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Surviving Daniel's 70th Week

This is a poetic rendering of my novel, "The Disappearance of a Pied Piper."

Whispers from Plano's Past and Future

An actor from the 1890s travels to 1980 to guest star on a TV show. (Contest submission).

The Moment I Knew

When all you're wishing for is to be left alone.

Spacewalker

To infinity, and beyond.

READ A NEWBIE

What am I even doing-

Request by a friend to make a poem out of my previous poem descriptions… WHY WOULD YOU-

Run

Auria finds herself figuring out her new powers while escaping from danger.

Politics

I am in french class right now. In germany. My brain is a language mess.

Exams and Anxiety

Guess who I am? A student. Guess what I have? Exams. This is a poem.

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Life in Prison

A prisoner is interviewed

New & Noteworthy Things

My currently active and most recent / notable items.

Dance of the Fairies

Rainey, my muse, inspires for the Summer

The Slave's Exaltation - - Winner

A dejected servant feels trapped in life. Will anything lift his spirits?

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#4289114

Review of Jesus is Lord!

for entry "Give US this day OUR daily bread... "

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Rated: E

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Hi Ruwth, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your essays for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This essay paints a picture of the most important relationship in the monthly featured writer's life.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You begin your essay with "The Lord's Prayer" and show with examples that Our Lord did not mean for the Disciples to pray for, deliver, forgive ME, He meant for them to deliver US, and forgive US, He meant for US to pray, deliver, forgive in everything WE do. Prayer applies across the board to the whole body and family of Christ. I enjoyed reading your essay. There is an underlying tone of a real Christian spirit. The title "Give Us This Day, Our Daily Bread" is appropriate in that "The Lord's Prayer" from which your title is taken is a major part of your essay. Areas for improvement: N/A. Most memorable: Pray for Us, not Me.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Evenings Walk

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Rated: E

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Hi Mamac60, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with aone of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of perspective on life.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Solitude speaks to you on your evening walk and you understand. Joy and sadness are mixed with memories of youth. Everything that was and is brings you to darkness where you are able to heal. Night is your peace and where you go to think, remember and forget. I enjoyed reading your poem, in which there is an underlying tone of self-evaluation and putting things in perspective. The title of your poem "Evenings Walk" is appropriate, as this is where you examine your life. Areas for improvement: You might want to think about your use of the word darkness. It has a connotation of the devil or seamy side of life. I think you mean to say the darkness of the night. Perhaps, use the term darkness of the night, rather than darkness. Most memorable: Solitude speaks to you on your evening walk.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Unrhymed verse. Descriptive n is vivid and expressive, eg memories of joy and sadness are mixed with my youth. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4288973

Review of Mexical

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Rated: E

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Hi Fivesixer, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Who is to say anything is for certain?

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Any man can tell you he speaks three languages. What do you do when the third one stands out in colors and colons? When diplomacy works at its best, you'll be at the border between romance and war. The fine line is as big as a country, like my heart or my grudges, but how would you know differently if you didn't know the difference? I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of desiring to seek answers, especially when you don't understand the straigh forward, diplomacy or fine lines. The title of your poem "Mexical" may be appropriate. It needs to be researched for clarification. Online research tells me Mexicali is the capital of Baja California. I don't see anything on Mexical. Areas for improvement: See suggestions. Most memorable: caught at the border between romance and war. What is the message of your poem? It is not really clear to me.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestions:
tell you NOT sell you
misjudgment sis NOT misjudge nets.

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#4288955

Review of My Love

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Rated: E

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Hi Nalthur, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your , which I found on the. . Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of loving someone from afar.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You need her so much, you have to feel the warmth of her body. How I long for you to say those three magic words. I'm willing to wait for you forever. Even if you don't feel the same, you'll always be the keeper of my heart.

I enjoyed reading you poem, as it reminded me of infatuation. There is an. underlying tone of fascination with another person from afar. The title of your poem "My Love" is appropriate, in that this love could be one-sided. Areas for improvement: N/A. Most memorable: The long list of ways the woman satisfies the needs and love of man. If you can't have her in reality, you can have her in your dreams.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestions:
You're so beautiful NOT your so beautiful
You're my princess NOT Your my princess

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Review of Darkness Lies

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Rated: E

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Hi Neva, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the lies of depression.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:.
Depression is only an illusion of your mind. Dawn gives the hope and faith that dispel the dark devil of depression. I enjoyed reading your insightful poem, as there is an underlying tone of discernment and honesty. The title of your poem "Darkness Lies" is very appropriate in that a lack of faith and the presence of the devil lies. Areas of improvement: N/A. Most memorable: Dawn give faith that dispel darkness. Message of your poem: Always use discerrnment and honesty.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Metaphor is used effectively, eg Darkness lies. Unrhymed verse is used well. Poem is well-written.
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of A Love That Rings True

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Rated: E

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Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of your regular time together with your friend.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:{/b
You busily plan your weekly production schedule then dial her cell phone number, and eagerly plan your next meeting time together. Your memories of sweet loyalty and young passion intimately are obvious as you gently show care through your hand held devices. The message of the poem is appreciation of a device that allows all communication.

