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Review of Mom  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Fyn,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes and also one of yur devoted readers.

Title: Mom

First Impression: I look forward to whenever you write the newsletter, you have a way of expressing your thoughts that connect with mine. So today, I finally decided to take the next step and venture into your port. I am so glad I did.

What needs your attention: Nothing, the images, and the memories invited this reader to pause and reflect on her own memories. Yes, I do remember the negatives, I have box filled with them tucked away in a dark, cool place myself.

What part I liked best: The author getting suspended from school and her Mom taking her for ice cream. This reader got suspended from school for grabbing a yard stick from the teachers hand when she went to strike me a second time for falling asleep during her reading MacBeth. I broke the yardstick and half and returned it to her. I was suspended for a week, and grounded for a month. It was worth it to me. You were lucky to have a supportive Mom. I chuckled when I read your brother for the same word.

Overall impression: The poem flowed beautifully with the author's passion about her Mom. The free style poem worked very well in this incidence inviting the reader to spend time with Fyn and her beloved Mom.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my IMMENSE pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? I'll be back again soon! Thank you fro writing such inspiring newsletter and highlighting really talented poets.

Lyn


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Review of Gatsby Romance  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi Hi Hooves,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Gatsby Romance

First Impression: Outstanding! I am so impressed, this poem is exceptional I wish I had the option of more than a 5 star rating. Yes, there is and I will certainly do that!

What needs your attention: Nothing, this poem has a excellent rhyme and rhythm pattern that carries the reader from stanza to stanza delightfully.

What part I liked best: I love my gardens so naturally I connected with that stanza immediately, oh how I love roses. I don't let a weed linger by my roses. I also enjoyed the wedding dance under a timeless moon, Vic and I were married on a Friday, Halloween and the moon was full in the sky. All lovers want to believe their rapture is written in the stars.

Overall impression: The lovely images, the excellent word choices swept this reader into Gatsby's romance and made her feel like she was experiencing their journey with them. I love when a poem invites the reader to come in with such a strong voice. I hope this poem won the contest, it definitely should have.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my IMMENSE pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? This poem looks naked without a ribbon, I'll address that myself right after I close this review. Thank fyn for highlighting your poem in her article about poetry. I enjoy her writing and look forward to when she posts. I am glad she chose you!
Lyn


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Review of Lost Without You  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Jim,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Lost Without You

First Impression: I hear you, it is difficult to write when our muse abandons us. I've struggled with that lately myself. Maybe it was because I was so drained after April's challenge for poetry but I feel challenged.

What needs your attention: Interesting choice to have two stanza's not rhyming in the same pattern the rest are. I think it works for the message you convey.

What part I liked best: His choice of going to the ocean, I do that frequently myself, there is something soothing about the sound of the waves rolling across the sand no matter how sad I was when I arrived I feel better when I leave. I think it is the perfect place to converse with God.

Overall impression: The non traditional structure of the poem works for this reader, the images and word choices invited me to stay with his voice as he pleaded with his muse to return, he was ready to write. The poem's voice feels natural and flows smoothly like the more contemporary styles of today versus the stuffed shirts of the past.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my IMMENSE pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? Looks like the Muse is rocking your work!
Lyn


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Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Jim,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Where in the World is Sum1?

First Impression: First of all, I do have to comment on your handle that is creative. I remember the day you popped me an email saying you were leaving Blog City so you could focus on making your blog a travel journey. We were sad to see you go but happy to know you would continue blogging about all the places you go.

What needs your attention: Nothing, you are very articulate about the locations and what you discover. We couldn't ask for anything more except maybe to go with you.

What part I liked best: It looks to me like you get to Barrie Ontario frequently. So you were born in the south, what made you decide on the Chicago area as your adult home. I hope to go to Myrtle Beach it is on my bucket list, my favorite Civil War battlefield is Gettysburg, there is something haunting and eerie about the place that I find appealing. I've done Sewell's Point, Manassas, Petersburg, Harper's Ferry, Antietam but none of them affected me the way Gettysburg did. I've been to Fort McHenry too. I know different war but we were there.

