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Review of Christmas Magic  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Winnie, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems for our December Power Review. I found this magical poem in your portfolio. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the magic of Christmas between father and son.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Jack's eyes were sad as his son asked if Santa would be there. His son said the fire truck must be red. Jack knew there would be no toys, as the rent was due and the heater went out. He could provide food only. Jack prayed and asked for a small delight to put under the tree. Morning arrived and Jack saw through tears: Clutched in small hands was a bright red truck.

I truly enjoyed reading your poem. You evoked an emotion of compassion that any parent perceives at the thought of not having money to provide for the small joys of children at Christmas.

I as the reader wouldn't change any part of your message because great compassion is expressed.

There is an underlying tone in your poem of delight by the son and great appreciation by the father.

Stylistically, you have a very smooth flow of words in your verse. Your language usage, grammar and punctuation are quite acceptable. Nicely written.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Dogpack, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems for our December Power Review. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the Florida snow bunny.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Imagine a downhill snow bunny in shorts, short shirt and yellow sombrero in Florida, skiing on man-made snow. Spectators are clad in winter gear. Skiers fly past trees on snow skis, heading south for a warmer climate or a coat. The snow bunny should have warm clothes so he doesn't freeze.

I enjoyed reading your poem. When it snows in the summer occasionally, I have seen people skiing in their bathing suits. The sky is sunny and warm in Mammouth, California. People think this is a real treat. It might be if they're advanced skiers and not falling in the snow and slush.

The underlying tone is adventuresome and enthusiastic.

I see some need for improvement. I was confused at times reading your poem. You might want to make sure you can decipher skiers and spectators.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestion: clothes NOT cloths

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Dave, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems for our December Power Raid. I found this very insightful poem in your portfolio. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem provides a canvas for the painting of a picture of the homeless man's Christmas celebration written in Hymnal Measure. .

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
This poem gives the homeless man's insights on Christmas. He describes the glitz of others who have homes and compares it to his homeless lifestyle, eg He "owns" a shopping card and all his possessions in it, a cardboard box for shelter, just like the manger sheep. He'll have a slice of pizza for Christmas dinner. He dodges the flu over a barrel fire and sings Christmas carols while facing wrongs. His dreams no longer thrive. He now celebrates the birth of Christ to keep his faith alive.

I enjoyed reading your poem, as it gave me insights galore into the homeless man's lifestyle. The poem's statement is to promote further understanding of the homeless man's condition. There is an underlying tone of heaviness combined with hope, painting a picture of the homeless man making the most he can of his life, remembering Christmas and his faith.

I see no real need for improvement other than lessening some of the detail of the poem and focusing more on the homeless holiday, eg the aromas of the donut shop and the sad lament of the scent of urine.

Stylistically, the Hymnal Measure is a wonderful.form pattern with two rhymes in tetrameter and trimeter, eg the sound of the song Amazing Grace. The link was very helpful to the Reader in understanding the form poem.

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Very well-written. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Moarzjasac, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems for our December Review Raid. I found this delightful winter poem in your portfolio. It is perfect for children at Christmas. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the magical quality of a new fallen snow. I thoroughly enjoyed reading your poem.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You have a magnificent way of using metaphor. The overall tone of your poem is one of pure silent new fallen snow. An example of your metaphor follows, eg A soft down quilt of new fallen snow is silent and forms a thick blanket. My favorite part: This is the perfect Christmas poem. Imagine a smooth cushion of feather soft flakes with little children's footprints buried beneath its surface. The conclusion: At the end of the day the soft glow of a street lamp becomes a weak orb in the gentle darkness of new fallen snow.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed. No issue with language usage, grammar or spelling. Punctuation is perfect. Good job.

Thank you for sharing.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Harry, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This story poem is about a man who waits patiently in the doctor's office while trying to lower his blood pressure. He could be a Bob Hope type or a male Phyllis Diller.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: The man in the doctor's office waiting to have his blood pressure taken, curses the driving of a little old lady. His thoughts turned to his daughter's no-account husband who wanted a loan from his father-in-law to start a tattoo business; his fine son, who failed out of LSU and now will take 7 years to graduate while living with a stripper; his own desired online acclaim in poetry. He can't see the doctor, as his blood pressure is still too high for some reason. This story poem is most enjoyable to read. Write on!

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Consistent rhyme pattern. Good humor. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of My Father's Hands  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi HuntersMoon, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the strength and comfort the poet's father could give to him.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: The poet's dad's hands are miracles and keep a sad world an arm's length from his child. An embrace is used to nurture and guide the child . Pride was never part of the embrace. His hands outwardly speak of duty. In the poet's eyes they shine of beauty. When he needed comfort as he grew up, he felt an angel's touch on his shoulder. A sentiment of love iand gratitude is reminisced for your father. How fabulous to receive omfort from a memory.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme pattern is consistent. Logical development makes a strong statement. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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GerMac