This title "A Love That Rings True" is appropriate, as you communicate over the cell phone. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of convenience. Most memorable: Regular endearing correspondences. Areas for improvement: N/A

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestion:
Stanza 1: I think you meant production NOT productive.

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#4288362

Review of In The Fields of Clover.

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Rated: E

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Hi Jane, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the poet's childhood spent near a field of clover.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
A clover field got your attention one day as your drove by. You walked to the field and walked with the cool ground beneath your feet and bees nearby. She then began thinking of her childhood when her parents took her to a clover field. You learned the day you were stung by a bee that bees are to be watched not touched!

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestion: learned NOT learnt
Thinking about using past tense at the beginning of the poem, took my shoes and socks off NOT take my shoes and socks off.

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#4288243

Review of 1994

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Rated: ASR

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Hi B. M. I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of tragedy in 1994.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:{/b
You say 1994 was a year of budding romances and second chances.. It was instead a year of heartbreak and strife. You recall that your best friend died that year. It didn't seem to matter to anyone else. They had their plans for the year of all years. They didn't care if Iyou lost your best friend. It was a cold, cloudy day when you lay him to rest. You drowned in sorrow's pool that year. Something died inside of you. I am so sorry to hear of your sadness. I truly Hope that the Lord protects you against this sorrow.

The title of your poem "1994" is appropriate. I'm sure that day is ingrained in your mind. I felt sympathetic reading your poem. I hope you've been able to soothe that which died inside you the day he was buried. Areas for improvement: N/A

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Nice job with consistent rhyme pattern. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4288228

Review of Near the Fountain

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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)

Hi Nikola, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of voices blended with the water's symphony.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Young people talk and laugh. Voices blend with water in a song of joyful symphony. The refrain "Near the fountain" is repeated four times. Lovers part ways with tears as the fountain gushes its own tears of symphony. People dare to dream. The hopes, joys and sorrows calmly reflect in cooling harmony. I find this poem is refreshing with the combination of music and a water fountain.

The title of your poem "Near the Fountain" is appropriate, in that being near the fountain brings out the harmony of people and the beauty and a refreshing quality of water. I enjoyed your poem, as there is an underlying tone of bringing out hopes, joys, and sorrows and real people. Areas for improvement: N/A
Most memorable: appreciating of joyful symphony' and cooling water. .

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Metaphor is effective, eg water's song in a joyful symphony. Onomatopoeia is used well, eg gushes. Description is vivid, eg cooling harmony. Unrhymed verse is pleasant.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4288178

Review of wisdom

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Rated: E

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Hi Tank, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture for witless poetry.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:{/b
Your poem is short in length and long in wisdom. This seems to me like it is fabulously witty. A word for the wise one would surmise would be sufficient. It isn't.

The title for your poem is "Wisdom", in that if you have any common sense, a word for the wise would be enough said. The listener would know it is time to button up thou lips, and learn from the moment. All you should need to inculcate is one or a few words that will keep you in the pink. You should have faith that this teacher of sorts has knowledge and wisdom to correct the problem. The last line of the poem: IT ISN'T. A person never learns the easy way. It always takes more time than it should; a person almost always learns better from his own mistakes. That's unfortunate. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of: practicality vs. impracticality. Areas for improvement: N/A. Most memorable: the whole poem I refer to as a saying.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled in your poem. The poetic convention of consonance, eg word to the wise.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4288117

Review of When Your Smiles Have Stopped

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Rated: E

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Hi Cypollo, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a girl whose smiles have stopped.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
When your smiles have stopped, your face turns away, and your eyes drop, your thoughts seem to stray to those quiet, secret places deep behind your eyes. . When your soul wanders through memories and lies, that is when you age with a heart's rage. I know not your sorrows or fears, nor words to put a stop to your tears and restore what life cheats. I have only a kiss where your sad heart beats.

