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Hi HuntersMoon, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your , which I found on the. . Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of an outing with the kids.n

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
After typical bickering of where they would go for the day, the family decided to go to Zombie Park. I feel preliminary bickering is necessary to family decision making. They were frightened by a zombie who had no chin and asked them to fill in a survey giving their name and address. They hurriedly left, enough zombie. They agreed they wouldn't tell mom about the frightening day. I enjoyed reading your humorous poem, as there is an underlying tone of family bonding. The title "A Visit to Zombie Park" is appropriate as that is what occurred. Areas of improvement: I think you can work on being succinct. My Favorite Part: I can identify with family bickering. Write on!

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Rhyme pattern is consistent. Your poem tells a story, which I always enjoy. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi HuntersMoon, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your humorous poem, which I found in your portfolio. (I'm still snooping around.) Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This humorous poem paints a picture of your canine Valentine.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
If you're looking for your true love, get a dog: She'll love and appreciate you forever and listens to what you say. I enjoyed reading your poem and laughed all the way through it. There is an underlying tone of humor and animal love. The title of your poem "The Perfect Valentine" is appropriate as that's what she is. Areas for improvement: N/A. My Favorite Part: She listens to you.

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Well-written in the humorous vein. Rhyme pattern is consistent. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi HuntersMoon, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your humorous poems, which I found in your portfolio. (I've been snoop in' around there for awhile this morning! 😀 Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This humorous poem paints a picture of aging wisdom. Are we there yet?

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Senior jokes are the best around. This is better than Mad Comic Books, remember? I love how you predict weather with your knees and get credit for being a sleuth. Your ear, eye/shorter arms, deeper panting and stay awake jokes leave me giggling like a young girl. You must not be quite a senior or where's your wisdom? I'm the one with the wisdom! I enjoyed reading your poem as there is an underlying tone of humor and looking into the future. The title for your poem "The Wisdom of Years" is appropriate in that wisdom comes with years, especially if you have enough of them. Areas for improvement: N/A. My favorite part: Your knees predict the weather.

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Rhyme pattern is consistent. Metaphor is effective, eg the hill of time. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
His Fyn, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the story of Cookie Monster and Mark.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Cookie Monster, the miniature poodle, went looking for cookies to munch. He followed the crumbs and found Mark with his bag of cookies in the park all alone. Cookie Monster stayed by Mark all night long. In the morning Cookie Monster was awarded with a great, big cookie flavored bone. I enjoyed reading your story poem as there is an underlying tone of loyalty and adventure between Mark and the dog. The title"Cookie Monster the Miniature Poodle" is fairly appropriate, but it doesn't give any hint about what is to happen. My Favorite Part: Cookie Monster's protection of Mark.

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Well-written, delightful story poem. Cookie Monster and Mark must be quite a pair. Rhyme pattern is consistent, except in stanza three. You might want to check it out. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestion:
For clarity you might try punctuating, i.e. Cookie Monster, miniature poodle,

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Review of To Run Dry  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Minja, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poem, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of writer's block. Letters become words just like snowflakes twirling around before landing on the ground.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem and your beautiful metaphors and imagery. There is an underlying tone of frustration with writer's block and wanting to wish it away. The title "To Run Dry" is very appropriate in that you've said exactly what happens with writer's block. My Favorite Part: like snowflakes, they are ably dancing the last dance. Areas for improvement: N/A.

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Rhyme is sprinkled through your poem. Nice use of metaphors, eg eternal serenity. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Quiet Fire  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Jace, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your prose pieces, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This prose piece paints a picture about a quiet fire.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
There is an underlying tone of.casting your fate to the wind in your prose piece. so I can't say I completely enjoyed your piece,, as I am more cautious than that. I must be missing a piece of the puzzle, perhaps some background. How could children dive with safety into the leaves while screaming with delight? They must have dove into the pile of leaves a hundred years later. Before that it would seem unsafe. My Favorite part: Those which provided life and shelter to many now have one task to fulfill. What is the message of your poem?

