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Review of Winged friends  Open in new Window.
Review by Humming Bird Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello there Mina~ Author IconMail Icon,

First of all, welcome to WDC. Hope you'll enjoy the community here as much as I do. Here's what I thought about your story:

*Check3*Title: The title suits the story well, as it is about a pair of birds.

*Check3*Language and Layout: You've used pretty simple language, and the layout is also very neat. *Thumbsupr*


*Check3*Trying to help: Remember, your brief description is very important as it is the first key to attract a reader. You can try "we prefer confinement over freedom" or maybe "The cage feels better than freedom". Such indications will allow the reader to guess what the story might be about.

The tense usage could use some improvement. like: "manage" would be "managed". I did notice a few little errors like this one.

*Check3*What I liked: The part where you described the female bird being upset seems touching.

*Check3*In conclusion: This one's an interesting piece. It's an everyday event many readers can relate to. Keep writing!


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Review of Why me?  Open in new Window.
Review by Humming Bird Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello there,
This is just so touching! I never knew girls could be so mean! If I were them, I'd have accepted the gift with gratitude, I'd never even think of being so mean. I can relate to this as I was the outcast of my class back in high school. But now, thanks to Allah, I can say I do have at least one real friend, which is very important for people of all ages. Keep writing!


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Review by Humming Bird Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Please enlarge these paintings a bit, for a better view *Smile*
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Review of lake at sunset  Open in new Window.
Review by Humming Bird Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is sooo beautiful! Is it your own work?
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Review by Humming Bird Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Lynda,

You had won five reviews from me through an auction. So sorry for the delay. This poem made me smile. I'm sure many readers, especially children would love to read this. I feel sorry for the poor cat. Keep writing!


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Review by Humming Bird Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello there,
You had won five reviews from me via an auction. So sorry for the delay. I like the talking female butterfly here. I'd like to know more about this guy she meets, and her surroundings. Love the vivid descriptions here. Add a butterfly image if you want to. Keep writing!


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Review by Humming Bird Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Anistasya Author IconMail Icon,

I flew in your port in search of a good read, and this is what I think about your piece. Remember, I am a writer like you, and can only offer my suggestions:

*Starb*Title: The title made me think of something dramatic, but I didn't find drama in here. What I found was a life changing experience many people can relate to.

*Starb*What I felt: This reminded me of an advice I always follow : "even if the world turns upside down, trust yourself."

*Starb*Language and Layout: I won't comment much about the language used, because heartfelt words have a flavor of their own. The layout is pretty neat, with well spaced paragraphs.

*Starb*Overall thoughts: I felt that this has the potential to become a much longer piece. What happened to the girl when she changed to a much stronger person? How did the world react again? How did it change her life? How did she move on? Keep creating!

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Review by Humming Bird Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello there 💙 Carly: poems & novel Author IconMail Icon

I'm doing this for "I Write in August-September-October" Open in new Window.. I'm a real amateur when it comes to writing poetry, so I'm neither so familiar with the forms, nor the technical terms. I do like the poem, it is very short, yet very deep. I wonder what this form is called. It does follow a specific pattern, I'd love to know more about it.


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Review of Who Am I?  Open in new Window.
Review by Humming Bird Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  Open in new Window.
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi there ElizabethHayes-DaughterofIAM Author IconMail Icon,

I enjoyed reading this little account about your life, and I must say, life has shown you a lot. What happened to your parents, if I may ask? You are an independent woman, and experience will guide you well through life. All the best with Angel Army author of the month. Write on!

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Review of Dear Heartburn  Open in new Window.
Review by Humming Bird Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there, Pumpkin Author IconMail Icon

I'm here to check out your work as you are one of the nominees of Angel Army author of the month. here's what I think about your item. Remember, I am a writer like you and can only offer my suggestions:

*Starg*Title: I always enjoy reading these Dear Me entries, they give me a chance to know a bit more about the writer.

*Starg*Language and Layout: The paragraphs are well spaced, so it was easier to read. The whole thing has a nice positive tone and appreciation for the little blessings of life, which is enjoyable.

*Starg*I hope: I hope you have found solutions to the issues bothering you by now. Keep writing!

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Review by Humming Bird Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello there Lisa Noe Author IconMail Icon,

I came here for a good read, and this attracted me. Here's what I feel about your writing. Please note that I am a writer like you, and can only give suggestions.

*Starg*Title: The unusual name of the disease caught my eye.

*Starg*Language and Layout: I have enjoyed this biographical account written in a bit of formal language, without directly using first person. The words used are not so difficult, and the item is laid out in a very neat way.

*Starg*Errors: None noticed.

*Starg*What I liked: I really salute this lady. She went through such difficult times, yet she never gave up. I can relate to this, as certain health conditions will also prevent me from having a child.

Keep Creating!

