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I look to be entertained, informed, and connected in some way. It may be wrong but if the first few lines or paragraphs don't hook me in some way, I will leave without even reading the rest. Also, I will notify you if I run into errors.
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I do not mean to toot my own horn but I am awesome at limericks. I've helped so many people with limericks. I've even thought about opening up a class here on limericks.
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In no particular order: humor, horror, biography. I'll read any genre but those are my main favorites!
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I'm not sure. Maybe legal or finance but if done in the right voice, even that can be good.
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Poetry, short stories, bios, essays,fiction, and nonfiction
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pros, books
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Something that is LONG like 100 kbs or something. I will only review long pieces if someone requests it of me but nothing that's 100 kb. Let's not get crazy or anything.
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Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Gypsy,

I have read "history of writing" Open in new Window.and I offer you my opinions.

This was great. It didn't have any typos and was very informative. I enjoyed reading this because I have learned things from it. Learning is always good.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Yellow Brick Road  Open in new Window.
Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Hello Mark,

I have read "Yellow Brick Road" Open in new Window. and I offer you my thoughts.

This was written more like a romance than an erotica. Well done with the story I might add.

There were no typos or words spelled wong. Punctuation was good. I did have two minor problems as I read this. The name Chevy: Is that pronounced like the truck or like Chevy Chase's name?

Something else I just couldn't get past was this sentence He moved his hands to her hips and didn’t waste any time in removing her panties and throwing them into the fire. If anyone threw an article of my clothing into fire, we'd be fighting then I would put whatever clothes I had left back on and leave. Maybe that's just me though.

All in all, I enjoyed the read.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Misunderstood  Open in new Window.
Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hello Mark,

I have read "Misunderstood" Open in new Window. and I offer you my thoughts.

This was good but it could be a bit better. Like maybe tell more about what people did when they saw the boy.

After several years, a group of campers came back to the lake. I became excited because for the first time in nearly 30 years, I had the chance to meet real people again. The number 30 would look better as the word "thirty". Of course it's not a necesity though.

While she ran, she tripped on a root and fell headfirst into a tree. After she landed, she stopped moving. It wasn’t my fault. But I felt like it was. headfirst is two different words not a compound. The last two sentences should be combinded into one.

I hide so no one would see me for weeks. During the filming, I enjoyed the excitement. Hide should be hid.

I hope I have been helpful.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Writer's Block  Open in new Window.
Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello J.D

I have read "Writer's Block" Open in new Window. and I want to offer you my thoughts.

I thought this was terrific. No mistakes and it flowed great. The subject was also fantastic.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of It Had To End  Open in new Window.
Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello Nevada,

I have read "It Had To End" Open in new Window. and I will share my thoughts.

This was absolutely amazing. Didn't see any error and I could picture everything happen.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of " untilled"  Open in new Window.
Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Amy,

I have read "" untilled"" Open in new Window. and I offer you my thoughts.

It had a good rhyme going. The subject was good and although short, you didn't leave anything out.

I suggest giving it a title. That would make it stand out a little more and tell what the poem is about. You had one mispelled word. You had havens when I think you meant heavens.

Write on!

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello rogue,

Congrats on second place.

It was flawless and the tiles fit nicely. You only got 2nd place cuz it was too sad.

Hope to see an entry from you again.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Why Haven't You?  Open in new Window.
Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello Dragon,

I have read "Why Haven't You?" Open in new Window. and I offer you my thoughts on it.

I thought that this was a great little thing which made people get to know you a little bit like myself who did not know you at all. It was kind of like reading an autobiography in a different form.

I don't really understand why you put this on here if you didn't want to but your friend did. I'm guessing this friend is relentless. I am glad that I got to read it.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Magoo,

I have read "I Can Wrestle My Dad" Open in new Window. and I offer you my thoughts on it.

What a cute poem. I admit at first I wondered why this was happening, then I saw. Great job and I didn't encounter any errors either.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Hello Allwrite,

I have read "10 Years Ago: I Was in Second Grade" Open in new Window. and I offer you my thoughts and suggestions.

This was pretty good story wise, but it did have some errors. The very first sentence was Often people ask me if I was scared. On 9/11. You have that as two seperate sentences where that should actually be one sentence. Just take out the first period and put a lower case on the o and it will be better.

In this sentence I felt glad, having a acrid distaste for learning "a" should be "an".

There's just little things like that. I hope this has been at least a bit helpful.

Write on!

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello Bagelboy,

I have read "Slumber Party Exploits" Open in new Window. and I offer you my thoughts on it.

I hope this was fiction and you don't have any girl friends like this. *Laugh* This was very funny and very well written. I really was hoping there would have been some pillow fights or freezing bras or something for you. Or well, your main chatracter. I completely sympathazied.

My favoreite part was the last libe. *Laugh*

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Hello Adrian,

I have read "Black Friday; A Christmas Story" Open in new Window. and I offer you my thoughts.

