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#4307056

Review of Let's Put Back The Clock To Christmas

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi Ann, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your song, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This song describes how the lyricist feels about Christmas.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading about your thoughts on Christmas, expressing peace, love and never greed. The rhyme pattern in your song is consistent and the cadence and flow of words is smooth. Description in your song is expressive, eg through the eyes of a child. Nice metaphor, eg It's time to let the dove of peace fly free.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4307015

Review of Sweet #9

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi Fivesixer, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a day of glorious awakening and a new lease on life.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem. I am saddened by your bleak situation but I'm elated for the hope you've found to live in moderation, to recapture your soul and spirit. Congratulations. Your poem is Unrhymed verse. Description is expressive, eg It is now that I can take a deep breath, and catch my bearings and ready myself properly for what lies ahead.
Suggestion:
Stanza 2: awakened NOT awaken

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4306851

Review of Etchings of a Broken Heart

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi Mrs. B. Ray, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the loss of the poet's military husband.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your heartfelt poem although I was saddened and sympathize with your loss. Description in your poem is expressive, eg biting pain forever etched in her heart. You might think about these suggestions:
Suggestions:
day he would safely return NOT day he safely returned

Consider the punctuation in this verse.
She sat at her desk writing
while winter winds howled outside,
Would her letter ever reach him
in the faraway lands he served?

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4306843

Review of SURVIVAL

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi Shami, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your articles, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This article describes the writer's hope with Our Lord's help.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your article, your realization that Our Lord is always there for you and loves every hair on your head. The hope that you've found is magnificent. I agree! Congratulations!
Suggestions:
Par. 2: But it happened one time, NOT It happened one time...
Par. 4: Everything in the world is in it NOT The world is evil. Everything in it. You might want to think about the many phrases you are using as complete thoughts. One phrase occasionally is acceptable, but I think you have used too many phrases rather than sentences. Your whole first paragraph is phrases.
Par. 7: Tears ran down my face NOT tears run down my face. Please consider using past tense or present tense and not varying between tenses.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4306804

Review of ... tom-tom-tom ...

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Rated: E

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Hi Kare, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a blessed picture of the birth of the son of a couple.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem and found it enchanting, a combination of the beating of the baby's heart and the baby's middle name. Very cleverly written. Description is vivid, eg Warm, darkened place of translucent light and muffled sounds.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4306801

Review of Query Megan's Man

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Rated: E

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Hi Purple Princess, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your letters, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This query letter paints a picture that any publisher should sympathize with.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I fully enjoyed reading your query letter and found it evoked sympathy and was very cleverly written. Best wishes in your pursuit. For your consideration: Paragraph 2: affect NOT effect

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4306798

Review of The Plumber Geek

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Rated: E

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Hi Ben, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a plumber and a leak .

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your comical poem in the poetic style of "The Raven". Hilarious! The rhyme scheme of your poem is quite complicated and classic too. Rhythm is upbeat. What a great flow of words. The description of your poem is vivid, eg Pale, pathetic geek. Here are a couple of suggestions for your consideration.

Stanza 3: "Morning Ma'am," NOT "Morning Ma'am."
Stanza 3: "...I'll get on this," he just mutters. NOT "I'll get on this" he just mutters.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4306670

Review of WHAT YOU MEAN

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hi Brent, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the poet's friendship, love and bond with his beloved.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem of romance and felt it was quite inspirational. Your poem is Unrhymed verse. Poems don't usually have periods at the end of lines. More often you see commas at the end of stanza lines except at the end of the stanza or no punctuation at all. Stanza 3: Good simile, eg like porcelain. Description in your poem is vivid, eg the color in my days would have greyed. Stanza 3: complete NOT complete.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4306649

Review of "Teach Me Your Mood..."

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Rated: E

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Hi Jaya, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes unusual beauty.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem and the values to be learned from nature, the stars and the sky. Most incredible. Your poem is Unrhymed verse. Description in your poem is expressive, eg giving out twinkling rays of joy and light. Your lovely poem is full of description.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4306645

Review of Making Friends

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Rated: E

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Hi Schnujo, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes friendship from the perspective of two friends.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I found your partner poem fun to read, fun looking for friendship. Suggestions: You might want to think about this. Periods are not usually placed at the end of stanza lines except the last stanza line. Commas might be placed instead or no punctuation at all. The rhyme pattern in your poem is consistent. Your pacing is upbeat and spot on. The description in your poem is vivid, eg I think I'll go out in the fray.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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#4306641

Review of My favorite name

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Rated: E

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Hi Payal, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a name and the strength the poet has gained from it over time.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem and found it interesting that it is part of the strength you've gained over the years. A name is to be proud of! The description in your poem is vivid, eg It runs through the recesses of my ego and superego. Your poem is Unrhymed verse.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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#4306640

Review of Mused

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Rated: E

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Hi Pamela Sue, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the imagination or muse.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I really enjoyed reading your poem, as it has some lessons to learn about the muse. Rhyme is sprinkled through your free verse poem. Your description is expressive, eg You inspired me, fed off me, engulfed me. Suggestions: You have used the word me at the end of the line several times. You might want to use another word other than me to avoid redundancy.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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#4306606

Review of The Lonely Tower

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Rated: E

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H Ben, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem attempts to answer the question, Who Ives in the lonely tower?