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Turtle, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes differences between a house and a home.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I like the differences you describe between a house and a home. A house is a physical structure; a home also provides warmth and beauty. A house gives safety, but the nuances of a home aren't there. Many times a man notices that a woman's touch is not present in the house. For a house to be a home, a woman's touch helps. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of security and safety. The title, "This House, Our Home is very appropriate in that it alludes to the differences. Areas for improvement: N/A. My Favorite part: A house is a place to hang your hat. A home is a place to hang your heart. This is a 5 rating in my book.

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Rhyme is sprinkled through your poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of No Pity  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Elisa I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poem, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes a poet's feeling that she is a frustrated, bad poet.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You say you think you can let go of the hurt you've felt on these lands. The last of your stink has floated into the clouds. You never have been good fighting against the crowds. So long, stinkers! are your parting words. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of disgust and throwing up your hands. The title of your poem "No Pity" is appropriate in that it seems you have none for yourself or any other members. Areas for improvement: I admire your courage and ability to make a decision. Perhaps a few days of rest and a fresh outlook will be helpful. Best wishes.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes a pleasant job in a good company.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of conscientiousness. You enjoy your office job and are stimulated by making money. You get along with your supervisor. She trusts you: you are reliable and diligent. You're never late. She trusts you with new demands and never has to sit close by. You're given due respect and try to do your best. The title "A Nice Office Job" is fairly appropriate. My Favorite Part: You are stimulated by money and get along with your supervisor. Areas for improvement: N/A.

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Nicely written. Rhyme pattern is wonderfully consistent. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Music to the Ears  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of different schools of musical thought/performance.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
There are myriads of different schools of music: symphony, jazz, country, blues, rock 'n roll, rap, hip hop, r&b, and your favorite, the best of all is pop. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of surveying music. The title of your poem "Music to the Ears" is appropriate in that most all music is good, but tops in your book is pop, which is music to your ears. Areas for improvement: N/A. My Favorite: jazz, country, pop and my very best: classical piano/symphony, especially the romance period from the Renaissance.


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Rhyme is a consistent pattern. Good description. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of What I say  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Me and My Thoughts, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes what the poet and how she says it.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of discriminating judgment or finesse. It's not what you say, but how you say it. They now ask you about sorrow, but only a few people understand your feelings about the emotion.. Now those people know that problem too. The title of your poem "What I Say" is appropriate in that it tells what to expect without giving it all away. My favorite part: Your comment: It's not what; it's how. Areas of improvement: N/A.

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There is a splash of rhyme in your poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of soothing water  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Chris, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your haiku poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This haiku poem is most refreshing.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your haiku poem, as there is an underlying tone of peacefulness. The title of your poem, "soothing water" is most appropriate and gets at the essence of what's happening in your poem. I easily envision your poem. First, I imagine myself alone at night, sitting on the bank as the water trickles down the rocks of the creek. The water is oh! so soothing and I am at peace. I reluctantly leave: I surely don't want to give up my place in the non-sun. Areas of improvement: N/A My favorite part: calming is the water.

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Your poem is a Japanese haiku. No punctuation or capitals are used, as traditional of the Japanese. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
H Neva, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of fields of grain alien artists canvases.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of appreciation of science fiction. The title of your poem "Crop Circle Armada" is appropriate in that there is a fleet on this mission. Flying saucers fly across the sky as a mother ship directs them. Citizens tremble with fright as the saucers hover over fields of rye. Grain stems flatten and take geometric shapes.


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This Octavia Roma form poem is effective, including a rhyme scheme of abababcc with eight lines. and 10 - 11 syllables in each line. The poem moves along like the platinum saucers move across the sky. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
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Did you mean to say canvases or did you mean a verb canvas?

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Review of Spiritual Echoes  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi. Neva, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes morning meditations.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of expressing the love of God. Spiritual echoes enchant one's soul. as I chant God's name. I meditate on His word and give thanks for another day. Your title of the poem "Spiritual Echoes" is appropriate in that echoes are found when you meditate on His word. Areas for improvement: N/A. My favorite part: giving thanks for a new day.

