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Review of A recent cab ride  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece I found this in essays

Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors You have run-on sentences like I no nobody cares about this. Joining whole sentences with a comma is generally wrong. You need an and or a semicolon

What I liked?*Smile* Yes, this is honest. It is obvious that you care about this

What I disliked*Idea* You go from a scene with a taxi driver to waxing poetically to your self. It is a bit hard to follow. It would be all right to feel a response. Just one way to marrate this

How the piece made me feel You have to be able to process this so that others can understand it. You are far from the only one.

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Peace and beauty in freefall
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I do like essays and the thinking invoved.

Overall impression of piece: This is your take on a very complex world.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Imageryof run together. At the present time, MJ-12 not defined

What I liked?*Smile* There is an atitude here, that is pretty understandable. I doublt if we are told the truth

What I disliked*Idea* I need more specifics on how these things work. You have a lot of pretty high powered science here. One thing fully told about would be the best argument. It is not enough to say oceans are rising. We need some data.

How the piece made me feel You do have to show you are credible. Just saying it is not enough. Credentials and examples would help a lot.

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Review of Prisoner Of Love  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I was thumbing through essays and found this one

Overall impression of piece: Not really an essay, unless you have a very vivid and imaginative family tree. You do some interesting scene setting

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors seen

What I liked?*Smile* Interesting women's liberation angle. This is obviously not a poor defenseless female

What I disliked*Idea* Excelsior is the name of the dragon and not a suitor. Kind of confusing, uless this is kind of kinky. Maybe excelsior like roasting company?

How the piece made me feel

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Review of Speak  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This was advertised in the Newbies side column. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece" This is quite good and got me to thinking about my own creative process. It is not simple

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* There are some really interesting rhymes in this. They seem to be not forced and add to the rhythm of the piece

What I disliked*Idea* There is a visceral flow that seems to flow first before the hearing in our head.

How the piece made me feel Do we think our words or do we feel them? Which comes first. I would guess the feeling part is first. If it doesn't feel right, the editor in our brains probably deletes them

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review.

Overall impression of piece: This is clever. No one would have come up with a dragon in the tomato garden, Can you spray for that?

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Men do try and placate their wives or significant others. Obviously, we are trying to stay away from the outright identification of the animals

What I disliked*Idea* Bronze dragons with scat seem a little over the top

How the piece made me feel this is amusing and pretty lifelike, for a fantasy

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Review of Oh My god~!!!!  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (1.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was in a newbies newsletter.

Overall impression of piece: You can give us more

Grammatical and spelling errors Ok, what there is of it

What I liked?*Smile* Obviously this is a common plight today. I don't give computer games to my grandkids. Kind of like giving them crack cocaine

What I disliked*Idea* Introduction really doesn't fit the rest of the piece. Not only are you on x games, you wrote about it. It seems like a journey into senselessness

How the piece made me feel If you are going to delve, delve.

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Review of April  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was in essays

Overall impression of piece Obviously a word limited contest. It does sound like our April in Idaho

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok

What I liked?*Smile* Seems germaine to the month and to the point

What I disliked*Idea*This seems kind of pointless. I have no idea what you are trying to convey. It is kind of wordy, The first two sentences could be combined. We don't want to know about buns. We want to know how it makes you feel

How the piece made me feel This is kind of like prose. You need to be a bit more poetic about this

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review.

Overall impression of piece: This does give some credence to beauty is only skin deep. We often only see that much

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* This is a really cool piece. It made me look at myself. I am half Italian and half scandanavian. Only the Italian part comes out externally. I don't look scandanavian at all. Personality is quite different although I can see both sides there. We are definitely, marked people

What I disliked*Idea* Can't think of anything.

How the piece made me feel they really do tattoe are souls too. I am the peace maker while my Mom was the artit and creator. Dad had none of that. We definitely are a tapestry

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Review of Daddy  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: A teen angst type of piece.

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. I could use a little punctuation to help me read it.

What I liked?*Smile* The emotions are honest and genuine. I believe what you say

What I disliked*Idea* There is a lot of telling in this. Help us get there without just telling us. "There are lies in his sighs?

How the piece made me feel This almost a right of passage poem. I think we all go through this. I definitely am not my Dad and he died two decades ago.. That isn't bad or tragic. It just is.

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Review of Fear  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I like essays. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece This is very easy to identify with

Grammatical and spelling errors Probably many of us climb.