Overall impression: Your travel blog is enjoyable to read, it sounds like you have a good time teaching what you know about 2 way communications.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? Wicked cool!
Lyn


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Review of Trusting Love  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Amanda

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Trusting Love

First Impression: It is difficult to trust someone knew when all you have known is difficult men.

What needs your attention: You have some lines rhyming and then some not. I truly believe you could make this a stronger poem if you chose to make it one or the other. The word iniquity hung me when reading it out loud, maybe a different word there.

What part I liked best: Surrendering to the journey encourages the reader that the narrator is open to possibilities even though she feels fear and suspects her heart will be broke again. I don't envy her, new relationships are challenging and putting one's self out there is a very vulnerable place to be.

Overall impression: The poem led the reader to believe this poem was done in a free style poetic conversation with Sean, hoping that he will go gentle on her heart and not hurt her. I hope things went well.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? Hi Amanda, I am still exploring your port.
Lyn


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Review of Amygdalia's Blog  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi Amy

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Amygdalia's Blog

First Impression: Amy is a very engaging writer and has a knack of making the reader feel like she is sitting across from her yakking. The blog flows that comfortably.

What needs your attention: Nothing, a blog is whatever the author wants it to be. These games are totally killing my blogging right now as I noted yours as well.

What part I liked best: The story about your husband sitting with the ladies of the red hat society watching the Oscars at the theater and him blurting out that you probably weren't reading the book. Husbands at times are worse than children about secrets.
Your children sound delightful, I bet they are very proud of their Mom, I know Mom is of them.

Overall impression: The topics vary as blogs do and the writer takes you along with her in an easy flowing manner. The only thing is missing is a cup of coffee but at this hour I better skip it.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? I think Amy writes really well!
Lyn


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Review of One Little Toad  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Amy

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes doing another ally raid with Hightower.

Title: One Little Toad

First Impression: Wow, this is absolutely adorable, I can't wait to see the illustrations you choose to go with it.

What needs your attention: Nothing, it is perfect as it is.

What part I liked best: I love how the rhyme is in the middle and at the end. The animals chosen by the author are all adorable animals that young children should easily recognize and say easily enough repeating with the adult reading to them. I loved the three little seeds turning into weeds the most but then I am an avid gardener and flowers and weeds make me smile

Overall impression: A very entertaining ten line poem with a rhyme pattern in the middle and the end of each line with delightful images that certainly will make an appealing children's book. I truly hope this published for I would definitely purchase it for my granddaughters who are just the right age to enjoy the verse.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? Excellent children's poem!
Lyn


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Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Amy,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes doing an Ally raid with Hightower

Title: Twas the Night Before NaNo 2013

First Impression: Sounded like a Christmas story to me but then I remembered that NaNO is in November and it does bring in the holidays. Or raise total havoc depends on who is looking at the picture.

What needs your attention: Nothing, the poem reflects the author's sense of humor and love of writing.

What part I liked best: Family and friends cheering the author on, she is very lucky. Most of m y family has no idea how much I love writing, they are very critical so I don't volunteer much information. I think it rocks that you will have completed a trilogy. Awesome, Amy!

Overall impression: The author indicates there is a lot of prepping to get done for NaNo, in the second stanza and her laptop is ready to go. I chuckled at that because it seems whenever I am in the middle of doing something I have to plug mine back in.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? Why do you hide the candy, Amy?
Lyn


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Review of Ophelia  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Mark,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Ophelia

First Impression: The poem painted a sad portrait of her life, loved by men and adored by women but fate was not in her favor.

What needs your attention: Nothing, the images work and rhyme is not necessary in this free style poem for it to flow naturally.

What part I liked best: I like the image of a fiery blossom that evokes compassion in those who see her. The third stanza evokes more sadness as I read about her suffering and that life is truly not fair. Each stanza builds upon the previous one painting a very sad visual image of Ophelia's life, and how the tragedy inspired another one.

Overall impression: Yes, love denied can be very painful and cause people to react in ways they normally wouldn't. The words chosen by the author stir sadness and loneliness in this reader's mind as she walks with Ophelia, pausing at the willow and hearing the water rush along quickly. Excellent job with the rhythm , the poem flowed very nicely when read out loud.

