Writing.Com! *Skier* I found your Poetry from Recent Reviews ▼ *Snow1* *Snow2*

*Star* Rating is for the following. The words flowed well. The tone is sweet and melodic. The poem progresses like a story.

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Thank you for sharing such a sweet love poem. I hope you find my thoughts helpful.

~ Amy
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Merry_Mikey Author Icon,

I found your Short Story from Recent Reviews ▼ *Snow1* *Snow2*

*Star* Rating is due to following. I loved the way these 55 words flowed. It conjured up pleasant scenery. The words flowed smoothly. There was a feeling of seasonal changes.

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Thank you for sharing this very vivid tale of man versus nature. I can relate to the homeowner's adversity.

~ Amy
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I found your BITEM from Recent Reviews ▼ *Snow1* *Snow2*

*Star* Rating is due to the following. I love the title. I love the purpose. The description is very positive and well written.

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Thank you for sharing this In & Out. I hope to see the addition of new gems.

~ Amy
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Rated: E | (5.0)


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Hi Genipher Author Icon,

This review is for your Fiction ▼ that was shared in I Write in 2024 and Daily Flash Fiction Challenge ▼

*Star* Rating is due to the following. The start was a little rough to visualize however, once going, the pieces fell into place and the scenery was quite breathtaking to behold.

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Thank you for sharing this remarkable story. I enjoyed discovering the different levels of enlightenment that were woven into the story.

~ Amy
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)


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Hi Richard Allen Author Icon,

Thank you for the opportunity to read and review a revision of an installment from your Short Story Series ▼ *Writing* *Reading*

*Star* Rating is due to the following. I can sense the energy jumping out. There are some awkward sentences but overall the scenes are vivid with stimulating dialogue.

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Thank you for sharing this installment of the ongoing investigation of the appearance and disappearance of attackers. I hope my comments are helpful.

~ Amy
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)


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Hi Richard Allen Author Icon,

*ConfettiR* *ConfettiR* Thank you for the opportunity to read the next installment of your Short Story Series ▼ *Music2* *ConfettiV*

*Star* Rating is due to the following. Despite the issues related to punctuation, spelling, and grammar, I had no trouble following the story. What I liked about this installment were the moments where the troops did studies and came up with unified plan of attack.

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Thank you for sharing this installment of the ongoing investigation of the appearance and disappearance of attackers. I hope my comments are helpful.

~ Amy
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Review of Weekly Goals  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

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Hello The StoryMistress Author Icon,

*Star* I found the Weekly Goals Message Forum from Our Writing.Com Community Newsfeed ▼ *Star*

*Star* I've always loved the red, blue, and black target with the quilled arrow stuck into the target's center. It's very cheery.

*Star* This was my first Weekly Goal in 5 years: "Update: For badges, one more day to go // 01/07-01/13"  Open in new Window.

*Idea* It appears that the key to setting and completing a Weekly Goal is to outline realistic goals. The outcomes must be measurable.

*Star* Mentally I felt my chores were done the moment I posted my Friday Update. However, upon further reflection, I realized that my Friday Update was only a checkpoint within the Greater Schedule. It appears that I must press on.

*HeartB* Thank you for promoting this activity. It is an exercise in self discipline and very rewarding.

~ Amy
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)


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Hi Richard Allen Author Icon,

*Music2* *ConfettiV* I found your Short Story from Random Read & Review ▼ *ConfettiR* *Music2*

*Star* Rating is due to the following positives and negatives. Although there is action, what I enjoyed most was how the characters mentally explained away perplexing situations that made them question their own sanity. Although I was able to follow the story, the grammar and punctuation made the errors difficult to ignore.

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~ Amy
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Rated: E | (5.0)

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*ConfettiV* *ConfettiR* I found your Poetry from Random Read & Review ▼ *Music1* *ConfettiV*

*Star* Rating is due to the following. I found no technical issues. Poetry as a craft has always leaned towards hidden meanings so without knowing more beyond the Short Description, I can't say if this hit the mark or not. I can only say that the poem flowed well and the last line was my favorite. I gained more by attempting to dissect the verses.

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Thank you for sharing this unusual poem. It's very cryptic and I guess everyone must read it and decide what the poem ultimately means for them.

~ Amy
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Rated: E | (5.0)


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Hi Serhii Sobol Author Icon,

Welcome to Writing.Com! *ConfettiR* *ConfettiR* I found your Poem from Random Review ▼ *Music1* *Music1*

*Star* Rating is for the following reason. I enjoyed the way the words rhymed and flowed. There were beautiful metaphors. Although I did not quite understand them, they conjured up some interesting personifications of objects such as rooms and time.

