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Review of Little Bear  Open in new Window.
Review by Lyn's a Wit... Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Review number # 4 of week May 21-27th

Hi April,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Little Bear,

First Impression: It made me think of the popular children series Little Bear by Else Holmelund Minarik. The poem could easily become a book as hers did.

What I liked: The little girl and the little bear setting up camp together in the open out in the sunshine.

What needs your attention: Nothing!

Favorite Parts: The little bear expressing his loneliness and the little girl promising to return. I smiled knowing there was a happy ending. *Bigsmile*

Overall Impression: The poem flowed delightfully from beginning to end. It was a very enjoyable read, a feel good story that could very easily be created into a book with lovely illustrations. Congratulations April, this is excellent work!

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my IMMENSE pleasure!
Lyn


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Review number # 6 of week May 14-20th

HiOld Warrior,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Resurrection of the Dead

First Impression: The title caught my attention when I was looking over the group's contest entries.

What I liked: I enjoyed reading about the different people with memories of past lives, interesting twist how each was from different areas and time frames.

What needs your attention: Nothing, it rocks as is.

Favorite Parts: The discussion of the food contents in the man's stomach and then when the author discussed how many people could possibly be resurrected. That's a staggering number to consider. We would face chaos, cultural shock and more battles or struggles over power. I was amused to discover Father Joe was not really a nice Catholic priest but instead Anubis with a mission.

Overall Impression: Enjoyable read, the author did an excellent job of holding this readers attention. The Book of the Dead even the thought is revolting and compelling at once. I can't wait to see what happens next.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my IMMENSE pleasure!
Lyn


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Review of I Am  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Review number #1 of week May 14-20th

Hi Midnight Wanderer

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: I Am

First Impression: I was curious how you addressed not using a transient state.

What I liked: I liked the eagle image, they are impressive to watch. The author created successfully consistent imagery in each couplet. *Bigsmile*

What needs your attention: One simple thought- the first couplet might be stronger if you find an alternative word to continue with the rhyme theme.

Favorite Parts: The rainbow after a storm, even at my age I love looking for the rainbow after a shower. The feeling of discovery never grows old.

Overall Impression: The couplets enhanced the flow of the poem, the imagery was balanced throughout to the reader's delight.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my Immense pleasure! Welcome to WDC!
Lyn


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Review number # 6 of week May 7-13

HiFiction Diva,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Rain

First Impression: Initially, the picture of rain enticed me to visit.

What I liked: The imagery created by your word choices made me smile and enjoy the rainy experience. I love walking in the rain.

What needs your attention: Nothing!

Favorite Parts: "Her April showers can bloom reflection and drive those with old afflictions to their beds." A potent reminder that the weather affects so many people. I feel blessed that I can enjoy the rain at my age. I am truly glad that human hands cannot control the rain, we would not handle the additional power well.

Overall Impression: The sonnet is well done, the rhythm and rhyme work very well, definitely a joy to read. Thank you for writing a beautiful sonnet!

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my IMMENSE pleasure!
Lyn


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Review of Poetic Thoughts  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Review number #4 of week May 7-13

Hi Kings,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title:Poetic Thoughts

First Impression: The title is what caught my attention.

What I liked: A poem about poetry is what appealed to me.

What needs your attention: The second line in the first stanza, I would use something different than poems because it is to close to the ending in the previous line. How about you write masterfully emotions I've never known. Just food for thought *Smile*

Favorite Parts: I love the last two stanzas! "Rhythm and rhyme gel to a sweet liquid emotion", are a joy to read for a poetry writer and lover of the written word. It is not easy mastering both.
"Painting a picture as in art", every poet hopes they accomplish that when they bare their heart and soul to the reader.


Overall Impression: Delightful surprise, I am glad I visited your port, I will be back again.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Review of Ageless Memories  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Review number # 3 of week May 7-13

Hi Old Warrior

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Ageless Memories,

First Impression: I felt the old warrior's sadness at his role in life, part of him happy to be able to enjoy the sunshine but also missing being with his sons and grandsons.

What I liked: I enjoyed reading the comparison between the white man's children and the old warriors. Yes, it is definitely of their own making.

What needs your attention: Nothing!

Favorite Parts: The sweet smell of life runs free in my veins and the Great Spirit has provided for the old warrior, this makes me very happy to read.