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Review by Humming Bird Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there catwoman Author IconMail Icon

I had no clue that you were the mother of dear The StoryMistress Author IconMail Icon. I was totally into this personal piece, I'm sure you're both an amazing mother and a great mother-in-law. I liked the fact that this whole plan was a total secret till the big day. Keep writing!

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Review of A Fairy Tale  Open in new Window.
Review by Humming Bird Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hellofroth Author IconMail Icon,

I just looked for a random review, and this came up. Here's what I think about your piece. Please remember, I'm a writer like you and can only offer my suggestions.

Title: Perfect for the story, as it had a fairy tale ending.

Language and Layout: Though the paragraphs look a little clustered, I enjoyed the story from beginning to end. The atmosphere created was indeed magical. Events unfolded gradually, preventing monotony.

Question: Is forgiveness really so easy? Especially after everything that happened with her?

Suggestion: Just work a bit on the layout to make it a bit more visually appealing. Enlarge the font size, that way it would be easier to read.

Overall: A perfect read, keep writing!

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Review by Humming Bird Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello there,

I love this poem. Sometimes it's too late when we realize our mistakes. Women can be very soft for the ones they love, but if consequences force them, they can be really cruel. Sometimes people hurt me so bad that my heart turns into a stone for them. Later, if they want me to go back to them, I'd never do so. Keep writing!

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Review of Pre-writing  Open in new Window.
Review by Humming Bird Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
hello Joy Author IconMail Icon,

Thanks for sharing this. This would help me go deeper into my characters. I used to cross out all the random writings before, I will look back into those and see if I can come up with something constructive from them. You have given some important suggestions we should keep in mind. Keep writing!
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Review by Humming Bird Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello there,
Happy WDC anniversary.

This woman seems a little unusual, as if trapped in the past. Looks like she prefers to live in the past more than the present. She looks confused, curious to find more about herself. She knows she's different, but does her past collide with her present life?

Keep writing

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Review of Summertime heat  Open in new Window.
Review by Humming Bird Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello there,
I was here to wish you a Happy Account Anniversary.

The cover photo attracted me. I wondered what a poached egg had to do with the story. I really enjoyed the science experiment these kids did. Do you really do this? and do you really have a Duke to eat up the mess?

Really enjoyed reading this.

a gift from yellow witch. I love it!


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Review of A Freezing Rain  Open in new Window.
Review by Humming Bird Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello,
A beautiful free verse worth reading. This gave me a glimpse of the past, as it happened many years before i was born. I like the last 4 lines most, as I believe friendship should not be bound by anything like religion, skin color and other things. It's the mind that matters most. There are some people from other religions who believe that Muslims are terrorists and tend to avoid being friends. I'm a Muslim woman, and I consider all the members of this site members of my virtual family. Keep creating!

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Review of KEYBOARD  Open in new Window.
Review by Humming Bird Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Sonali,
http://thepoetsgarret.com/2013Challenge/form14.htm...
Check the link given above, I think this one's a blend of both acrostic and Kyrielle. I just know that the keys of the keyboard, the white black brother to brother as you describe, have the ability to soothe one's soul. I just played my keyboard this morning, so I thought I'd read a poem about one. Lovely rythm, keep creating!

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Review by Humming Bird Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello,
I love the way you've written this one. It'll give children a new way of looking at their elderly parents. I can't imagine what this elderly lady must be going through. The simplicity of this story would help many readers relate to it. I would love to know what happened to the characters next. Keep creating!

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Review of Police Lines  Open in new Window.
Review by Humming Bird Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
hey there,
I just came flying to your port, and stopped to rest on this. Yes, sometimes certain "do not cross" lines have to be crossed, maybe to know about the other side of the coin. I like the last part most, and I wonder how it will sound when sung. The lyrics are definitely great!

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Review of Coloring Time  Open in new Window.
Review by Humming Bird Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello,
Happy WDC Anniversary. At first I landed on something of yours that I couldn't quite understand, so I settled for this one instead. I love the way you show the nervousness of a kid on her first day of school. This will teach kids ways to adapt to new situations, and appreciate friends. Keep creating!

another gift from my secret pal


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Review by Humming Bird Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello there,
Welcome to WDC.
I like the way you wrote the story, it is short but precise. I think you could also add some description of this beautiful girl. You say she's beautiful, but readers won't be able to visualize her. Please adjust the font size of the last two lines, it's very small.
Keep creating

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Review of Garden Sores  Open in new Window.
Review by Humming Bird Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi there,
I really like the central character, she didn't think of herself. Usually people or angels with a combined power of brains and beauty would love to live for themselves only. I'd like to know more about the characters mentioned here.

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Review of ???  Open in new Window.
Review by Humming Bird Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello there,
this looks like the starting of something bigger, maybe it can be developed into a longer story. As I read, I kept asking myself: what will happen next? the question marks made me curious. you should try to fit it in one of the genres. Keep writing!


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