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Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello John,

I have just read "Smoking Out Obesity" Open in new Window. and I will be offering my thoughts on it.

I thought this was just great. I absolutely loved it and I even chuckled outloud a few times because I completely agree with everything in here. I myself, have been smoke free for 2 years now but I still want a cigarette on a daily basis. So I was completely able to see your point.

This was very well written and I did not encounter any errors. Great job!

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Omni,

Congrats on 1st place. This was well written with no mistakes. It was entertaining to read and I enjoyed how the titles were written into the story.

I hope to see an entry from you again sometime.

Write on!

Jenny
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Review of Rosie and Ray  Open in new Window.
Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi Beck,

Congrats on 1st place. It helps that you didn't have any competitors. *Laugh* This entry was very good and I loved how you didn't wait to long to throw in the titles. That's how I do it.

Hope to see another entry from you.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Summertime Blues  Open in new Window.
Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hello Jamie,

Thanks for entering my contest. I absolutly loved your entry! I loved when you had The facts of life are me and these perfect strangers are living in a different world . This will be the longest two weeks of my so called Llfe .

New prompt will be up tomorrow.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Calling Me  Open in new Window.
Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Sherri,

I just loved this poem. I was able to picture everything with the great imagery you provided.

Everything was just perfect in the poem. Nothing was spelled wrong nor was any punctuation wrong.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Just One Chance  Open in new Window.
Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Sherri,

This story was great. You did a great job at having the reader (or at least me)rooting for Todd.

The only suggestion I have is with this line Todd could not believe his ears. “Y, y, yeah!” he stammered. “I’ll go get my glove!” When stammering or stuttering, it's always best to put it like this "Y-y-yeah".

I know I didn't give much help because there was no reason for a lot of feedback other than the stammering. I hope that bit was helpful.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Chained,

This was good, telling of why you like martial arts. Now I am going to offer you some tips to improve this.

You said Martial Arts is important to me because it teaches discipline and self control You should have "are" in stead of "is" because you are talking in plural form.

You put In class a student learns discipline through listening and focus. One way to learn discipline is through listening. This is too repetitive. Maybe you can say something like "One way to learn discipline is through listening and focus which is learned in class."


You had Focus is also needed, otherwise a student cannot progress. Focus is needed in the forums that students learn, Once again, too repetitive. The second sentence isn't really needed.

You have But when a student finally does complete it, he feels a sense of pride. Take out "But".

I hope this helps.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of LIGHT  Open in new Window.
Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Natalie,

This poem had a good flow to it and good images through out. There didn't appear to be any sort of grammar mistakes.

This was a little too metaphorical for my taste. I like more literal poems. Just a personal preferance. What doesn't work for one person, works great for another.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Jessica,

This was just fantastic! Very well put together and you told just about everything. (I would find it hard to believe that there's a ton more about you)

This is such a wonderful page for such a wonderful person!

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Sex and the City  Open in new Window.
Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (2.5)
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Hello Jen,

First of all, it's not necessary to double space every line. It would be better to double space between paragraphs.

This had mistakes through it, but there were two that really stood out.

Sex and the City is coming to theatres tommrow. That would be "tomorrow".

although, her character also has a sensitive side to her friend's problems

I find that so moving to care for a friend, where you need a shoulder to cry

on to confess your feelings to. Capitolize the first letter of the sentence. And once again, double spacing only between paragraphs will make it look much better.

I hope this has been helpful.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Grooved Pavement  Open in new Window.
Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Angie,

Interesting opinion piece. I didn't really catch any errors.

I listen to music a lot. When I write, is one of those times. The only way it affects me is I will type to the beat if a song comes on that I really like. Funny thing is, I can't stop typing to the beat. I've tried. lol

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
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Hello Chlo,

I thought this was a very interested story. I love metal, but will never get in a pit. Maybe if I had floor seats....maybe.

At times, you switched from second person and third person. You should go through and make it all one POV.

The other errors I encountered will be in red.

It hits you that he just waved at you. He... Just... Waved... At... You... Jimmy... Waved... At... You... And (take out And) from that moment on, all common sense, all rational thinking, is lost from your mind. In stead of having just one sentence words, why don't you do this "It hits you that he just waved at you. He. Just. Waved. At. You. Jimmy. Waved. At. You. And from that moment on, all common sense,

I mean, your entire room is covered in posters with him.
your head is tick tick ticking with excitement It really would seem better to just have ticking. You cold say really ticking or just ticking.