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem and found your pacing quite excellent. The rhyme pattern of your poem is consistent and well done. The description in your poem is vivid, eg I chanced upon a shady glen, though far from any road it lay. No issue, as this poem is very well written.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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#4306436

Review of Guardian Angels

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Rated: E

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Hi Harry, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the.public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a very unusual picture of a fledgling bluejay and his guardian ange.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I thoroughly enjoyed your story poem. It is highly descriptive and expressive throughout.. I especially like how you continued one stanza into another stanza with a transition thought. Beautiful! The rhyme pattern in your poem is consistent. Your pacing is excellent and spot on. Thank you, Guardian Angel!

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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#4306433

Review of Our Summer

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Rated: E

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Hi Heleny, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, , which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a very brief summer in January in Wellington.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem and found the seagulls' laughter humorous. I chuckled when the seagulls laughed because they knew your summer in January had melted away. Description in your poem is vivid, eg salty caramel readily blended with the briny breeze. Metaphor is effective, eg seagulls swirled and stole the discarded dream. Good job with consonance, eg seagulls swirled and stole. Your poem is Unrhymed verse. There is a nice flow of words in your poem.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4306297

Review of Frozen

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Rated: E

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Hi M.J. DeLuna, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of one who is frozen, lacking the ability to respond because being hurt so much.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem although it saddened me to think of the hurt you must be suffering. Effective metaphor, eg black smoke which turns into thick impenetrable walls. Your poem is sprinkled with rhyme. I think your meant the title of your poem to be "Frozen" NOT "Fozen". Description is vivid, eg Our love has become a jar of bile.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4306147

Review of The Forever Gift

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Rated: E

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Hi HuntersMoon, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This love poem paints a picture of the poet's proposal to his beloved.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem about your beloved. The rhyme of your Balazzi stanza poem is fascinating. I like looking for the rhyme within the stanzas. A surprise every time even though the scheme is clearly communicated. Description in your poem is vivid, eg She now felt reassured that all could be endured with his love all around her. Effective metaphor, eg at last the sun had found her. Perfectly written.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4305946

Review of Rise Up

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Rated: E

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OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the poet's plan to improve herself.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem and felt that it is a model for others who would like to move beyond past mistakes. Your poem is Unrhymed verse. The rhythm of your poem is quite good. Description in your poem is vivid, eg Now begin to soar with the winds above.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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#4305910

Review of Winter Series

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Rated: E

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Hi Angel, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poem, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem of five Haikus paints a picture with a winter flavor.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your very expressive poem.. Your five Haikus joined together make for a lovely poem about winter. Description is vivid, eg forlorn, they stand tall, de-void of their verdant cloak. Your rhythm is beautiful, as Haikus are. Rhyme is not part of a Haiku.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4305881

Review of Love

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Rated: E

| (3.0)

Hi Razia, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your letters for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This letter describes the writer's feelings for her good friend.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your letter and sympathized with your lack of ability to communicate your feelings, as well as your friend's lack of ability. A letter is a good way to communicate your thoughts. You have errors in the use of past and present tense, punctuation, language usage, grammar and paragraphing. I did not see any errors in spelling. If you would like to edit and re-write your letter, I will review it again for you.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4305851

Review of What I want to be, when I grow up.

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Rated: E

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Hi Denniston1500, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review one of your articles for our account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This article describes the writer's plans for his occupation in the future.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your article about your future. Best of luck to you.
Suggestions:
Paragraph 1: NBA, National Basketball Association
Paragraph 2: introduced wNOT introduce
Paragraph 2: she doesn't NOT don't
Paragraph 2: quit NOT quite
Paragraph 2: class work NOT classworks

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4305833

Review of Arguing

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Rated: E

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Hi OrcaNerd, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a flawed side of human nature.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed your poem and found it humorous although it portrays a very serious subject. The vocabulary you have chosen is what makes it serious and humorous too! It seems to me the use of egress is unusual and normally refers to an easement! Well-written poem! The description in your poem is vivid, eg you begin to aggress without any finesse. Your pacing is excellent and spot on as they say. Your rhyme pattern is unique and consistent too. Congratulations on your account anniversary.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4305812

Review of Warm

Review by GerMac

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Rated: E

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Hi Chris, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Congratulations to you as our featured reviewer for March. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of warmth in the home where good friends are welcome.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem and felt it was a magnificent invitation to a thoughtful neighbor on a chilly day outside. Description is vivid, eg Those who you have helped love you so. Effective metaphor, eg Our fireplace is warm on a cold day and so is your heart.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4305610

Review of Starlight Parlor

Review by GerMac

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hi Alala, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a }review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the poet's starlight parlor.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed your poem and easily visualized the essence of the evening in front of the campfire, warm and toasty by the fire, lapping up the fresh clean air and conversation. Stanza 1: You might think of using a different word other than the second starry.to get away from being redundant eg under starry starry skies. Nice flow of words and rhyme in your poem. A warm thought!

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4305606

Review of About My Writing

Review by GerMac

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hi Ollie, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the poet's thoughts of his own writing.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed your poem, as I sympathize with our private thoughts and being separate entities, each of us individual and unique personalities and yet there is a connection of humanity. Description is vivid, eg there is that light, that connection. Your poem is Unrhymed verse and has a nice flow of words. Good job.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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GerMac

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