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Jeff, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is a chinquapin about the life habits of birds.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: The syllables in this cinquain are divided in an interesting fashion: 2,4,6,8,2 in 5 lines and makes for interesting rhyme and rhythm. The birds are chirping, munching, hanging precariously, life in the branches, they are content. Your poem has a pleasant underlying tone and is easily visualized.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Cakes & Circuses  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi Guardians of Worlds, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. . Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the thoughts that the poet has of another.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: What is the message in this poem? You have given your thoughts on the matter, i.e., someone thinks you and some associates are dunces, etc. A report on the disagreement to an ombudsman might help in the future.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Unrhymed verse. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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GerMac

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Review by GerMac Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Ruby, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your account anniversary. . Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the consequences earned by one's lifestyle.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: The poet could perhaps say, "I died and went to heaven." Just one small change could land a person in hell for something so small as wishing a person's life unwell. When people tell a little white lie, they are one step closer to an unfortunate life because we put those who love us in strife. We make mistakes, but if we learn from them, we gain strength. When we speak hastily, we increase our chances of ending up in purgatory. (Limbo is for innocent babies and children.). Therefore, think before you speak. Language needs to be deciphered in your poem. A strong statement is made, but language is somewhat cryptic and not easy to understand.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
ILogical development is good. Rhyme pattern is consistent except Stanza 3. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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GerMac

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Review of Fading storm  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi -Lusername, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a hollow tune, the wind blowing across the poet's face.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: The premise of this poem: The cold sea water makes life grow. The whistles of the trees in the rain are drums of pain. Light breaks through the storm. There is a symphony of light and color. The clouds no longer cry. The wind blows across the field. There is a good harvest yield. Your poem is loaded with personification, the assigning of human traits to inanimate objects, eg the sea speaks. Poetic convention of consonance is used, eg sorrowful sound. Metaphors are loaded in your poem, eg symphony of light and color. Vivid description, eg light breaks through the storm.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme pattern is fairly consistent. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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GerMac

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Review of Lost  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Cynaemon, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This is a love poem from the story "Five Little Words".

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: The lovers' relationship is not stable. It is obvious in the way they relate to each other. It seems to the reader that they need a minister or other person capable of helping them to gain a stable footing and bring maturity into the relationship. The poet stares at her, torn between love and hate. Words don't tell his thoughts, but his eyes betray his longing. She wills him to the safety of her encircling arms. There are two steps between the lovers, love and forgiveness. One tear gave away his iron-willed self-control. Finally he plunged the knife into his heart. She stands there, lost.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled in your poem. Some nice use of metaphors, eg on the knife edge of a sword. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Internal Fire  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Iris, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes how the poet feels about soothing anxiety and pain.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: You speak in metaphors that are vibrant and highly descriptive. You ask that pins be taken from your skin. Cool the fire in your breath. You'd like to be a tree, steadfast and slow. Make you still and the world quiet again.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:.
Rhyme is sprinkled in your poem. Excellent use of metaphors throughout your Poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Tender Touch  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi B4Heart, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes bonding between mother and child.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:{
From the Reader: Baby awakes alone in a dark room with crocodile tears. Mother picks up baby and baby's fears go away, replaced by a big smile. Mother helps child with teething, hunger, diaper rash. Mother appears and crocodile tears disappear. Mother loves Baby and Baby loves Mother's tender touch.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme pattern is consistent. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of beauty  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi NUTTSS, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the truth in beauty.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: Beauty is unique in each person. There is beauty in each person in many ways, whether you're spinning around with the wind in your hair, falling on the grass like an angel, returning to your very own mother or glistening without makeup.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Nice simile, eg like an angel, Rhyme sprinkled throughout poem of unmetered verse. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestions:
positioned like an angel NOT position like and angel
it's rich NOT its rich
God's creatures NOT gods creatures
through the years NOT threw the years
their own beauty NOT the own beauty
your beauty NOT you beauty

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Family Tree  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Jade Amber Jewel, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found in your portfolio. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the love of generations in the poet's family. The poet has done an immense amount of work putting together hter portfolio in just a few days. Very impressive.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: You have wonderful insights, realizing you come from a loving family who loved iyou from the start. You're a tiptop trio, but someday your Mom and Dad will be a duo again. Here you showed your maturity. You like being a niece, so it's nice that your Mom and Dad have brothers and sisters. If it weren't for grandparents, everyone would be too sad! None of you would be. Every teenager has a mighty appetite for that healthy growing body. I can understand needing a walk-about. I like this word walk-about. Did you create it? Your underlying writing style is breezy and upbeat. Very nice. I can say you are good at showing, not telling.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Jade Amber Jewel, You have sprinkled some very nice rhyme throughout your poem about the love in your family generations. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Suggestions:
Next in our family tree are the aunts, uncles, and cousins NOT Next in our family tree is the aunts, uncles and cousins {subject verb agreement).

Best wishes,
Thank you for sharing.

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Review of The Viewing  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Kelso, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem was written by the poet for his grandfather's funeral.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: The people who attended the poet's grandfather's funeral were all dressed in black. The poet's message said not to mourn our sudden loss, as the Angels wanted him back. Your soul is at last peacefully at rest.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout the poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Hard Nights  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi WritingInMotion, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This is a love poem.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: He feels her kiss on his lips. He feels quaint and misses her touch that makes him faint. He can't let this grow. He has to slow his heart rate. He doesn't believe the one has been found. He can't string himself along. He says he's not that good. He says he'll be what she needs, not just what she wants.