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Your poem is Unrhymed. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems,, which I found on the.public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes one of Monet's paintings of water lilies.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I truly enjoyed reading your poem of French painter Claude Monet's impressionist painting of water lilies on a light green lily pad with shadows from the jungle in the background. There is an underlying tone and tue appreciation of art history. The title of your poem is appropriate in that you are reporting your knowledge and appreciation of Claude Monet, well- known for water lilies. My favorite part: Your wonderful description throughout the poem. Areas for improvement: N/A.

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Description is vivid, eg the gorgeous and colorful aqueous plant life in watery opalescence. Your attention to detail in this poem is exquisite. Your poem is Unrhymed verse.
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of A Cup Of Hope  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Lisa, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the. public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes a cancer survivor's outlook.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You say share a cup of hope. Cancer has reason to bring tears, pink ribbons and bows. You live to fight for another day. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of courage and promise for the future. Your title "A Cup of Hope" is very appropriate in that hope is one thing that helps a cancer survivor. Without hope days are dim. Areas of improvement: N/A. My favorite part: There might be pain and sorrow, but there is a good measure of hope.

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I like your metaphor using coffee, tea, measure, cup of hope. It is a theme that runs through your poem. Your rhyme pattern is consistent in stanzas 2 and 3. You might think about re-working stanza 1, as the rhyme is not consistent.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Tower for Two  Open in new Window.
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Hi Marcus, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your narratives, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This short narrative is about your life so far.

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It seems that the answers you are seeking have to do with not so much your. actual thoughts of being average and then achieving more when you became a renaissance man, but in your self-image of yourself. You have to be confident to find that tower-mate, which by your admonition you have lacked until you became a renaissance man. If you approached potential tower-mates the way you approached paintings, music and the like, you just might find a tower-mate. . I enjoyed your narrative, as there is an underlying tone of searching within yourself. Your title of "Tower for Two" is very appropriate. My favorite part: your description of the Renaissance man. Areas for improvement: N/A

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Well written. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Hi Me and My Thoughts, . I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your , which I found on the. . Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

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This poem describes where your heart lies.

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Your heart lies between your lungs and your rib cages. It also lies when you're next to your beloved friend. A sad state of affairs when you need to lie to your beloved. I enjoyed your poem, as there is an underlying tone of cagey or Tom foolery. The title for your poem 'Where My Heart Lies" is fairly appropriate in that you do answer where, but you also answer when which colors your poem with a different perspective. Favorite part: The cleverness of your poem.

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Your poem is Unrhymed verse.
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.


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Review of Snow Fall!  Open in new Window.
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Hi Cubby, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

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This poem paints a picture of the effects of snowfall.

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You cannot go very far as snow is everywhere. You might fall on your derrière. Your tires are worn; your tread is bare. Snow is falling on your car. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of caution. The title of your poem "Snow Fall" is appropriate. Areas for improvement: iIt seems that future tense "you'll fall on your derrière" is more logical than the wording you have. My favorite part: Snow! Oh No! It's everywhere. I cannot go so awfully far. There is an element of gleefulness with a new snowfall. I remember from my Northern California experience living in the mountains. My family could hardly wait for the sun to shine so they could play in the snow.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Green  Open in new Window.
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Hi ConnieAnn, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

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Green is a popular color and environmental term fairly recently. You speak of grass, leaves, pine needles, the vines of tomatoes, and limes. Life abounds when green's around.

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You spoke of new tomatoes of the vine. Technically you are really referring to the vines of new tomatoes, and you should call it that. This is a minor error in language usage. Rhyme pattern is consistent unless you decide to get accurate with language, i.e., the vines of new tomatoes.

I was distracted by one error in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Hi Mrs. B. Ray, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

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This poem describes waiting for a traveling soldier.