What does the Fox say? One of reviews from earlier says invalid now so I came to do another to assure my points were not jeopardized.


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Review of Life  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Mumsy,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Life

First Impression: A simply delightful reminder of the joy when a newborn enters the world. We become so overwhelmed with the moment that we lose sight of the rest of the magic that was happening too.

What needs your attention: Nothing, the story introduced to a new day filled with possibilities and ended with a new child in our magnificent world.

What part I liked best: I thought the image of the sun creeping across the sky, a day filled with hope and possibilities. The excitement of the day was also felt by something hidden in the foliage on this spring day with its blossoms blooming with their unique aroma. All the pieces in place, yet everyone was focused on the wailing cry of the newborn who had just arrived.

Overall impression: The story is short and sweet. It does not need a bunch of fluffy details to enhance the moment more, it is perfect the way it is. I thought it rocked just like it is.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? Hello little one, maybe you and I can be friends. I was the fox hiding in the foliage waiting your birth. *Smile*
Lyn


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Review of The Carousel Ride  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Mumsy,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: The Carousel Ride

First Impression: I love the carousels too, especially the decorated horses with the feathered hat sitting on its head. I've always chosen one like that, maybe it has something to do with my childhood. I noted that you chose the tiger on your adventure into the closed park with its peaceful calm silence.

What needs your attention: Nothing in my opinion, the story flowed smoothly from the opening to the conclusion.

What part I liked best: Memories of her grandfather oiling the gears on the carousel, he was one of the lucky ones that always heard the lovely music of the carousel. I can see why it would hold such special memories with the carousel, I bet your grandfather had lots of tales over the years about the amusement park.

Overall impression: Thank you for taking me back to my childhood and the carousel rides that I had forgotten about. A picture of a carousel would enhance the story if you come across one.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? I want to ride the horse with the feathered cap.
Lyn


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Review of Drifting Home  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Mark,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Drifting Home

First Impression: I enjoyed the imagery created by the author in the first stanza that carried the reader smoothly to each stanza after. Rhyming was not necessary the poem has a natural flow with the words selected by the author.

What needs your attention: I really think this would sound better with the word a inserted after the word and " And place to land"

What part I liked best: I liked the third stanza best because morning is my favorite part of the day, it gives me immense pleasure to see the first light of the day. I am also very sentimental so noting that hope and peace are found then I want to linger before going on.

Overall impression: I enjoyed the spiritual offering the writer shared with the reader. Each of us at time feels like we are adrift and need help finding our way home again. I thought each stanza built upon the previous one to create an invitation to come home.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? A lovely spiritual poem, Mark!
Lyn


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Review of October, 2013  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Mark,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Oct. 2013

First Impression: The concept of living within our means struck a chord with me. I see so many young people with the sporty cars, the tattoos and whatever trend flashes at the moment.

What needs your attention:Nothing, your opinion is simply that expressed in this article.

What part I liked best: I chuckled when I came to the line hemorrhaging funs through multiple layers. It appalls me when I receive all these requests in the mail to support this campaign or another and then I look up online to see what their CEO is being paid. Not on my dime, sorry I am not going to support causes that pay ridiculous salaries instead of helping the people who really are in need. I understand people need or better said want compensation for their services but seriously many of them are ludicrous. They should be ashamed of even receiving a third. Our country has encouraged robbery on every level in society and the poor pay dearly for not having the means to steal themselves.
Politicians should never be hold office for more than 2 terms and should be made accountable for their broken promises to the people.


Overall impression: I agree with most of your observations about government needing a swift kick in the ass reminding them they serve the people not their wallets. Future generations need to be less dependent on technology and use their own brains more to plan for the future. Short terms goals never fix they only sustain the problem.
Interesting read!

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say?????
Lyn


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Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Mark,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Rethinking Technology

First Impression: Like you I am reluctant to put my eggs into one basket, I don't feel the need to jump onto the technology bandwagon. My husband wanted to buy me a bread maker so it would be easier. I gave him one of those stare down moments, he hasn't suggested it again.

What needs your attention: Nothing, your opinion is well thought out and explained clearly in this article.

