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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Definitely a slic of life piece. Welcome to WDC. A review raid

Overall impression of piece. The thngs we do as kids would pobably chill the heart of any reasonable parent and make them much less so

Grammatical and spelling errors Numbers need to be spelled out, Periods and commas are immediately after the sentence or claue--no spaces. Block formatting means there isa lin in between each argraph. Much easier to read on the screen

What I liked?*Smile* I get the enthusiasm of youth. It didn't have to be founded on reality. I like the look ahead. Nothing appens in a vacumn. I fet I was there with you.

What I disliked*Idea* Mainly grammar flaws as above.

How the piece made me feel> I think we al have some stories tell. Thanks for this one.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on random review. A raid review

Overall impression of piece Why do we do what wdo? What is our response to heroism?

Grammatical and spelling errors: None seen.. o errors.

What I liked?*Smile* What a great picture. I sense it probably came before the poem

What I disliked*Idea* How do youreresent the Lord of all creation? It is a question as old as time The frmat and the picture doesn't give the relationship of Jesus being alive.

How the piece made me feel Jesus is like a statue in this one. Probably because He is. Your rhymes kind of give this some continuity and make it like a song.

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Review of Filestron  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of the shameless plug page. I love essays and write a number of them

Overall impression of piece> I am unaware of the origins of this. I definitely understand the history of the time

Grammatical and spelling errors Filestron, the sorcerer, is an apositive. It needs commas. Filestron

What I liked?*Smile* Who doesn' like a hero? Many of the biblical things have a hard time being traced exactly. This is a pretty graphic description of what happened. I coul see it and feel it.

What I disliked*Idea* I would develope God King a little more. I need a little ore where this came from and why tcame to us,

How the piece made me feel I think there is plety of madness in the world. It doesn't look lik hewon at all.

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Review of Sisceal  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece: This is pretty cool. I suspect most of us are at least a bit Irish

Grammatical and spelling errors No errors seen

What I liked?*Smile* Irish syntax seems about right. Dialects are good and believable. This is very graphic. I do believe that people can swirl like leaves. Names seem to work

What I disliked*Idea* You have a different reality with all kinds of weird names. Perhaps footnotes would be in order.. As this is a preference than anything hardline, it works either way

How the piece made me feel We do give a lot of evidence what we are like by how we move. Moving like another helps build rapporte

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Review of Firefly  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This cane up on a random review

Overall impression of piece: There is magic here. I remember seeing these in our home in Nebraska. My story, The Prince has them figuring prominently

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* About and shout rhyme kind of gives cause and effect.I like that your rhyme pattern varies

What I disliked*Idea* Small insect seems to go beyond child perceptions and adds little magic. Winged spectacle. Purveyor of summer?

How the piece made me feel I think we all miss being a child. I think they had the most fun. Now we train them on video games

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I came accrossed this and was interested. I did live through these times

Overall impression of pieceL Why not a false interview. It kind of works for me

Grammatical and spelling errors: NO appreciable errors

What I liked?*Smile* You asked some relevant questions in this review. I found it entertaining. I guess this never bothered me.

What I disliked*Idea* I am kind of missing why this is important and why you wrote about this. If you look at the original tapes, it would have been amzing that we got anything about this write/

How the piece made me feel I have a history section on my port. I love the story of wrong way Corrigan. They really don't have anyway of knowing what really happened

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This was part of the spiritual newsletter.

Overall impression of piece: There is obviously a lot of truth in this. Most great and perfect truths are spoke to our inner person. Otherwise, we don't really hear them

Grammatical and spelling errors" Seems intact. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* This is pretty believable and I believe, heartfelt. It is the God I know too.

What I disliked*Idea*
There isn't a lot new here. Fast paced life is almost a cliche. Kind of coming from a we perspective kind of makes this impersonal. I would be better. but you continue to race about is really part of the sentence before

How the piece made me feel Proabably should footnote his work, if available.

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I like essays. I write them and review many of them

Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors Dashes are two hyphens together--then the parathetical thought. A tiny greek girl really isn't parenthetical. I would just use a comma

What I liked?*Smile* I believe this to be honest and forthright. The language of interaction is strong. I am not sure how to piece the events together.

What I disliked*Idea* You go in with a seizure and it looks like you had a heart blockage. This doesn't make sense to me, I need some filling in from your hospital room to visiting other

How the piece made me feel You were encorporated into another family group. That is incredible. Most folks aren't like that.

