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Review of The Diary  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece Pretty well put together poem

Grammatical and spelling errors Some punctuation would probably help. I would have to guess on how to read it. All caps at the beginning of lines also make it difficult

What I liked?*Smile* There is a lot of interesting rhyme and rhythm in this one. I think we do write on others.

What I disliked*Idea* Covered in grammar

How the piece made me feel Tell us a bit about yourself on your port. It helps to know who we are communicating with. It is nice where you havepeople to write on

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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece This seems pretty honest.

Grammatical and spelling errors. I am pretty sure you have the wrong type of sole. This one has to do with shoes

What I liked?*Smile* It seems like you have fist hand knowlege of this> I could feel a lot of the things in this.

What I disliked*Idea* Punches on the wall, her tiny body is a little hard to get a handle on

How the piece made me feel> do we make a difference? That seems to be the real question here. On a planet scale, we are cosmic dust.. Even people are ashes to ashes and dust to dust. We make a difference when we help someone, not necessaily when we are noticed. I think Thoreau said we live lifes of quiet desperation

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Review of Twilight  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of a random review

Overall impression of piece: We have all kinds of markers in our lives. Why not twilight?

Grammatical and spelling errors

What I liked?*Smile* Triple line rhyme works pretty well. We look at this everyday and most of the time, miss it.

What I disliked*Idea* Doesn't really go too deep. It is lovely in its simplicity. I think there is more here.

How the piece made me feel We are highlighted by so many things. Nature does supply the beauty.
talk about value added. Often, actresses eyes are highlighted in their intense passionate scenes

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Rated: E | (2.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece Interesting.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Where to begin. You have a lot of sentences that aren't sentences. The chief sentence is a run-on sentence. Nick name of err I have no idea. Hundreth case spelled out. Quotes start with a capital

What I liked?*Smile* I could buy your character. He seems honest and to the point. It does seem like another day at the office.

What I disliked*Idea* You are referring to episodes that aren't really cogent. It is a short piece and needs to stand on its own

How the piece made me feelErrors make it hard to read.

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece Thi came up on a random reviw

Overall impression of piece This issimple and direct. You had a clear vision

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* I d like faith as a gravity well. Most physycists would call it a dark hole, but it would not fit your imagery. They say these gravity wells are the things that form are universe. You have captured the faith thing with something new, different and exciting.

What I disliked*Idea*

How the piece made me feel You are right. You can't be reborn without a God''s love. W do have way too much ego

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Review of Suzanne  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review.

Overall impression of piece I am a bi fan of Leonard Cohen and this song. I used to know ll the words and would sing it

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads wel. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* You obviously could see this and I can too. She would have been fully present. If you have such an engaging person, I am not sure if you worry about oxygen

What I disliked*Idea* Can't think of anything

How the piece made me feel: You can hear the boats go by you an spend the day forever.

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Review of The Idea  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This cap on a random review

Overall impression of piece This is very wel done. I can see the historical setting prety well

Grammatical and spelling errors: No overt errors.

What I liked?*Smile* I am sure things like this probably did hapen Genius always dos have distractors. The back andfoth between two young people is pretty believable

What I disliked*Idea*> Never mention it is South Dakota, in the summer.. If you got the background for this somewhere, you migh footnote it

How the piece made me feel I wondered if they ever thought about jut how big was his nose.

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Review of TARA, TARA, TARA  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This is a random review. Your number came up again

Overall impression of piece: I like this

Grammatical and spelling errors sighed rolf as he lay under he bushes is kind of tied the sentence before. Eight should be spelledout.

What I liked?*Smile* This is amusing and I canbuy it asvalid. Animals are often very protective.

What I disliked*Idea* I suspect a word limit type of thing for a contest. We got from Tara the cat without much in the way of connection. What about the couple?

How the piece made me feel Guardian angel cat. Sure, why not?

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of the prose selection. I often use prose myself.

Overall impression of piece: This does bring back some memmories. Simon And Garfunckle would write, "We're just a habit, like sacharyn.

Grammatical and spelling errors. I am not sure why the fist It's is capitalized. Dashes are two hyphens and no spaces--just the parethetical thought. Otherwise, reads prett well

What I liked?*Smile* I like he phrase the destruction is all that is left. It like the second IT as capitalized. This is honest and I beleved it.

What I disliked*Idea* We used to love each other is close to cliche. You could show the emotion better

How the piece made me feel We are meant to be together. That is who we are. There is pain when we are not.

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Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of the prose pieces. I often use prose.

Overall impression of piece: This might be part of the univers struggle

Grammatical and spelling errors: The feeling of emptiness sentence is a run-on sentence. You could put a period after addicting.