Overall Impression: Yes, it does take years to build but when it comes to writing our lives we tend not to overwhelm our readers with too many details. This was a delightful story to read, I am so glad I visited your port.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Review number # 5 of week April 16-22nd

Hi Carly,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Trolls,

First Impression: As I read, my first thought was Carly met my ex-husband, he was mean like that.

What I liked: The images created with the authors word choices.

What needs your attention: Nothing.

Favorite Parts: Toothless grins, made me chuckle. I hate seeing people's gums when they forget to put their teeth in. I bet a troll would look worse.

Overall Impression: Amusing free verse about trolls. One of my favorite books to read as a child was 3 Billy Goats Gruff and the mean troll under the bridge.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my immense pleasure!
Lyn


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Review of Is That Love?  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Review number # 5 of week 3/25-4/1

Hi Walter

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Is That Love?

First Impression: Interesting question, I am not sure you found the answer.

What I liked: When you're okay with being sad. Yes, I believe that putting another before ourselves is important always. It feels sweeter when you know that the other is happy.

What needs your attention: I would put a comma after yet, because when I read it out loud I pause there. It's your call, I suggest you read it out loud and see if you do.

Favorite Parts: Yes, ignoring ones need because the others matter more. However compromise is equally important.

Overall Impression: Everyone asks these questions of themselves in the beginning. I think you covered it very well. Very nice to read.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Review number # 6 of week 3/20-3/25

Hi Dave

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive and for your assignment in the Poet's Place.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Echoes From the Crypt

First Impression: The author is very capable of creating visual imagery. I felt my first read of the work, I could visualize each detail like I was standing there.

What I liked: The second stanza I felt really moved, I sensed the author's reluctance to harm the common folk. A brief glimpse of the author's personality which I find important in all poetry.

What needs your attention: The student bows to the teacher on this, excellent work.

Favorite Parts: I can't separate one particular part because the story told in the poem builds from beginning to end, creating a powerful image of our societal demise. It indicates that is gothic, occult and horror but in reality it could apply to our daily existence at times. Look at how that is happening around the world, so many people weeping in despair, crying out for help, bombings, etc.

Overall Impression: I think the authors descriptive imager was very persuasive. I believe the intent was to make the reader think, feel and challenge themselves to change therefore becoming more than a creature from a crypt. The structure of the Rondeau form fit this particular work very well, I agree with the author it allowed the story to be told with particular emphasis stressed at the right moment. Excellent demonstration, Dave. Just in case I haven't said, thank you for all you do, please note that is one of those moments.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my Immense pleasure to give back to the teacher. I am a grateful student!
Lyn


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Review number # 6 of week 3/12-3/18

Hi Sue,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

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Title: I am a butterfly

First Impression: I would love to be a butterfly in that garden.

What I liked: I am getting woozy from all the pollen. Yeah, like everything in life moderation, though the temptation with such a lovely garden would challenge all creatures.

What needs your attention: Nothing, it is perfect as is.

Favorite Parts: I had forgotten they lay their eggs on the milkweed. It is so sad to see butterflies declining because of all the chemicals people use to keep their yards free of weeds. I prefer the old fashion way, puttering every day and appreciating the imperfections.

Overall Impression: I am glad I visited your port and discovered this lovely butterfly tribute. The wind is whipping away outside, a brisk 34 degrees and I am longing for spring to appear. Thank you for creating a lovely place to visit in the mean time. Well-written and visually stimulating.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my immense pleasure!
Lyn


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Review of He Was Only Two  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Review number # 2 of week 3/12- 3/18

Hi Matthew,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: He Was Only Two

First Impression: What a inspirational way to share a young's life with us.

What I liked: How you took us for his journey by stanzas.

What needs your attention: In the stanza, where he is 7, you have used was in all the lines except one. All that he is hearing, should be for continuity all that he was hearing.

Favorite Parts: He put his country first, I respect that belief strongly. My son is a Senior Chief Petty Officer in the Navy, this is his 19th year. He believes as your young man does, country before self.

Overall Impression: I was sad, to know he did not return home to his wife and child. My heart breaks for the family. Thank you for reminding us all of the men that serve to keep us all safe.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Review of The Sleeper  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Review number #6 of week 2/19-2/25

Hi PhantomPen

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Unfinished

First Impression: Wow, I did not see that coming. I thought I was reading a story about Alzheimer's and the wife was watching her husband.