What I liked?*Smile* This is short and to the point. I tend to write that way myself. You have identified with your readers. You are not as different as you think

What I disliked*Idea* Fear is a pretty graphic thing. Especially, with snakes, you can even go a little over the top. I work in an aquarium with snakes and some folks will run out of the building

How the piece made me feel You have a fear of being rejected. You aren't a creative person unless you have that. The Power of Positive Thinking was rejected 40 times and the author was ready to throw it away. Rejection is really kind of the norm. Look at how you have been reviewed so far. I would say, that they seem pretty positive.

Do tell us about yourself. It really helps us as reviewers.

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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece I like nonfiction so I thought I would give this a try

Overall impression of piece: Definitely a story for our times

Grammatical and spelling errors People-power with a hyphen

What I liked?*Smile* I do remember Marcos. Suharto not so much. You have a lot that can be built on. There are terrible injustices here.

What I disliked*Idea* You have a lot of accusations in here, without a lot of particulars. EDSA is never defined. You do kind of leave yourself out of this. I have a feeling that you know more than you are telling. We need particulars to make this work. You talk of palatial homes. If you are in the Phillipines, I remember cardboard box homes. You need to make this personal so that we can really know what is going on and why it is important

How the piece made me feel Make us believe you. It is not enough to say that things are so. You need to show those injustices graphically

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is a newbie review. With the pen name, I had to check it out.

Overall impression of piece Poetry often expresses emotions and images to help us have similar undertones

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* I got this from my early married days some 44 years ago. I felt a lot of the same things and remember them vividly

What I disliked*Idea*: Can't think of anything

How the piece made me feel You think the change is instantanease? It is life long. Becoming one flesh is much more than physical. Put down something about yourself. It helps us as reviewers.

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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece I like articles and nonfiction

Overall impression of piece It is short and concise.

Grammatical and spelling errorsYou have long breaks in your text, for no apparent reason. Initials are never definted. They are kind of Greek to us in the United States. It's time needs an appostrophe

What I liked?*Smile* A lot of these demerits are pretty world wide. Like the use of inculcating

What I disliked*Idea* starting sentences with but is usually not helpful. It is a filler.

How the piece made me feel Apparently you are from India. Having this on your port would helps us to be reviewers. Bring out your point of view more. You probably know more about this than you are telling

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Review of Menace  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this in articles. I do like non-fiction stuff

Overall impression of piece Definitely a piece to get the old brain cells going.

Grammatical and spelling errors Block formating means that you leave a line in between paragraphs. on the screen, it is hard to read. Got a quote, start with a capital.

What I liked?*Smile* You have listed some--not all --of the major threats against humanity You have hit tthe ones in the news for sure

What I disliked*Idea*I got the feeling from reading this that the problems are so radical that we couldn't fix it. I read the litany of potential destruction. Is this beyond us? It may be withut a change in man. I have read the end of the Bible. It too is not pretty.

How the piece made me feel What about poverty and profiteering over the poorer countries? Put something about yourself on your port. It does halp us a reviewers

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review (along with major items in this piece.)

Overall impression of piece: This is classic

Grammatical and spelling errors No errors

What I liked?*Smile* The adult twist is totally unexpected. The format is a childrens fable. This is appropiately rated and pretty graphically told

What I disliked*Idea*: Should mother duck be shocked with the turn of events? Definitely a bridge over troubled waters.

How the piece made me feel

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Review of Carry you Home  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This is a random review

Overall impression of piece: You have fulfilled the parameters of the piece. They are easy to see.

Grammatical and spelling errors Kind of lacking punctuation except for the final line with a period. These things guide us on how to read your work

What I liked?*Smile* We do go a million miles to get what we already have. Maybe it is too much network tv. You have a fair amount of rhyme to make this pretty readable

What I disliked*Idea* Mostly the sentence punctuation.

How the piece made me feel I have worked with troubled relationships. Most of the time, they need to work on what was wrong with the first one. The trouble is often, ourself

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Review of Junk Yard  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Random review

Overall impression of piece: I guess things are good if twelve words produce tons more in an eval

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* I like you put the parameters of your poem down. Used your highlighted words well. Basic parameters of the piece are satisfied.

What I disliked*Idea* I am not sure if memmories are dusty and rusty. Many of our thoughts should not be salvaged, but I don't think that this is what you mean

How the piece made me feel Maybe we live in fields of undriven or undrivable dreams?

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I like essays and I love history. I saw this in essays and decided to check out your site.

