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Review of Ocean Rhapsody  
Review by Humming Bird
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there,

Wow, that's just wonderful! You surely love the ocean! I have never been to a sea, so I don't know. But your poem taught me the value of appreciating the simple pleasures of life. I'm glad I have eyes to see the beauty of nature, which perhaps blind people can't.
Keep writing!


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Review by Humming Bird
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Nice little tale, thanks for sharing.


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Review of A New Day  
Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hey there,

You seem to be a teacher, with busy days filled with children and teachings. Man, you surely have a very eventful day. And a bouncy pup? Wow! I'd love to have one, but my parents won't allow to keep an animal imprisoned in four walls. This looked like a short story in the first place, but I'm surprised to see that it isn't. Keep writing!

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Review of Goosebumps  
Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there, Koyel,

Are you participating in PWW this season? It would be a little weird to learn about betrayal from a ghost. You have used some interesting prompts here. You've portrayed the picture of a very loving wife here. This one's a nice supernatural story told in verses. Keep writing!


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Review of Things I've made.  
Review by Humming Bird
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
I was part of bidders and bribers, can't find the item anywhere now. Is there any package I have to fulfill or something else? Please send me a link to the activity. A nice table of contents for all the items in your port. Keep writing, and tell me when you host other new activities.
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Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello again,

The previous poem made me smile, this one makes me want to weep. It has such a sad, helpless, and somewhat negative tone throughout, just the opposite of the previous poem.

I know you want to show the sad state of one's mind, isolation is not easy to handle. But you can at least show that glimmer of hope, show that every cloud has a silver lining, make it at least a bit happy. Keep writing.

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Review by Humming Bird
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there,

This one's the second of five reviews won through "Invalid Item" . Here's what I thought about your poem:

Title: Well, I've always known about a man's best friend. Learning about just the opposite was interesting.

Language and Layout: Simple and precise lines, with well punctuated, neat layout.

What I felt: This was a heartfelt poem, and obviously, very true. We need our pets as much as they need us, keep writing!

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Review by Humming Bird
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi there,
You have won five reviews from me through ~ Santa Sisco ~ 's auction. This one's the first of five. Here's what I thought about your story:

Title: Questions tend to make me curious, so I came in to find the answer.

Language and Layout: You've made this well formatted, neat and simple. The story flows well, and events unfold at a steady pace. I could understand it all, nothing too complex. Though it looks a bit lengthy, it actually isn't. This has a sad tone throughout, I wish at least the ending would be happy.*Cry*

Questions Kevin disapperared from time to time, I wonder why? Was he only her imagination at the wedding venue, or was he really there?

In conclusion: This was a nice piece to read. Though I'd expect something happier next time.

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Review by Humming Bird
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello there,

Was just looking for a random read and found you through the Advent Calendar. Here's what I thought about this one:

*Butterflyg* Title: I always like going back to the past, to make my future better. The title reminded me of that again.

*Butterflyg* Setting: Birthday party of a lady, who recieves a surprise gift.

*Butterflyg* Language and Layout: Dialogues dominate a bit, but overall, there was nothing I couldn't understand. It's simply laid out, looks pretty neat.

*Butterflyg* Question: Why did Candy disappear in the end?

*Butterflyg* In conclusion: I enjoyed reading it, keep writing!

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Review by Humming Bird
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi there,

You have some achieveable goals in there. Hope you get to achieve everything in 2013. Do not forget your goals, keep coming back to your goals, and keep fulfilling them, never give up. Did you get to new groups? Try the Newbie Novelists or maybe the Brainstormers, they're both great. Keep writing!

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Review of Story of my life  
Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there,

This is my first visit to your port. I love the way you've introduced us to your wonderful family. I have 3 of my brother's kids I can call my own, it's like experiencing motherhood before being a mother. This item just looks a little clustered, otherwise, this is a very nice piece to read. Just increase the spacing between the lines and indent the paragraphs to make it look better. Keep writing!

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Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE NEWBIE REVIEWE...  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi there,
Welcome to WDC. I liked the title of your story, so I was dragged in.

Well, just picking up a favorite song at random doesn't really prove true feelings, especially in friendship. You can expand the chapter in many ways. Maybe talk about the friends having an intimate talk, or one being angry, and the other trying to break through the ice. This one has a lot of potential, just needs a bit of brushing up. Keep writing!

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Review of Princess  
Review by Humming Bird
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there,
This poem reminded me of my childhood. All the fairy tales, had a great impact on me, the childhood experiences inspires me to write children's tales. I think the experiences with the dolls helps a girl to take care of her own family at a later stage of life. Enjoyed reading it. Keep writing!
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Review of Daddy's Girl  
Review by Humming Bird
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Bonnie,

I'm also the "Daddy's girl", Dad even takes me to office.