What I liked: The agony and loneliness apparent in both characters, I felt so sad.

What needs your attention: Nothing

Favorite Parts: The surprise in the ending when you revealed that he had killed her. I felt so bad for her but then when the demons came for him, I hoped they wouldn't take him either.

Overall Impression: Excellent, the story evolved in such an unexpected manner, and the ending was perfection!

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my IMMENSE pleasure!
Lyn


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Review number # 3 of week 2/19-2/25

Hi Mason

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: A literature Essay on Twelfth Night.

First Impression: This must have been written for a school assignment. I'll read on since I enjoyed the Twelfth Night.

What I liked: "However some language between the characters for modern audiences could be viewed as a little over emotive. 'If you will not murder me for my love, let me be your servant' (2.1.30-1, Norton 2nd edition, p.1806) this statement is not typical of a heteronormative relationship between a Captain and passenger. This could simply be down to a comedic idea of sexualized banter of sea going men who exchange such words in a tongue-in-cheek manner adding to the comedic value of the play." In reading, the story I felt it was tongue and cheek play more than a conversation between two gay lovers.


What needs your attention:Your title, you have misspelled Twelfth


Favorite Parts: " If Shakespeare had been writing in a manner that was politically persuasive and that foregrounded homoeroticism with impunity then he could not have chosen a better way of doing it. It appears ostensibly that the play is simply festive fun where the working class is elevated and family reunion is the order of the day." Excellent summation in my humble opinion.

Overall Impression: I felt that Shakespeare wanted to rattle cages and make people think outside the norm, to stimulate the imagination of what is possible in love. If women had actually been able to be in the roles I wonder if these same conversations would actually occur.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Review number # 1 of week Feb. 19th-25th

Hi Bob,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: My Boss Reads My Facebook

First Impression: You do have the option of blocking him instead of closing your facebook page.

What I liked: Wishing that Anonymous takes ISIS down, I am surprised they haven't targeted them already.

What needs your attention: I believe you meant we're not were sowing China, we will fight for Democracy in Vietnam.

Favorite Parts: Fox news Greg getting drafted. Fox news should be banned period.

Overall Impression: My curiosity was peeked and satisfied, interesting read but you could elaborate more on freedom of speech and employers using facebook, all social media to invade employees personal space.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Review number # 5 of week 2/12-2/18th

Hi Beth,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: The Soundtrack to Your Life Challenge.

First Impression: Each time you put a contest together, everyone has such a good time.

What I liked: How many new people have joined us in this fun activity.

What needs your attention: Nothing!

Favorite Parts: The variety in music that each blogger brings to the forum.

Overall Impression: Totally rocks! Thank you for giving us a place to share our music passion.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Review number # 4 of week2/12-2/18th

Hi Juliet,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: The Window

First Impression: Interesting topic.

What I liked: By the window is the best place to be. I love looking out the window too! I always notice something new, each time.

What needs your attention: The last two lines in the second stanza I think would sound better if you changed the order.

Favorite Parts: Yes, I agree looking out into the countryside is much nicer than looking out in a city.

Overall Impression: Congratulations on your first poem.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Review of Founder's Day  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Review number # 1 of week 2/12-2/18

Hi Cheri,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive and to welcome you to BLOG CITY!

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Founder's Day

First Impression: I love storytelling with children, what a delightful way to share a story.

What I liked: The way the children picked up where she left off, anxious to hear the story.

What needs your attention: Nothing.

Favorite Parts: The sister rescuing her sister, sisters are like that. They wouldn't bat an eye about helping or even think of the risk involved.

Overall Impression: I never saw it coming that she would die in the end. I was saddened that she lost her sister. I truly enjoyed reading this, I would love to see one of the children sharing the story with her own children about Aunt Josie that day and about her sister. Beautifully told!

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Review number # 3 of week Feb. 5th-11th

Hi Megan

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Jane Austen Valentines Day Newsletter

First Impression: It was entertaining to read.

What I liked: The explanation on how cards were made back in Austen's day.

What needs your attention: Nothing

Favorite Parts: Suggestions on how to make our own cards for our loved ones. The quotes were really perfect to get the ball rolling.