And suddenly, you faint.

And that will always go down as the best 20 minutes of your life. In here, take out both Ands. It would also look better if you spelled out the number.

Hope I've helped.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Magoo,

I am gong to share my opinions about .

This was just great! There were no errors and it was a great story.

I do admit though the line Sure I get yelled at if I try to lick the tray. Puzzled and disgusted me. *Laugh* Then when I got to the end, boy was I relieved.

*Bigsmile*

write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Keith,

I would like to share with you what I thought of "Ghost of Appleton High" Open in new Window..

This poem was just fantastic. It had great rhyme, it flowed smoothly, and it told a great story. I think it even sounded like a song. There were also no errors that I encountered.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Dear Me 2009  Open in new Window.
Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Sandy,

I have read "Dear Me 2009" Open in new Window. and I would like to offer you my thoughts.

This was a good letter to yourself about goals that you wanted for the year.

As you submerge yourself into an new year, was the only mistake I saw. "An" is supposed to be "a". Other than that I didn't encounter other errors in grammar.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello Norby,

This was a good start at your blog. I have just as many entries in my blog. haha

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of My WDC Goals  Open in new Window.
Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Nicole,

This was good. Short weet and to the point.

Well I have a contest
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Maybe I'll see an entry from you some time.

*Smile* write on,

Jenny
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Review of My Disasster Date  Open in new Window.
Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.5)


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Hello Bob,

Congrats on second place. I really liked this. It had good rhyme and the titles fit well.

The only thing I saw wrong was I grab Bruno's lease from my new favorite lass, From reading it, looks like lease was meant to be leash.


I hope to see an entry from you in future rounds.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello kneedeep,

I thought that this was quite funny. Everyone knows wht that situation is like. lol

I didn't encounter any technical errors either.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of The Habit  Open in new Window.
Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hello Bill,

I have read "The Habit" Open in new Window. and I would like to share my thoughts.

This was just sick. I was able to picture what everything looked like and invision everything happen, like I do whenever I read something you wrote. I loved the descriptions at the end. This was just fantastc. If I'm reading something and I scrunch my face as I read it, it's good. And you have succeeded in having me scrunch my face in this story.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Passing of Summer  Open in new Window.
Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Jayce,

This was good. It caught my attention because I love summer and I always mourn its loss. No errors either. Great stuff.

You're in Missouri? What part? I'm in Jefferson County, not too far from St. Lous. I knew we shared the same birthday, but had no idea we lived in the same state as well.

*Bigsmile*

Jenny
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Review of Questions  Open in new Window.
Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Jayce,

I have read "Questions" Open in new Window. and I offer you my thoughts.

Funny thing...I have often wondered about this myself. Unlike you though, I haven't put quite as much thought into this. But thanks to you, I am now wondering more about it. *Laugh*

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Debbie,

I have read "Ghosts of A Hospital" Open in new Window. and I would like to share my thoughts.

This was just amazing. I loved the subject. The description said you wrote this wrote this while working at a hospital. I'm curious, was this from your imagination or did stuff like this actually happen? Makes me want to go work in a hospital.

One mistake I did encounter was this line You can't see them,but ,they can see you, The commas before and after "but" are not necessary.

I hope I have been of some help.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hello Cougar,

I have read "Book 5: Where the Oasis Blooms" Open in new Window. and I offer you my opinions.

I thought this was just great. No errors and very informative.

My favorite part was about slang. Like you I'm also guilty of saying sweet, but I don't put it in my stories for the same reason you said. A new one could take its place any second now. This part made me laugh because it's so true. People of different generations also have different slang terms. An example of this is the word "thong"--which to some people means a shoe, a flip-flop. This can sometimes provide humor for you: For example, the reaction of a grandson when his grandmother asks him if he's seen her thongs laying around anywhere. Not long ago I was in the same kind of situation, but I was talking to someone my own age. *Laugh*

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of The Ghost House  Open in new Window.
Review by *Jenny* Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hello Pennywise,

I have read "The Ghost House" Open in new Window. and I offer you my thoughts.

Story wise this was spectacular. There were some punctuation that I recommend changing....

A few times you have &. I think it would look better if you had the word "and".

Also at some points there are double quote marks like "".

Hope I have been a bit helpful.

Write on,

Jenny
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