What I liked?*Smile* This is a universal type thought. It may very well be, the human cnition

What I disliked*Idea* I like short, but it needs a lot more. Help us to know exactly how you feel. Give us detail as to the condition and perhaps were you can go with this.

How the piece made me feel You are exploring the human condition, but you state a lot of facts and very few feelings. I see by your picture, you are young. It probably is a lifelong struggle.

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Review of Hour Glass  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was in the spiriual newsletter

Overall impression of piece: This is supposed to be mysterious and sensible, all at the same time

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* We think we know things as defined by our own petty lifestyle. Nothing can be farther from the truth. Life takes time

What I disliked*Idea* Can't think of anyting

How the piece made me feel We define who we are partially by what we have been over millenia. Some of the ancint animal of man still lives in us. Our society changesus a lot faster than biology

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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece: Why not? A talking raven. I can go with that

Grammatical and spelling errors Last line should have deceased in it, I think.

What I liked?*Smile* This haracter kind of reverberates accrosssed are collective conciousness. You have made it more personal and immediate

What I disliked*Idea* Your A with a carrot need some explanation. It is not intuitive to me. I don't know who you met. It needs little more there. Make it personal and make it spooky. Maybe we need to know more of the folklore of the Raven

How the piece made me feel Edgar would have been somewhat proud.

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Review of The Letter  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review.

Overall impression of piece> This is very intriguing

Grammatical and spelling errors No apparent errors.

What I liked?*Smile* You have a premise that seems deemed to work out in some way. You have intrigue and a premise that seems pretty believable.

What I disliked*Idea*: It seems a bit rushed. Perhaps there was a contest invoved.. The story is adequately told, but could be embellished and worked upon. No photos in 1847, to speak of. Maybe a daugerotype. This could be tied together a bit better. Even making the Bible an antique would help. You could even do a book with this theme

How the piece made me feel This was one of the more entertaining pieces I have read.

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Review of summer magic  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review. I don't believe I have had the pleasure of seeing your work. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: There is magic in those summer days. We know it in various ways

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile*: This is characterized by evocative imagery. I can see it, hear it, feel it and even smell it. Then there is the magical elelemtn which you also allude to. The rhymes do help. Bards often wrote in rhyme, especially of their noble times

What I disliked*Idea* Can't think of anything. Maybe missing a rhyme in the last stanza. A rhyming couplet might have given it some finality

How the piece made me feel Do we lose magic as we get older. I am now in the desert and it can get to be 110. It is hard to be poetic about that. Maybe, we just see differently

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Review of Mermaid  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was in the need review folder. I review things I like.

Overall impression of piece: A pretty evocative piece. I certainly got the emotional, biographical and personal piece. Many could identify with this

Grammatical and spelling errors Compatible with prose style

What I liked?*Smile* I always have kind of tended towards the prose side. This captured my imagination like the Hulu series, Sirens. You are obviously speaking about something more metaphysical

What I disliked*Idea* The distinction between the present reality and the girl is a little hard to follow. Maybe to describe one first and then, the other, would be better.

How the piece made me feel I must be a merman although I have always been around mountains. Go figure. How do we reconcile those child-like ambitions with today's reality. I was going to be the world's greatest baseball player. We are all in the passage of becoming. I am becoming things I never dreamed of

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Review of Ocean Boy  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This was in the review requested folder.

Overall impression of piece: This is quite good. I could see it in my memmories, although it has been a while since I was a boy

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* The best poems are kind of like. "Being there." I could see it and feel it. I marvelled at the vastness of the ocean. I felt pretty small

What I disliked*Idea* Is there a process here. I don't think it is just, wanton destruction. It is building to build again. Young boys are eternal optimists, and they learn

How the piece made me feel I needed something to put this in focus; an answer to the question of "Why this poem?" It is quite good.

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Review of Dear Me  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review. You have good thoughts and this is always a great exercise.

Overall impression of piece: This is short an to the point. I think you have had a clear look at things

Grammatical and spelling errors: None seen

What I liked?*Smile* I do like you itemizing things. I personally have worked on work schedules. I love the stop whinning and start writing paragraph

What I disliked*Idea* Your word count seems out of place in a letter to me. Either put it is God''s hands is a little unclear. Maybe we are supposed to learn from our mistakes?

How the piece made me feel I think writing is a gift and it is something that writers are put on earth to do

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Review of Praise the sun  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece Interesting descriptions. We need more than adjectives. Give me more.

