You've expressed the experiences of a lonely tree beautifully in this poem. Loneliness can be frustrating, but can be enjoyable at times too. This is a well planned poem, and its layout is very attractive. Being lonely does not mean being away from the world.
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Well, this can be a very sweet letter or token for your first love. Making commitments seem very easy, but it is equally hard to keep them. And a man would definitely fall in love with a sweet note like this. This is persuasive, but polite too.
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This is a beautiful poem, about the mysterious musings of a teenage mind. For this girl her usual situations seems boring, and she wants to fly like a bird. I love the layout of the poem, and appreciate the footnote given at the end, cause I like learning new things.
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This is a very good contest for those who wants to travel in the land of fantasy. You have offered very attractive prizes, and the layout of this forum is wonderful. I love colours, and your forum is filled with colorful images. Hope to enter in this soon.
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At first I thought that this lady hated her father. But after reaching the end, my opinion changed. I like the main character, as she displays both love and hatred. I think the foolish driver's character could be developed a bit more. This one has a unique layout, and is well punctuated.
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This story reminded me of myths and legends. I like Bryna very much, cause maybe she was hesitant to follow her own dreams at first, but manages to do so at the end. I like the way you've described the characters. Every action is described in detail as well.
this is my first visit to your port, decided to check this out.
What I liked: I liked the characters a lot. One seems like a very disturbing character and the other's very sweet. Language: You did not use complicated words, but managed to paint a clear picture for the reader. Every single word is chosen carefully, which is very important while writing a story within word limit.
Graphology/layout: The lines are well-spaced, and the lines are well punctuated.
Suggestions Though I like the way of telling a story using dialogs, I think a little bit of character description could make this story even better.
This one's quite short, but still worth reading, as it is pretty interesting. Any sort of animal can make you happy or sad even if it is for a moment only. I guess you could make this story a little longer by describing how you felt, or you could describe the surroundings a bit.
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This is the review you had requested from my review forum. I really love this one. I could see absolutely no grammatical errors, and the story is laid out very well. I like your use of purely Indian words here. I think you could use a little bouquet image as a header, just to match the title. Did this win the contest?
This might be a very good begining paragraph for a short story. Why don't you continue it? I like the imagery you've used here. It looks like a tiny picture painted with words. You can create a fantasy or romantic story from this, or maybe a drama.
Well, I liked the first poem better than this one. I guess this is the story of a girl who broke up her relationship with a boy, maybe the girl repents for what she had done, and wants him back in her life, but he's confused. But still, this poem made me smile.
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This seems to be a very good contest. I hope you will like my entry. The prizes are quite attractive, and you already got loads of entries. I'll make this review public so that you get more contestants. Hope you'll come up with more interesting prompts.
This is really such a beautiful story. Though it is quite long, it's worth reading. I like Barbara very much and feel quite sorry for her cause she couldn't get larry. I wish the story had a happy ending instead of such a tragic one.
Well, a newborn is never easy to manage. You were lucky to get a quiet one. Maybe the big bro got a bit jealous at first, cause no matter how hard you try, sibling rivalry might start at times. Your son seems very interestiting, how old is he now? glad to know that chris loves his sis.
Well, I can relate to this cause I have cerebral palsy too and a major part of my life was spent in physiotherapy centers and under x ray machines. But disability is just a shortcoming, it is not a weakness. Rather, it can be considered as a challenge which can encourage someone to move on, no matter how hard the situations are. I love the way you've expressed it.
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Well, women in India, or even in our Bangladesh always have to face the agony called family life. Homes can be turned into heavens only when husbands are supportive. Though this poem does not really ryhme, yet this was worth reading. The stanzas are well spaced, but allignment at the center would make this look better. I like your choice of words.
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I liked the story, especially the use of dialogues here. Your story goes step by step, paragraphs and ncidents are well connected to each other. You do have a few typos here and there, but that's not really a major flaw. Still, you can correct them. This story has a happy ending which seems sweet. Write on!
this one's a cute lttle piece describing the little boy's activity. I bet he still loves to play his drums. I like the rythm, and I can easily visualize the boy cause you've used very clear descriptions. You could've allinged this at the center.
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I just love this. You have shown wonderfully how us humans torture mother nature. Maybe all people cannot hear her wailing, but those who can, do their best to save nature. Some people do not understand that harming nature is harming life.
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This is the first of the five reviews you have won from earl's quickie funny auction. I really admired your story about this lonely little word is. English is not my mother-tongue, but it was and still is my passion. I think a lot about the words. I'm glad is finally found his place in the world of grammer. write on!
Nice poem, I like the rytthm and the word choice. It is not too difficult to understand, and it is not monotonous either, because there is no repeating of any topic. Each stanza deals with a new issue. Thank you for sharing this with us, Write on!
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This is perhaps my first visit to your port, so I just picked this up to read. Usually, people who THINK they are perfect, don't want to realize what others are going through, only the wearer knows where the shoe pinches. But pain, of any sort, can turn into your strength if you want it to be.
This is a tribute someone loved and lost. Maybe the lady in this poem was a little confused about her feelings towards the male character, who shot himself dead in front of her very own eyes. Well written poem from the viewpoint of the lady. But I guess it will look better if alligned at the center.
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