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Thank you for sharing this beautiful piece. I hope my comments were helpful.

~ Amy
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Review of CHRISTMAS, 1965  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)

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Hi SSpark Author Icon,

Happy Anniversary! I found this Story Version ▼ from Please Review ▼

The storyteller shares a memory of the best Christmas present ever.

*Star* Rating is due to the following. I was very moved. The overall effect was soothing. There were some sentence structure issues and a few areas where I had difficulty going through, however, the story as a whole was uplifting and delivered the Christmas message in a most powerful way.

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Thank you for sharing this touching and moving Christmas Story. What a wonderful way to remember special moments. I hope my comments were helpful.

~ Amy
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Rated: E | (5.0)

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Hi SSpark Author Icon,

Happy Anniversary! I found this Chapter Version ▼ from Please Review ▼

Thank you for sharing this piece about an individual's endeavor to realize a lifelong dream.

*Star* Rating is due to the following. I loved the friendly and engaging tone. It felt like I was listening to someone sharing intimate knowledge of hardships and joys of purchasing land in their home state.

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Thank you for sharing this wonderful chapter. I hope my comments were helpful.

~ Amy
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

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Hi foxtale Author Icon,

Happy Holidays and Happy New Year!

Thank you for offering me the opportunity to review your article Young Adult Readers and Classic Writers ▼ *Writing* I hope that you find my comments helpful.

*Star* Rating is based on the following reasons.

The article was well written and the words flowed well. However, the essay did not feel complete. The essay informed of a solution but the solution was not included in the portion that I read.

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Thank you for sharing your essay. Please let me know if there are any questions.

~ Amy
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Rated: E | (4.0)

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Hi AnotherDreamer Author Icon,

Happy Anniversary! This review is for your Poem Version ▼ *Writing*


Pi - Archimedes' is an intriguing form. Per Poetry Forms ▼ , the poem's structure follows the value of PI = 3.14286.

*Star* Rating was influenced by the following reason.

The artistic form is intriguing, however, the message is obscure. There were some good lines however they felt separate and disconnected from the other lines within the poem.

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Thank you for sharing this poem. Please let me know if there are questions about my comments.

~ Amy
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Review of Goo  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)


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Hi Duane Engelhardt Author Icon,

Happy Anniversary! This review comes to you as part of Anniversary Reviews. I found your portfolio from Anniversary Accounts ▼ and reviewed Goo Version ▼ *ConfettiG* *ConfettiR* *ConfettiG*

An unexpectedly humorous story about a UFO sighting.

*Star* Rating was due to the following reasons.

The flow was awkward due to the switching of tenses and some awkward sounding sentences.

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Thank you for sharing this delightful story about alien encounters. Please let me know if there are any questions about my comments.

~ Amy
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)


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Hi Duane Engelhardt Author Icon,

Happy Anniversary! This review comes to you as part of Anniversary Reviews. I found your portfolio from Anniversary Accounts ▼ and reviewed Jupiter's Heart Version ▼ *ConfettiG* *ConfettiR* *ConfettiG*

A fascinating look into a man's discovery of a correlation connecting seasonal changes to off planet influences.

*Star* Rating is due to the following reasons.

The imagery and dialogue were potent and identifiable. However, there were a significant number of areas where sentence structure could use correction. Mostly punctuation issues that made a few areas with errors extremely noticeable.

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Thank you for sharing this story. I had a wonderful time listening to their private conversation that ultimately led to a woman's revelation about the approaching end of their world. Please let me know if there are any questions about my comments.

~ Amy
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Review of MISSION EARTH - 2  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)


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Happy Writing.Com Anniversary! I hope you are having a wonderful day!

When I set the filter to the "Sci-fi" genre, I found MISSION EARTH - 2 ▼ Story Version ▼

This piece is part of a series or part of a collaborative project. However, I was unable to find the preceding chronicles.

Particularly humorous were the explorer's interpretations of the cultural and social structure of the Cyndys people.

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The report was engaging to read, however, there were too many informational gaps. The gaps made the story difficult to follow.

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Thank you for sharing this story. I had a wonderful time seeing the world from this adventurer's point of view. Please let me know if there are any questions about my comments.

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*Star* Very strong statements. However, the unclear definition of "it" and unclear point that was made in the second paragraph made the message in the monologue more difficult to understand.

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Thank you for sharing this deep thought. I love the point made at the end.

~ Amy
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