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Review of Stuck  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This was interesting so I bookmarked it

Overall impression of piece: Everyone has a thing about being a cog in the machine

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Crushing and stretching are really quite visceral. Hopefully, that doesn't happen to me before noon. Heart pumping and lungs are all quite visceral

What I disliked*Idea* The purpose of this is... I am not sure if just being crushed does anything for me as a reader. Being caught in the cogs of the machine isn't too new

How the piece made me feel I feel we need to feel we can make some sense out of things. Noone really gets off on helplessness

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Review of FROZEN FLAME  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I was looking at another piece (on winter) and saw this portion of your port. It seems like a good idea and deserving of a review

Overall impression of piece Cool piece. Elderly are people too.

Grammatical and spelling errors Maybe a comma after youth and a period after prime

What I liked?*Smile* This is personal and sensual. These feelings don't go away. A frozen flame is quie an image. I get that.

What I disliked*Idea* I had to look at quell. There is an element of overpowering to submission. It is kind of an old word. Burst upon may be better.

How the piece made me feel I get this. I am within a decade of you, but I am sure my fire has not gone out

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of a newbie newsletter

Overall impression of piece: This is quite good. I have never had a parade follow me home either

Grammatical and spelling errors None seen. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* We do live our life in pieces. It can see this and feel it too. Who doesn't want more? It is part of the human condition

What I disliked*Idea* Sparkling momments and still scared of the dark seem a little bit at counter purposes

How the piece made me feel: There is a mystery to life. We are all waiting for the big revea. Speaking of reveal, be sure and fill out your bio. It really helps us as reviewers.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I like essays. I understand your background

Overall impression of piece: Essays and philosophy are generally pretty stuffy--not this one.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Two and twenty need to be spelled out. Semicolon followed by an and is kind of redundant. After the semicolon should be a complete sentence.. After twenty, you need a comma. It is a clause modifying two or twenty. A colon after a question mark is not warranted.

What I liked?*Smile* I think about these things all the time. If we are truly living, it is imperative to think on these things. Do not go quietly into that goodnight. This is personal and I believe, quite honest.

What I disliked*Idea* No problems with the ideas themself or the tone.

How the piece made me feel You have hit a very old topic in a new and exciting way

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece: It is always a pleasure to review your work

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* You wonder where these things get started.. I know what I am to write about before I write it. The enchantress, in this case is subtle with rhythm and rhyme that seem to mesh together and are not strained. I love the reference to triolet. We often need help

What I disliked*Idea* Is it dark enchantress or shadowy? I would hate to have to see Elvira. Maybe just a shade of meaning here.

How the piece made me feel I identified with my own writing and felt your craft in the words and rhythms

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was in nonfiction. I tend to write in some of these areas.

Overall impression of piece: This is pretty cool writing

Grammatical and spelling errors After a semicolon, you generally link another complete sentence to it. You continuation of the first paragraph construction is missing a verb. Perhaps a dash would be better. ... generally means words are left out. I am not sure I see that. Dashes are two hyphens together with no spaces--just the parenthetical thought

What I liked?*Smile* I was a hospital corpsman in the Nanvy and we too had wild and wacky stories. This does bring back some of my own memmories. Very evocative and good writing

What I disliked*Idea*: I've always thought I made a positive influence isn't really tied into anything else. It is kind of part of a mommoir where the rest really doesn't appear like that.

How the piece made me feel I liked this. It brought back memmories

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece There is magic on cycles--even our own cycles. Oak trees definitely have a history longer than ours

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* The strongest image is purple flags waving in the wind. Lovaed your explanation at the end. You shouldn't have to explain free verse, but I know how folks are.

What I disliked*Idea*: I love science. I was kind of raised that way. I think there is a poetic side that can come out more. How does an oak know and what does it know?

How the piece made me feel What would an oak feel as it comes out of a winter slumber? We need to feel it, not just know it.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I was looking through essays. I write a lot of them

Overall impression of piece: I love the attempt at what you were trying to do here

Grammatical and spelling errors: After the indian names there should be a comma before and after the indians. It is an appositive. Twelve needs to be spelled out.

What I liked?*Smile* All these things you are talking about as corrupting influences are right on. They have a lot of modern equivalents

What I disliked*Idea* Tends to be a little bit preachy. I am of the same mind as you so I am not offended. I have been married for 45 years. You kind of go from Matt's voice to a preachy narrator almost theologian. Could some of this be handled with footnotes or better yet, type out the whole verse in the footnote.. (People don't read references.) It would be better to have Matt argue with himself and draw his own conclusions. His internal dialogue is not as important as other folks who aren't there.

How the piece made me feel Don't fail to put something in your bio block. It helps us as reviewers. Is this an ethical choice or a spiritual one? I would think spiritual. It is a pleasure to review something as meaningful as this

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Review of Nature's Gifts  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Bookmarked this as interesting.

Overall impression of piece: We are getting a bird's eye view of nature

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors.