What part I liked best: I chuckled when I read your opinion about twitter allowing unfiltered commentary. I shake my head quite often when you hear this celeb twitted this and another did this. I realize technology has benefits but it also has many negatives as well. It opens the door to every stupid comment, every copycat committing the newest item we just to have. And it also provides way too much information to individuals that want to use it in a harmful manner as well.

Overall impression: Each of us have opinions and this is just an example of yours about technology, pros and cons. Like you, I will keep my cast iron cookware, my stoneware and old fashion connect to the wall telephone that works when the power is out. Nor do I feel the need to have a phone tracking me with a gps either.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? Stubbornly, hanging onto the things she is familiar with, if they work I'm not changing.
Lyn


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Review of The Inner Me  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi Mark,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: The Inner Me

First Impression: This is the most powerful piece I have read in your port thus far. My grandson CJ has Asperger's, at least that is the label the doctor gave him. Your discussion of the changes in your life are similar to his in some cases and different in others, which I am told is what makes Asperger's so challenging.

What needs your attention: Nothing, you are very articulate and have done an excellent job discussing the reality of your life and what you do to cope.

What part I liked best: The genuine frankness as I read, you did not try to paint a pretty picture, you chose to simply share your own personal experiences for us to read. My grandson differed in the fact that he was non-verbal until he was 4 years old, his social interactions were very challenging to him. He still has difficulty in social situations but excels in math and science. He thrives on learning the answer, he will do something over and over to he has satisfactorily resolved in his mind what happens.

Overall impression: I am glad that you and your wife have a system that works well for you. Life is about adapting to the best of our ability, reading this indicates to me that you did and are making what you have work for you. I wish you much success!

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? This is ally raid 3 with House Hightower of Turtle.
Lyn


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Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Mark,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Awaken the Bull Moose,

First Impression: Initially, after reading your bio about you living in Northern Maine, I thought wow, a moose story then I read the explanation with the title and thought maybe the author will turn a herd of moose loose when Congress is in session. I know wishful thinking but something needs to wake them up to reality.

What needs your attention: Nothing, the article discussing the political issues that were an issue in 1912 are worse and could use the same adrenaline rush that took place during the Roosevelt- Taft era.

What part I liked best: The explanation of the Bull Moose's purpose and how it would benefit today's society equally as well because the stronghold businesses have on our government have crippled our country as a whole. Corruption and greed run rampant in today's political arena and the voice of the people is not a priority. The color of money is.
Roosevelt would be appalled at how many changes have been made to fulfill business needs even to the point of placing HB workers first before American workers because of the profit margin. Look at how many things have changed just in our local governments, they don't say the Pledge of Allegiance because it may offend someone, the list of school functions changed to cover different nationalities and not offend anyone. Roosevelt firmly believed if you wanted to live and work on US soil than you became an American and lived by our customs. He would be in an uproar to see how many rules have been changed to allow religious issues to exist in place.
Yes, I do think we need another individual like Roosevelt to come in and clean house. First of all eliminating all corporate connections with our government and no more money crossing hands. Period.

Overall impression: This is an excellent discussion on what is needed to bring our country back on track unfortunately corruption is difficult to battle. I am not sure we can turn this political mess we have around.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? I'm from Madison, Maine. Where are you located in Maine?
Lyn


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Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Turtle

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Introduction to From the Ground Up

First Impression: I am going to check this out, as usual I started backwards. I've read a lot of poetry, and I spend a lot of time practicing different styles but mine lack what I feel lack the sparkle.

What needs your attention: Nothing, you have written an excellent introduction to what the course offers and how a student will benefit from taking the course.

What part I liked best: I love to garden so using the simile for me worked perfectly because I could easily relate to the essential prep work and totally got what you were proposing and how it would make a huge difference. I know what gardens that have not been prepared look like all to well and I know how much time I have spent in mine. It never crossed my mind that poetry writing could be the same.

Overall impression: The suggestions were valid and reminded me how I always do things the hard way myself. After the games, I will check this out. I truly want to improve my poetry writing skills and hopefully have them flourish as well as my garden.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? This sounds really awesome Turtle!
Lyn


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Review of When I am no more  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi Keeper of the Realm aka Gaby,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: When I am no more

First Impression: I hope that we do not know the answer to your question for a very long time. Personally, I am hoping I have 50 more years before I know the answers myself.