First of all *Laugh*This was great to read. I can relate. I wouldn't be caught dead at Wal mart at that time on that day.

There are a few things you can do to make the story even better. surrounded by a thousand rednecks, probably armed and ready to fight over ANYthing, and I'm going to try for an X-Box? This would appear better if "anything" was in italics.
c:red}softly muttering to each other like a huge flock of vultures waiting for their chosen target to finally breathe it's last, when suddenly, there before me, in all it's plastic and paper clad glory, was the pallet upon which were neatly stacked the X-Box 360's. I think maybe you meant to put breath after last? It would flow better if you did. There are too many commas in this. I know commas are as evil as crazy rednecks on black friday.

My favorite part other than the not being a morning person was when you wanted to beat the lady, but yelled at her in redneck in stead. *Laugh*

Write on!

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Mel,

I have read "Prayers Be With You" Open in new Window. and I offer you my thoughts.

I thought this was well written and I think it will make Judy a bit happy. Well done. *thumbup*

Write on!

Jenny
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Review of Trick or Treat  Open in new Window.
Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Jaye,

I have read {item:1485020 } and I offer you my thoughts and opinions.

Technically, I didn't see any gammar errors.

Story wise, it was okay. I would have liked to have known how Jack died. I really would have liked to also know who was actually right. Was it just a ghost playing a prank on his widow?

I think you could have told just a little more to make it slightly better. Of course that is just my opinion.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Cubby,

This was a very good question. Never gave it much thought at all. I chose I'm here for enjoyment and love the feedback. When actually I think i have more than one answer. I love to write and I'd rather write than do almost anything else. The reason I came here in the first place was to buckle down and write a book. Well lol I've only wrote a ton of other things in stead.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of No Treasure Here  Open in new Window.
Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Beck,

Congrats on third place. This was very good and had no errors. You fit all the titles in nicely.

I hope to see another entry from you. It won't always take so long to get to judge.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hello Mike,

Congrats on first place. This was a fantastic story with no errors. I absolutely loved it.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello Mike,

I have read "A Nation Moves Forth" Open in new Window. and I offer you my thoughts.

I loved reading this. This was very well written and shared your opinions of this horrendous trajedy. Most people share this opinion as well. I know I do.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Snowsuit Gone Bad  Open in new Window.
Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello Stickwalker,

I have read "Snowsuit Gone Bad" Open in new Window. and I offer you my thoughts.

I absolutely loved this! This was great and very imaginative. It kept my interest and I didn't run into any errors.

My favorite part was when the genie said “Where did you get THAT idea,” the genie said; “Giving three wishes went out ages ago, right after computers were invented. Now you want my magic gift or not?” Creative!

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Amber,

I have read "Why I won't climb trees" Open in new Window. and I offer you my thoughts and suggestions.

This was a bit humorous as the guy is laying there. It was good because I can really imagine that scenario happening for real. *Laugh*

I did happen to catch a few minor errors. You would think that wouldn’t take too long, right. after right there should be a question mark in stead of a period.

I also think I broke my let, last I checked legs were not meant to bend that way. let is a minor typo that was supposed to be leg.

“Well this is a fine mess you have gotten yourself into, what happened.” That looks like it was meant to be a question.

I hope i have been at least a bit helpful.

Write on!

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello Beck,

This was very good. I wanted to give you first place, but the reason you didn't win was there were some mistakes. Just mispelled words or typos.

Here are some gift points though for a good story.

Hope to see you enter again.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Tea and Sympathy  Open in new Window.
Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello Coruruc,

Congrats on first place. Everything fit in nicely and it helped that my name was in there. lol Coincidentally, my grandpa's wife's (not my grandma) is named Georgia. Giving you any less than first place was not an option. *Laugh*

I hope to see you enter again.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Erotica  Open in new Window.
Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hello Ashie,

I have read "Erotica" Open in new Window. and I offer you my opinions.

This was good and I couldn't agree more. I see so much of the same kinds of things you mentioned. You just gotta weed through the weird and bad stuff to get to the good stuff.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Travel-Uppity  Open in new Window.
Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)

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Hello Mike,

Congrats on third place. This was a great story and you made the titles fit in quite nicely.

I hope to see you there again.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello Beck!

Congrats on first place! Excellent job with this. First place goes to you for good use of the titles and making me laugh more than a few times.


My fave parts are “Did you hear what Billy Madison told me?” Irene turned down the radio. Not waiting for an answer, she blurted out, “You know Mary? The Employee of the Month? She’s Knocked Up… by The Cable Guy!”

It didn’t surprise me. Nothing did anymore. “I knew there was Something About Mary,” I muttered, looking out the window at the traffic creeping along next to us. My dreams of a quick trip home were going Up In Smoke. My cell rang. {/b} Funny stuff!

Write on,

Jenny
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