The title of your poem "When Your Smiles Have Stopped" is appropriate, as smiles are connected to a person's overall outlook. I enjoyed reading your poem in that there is an underlying tone of truth seeking and understanding human nature. Areas for improvement: N/A. Most memorable: I have only a kiss where a sad heart beats. Something to ponder. I believe you are telling the girl not to get involved in lies, rages and the complexities of life.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme pattern is consistent. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestion:
heart's NOT hearts

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Review of WHERE'S THE BEEF ?

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Rated: 13+

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Hi Fisfall, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only.

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a beef-eater in a vegetarian restaurant.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You go to a vegetarian restaurant with a friend who is strictly a vegetarian. You are a meat-eater and don't enjoy the vegetarian cuisine. This one is no different. You decide next time you're taking him to a beef and brew restaurant. If he doesn't like your choice, you're finished.

The title of your poem "Where's the Beef?" is appropriate, considering your preference for beef. I enjoyed reading your poem. There is an underlying tone of justice or fairness in your poem. I don't know how long you'd want to enforce justice though. Areas for improvement: N/A.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout poem, but not consistently. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4287685

Review of Trucks and Toy Soldiers

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Rated: E

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Hi Planner-Dan, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of precious memories a dad has of his son the day his son gets married.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You watch your son and wonder if he will always give you precious memories. When he's married his interests will be different; he won't be playing in the sand with Tonka toys, but watching his different lifestyle will still give you precious memories. Someday you will marvel at the precious memories his son gives him. History repeats itself.

The title of your poem "Trucks and Toy Soldiers" is appropriate, as there is an underlying tone of zest and enthusiasm which lead to precious memories. I enjoyed reading your poem, and felt it gave me a special start for the day, knowing that precious memories don't come and go, they repeat themselves. Areas for improvement: N/A.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme pattern is consistent, except Stanza 1, in which you have repeated moment and moments. They don't really rhyme.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Angels and Heroes

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Rated: E

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Hi Slaates, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The lyrics paint a picture of angels and heroes

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
When you deserve them most, angels and heroes show up. They sparkle, glow and lift your heart. Take your heart to its highest level. Look around you. Look inside you. The title, "Angels and Heroes" is appropriate for your lyrics. I enjoyed reading your poem and found it upbeat. . Areas for improvement: N/A. Most memorable: Angels and heroes show up when you deserved them.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4287289

Review of Perception

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi HuntersMoon, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your Dodoitsu poemr which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a lovely picture of love.of nature.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Sunlight fades in shades of grey and leaves only silhouettes. Reflections change as ripples change reality. (Reflections from the fading sunlight. Movement causes ripples.).

The title of your poem, "Perception", is appropriate, as perception is a type of reality and reality has been changed by ripples. I enjoyed reading your poem immensely. There is a tone of appreciation of nature and anticipation of its next move. Areas for improvement: N/A. Most memorable: Sunlight fades in shades of grey and leaves only silhouettes.

This Japanese dodoitsu form has a very natural and smooth flow of words. Nice choice of words.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4287162

Review of The Night Before You Left

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Rated: E

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OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of two lovers , their excitement about her visiting her parents.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The title of your poem, "The Night Before You Left", is appropriate, in that the poem describes a few goodbye moments. I enjoyed reading your poem, for there was an underlying tone of sentimentality for the coming few weeks. Areas for improvement: N/A. Most memorable: Those lingering kisses on your lips.

You wondered how you could endure three weeks away from your beloved while she went to visit her parents. After dropping her off, you had lingering feelings of the kisses and thoughts of your beloved. You both said I love you that night.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Poisoned Love

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Rated: E

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Hi Fran, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of love gone wrong.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The title of your poem, "Poisoned Love"- is appropriate, as your love has become poisoned. I enjoyed reading your poem, for there is an underlying tone of anger that should be expected under the circumstances. Areas for improvement: N-A. Most memorable: Strength to scare without a care, darkened eyes glare and her heart could tear beyond repair.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme pattern is consistent with a good cadence. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Living Off the Land – A Sleight of Hand

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Rated: E

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OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of prairie dogs and tigers and how mankind is making them extinct.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The title of your poem is appropriate. Almost extinct animals are living off the land while man controls the environment more and more. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of seeking knowledge and evaluating what needs to be done to protect environment, animals and man. Areas for improvement: N/A. Most memotable: the thought that tigers and prairie dogs are a precious commodity so man protects him to make money.