Grammatical and spelling errors None apparent

What I liked?*Smile* The sun is what empowers us and gives us life. People are described as "Stardust," because that is where our origins are in the secular world. You have a pretty big view of the world

What I disliked*Idea* I don't know what a sun reciprocation would be. I am not sure what a sun bathed in nauseousness would mean. Suns don't seem to have a vision bathed in blackness. They seem pretty bright to me

How the piece made me feel Worthless or inconsquential seems to be the real question. Do we have power to change our universes. I would say yes. Make sure you fill out your port. It helps us as reviewers.

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Review of Fog of Ignorance  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this in essays. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: This is a very thoughful piece.

Grammatical and spelling errors Quotes start with a capital. Block formatting requires a line in between paragraphs. It is hard to read on the screen. Semicolons generally are used to join two complete sentences. You have done something else. Has always been iinside of us is missing a noun. We need that clarity

What I liked?*Smile*. We do kind of think we live in an era of knowledge, but I am not sure we do. We don't seem to get beyond our world problems

What I disliked*Idea* Never really said why there is clarity in challenging mistaken beliefs. An example would really help. Most faiths don't hold children responsible for transgressions under an age of reason

How the piece made me feel You have an interesting outlook. we don't have to agree. I do see where you are coming from

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece: Definitely a story here. It is quite orderly and easy to follow

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads very well. No errors.

What I liked?*Smile* You have drama here. I think we all have fears like this. We say we don't, but most of us don't want to be there when it happens

What I disliked*Idea* I am death. We don't know if that is a good thing or a bad thing. We do know not to be afraid, but is that a lie? Wish and dish is kind of a strained rhyme. It does rhyme, but seems a bit forced

How the piece made me feel Death is an agent of God. That seems intriguing although everything is subservient to Him. Death only has power that is given to it. Life is personal. I am not sure if death is.

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Review of Know Thy Self  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is from the newbie column on the right side. Readers do exist and some of us read a wide assortment of things

Overall impression of piece: This is unique. I can see how it comes from your background

Grammatical and spelling errors No errors. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* This definitely got my little brain cells going. I come from the realm of Spirit (Christian) and spirit and person are often hard to pick apart.

What I disliked*Idea* We are defined by the world we live in. That is intriguing, but I need more. Is there a spark that helps us light our way? I would guess, yes

How the piece made me feel We do kind of process by wqho we think we are. Sometimes that is a big lie. We tell ourselves some whoppers. Self worth, from your point of view seems tied up in how we perceive our worlds.

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Review of Back Back  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review.

Overall impression of piece: Picture on your port and the piece don't quite go together. I am not saying to lose the light saber.

Grammatical and spelling errors

What I liked?*Smile* Pretty serious piece for a four line piece. I can't say I disagree (but it wouldn't make any difference)

What I disliked*Idea* You do have basic truth here. Most never get there. How you get there is a little unclear. Must there always be raisins in the tapioca? I do believe that we have a certain amount that must be contributed.

How the piece made me feel Star wars called it the force. Love may be the ultimate force that drives us and keeps us real

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Rated: 13+ | (2.5)
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Why I chose this piece Randon review areticle

Overall impression of piece It is kind of a wolf's eye view of things

Grammatical and spelling errors: Missing lots of quote marks like the first sentence. Every said needs a quote. Beginnings of quotes like "Aww"need quotes

What I liked?*Smile* This is definitely an unique perspective with a lot of possibilities

What I disliked*Idea* Kevin and kenon are confusing. I suspect they are the same. There is a lot of telling going on, It is best if it kind of developes and is reacted to

How the piece made me feel

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this of interest and am reviewing it now.

Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors All capitals make this very hard to read. Block formatting has a line in between paragraphs.

What I liked?*Smile* Wisom is derived from life itself. There are a lot of educated fools. From the tone of this, it would seem that you have experience with this

What I disliked*Idea* This could use some examples of what you mean. Phd people often have a lot of knowledge but can't fix anything. Education does not make for a happy life. Dentists have a high suicide rate.

How the piece made me feelDefinitely tell us something of yourself on your port. It helps us as reviewers to review

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I love essays. I thought I would taqke up your challenge.

Overall impression of piece This is open and honest. I have lived many places. I grew up in Canada and snow was on the ground in May. Spring was days to weeks, at the most.

Grammatical and spelling errors __ after air might be not the best. Even a short sentence instead might be better. It is not really parenthetical

What I liked?*Smile* Every place on earth is different in the Spring. Desert seems to have a high degree of allergens. Desert grass actually becomes green, for a time Chamber of Commerce goes wild with pictures.

What I disliked*Idea* If Spring smells like life, we need as much sensory information to make that real to us. Dirty dirt in Oklahoma maybe doesn't advance your thesis much

How the piece made me feel I am not sure you would think differently, if raised in Oklahoma. Spring is a state of mind. It is a time to become alive--just like the world itself.

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