Just work a little bit with the layout, so that it looks a little spaced. Even if it is second hand, any gift from a loved one can make you smile. I wonder why you refered to the old guy at the end. The last sentence perhaps ends with a comma, you might want to fix it. Nice one, keep writing.

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Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there,

Oh, this one's such a sweet personal tale. I wonder what that 2 year old would think if he reads this now. Tulips, a nice little gift, and he was so innocent, thinking of blowing up another one! I guess every mother cherishes such a tale or two in her mind. Enjoyed reading it.

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Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi there,
I love reading the "Dear Me" entries. They tend to teach me a lot. I hope you were able to keep up with the goals set for yourself 2 years back. Did you set goals for this year? Could you keep up to them? You sound pretty positive in here, and also you seem to be scolding yourself a bit. Well, don't be too rough, just keep on writing!

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Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there, Bonnie,
I meet you in the chat room quite often, that's how I got in here. Here's what I thought about your story:

*Check3* Title: The title seems a little confusing, but it is appropriate though.

*Check3* Langage and Layout: This one's a nice blend of comedy, family, and animal. I liked reading this story, as you didn't really use difficult words. Simplicity is just my cup of tea. The paragraph at the middle is quite large, you can break it in two if you want, to make it look less clustered.

*Check3* What I liked: I loved the description of the cat, I felt a bit sorry for the husband, poor thing! He had to bear with the pets, but he didn't really like them.

*Check3* In conclusion: Nice one, keep writing!

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Review of Faced By Winter  
Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there,
Welcome to WDC. I was looking for a random read, and somehow I was led to your poem. Here's what I thought about it:

*Check1*Title: Love itself is a wonderful feeling. But the brief description brought me in here, I wanted to see how his wife saved him.

*Check1* Language and Layout: Every alternate line rhymes, except for the third stanza, where each line has a rhyming sound. It is well punctuated, the words "As" and "Noise" should begin with lower case letters.


*Check1* Questions: As I read, I was asking myself: "why and how did he get trapped in his own cabin?

*Check1* Trying to help: You did not say anything about the wife's emotions as she met her husband. You can add a bit of that.

*Check1* In conclusion: I enjoyed reading this piece. Keep Writing!

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Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi there,
You just came to my port recently, thought I'd drop by. This looks like the start of a dramatic thriller or a suspense, but the ending did not really seem complete. Do you plan to extend this? and why did this man actually kill the girl? Was the cat very attached to his mistress? Write on!

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Review of My Bio  
Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there,
I love to sneak a peek into personal items, cause they tend to teach me a lot. You seem to have a very thrilling childhood, and I like the way you expressed your feelings about non monetary prizes. Money can hardly buy happiness. You seem to be an average student, but you learnt a lot from life. Thanks for sharing!

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Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there,
Welcome to WDC. Hope you'll find a lot to learn from here, and make many good friends. Here's what I thought about this:

Title: The title itself is a very emotional one. Is this based on experience?

Language and Layout: This has a lot of dramatic sentences in it. You did a good job showing, instead of telling.

What I thought: I felt sorry for the whole family. I would like to know what happens next. Write on!

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Review of Hanakotoba  
Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi there,
This poem is filled with colors and blossoms, but I actually didn't expect such a sad tone in here. The title sounds a little Japanese, what does it mean? This has a lovely, cylindrical layout, just wish the girl didn't have to end it the way she did. Nice one. Keep writing!

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Review of "Crossing Over"  
Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there moderator,
I was looking through your port, and this poem seemed attractive. Here's what I thought about it:

*Star* Title: I was more impressed by the brief description, rather. Family tales always attract me, like light attracts insects.

*Star* Language and Layout: This was a complete story, in a lovely blue color, with a nice rhyming pattern. This was heartfelt, that's the most important fact.

*Star* In conclusion: Hope your brother is happy in heaven, and he'll always watch over you. Write on!

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Review of A WIFE'S DREAM  
Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi there,
I was looking for something short and chose this. Here's what I felt about it:

*Starr* Title: Dreams always seemed nice to me, so I thought I'd check this out.

*Starr* Language and Layout: There's nothing much to comment on, as this is a very short piece.

*Starr* What I thought: I felt like shooting the husband.

*Starr* In conclusion: Writing a complete story in such a short word limit, is not an easy job. You've done that hard job pretty well, keep writing!

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Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi there,
I was just sailing for a random read and dropped on this. Here's what I thought about your story:

*Starg* Title: The title sounds a little odd. I was wondering: Last drive? but why?

*Starg* Language and Layout: There's nothing difficult to comprehend, and I thought the layout was pretty simple, yet pleasant.

*Starg* What I liked: Well, if you ever come here in my country, let me warn you, you'll find traffic congestion everywhere, that's what I could relate to. I also liked the temporary friend.

*Starg* In conclusion: I was a little shocked at the end. I expected a romantic union, but got something completely opposite. Well written!

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