*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
The rhyme in your poem is driving your thoughts. You might want to try expressing your thoughts without using any rhyme or very little rhyme which is part of free verse. That way what you have to say will really make sense. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of The Black Dog  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi Gregory, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem provides a canvas for painting a picture of beating yourself up.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: The poet accepts defeat. His memories are daunting. He faces his plight of fight or plight. He wishes he could never e his own worst enemy. Never give in.A life of sorrow is no way to live. He'd trade sadness for cheer. Who would ever think he is a fighter? He'd face the world with much brighter days if he could get freedom from the black dog.

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Rhyme pattern is fairly consistent. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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GerMac

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Review of AFFECTION  Open in new Window.
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Hi Dr. I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary which I found in your portfolio.
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*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes love and beauty.

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From the Reader: Tears are not precious nor rare. There are not available in heaven nor earth. There are tears of love of the soul. Dark clouds of tears surge from an undiscovered pilgrimage of the heart. When the splendor of holy feelings is seen on the face, the edge of the sari wipes the tears away.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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GerMac

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Lexi Joy, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only.

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes praising in the morning.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: A lovely refrain is found at the beginning of each stanza, i.e. You're my glory in the morning. Jesus, is the rain that gently waters the poet's secret deserts in his being, which represent the poet's weaknesses, I believe. Peaceful moments are shared with Thee. The word of God binds the poet's soul and makes him walk in victory. He receives manna to feed his soul. Milk and honey deeply flow. Sweetly and softly the poet will praise Him.

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Rhyme is sprinkled throughout the poem. Metaphors are found throughout the poem, eg, rain, manna. Description is vivid and expressive, eg secret deserts in his being. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Hi Sisco, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a reviewer of one of your articles for your 7th anniversary on WDC. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This article gives the history of the evolution of the writer's username.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: The writer's username has quite a history, stemming from a background of a series of novels in his occupation in surveillance and intelligence. His first main character, Sisco Kid, joined an intelligence agency. Sisco Kid was a very gifted young man who had completed a degree by the age of 14. The writer scrapped the idea of writing this series of novels when another series of books by someone else became popular. (SISCO stood for Surveillance, Intelligence, and Special Covert Operations.) The writer's first, genuine main character was borne, Agent Kilo, the name from the NATO phonetic alphabet. The writer searched online, found yWriters and began to write as much as possible. The site that gave him everything he needed in grammar and editing was WDC. He retained his username forever as Sisco. His first, genuine main character was Kilo. It occurred to me that you had the opposite problem of writer's block. You needed to find a way to write to get as many ideas out of your head by writing as much as possible. I imagine some writers would love to need to write to get all the ideas out of their heads. Congratulations on curing that problem!

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Well-written , detailed and logically developed. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi HuntersMoon, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your eighth account anniversary. Congratulations! Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem sparks the imagination, especially when it's more than a rainy day.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: Raindrops from the branches of a crystal tree tell the poet it's more than just a rainy day. Wet window wonders are created just for him. The silver drops meander, play and glide like children at play lost in the magic of the day. They paint a perfect filigree like branches on a crystal tree.

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Very effective use of imagery, eg simile: like branches on a crystal tree. Effective use of metaphor, eg a perfect filigree. Consonance, a poetic convention, is used nicely. The poem, stylistically, is a French Rondeau form with a definite plan for the rhyme scheme and refrain. It is a complicated and lovely sounding form poem. Description is vivid. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Pro Scribe, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary, which I found on your portfolio. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the poet's love of his daughter, Jenna, through different parts of her life.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: The poet loved his daughter as a newborn. He appreciated her ability to test everything when she was an adolescent. As an adult she peeled the onion of love's intricate architecture, she molded the clay of her unique future. Jenna is a wife and mother, bringing new love into her life. Jenna is a daughter and connects indivisible to the poet's heart, more than he ever thought possible.

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Rhyme is sprinkled throughout poem. Very effective metaphor,eg she peeled the onion of love's intricate architecture. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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GerMac

 
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Brittany Lorraine, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary which I found in your portfolio. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the poet's feeling for her loved one as she tried to fall asleep.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: You know the poet's heart is breaking when you hear the sound of small stones hitting the glass. You know the beloved has arrived when you hear that same sound. The heart break is sudden and lingering. The feeling of the beloved's teeth on her lips when they kissed. This is the way the poet wanted her loved one to feel for her.

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Good metaphor, eg sound of small stones hitting glass. Rhyme is sprinkled throughout poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Hi. Bluejay, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your limerick for your account anniversary which I found in your portfolio. . Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This limerick is about a doctor who hired a nurse.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: There was a wealthy young doctor who hired a nurse. She was late every day. When counting her pay, she found she had been docked.

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Rhyme is sprinkled throughout poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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