What needs your attention: I might consider changing this to wander instead of wonder Or shall I wonder on my own
2012, and you haven't changed it from rough draft ????? I thought I was bad about editing things.

What part I liked best: I chuckled when you went in one stanza wandering with your guardian angel to playing cards with the devil. Talk about going from one extreme to another in a short space. *Bigsmile*

Overall impression: All of us contemplate what happens next at some point in our lives, this poem offers an opportunity to do with a good friend. The flow of the poem moves smoothly from stanza to stanza, line to line. It leads the reader to contemplate the questions herself. Rhyming is not necessary, the words chosen

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my IMMENSE pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? Groan, moan, another review for Game of Thrones *Check3* oh when oh when will I be done. *Facepalm*
Lyn


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for entry "Trees Stand Watch " 
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi Carly,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Trees Stand Watch

First Impression: I felt like I was invited to stand in a wooded grove to watch the storm unfold with the trees. Awesome imagery from beginning to end, Carly!

What needs your attention: Nothing, you rocked this prompt with a perfect poem. I hope you don't leave this hidden in your blog, it should be highlighted as a static item.

What part I liked best: Darkness gathers as the thunder rumbles, I love how the air feels when a storm is brewing. The leaves rustling daring me to stay with them and feel the burst of water that soon will fall. Awesome images for this reader, I am smiling ear to ear as I read. I never thought about how great a shower must feel to a tree, I know how I love the feel when I am in the shower.

Overall impression: The poem invites the reader to experience a storm with the dirt covered trees who are longing for the rinse of rain to refresh themselves. Rhyming is not necessary, the poem has a natural rhythm inspiring the reader to keep going line to line. Great job, Carly with the prompt creating this delightful poem.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my IMMENSE pleasure.


What does the Fox say?????
Lyn


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Review of The Terrible Gift  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi Leah,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: The Terrible Gift

First Impression: I can totally relate, I have the BRCA 1 genetic factor, I inherited from my grandmother as well. I had breast cancer in 2005, it was my third round of cancer. Initially, I had cervical cancer in 1980 stage 4 but I was pregnant with my daughter. I would not abort so I carried her to term but the cancer spread to my uterus. They did a radical hysterectomy after she was born and chemo. It was 20 years later when they discovered I have esophageal which they treated with radiation, unfortunately the radiation stimulated the growth in my breast which had not been detected yet. I am on the cancer preventive plan now.

What needs your attention: Nothing, this poem rocks!

What part I liked best:How the poem addressed our emotions when we find out the news, you did an excellent job of realistically painting the picture. It is so hard dealing with everything involved, getting the best medical care, worrying how you are going to cover the expense that insurance does not. It is a crazy roller-coaster that we don't want to ride at all.

Overall impression: Excellent work. Thank you for writing such a powerful poem on a topic that is dear to all women especially this woman.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my IMMENSE pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? Thank you Leah!
Lyn


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Review of The Question  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | (4.5)
House Florent Image for G.o.T. "Game of Thrones" 

Hi Rhyanna

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title:The Question

First Impression: Another delightful story unfolded before the readers eyes with delightful imagery.

What needs your attention:It appears you have duplicated the word for, ending it one the first line and beginning with it on the very next.
encountered in his presence she prayed for
for thanks. He knew of the world, he knew of

What part I liked best: The fragileness of new love is always a joy to remember to this reader. The story unfolds under moonlight with the two young lovers sharing a magical moment with sweet caresses and kisses. I remember praying for a relationship not to end back in my youth. Spell binding beautiful like a glorious sunrise jumped right out at me and I had to linger briefly because that is my favorite time of day.

Overall impression:The imagery is compelling, the word choices the author chose weave a lovely tale that flows smoothly from beginning to end.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say?????
Lyn


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Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
House Florent Image for G.o.T. "Game of Thrones" 

Hi Elaine,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: A place for just about everything.