Overall impression of piece: This is defnitely written in the academic style. You are interested in things that historians are often most interested in

Grammatical and spelling errors No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Well footnoted and analytic paper.

What I disliked*Idea* I have read on this and watched a lot of Great Courses on computer.., I have been to College (decades ago) and remember. Format is very consistent with what is expected, but it misses a lot of punch in telling why all this stuff was important. You actually have more about Thucydes than the actual was itself

How the piece made me feel Interesting. I am pretty sure you did well on this. From a general population,it didn't really fire the imagination

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece: This is a unique presentation

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* It does certainly tell the story. It is all too common, I am afraid. Interesting rhymes tht tell the story in and of themselves. Food is ready but gaze is steady. A fixed gaze is often coma. I like the variations of rhyme. Rhymes , in and of themselves tell a story

What I disliked*Idea* Can't think of anything.

How the piece made me feel We all do have ballads. We think we are not heroic, but we all do have stories

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Review of My sorrow  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece: I wrote like this once.

Grammatical and spelling errors Kind of scant on punctuation. We need more clues on how you would read this

What I liked?*Smile* Varying rhyme schemes seem to work well. I like the positive twist on the end

What I disliked*Idea* Poetry is about conveying feelings in tones and with images that help the reader see and feel like you do. There are a lot of I's here.

How the piece made me feel Be sure and tell us something about yourself. It helps us as reviewers to know who we are talking to,

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Review of Pilate's Lament  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I was looking through Christian things and found your entries.. I was surprised on how old some of the pieces were

Overall impression of piece This is a classic piece with pretty classic artwork

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors.

What I liked?*Smile* This is a pretty well structured piece. Rhymming is well done and not forced

What I disliked*Idea* This gives a classic cogent story about everything that most folks think they know. You go from descriptive with He stanzas to I (personal)

How the piece made me feel What happened to Pilate? No one knows. They think he ended up in Gaul. Can we identify his motivations? I doubt it. We know as procurator that he had a pretty tentative position. He had no real troops of his own. Caiphas tomb has crucifiction nails in it.

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Review of V-Day  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (2.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review.

Overall impression of piece: I do get what you are saying. It is a ripoff

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. Understandable

What I liked?*Smile* There is no doubt about how you feel

What I disliked*Idea* I am not sure if outright anger really changes anything. I take civil disobedience as a sacred right in America, but Valentine's day felonies may be going too far and be quite a bit over the top. This is just kind of a manifesto for change, but till people feel like it, that won't happen. Use more feeling words and less inflammatory ones.

How the piece made me feel I buy most of my cards from the dollar store. What is remembered is what the writer puts into them

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This is a requested review

Overall impression of piece. This interested me. I do have a book on the back burner. I am intensely interested in non-fiction

Grammatical and spelling errors Block formatting always has a line in between paragraphs. It is pretty hard to read on screen. Having the gumption is a sentence fragment. So is which leads to

What I liked?*Smile* This is an ambious undertaking. You have opened up whole new worlds that I was pretty unaware of

What I disliked*Idea* This is heavily into numbers, with little interpretation. I realize you are probably trying to remain objective. I think some more direct advice as to what may be the way to go may be in order. Watch your jargon. Terms like 80 legs are way over the top for me. This is pretty comprehensive and is like a course, but it is missing all of the references.

How the piece made me feel Wow! This is a lot more complicated than I would have guessed. I love books. I have 100's at home and continue to keep weeding out all but the very best.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Taking one of your pieces on a random review

Overall impression of piece Kind of stylized in the presentation. Definitely does have a message.

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Rhyme scheme is interesting and appears to vary. Looks like you used your necessary words well. I kind of like the plural possessive for years'

What I disliked*Idea* Passing shadow and gone in a blink of an eye are approaching cliche/ I would think something else.

How the piece made me feel We know about failed resolutions. We are not very good at this

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Review of Old man thoughts  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was under the articles needing a review

Overall impression of piece How do we learn? First and foremeost, we have to say something

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads reasonably well

What I liked?*Smile* Not many can argue with age-old wisdom. It is amazing how much of this stuff isn't known.

What I disliked*Idea* Some of your sentences that continue the next line have a capital, and some do not. Be consistent. A lot of these are platitudes that aren't that original. I suspect you are going for a more related and close audience.
Share yourself, not just the rules

How the piece made me feel It kind of depends on your audience here. I suspect it needs to be more personal

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