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Review by Humming Bird
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi there,
Happy WDC anniversary. You've done a really good job with this story. It was both amusing and realistic. At times ladies can be really violent. The quotes are not of the usual type, that's what makes them challenging. I'd love to take part in this contest. Is it open?

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Review by Humming Bird
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello there,
this one's told in a really nice way, it's an amusing story involving fellow wdc members. This is an unique approach, and you got a well deserved second prize. I hope you'll be able to follow your goals this year. Come back here from time to time and see how much you could achieve. Write on.
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Review of Dear Me...  
Review by Humming Bird
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello there,
this really is a marvellous letter, and it is visually appealing too. A VERY well deserved first place indeed. You've concentrated only on writing goals here, you could have included personal goals too. This is precise, and well laid out. Write on!
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Review by Humming Bird
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi there,
this one's a nice chapter, I always like items focusing on family life. The descriptions are powerful, the language is pretty simple. You can add a bit more dialogues here. This one is spaced well, and has a nice layout.
write on
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Review of Monotony in Rule  
Review by Humming Bird
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi there,
this seems like a mysterious story. Yet, it is quite deep and well thought out. You can elaborate this if you want to. Make this a bit more simple and straightforward. More or less, this was well written. Elaborate it a bit.
write on
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Review of Sticks and Stones  
Review by Humming Bird
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi there,
divorce can be really very painful but one must learn to convert sorrow into strength. This one's short, but the feelings are expressed in a very touching way, precisely. A bit of spacing is needed between the lines though. Write on!
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Review by Humming Bird
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi there,
This story is dominated by dialogues. You may cut those short and add a bit of description about the surroundings and the characters. This was a bit confusing too. It is a mixture of thriller and suspense. If you work a bit on it, this would be better.
write on
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Review of On Reviewing  
Review by Humming Bird
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi there,
this seems to be an useful article on reviewing, other authors will surely benefit from this. You can also add the points you personally look for in a good story, and the way you like to review. Write on.
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Review by Humming Bird
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi there
This one's a heartfelt poem. You are perhaps regretting or repenting for the mistakes you had made in the past. But maybe things just won't change. Don't be so depressed. This has no rhyme rhythm or pattern, still it was enjoyable.
Write on
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Review of Scars of Heaven  
Review by Humming Bird
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there,
this one's a nice poem, though it's not so simple. Remember, simplicity is a nice way to attract readers. This would look better if the lines were a bit indented. This has a nice layout though. It is punctuated well. You can enter this in a contest if you wish to.
write on
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Review by Humming Bird
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi there,
Thankk you for sharing this sensitive part of your life with us. Having two girlfriends surely is troublesome, so it's better to have just one or none at all. I like the way you've expressed your feelings here. I wish you could be with a girl of your choice. The story is nicely laid out.
write on
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Review by Humming Bird
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Hi there,
I wonder who altarose is. She must be very beautiful. This is a lovely poem about true love and sacrifice. This has a beautiful structure and it rhymes well. The red bold font was not required. Allign this at the center to make it look better.
write on
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Review by Humming Bird
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi there,
I liked this simple, amusing story. I wish this rubber toy would talk, instead of being sunk in the tub. This could be elaborated a little more. You can write a bit more about Jimmy and his activities. This is well laid out , write on!

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Review by Humming Bird
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)

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Hi there,
this one's a really entertaining story, without any spelling or grammatical errors. Though it is a bit lengthy, I really enjoyed reading this. I like the main character, and I like the way this girl leaves the forest. This is written in a very simple language.Write on
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Review by Humming Bird
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi there,
Birds are inseparable companions for their owners, I know that as I have a pair of budgerigars. I really wished to see a positive ending, didn't expect to read about the dead bird. Does your friend have a new pet now? I enjoyed reading this, well written.
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Review of Lost  
Review by Humming Bird
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello there,
this one's short, yet sweet. I like the first three paragraphs. This could be elaborated a bit. The feelings are nicely expressed and the descriptions are well planned. I wonder what happened to the grandpa mentioned here. You could've talked more about the characters.
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Review by Humming Bird
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi there,
loosing a loved one can be really painfull.So it's wise to keep the relationship good before it is too late. The emotions are expressed well in this poem, but more spacing required between the lines, it looks a bit clustered. Allign this at the center if you want to. Nice one, write on!
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Review of A Lost Muse  
Review by Humming Bird
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi there,
this one's a lovely poem, beautifully expressed, and has a well planned layout. You can put a comma after every two lines if you wish to. A writer might be affected by writer's block for the time being, but it is important to keep writing.
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Review by Humming Bird
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi there,
this one's a sweet poem, mostly about nature and its beauties, with a little flavor of religion. The layout needs a bit of work. Try to increase the spacing between the lines, break the little sentences, decrease the number of commas. Overall, this was a heartfelt poem, thanks for sharing it. Write on
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Review by Humming Bird
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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This one's a heartfelt piece for your daughter. It is comparatively short, but precise. Having a challenged child is a challenge itself, so you must be patient. None will understand her, but you have to. The layout is sweet and simple. Write on!
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Review of Faded Fears  
Review by Humming Bird
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi there,

This dream seems like a little thriller or adventure story at first. It is short and simple. Decrease the spacing a little bit. This is well expressed within a short boundary of words. You can add more description here.
Write on
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Review by Humming Bird
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hey there,
I do agree with what you say. Some people take the stars too much to heart and disregard everything else. Yes, rating does count but writers should get what they deserve, and every advice of reviewers should be considered. Stars doesn't count all the time.
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Review by Humming Bird
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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This one's a very detailed item on your friend. She's a good writer, I've been to her port and like some of her stories. She seems fun to be with, both online and in real life. She seems a bit unique too, according to you. Well done!
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Review by Humming Bird
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
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*Snowman*First Impression: Wow! What a dramatic way to confess love for someone!

*Snowman*Layout: This looks like a small drama script. It is well spaced, and well punctuated.

*Snowman* Language: Simple and attractive.

*Snowman* Final thoughts: Nice work, write on!
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Review by Humming Bird
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
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*Snowman*First Impression: Wow! What a dramatic way to confess love for someone!

*Snowman*Layout: This looks like a small drama script. It is well spaced, and well punctuated.

*Snowman* Language: Simple and attractive.

*Snowman* Final thoughts: Nice work, write on!
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