Overall Impression: Very enjoyable, thank you Megan for all you do!

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Review number #1 of week Feb.5th-11th

Hi Cubby,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive and to thank you for joining Blog City!

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Title: Bang, Bang

First Impression: Eye opener

What I liked: How much the poem felt like I was inside a teenager's mind.

What needs your attention: Nothing

Favorite Parts: I was teased and seized, my heart breaks knowing how many children have suffered from bullying.

Overall Impression: Simple and Direct! Excellent reminder how easily it can change a good kid to a desperate act.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Review number # 6 of week Jan 1-7th, 2015

Hi Catness

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Stronger

First Impression: I thought it was a coming of age poem when one realizes that it better to move on.

What I liked: Breaking our chains, is a big step for everyone.

What needs your attention: Nothing!

Favorite Parts: We are not the same, we never will be. This is so true, everyone changes after they have been in a relationship, hopefully for the best.

Overall Impression: A very direct coming of age poem that speaks directly about taking the next step after a break up.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Review number # 4 of week Jan. 1-7th, 2015

Hi Joyce

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

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Title: Letter from Jolene

First Impression: I remember the song, I used to listen to it quite frequently. The poem brought back the song and reminded me why a cheating man is more trouble than they are worth.

What I liked: The great advice to all the women.

What needs your attention: Nothing.

Favorite Parts: His eyes are always searching for a new life. That says a lot to me, sadly I've known men like that in my past.

Overall Impression: I think you did a great response to the song, and also to women out there with the men with roving eyes and those sweet talk lines of crap!

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Review number # 3 of week Jan. 1-7th, 2015

Hi Lynda

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: The Trouble with Bad Eggs

First Impression: I thought it was so nice of Sue to help Jeff clean up the mess on his house. That was sweet, rotten eggs smell horrible.

What I liked: How easily, Sue and Jeff seemed to hit it off except for the trash can.

What needs your attention: In the 8th paragraph the spacing is off with the sentence. Same thing with the spacing in paragraph 31. Paragraph 36 and 38 have words that need spacing between them.

Favorite Parts: I never saw the ending coming. I just thought he was acting like some men do about women doing things for them, like their masculinity will suffer. Man, poor Sue.

Overall Impression: Interesting plot twist. The story flowed very well and the ending is awesome.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Review number 1 # of week Jan.1-7th, 2015

Hi Lynda with a Y *Bigsmile*

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

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Title: My name is Jay and This is my life.

First Impression: My home in Maine is primitive like the cabin in your story, I miss it immensely. You can put a girl in the city but she will never lose sight of her real home.

What I liked: How easily Jay and Skeeter were able to function on their own. If you plan ahead, make the necessary arrangements, everything works. I felt Jay had all her bases covered.

What needs your attention: Nothing,

Favorite Parts: Skeeter taking on the bear, a dog is so much more than a companion. They will protect you to the best of their ability without question. I was so relieved that Skeeter survived the bear, many dogs do not.

Overall Impression: A very harrowing story with a positive ending for Jay and Skeeter. The story flowed very well from beginning to end.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Review number # 10 of week Dec. 25-31st, 2014

Hi Writerpenman,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

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Title: Ocean Moon

First Impression: I love watching the moon over an ocean so the title drew me to your work.

What I liked: Salt,and sea and sand forever mingle, Nature's dance. I love watching the waves break on the sand and then disappear across the sand back to the ocean. The beautiful caress across the sand tempts me to trace my toes in the wet sand.

What needs your attention: I think that it would flow better with salt,sea and sand without the other and.

Favorite Parts: Universal forces continent against sea, yes, the beach erosion does show how powerful the ocean can be.

Overall Impression: Beautiful imagery, great job!

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Review number #6 of Dec. 25-31st, 20114 week

Hi Mac 1

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: The Angry Young Man

First Impression: I am not sure the title works, the wise young man feels right because he learns what many do not.

What I liked: He is burdened with thoughts, I am happy that he did not look away at what he learned.

What needs your attention: Nothing.

Favorite Parts: The seeds you plant today will take you far away. This stanza is the best advice any young person could have said to them. I wish some one had told me to be true to myself and to find my own destiny when I was young.

Overall Impression: A well written coming of age poem that does inspire the reader to want more in life.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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