First Impression: I had to see the response to this after seeing the title. I loved seeing ayup, man it's been too long since I've heard that. My grandfather said it all the time, he's been gone since 1980. Being a grandparent is truly the best gift ever in life, as I am sure you know.

What needs your attention: Not a thing, the story unfolds like a good conversation with a grandchild but in poetic prose.

What part I liked best: A woman's place, amen! Times have changed in our lives so much. From being just in the home, to soaring to the moon and beyond. The doors are open to so many possibilities now, far beyond our youth. If I was writing this now, I would add toss the boyfriend or husband who does not support your dreams to the curb.
In my mind, I remember talking with my grandmother in the kitchen while taking care of dishes, we talked about everything under the sun it seemed until the day I tried to tell her about my father (her son) she would not believe me, and the sweet bond we had ended. I miss those days when innocence prevailed.

Overall impression: A joyful moment that every grandparent can truly appreciate. The story flows delightfully, rhyme is not necessary, the rhythm carries it along very well. I was surprised, I had no idea you have been on WDC 11 years until today. Congratulations, Elaine.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say?????
Lyn


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Review of The Picture  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
House Florent Image for G.o.T. "Game of Thrones" 

Hi Elaine,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: The Picture

First Impression: Artists of all kinds sometimes forget to simply be in the moment. I know that I am guilty of that with my camera in hand, I am so busy snapping pictures that I miss the other contributions to the scene like the birds chirping, or the little animal who stole a glimpse of me. Sometimes I am lucky and I've captured them on my lens.

What needs your attention: Not a thing, the poet accomplish a portrait for the reader to enjoy.

What part I liked best: The spring exploding in green everywhere, that is my favorite season watching everything come alive after the dreary brown stains of winter. It does seem like the crows are louder in the spring than any other season to me as well.

Overall impression: Yes, the author is right some pictures don't need paper to be expressed just someone there to enjoy them at their peak. I had not seen this style of poem before, looks like you mastered it well, the combination is right on. I'll have to try this one myself, I am always open to new styles.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my Immense pleasure.


What does the Fox say?????
Lyn


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Review of How now brown cow  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
House Florent Image for G.o.T. "Game of Thrones" 

Hi Elaine

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes from House Florent.

Title: How now brown cow

First Impression: I saw the title, I just had to see how you responded to the prompt. I chuckled as I read, very amusing discussion indeed with the brown cow. I haven't heard cow patty in so many years, not since I left Maine. People here in this area wouldn't know what one was unless they had a mouthful. *Facepalm* Come to think of it, I can think of a few that always have a cow patty dripping from their mouth.

What needs your attention: Nothing, the rhyming is right on, the rhythm is smooth and the images are hilarious.

What part I liked best: The cow chewing her cud, I have watched cows in the field before, they chew and they chew occasionally swatting a fly with their tail without a care in the world. Sometimes you see drool fall out of their lips but the one thing that stands out is the noise. I used to tell my kids to stop chewing their gum like a cow does its cud.

Overall impression: I enjoyed reading this amusing poem about the man with sweat on his brow having a discussion with the brown cow.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? MOO MOO!
Lyn


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Review of Free Association  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | (4.5)
House Florent Image for G.o.T. "Game of Thrones" 

Hi Rhyanna,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes doing an Ally Raid with House Hightower.

Title:Free Association


First Impression: Letting one's mind go seems to work very productively for you unlike me. I find myself staring at an empty page or maybe just a couple of words that I scribble out.

What needs your attention: Nothing, the author's intent was to free associate, letting her mind take her where ever and that has been accomplished.

What part I liked best: Elegantly my mind drifts, I envy you. There is nothing elegant about the musings of my mind. I sense there is a lot of agitation once you go deeper into your trains of thought that were once obscure, maybe even painful. The knife leads me to believe there is hostility. Yes, those lingering thoughts do tend to cast shadows with our fragile perception of what is essential in life. Each of us varies on what is necessary for quality of life and how we address it with so much opposition.

Overall impression: I feel the author is battling with life issues and is trying to find her way on the page by associating different thoughts looking for an answer. I hope the answer appeared because it is not indicated as resolved in this writing.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? Life is too Short to Sweat the Small Stuff!
Lyn


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