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Before the war times were simple. You thought of where you used to meet him and the scent of his cologne, just lovely memories. You thought you had forever, but then he was called to go to war.
You stood on a corner, searching all the faces, waiting for a traveling soldier. The title of your poem is not really appropriate in that you didn't really lose a love to war, you just gained a different status: waiting for a traveling soldier. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of lamenting but adjusting to a new situation in that you are the beloved of a traveling soldier. My favorite part takes place when you had memories that were much more simple. Areas for improvement: N/A.

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Description is vivid, Eg, the scent of his cologne wafted through the breeze around them. Your poem is Unrhymed verse.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Hi Me and My Thoughts, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

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This poem paints a picture of a complex poem.

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Definitions are necessary to analyze your poem: First, The, definite article especially before a specific noun as compared to a or an, a general or indefinite article; Second: Most, in the greatest quantity or degree; Third: Complex, interconnected or interwoven parts, adjective; Fourth: Poem, composition that, though not in verse, is characterized by great beauty of language or expression. Your most complex poem is stated herein: LIFE. It qualifies from a dictionary point of view. I liked reading your terse poem, as there is an underlying philosophical tone. When I first read your poem, I couldn't imagine how I would review it or what I would say. Then I decided I could study your poem for years, so here is a beginning! The title of your poem is very appropriate in that it applies to just that: The Most Complex Poem. My Favorite part: LIFE. Areas to improve: N/A

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Fireworks  Open in new Window.
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Hi Amay, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

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This poem describes a fascination with fireworks.

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Cascades of colorful sparkling light. Whoosh! Follow it. Earth shaking. Goosebumps grow. Sparks fly through the air. Emotional encounters. Look at him. Swept off your feet. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of excitement and happiness. The title of your poem "Fireworks" is appropriate for your poem. My favorite part: Sparks fly through the air. Swept off my feet.

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Whoosh! Your poem begins on an upbeat note.of onomatopoeia. I can just hear the sound. Description is vivid, eg darkness encroaches, a charge ignites. Your poem is Unrhymed.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Hi Fyn, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

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This poem describes the reminiscing, remembering of mom and dad too, how you're affected by your childhood and the emotions that tear you apart.

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Sweet sentiment engulfs your past and brings my emotions to a peak as my mind's eye follows you around your parents' home. Adventure runs rampant as you speak of the different things from your past. And what a magnificent idea your mom had in which she wrote you letters regularly for many years. And gave them all to you when she knew her last day was near. The last letter she wrote you right before she died, she told you she missed your dad and was going to join him in heaven soon. She knew her children and knew you'd be the one who grieved the most with your loss. Telling you she'd be in your heart was a special message because that's where you need her. Then she spoke to you like a tender, young child you must have been. And goodbye was "Quit crying. I love you" to her sensitive child.

I enjoyed reading your poem. as there is an underlying tone of compassion and loyalty. You must have had a good friendship with her. The title of your poem "Love Letters" is appropriate. My favorite part: Down at the bottom of the trunk, wrapped in linen and tied with twine, I found a packet of hand-written letters. I envision a precious package of which you touch it, smell it, look at it. It must be special because look how it's wrapped.

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You have done a perfect job of showing not telling. Your pacing is perfect with a smooth flow of words and fits your rhyme just right. Effective use of personification, eg you have given human traits to her chest which sat there all alone at the foot of the canopy bed in the guest room. Description is vivid, eg a misty morning when lilacs bloomed. I can easily see this.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Hi Fyn, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poem, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is metaphorically pleasing and paints a picture of risk.

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Circumstances navigate the vessel. Pushed and shoved by moons of discontent and the ability of choice-driven diggings, you take the helm and raise the sextant. With tact you tack your way. My favorite part follows: We set forth upon the Dante Algieri, riding the winds of chance toward our destiny. You speak of the human traits of circumstance dictating, discontent, choice, leadership, and tact. There are other refences to the human condition in your poem.

I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of adventure on the high seas. The title of your poem is appropriate in that Dante Aligieri is the name of the vessel.

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Use of metaphor is very effective, eg circumstances navigate the vessel through uncharted waters. Your poem is written beautifully in the language of the metaphor of sailing.
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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