What I liked?*Smile* Interesting rhyme that is not really strained to make it work

What I disliked*Idea* Nature's beauty is both enigmatic and unclear. Both radiate love. Interesting. I need more. I think we do learn more when things go wrong.

How the piece made me feel This is quizzical. Life generally is

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Review of Now Serving  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This interested me so I bookmarked it. I am a veteran

Overall impression of piece: I get this. I felt a lot the same way

Grammatical and spelling errors Dashed are generally two hyphens together and no spaces--just the parenthetical thought

What I liked?*Smile* No one talks you into what you already want to do. I like your character's proactive approach

What I disliked*Idea* Who was he talking to? Why is this important? I believe, in a lot of ways, he was talking to himself. Maybe this could use a little internal dialogue. Called to serve seems a little cliche. Maybe more specifics

How the piece made me feel Would we have a memmorial day if no one remembered? I wonder.

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Review of A Zebra Dreams  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This raised my interest as I am a aoo volunteer and we do have zebras.

Overall impression of piece Definitely a what if sort of piece.. Why is man a super being? Does he have a better agent?

Grammatical and spelling errors Not much in the way of punctuation to help us in the reading. Some would have the continuation of a sentence on another line start with lower case

What I liked?*Smile* Kind of theater-of-the absurb sort of stuff. Zebras do run quite fast. 35 miles per hour where the Kentucky derby winners only run 37. Some of those stalls do look pretty ritzy

What I disliked*Idea* This is what you would call anthropomorphizing a subject. I doubt if they ever wonder about being human--except maybe in nightmares.

How the piece made me feel It is listed as satire and I get that. I am not exactly sure what you are satarizing.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece i bookmarked this. We used to do a lot of outdoor stuff

Overall impression of piece: You do have an eye for this sort of thing.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Start quotes with a capital. Dashes are two hyphens together and no spaces--just the parenthetical thought

What I liked?*Smile* What is here is funny. The things that you say are true and valid.

What I disliked*Idea* Some of this could be played up a bit more, especially snake sitings. I know the paranoia involved. I guess what I feel is missing is a thing of "Why this piece?". One of my favorite outdoor humorist was Patrick McManus. There is a point behind the decrepid canoe. ""They shoot canoes don't they?" Give us something more we can identify with

How the piece made me feel Congratualations on your award!

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors. Moss is generally two ss's. I would think foliage grows

What I liked?*Smile* I like the rhymes in this. They don't seem forced and give an interesting rhyme. It also shows continuity of your description

What I disliked*Idea* Your instructions don't make any sense to a reader.

How the piece made me feel There is a continuity of nature. The poem seems to flow with all the rhymes and rhythm

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Review of The Anaconda  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This is pretty cool. I bookmarked it to come back to. I deal with snakes at our aquarium

Overall impression of piece: I know about the fears of our customers. This is pretty right on

Grammatical and spelling errors: I believe Morro has two r's. Maybe frozen in terror attached to the sentence in front of it with a dash

What I liked?*Smile* We all look at things the way we think that they are supposed to be. I doubt if there are thirty foot snakes in California. It is an interesting voice in this one. It seems pretty objective and it seems to work

What I disliked*Idea* Commented on

How the piece made me feel I have seen most of this. Most do not easily get over this fear.

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Review of Crew Welcome  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece: This is a great idea.

Grammatical and spelling errors Can I buy a period or starting the sentence with a capital? Thank you is two words. Join is mispelled.

What I liked?*Smile* I like the idea. This is sorely lacking.

What I disliked*Idea* Grammar and nicities like punctuation are really important. They are a part of your message.

How the piece made me feel With all the errors, it is hard to take this seriously.

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Review of I am Human  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece: Very evocative piece

Grammatical and spelling errors: I in last stanza needs a capital

What I liked?*Smile* We are so very different. On the outside, it is obvious and if we look at individuals at this site, it is really apparent.

What I disliked*Idea*: I have to accept you basic tenents, even if I don't agree. This is about writing, not philosophy. Is there something else, or will we be in a constant state of war?

How the piece made me feel You do have a world of endless war which, much as I hate to admit it, is pretty much what we have. We are in a more and more global world. Can we change? Should we

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of our spring review raid.

Overall impression of piece: Nature does have cosmic significance

Grammatical and spelling errors> Maybe a comma after blessing in the first line. Second two lines are really a clause and doesn't appear to read right

What I liked?*Smile* It is very hard to see a bigger view of what everyone sees as mundance. You have done a credible job.

What I disliked*Idea* Heaven is always full of sevens by defininition. It is a perfect number.. Maybe a bit of a strained rhyme? I am not sure if I see a church ship.

How the piece made me feel Pretty good attempt at a difficult piece.

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