From the smallest prairie dog to the largest Asian tiger, Nature's most treacherous cycle pertains to the foraging and the most ravenous hunting on earth. Humans continue to exist in their delicate environments, but the prairie dog and the Asian tiger are becoming more and more extinct as man encroaches on their territory. Prairie dogs are low on the food chain, while the tiger is close to the top. Tigers are valuable for their fur and their body appendages used for aphrodisiacs Mankind continues to tighten it's hold and its

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Description is vivid, eg windswept, built-up and generously used lands. Unrhymed verse which has a nice flow of words and good cadence. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4286931

Review of Birdbath Beauty

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Rated: E

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Hi ConnieAnn, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public reviewers pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of nature's sweetness.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Baby bluebirds enjoy their birdbath in the heavy raindrops, but dash for cover in warm houses when they feel drenched. Mama bluebird is happy to see them out of the rain. Clouds are reflected upside down. The title for your poem, "Birdbath Beauty", is appropriate. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of childish playfulness. Most memorable: Clouds reflected upside down.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Without you I´m Lost

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Rated: E

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Hi Mary Ann I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the memory of your husband.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You say you're lonely since he left. You cried for a year, and played your songs. You feel his presence when you awake. Your children help you through this devastation. You long for his embrace. Until he calls you to join him by his side, then you will once again be his bride.

The title of your poem "Without You I'm Lost" is appropriate. I enjoyed reading your poem, as it had an underlying tone of sadness yet hope for your future. Areas for improvement: N/A. Most memorable: You'll wait for him to call you to join him by his side when you will be his bride.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4286692

Review of Don't Let the Dance Go Unnoticed

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Rated: E

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Hi Fyn, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the clouds bringing the storm in. If you're going to see the forest for the trees, you need to stop what you're doing and watch.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The title of your poem "Don't Let the Dance Go Unnoticed" is very appropriate. To me it means if you don't look, you'll never see the beauty described in your poem. Your title hooked me right away. I enjoyed reading your positively lovely imagery. I easily visualized what you had to say. There is an underlying tone in your poem of an ability to paint words in the sky with imagery. I felt the clouds were bringing in a storm, as I evaluated what was said.. Perfect day for a glowing fireplace as you watch what is going on outside.

Gowns billowing with the gowns of a celestial waltz caress the deepening sapphire skies. As the winds whispered ethereal music, the clouds danced.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout the poem. Description is vivid and expressive, eg the winds whispered ethereal music. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4286682

Review of Christmas tree

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hi Chris, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poem, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the tragedy in the world of Christmas trees.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The title of your poem "My Prejudice Which I Freely Admit", is very appropriate and hooks the reader right away. I enjoyed reading your poem, as it had an underlying tone of raising a question of our treatment of the environment. Areas for improvement: N/A

In your haiku you speak of the beautiful Christmas tree which is now gone forever. Your poem brings to my mind the idea of not cutting down the Christmas tree, or buying a living tree which can be re-planted or even buying an artificial tree which has some desirable benefits, thereby saving the Christmas tree spoken of in your poem. I think you're justified in bringing up this issue.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Hands

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Rated: E

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Hi. Cheshire, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of remarkable hands.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Your title "Hands" is appropriate but could be more creative. Put on the creativity hat and let your thoughts flow. I enjoyed reading your poem. There is an underlying tone of iimagination of a person who can't get enough painting imagery. Nice job. Areas for improvement: You might think of the number of times you started a line with the word hand. If I were painting this picture, I would try to express the word hand in different parts of the lines.

Hands are storied. They can build, mold, shape, and speak. Hands can reach for heaven and believe in make-believe. Thoughts explode as fingers touch pen to paper. Inner emotions become reality as heart and soul become one. Hands are taken for granted for their life giving talent. Bent and cracked they are silenced from the song they used to sing. Hands caress and love.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Description is vivid, eg A finger can move mountains or search unknown heavens. Effective imagery: soaring mosaics of sky and water. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#4286664

Review of Seeking Oneself

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Rated: E

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OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of fears and rejection while growing up.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Your title "Seeking Oneself" is appropriate. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of answering the question Who am I? Areas for improvement: N/A.
Most memorable: Finding out that your true friends never rejected you.

You wanted to be the ultimate gift for both friend and foe. In school being part of a clique was not foolish. You feared the clique's disapproval as well as the opportunity. Your close friends never rejected you. You grew up, took a breath and moved on. The need was gone by then.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme pattern is consistent. Good choice of words and smooth cadence. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of And so, it begins

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Rated: E

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Hi Tide, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the snow and rain.

CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The title for your poem, "And So It Begins" is appropriate. You enjoy the day and hear the rain still pattering. We now have a fresh clean neighborhood. The snow is on its way. You've picked the perfect day to write. You can look out the window, hear the rain, see the snow if it gets here, see God's earth and be inspired to write. Perfect! Now you can wrap your brain around each thought. Areas for improvement:N/A. I enjoyed reading your poem.

TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Unrhymed verse. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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